|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
 Posted: Sat Aug 25, 2007 11:39 pm
Thank you Bromisto-Sensei. XD
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 12:06 pm
Citrus Samurai (So yeah I have not make my main yet so I role play something ) Cronos ran his hand though is emerald green hair parts of it where caked with blood. He stood over a dead body of a rain ninja. The rain ninja had stab wounds all over the worst one was a deep gash though his eye. The eye had been sliced open oozing blood. The deep gash ran from the top of his head to the bottom of his face the gash was at least 2 in deep in the skin. Cronos then looked down at the body he was some how still alive but on the verge of death. A smirk crossed Cronos face "You should have kept on being dead " Cronos raised his hand with a sword in it and brought it down with so much force is shatter the rain ninja skull. Cronos started to walk away from the man "told you, you should kept on being dead".Put the appropriate grammar marks in their correct places and then I'll pass you but if you don't then you'll have to rewrite your entire post so that it makes sense. This one would make sense if you had commas and appastrafies in the appropriate places.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 12:29 pm
~~~RP Sample~~~
In a flash, it was Autumn once more. The end of summer, the end of child play, and the first step towards becoming a shinobi. For yes, today, would be her first day in the Village academy.
Elruda sat on the yellowing grass field, watching the orange, red, and golden brown leaves dance in the air before fluttering to the ground. It was almost time for her first class but she didn't feel like getting up, just not yet. It was enchanting, at least to her, watching the faint golden light of dawn sift through the balding trees and cast a warm embrace upon the fallen carpet of leaves. Every once a while, a gentle wind would suspend new leaves in the air, for a passing moment, before brushing them among the already fallen ones. She could almost stay here forever.........in this feeling of peace and pure content.
In truth, Elruda hated Autumn as much as she loved its beauty. Because a few Autumns ago, she had been abandoned by her parents. They had left, left her behind to join their Kage, to fight against the Master of the Village. Her dream to become a shinobi was so that she could someday meet her family again. A stab of hate and guilt tormented her heart. What would she say to them? After all these years?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 12:34 pm
ProtoXtreme ~~~RP Sample~~~ In a flash, it was Autumn once more. The end of summer, the end of child play, and the first step towards becoming a shinobi. For yes, today, would be her first day in the Village academy. Elruda sat on the yellowing grass field, watching the orange, red, and golden brown leaves dance in the air before fluttering to the ground. It was almost time for her first class but she didn't feel like getting up, just not yet. It was enchanting, at least to her, watching the faint golden light of dawn sift through the balding trees and cast a warm embrace upon the fallen carpet of leaves. Every once a while, a gentle wind would suspend new leaves in the air, for a passing moment, before brushing them among the already fallen ones. She could almost stay here forever.........in this feeling of peace and pure content. In truth, Elruda hated Autumn as much as she loved its beauty. Because a few Autumns ago, she had been abandoned by her parents. They had left, left her behind to join their Kage, to fight against the Master of the Village. Her dream to become a shinobi was so that she could someday meet her family again. A stab of hate and guilt tormented her heart. What would she say to them? After all these years?Pass! That was done beautifully.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 6:10 pm
{{The Nature Of The Following Content Is Highly Obious}}
An ominous wind blew through the pitch-dark night as Unshin sat in wait of his prey. The air hissed through the leaves of the elm in whose boughs he was lurking. The eerie swaying motion caused by the wind, along with the dry rustling of the dying foliage made it seem as if the tree's very limbs had become serpents intent on grasping at the man who had disturbed their rest. Unshin tensed as he heard the muffled crunch of fallen leaves. This was his target. This was his chance. He would make his revenge happen... tonight.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 6:54 pm
Well I've read and decided to just jump in and try my hand. Kinda random but I think I'll be fine. So here goes!
The leaves of the old oak tree rustled as Athrun climbed up threw the tangle of branches and showering the ground below in a hail of morning dew. On the horizon the sun was slowly rising over the low clouds in the distance, illuminating the old academy grounds with with a soft amber glow as it did each morning.
Reaching for the larger branches Athrun carefully pulled himself up and took a seat straddling the rough, mossy surface of the trees bark. A few bead of sweat ran down his young face as he relaxed back against the trees trunk. Every morning since he was able Athrun had risen with the sun to watch the older children go to the academy, and each day he would climb the tree on the grounds staring vacantly of into the distance and dream of the future. Today was different though, for today was the last day Athrun would climb the tree. As the sun rose today his dreams had come to pass. He was finally enrolled in the academy. For a long time Athrun sat there among the damp leaves of the oak tree staring off into the foggy distance, a smile on his face and a light heart full of hope and determination.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 7:15 pm
Denboop {{The Nature Of The Following Content Is Highly Obious}} An ominous wind blew through the pitch-dark night as Unshin sat in wait of his prey. The air hissed through the leaves of the elm in whose boughs he was lurking. The eerie swaying motion caused by the wind, along with the dry rustling of the dying foliage made it seem as if the tree's very limbs had become serpents intent on grasping at the man who had disturbed their rest. Unshin tensed as he heard the muffled crunch of fallen leaves. This was his target. This was his chance. He would make his revenge happen... tonight. Pass. That was good.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 7:56 pm
OoC: Well here goes my example. >.< Sorry got a bit carried away, but I hope this is acceptable. =)
The wind blew ferociously through the large streets of Konoha, crowds of people roamed through the night enjoying the cold winds that seemingly blew the trees branches back. Croix appeared leaning on the trunk of a large tree, the wind blew his long hair back and made him gain goosebumps for a second .
Croix looked up a bit and opened his right eye, he was unable to open his left since it had been covered by his band. Once he had opened his eye he looked up to the busy streets of Konoha and smiled a bit as he saw his target. He quickly leaned off the tree and began to move his feet at a slow pace, it seemed as he was beginning to follow a old man. As Croix slowly walked through the crowds, he kept both of his hands inside his cloak, they both held small weapons tightly, as he finally was a couple of steps away from his target he opened his cloak and fired the small knives towards the old man. In a matter of seconds the old man lay on the floor, blood splattered everywhere and heavy breathing filling the sound of the air. The crowd gasped and panicked as they seen this unfold in front of their eyes, some men began to point out Croix and quickly began to move the crowd away as they began to get in their stances and grasping their weapons.
The men were now prepared to attack now that the crowd had been safely moved and the old man carted away from the scene and into a nearby hospital, three of the five men charged Croix performing seals and the ones that stayed back readied their weapons, but as they began performing their Jutsus the mere clone vanished into thin air leaving a small cloud of smoke were he stood. The men rambled on amazed at what had just happened, confused and angered at the same time. Some began to yell as they knew the criminal had gotten away.
Croix laughed silently as he was standing at the top of a large building looking on as his shadow clone did all of his dirty work, at first he wasn't even amazed but as the plan began to start in front of his eyes all of a sudden he found some interest and began to watch on from the building.
Smoke blew all around his face, and the cause of it was his cig which was slightly hanging off the edge of his lips. He smiled and said silently to himself, "Mission complete".
He then got up and blew another small cloud of smoke out of his mouth and walked away having his hands inside his cloak and a thin smile on his lips.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 8:05 pm
@Kerwyn: Pass! although the amount of times you say Athrun later on makes it very tedious to read >.< Still ok though :3
@Tony Romani: Super pass!
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 8:15 pm
'Lo!
My character's name is Tenchii Yabuki, from Sunagakure (Village of the Sand)
RP sample:
Tenchii's midnight hair swung at her waist as she pulled it up into a high ponytail. Her bangs fell over her big, blue eyes, to her great frustration. She blew them out of her face, pulling them into her pony. Her first day of school. Ha! She wasn't nervous, that was for fools. Her C34 chest was strapped in,and just barley mind you, by strips of plain,whit cloth. Like a tube top, but she thought it was far better. Her blue mini with black net around the bottom made her look like a striper, but it was all part of the plan...
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 11:51 pm
usiylover2 'Lo! My character's name is Tenchii Yabuki, from Sunagakure (Village of the Sand) RP sample: Tenchii's midnight hair swung at her waist as she pulled it up into a high ponytail. Her bangs fell over her big, blue eyes, to her great frustration. She blew them out of her face, pulling them into her pony. Her first day of school. Ha! She wasn't nervous, that was for fools. Her C34 chest was strapped in,and just barley mind you, by strips of plain,whit cloth. Like a tube top, but she thought it was far better. Her blue mini with black net around the bottom made her look like a striper, but it was all part of the plan... Pass
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 9:45 am
Daffodil walked over to his window. The window frame was made out of a rich oak, the glass was many shades blue from the sun shine. Outside many people where getting ready to go to the 1st day at the ninja academy. Daffodil himself was also getting ready to go the academy. He put on his yellow shirt, and blue jeans. Daffodil walked, opened his window, and jumped out. He loved the cool end of summer wind blow though his face. He made it safely to the stone ground. He started to walk to the academy. He took a short cut though the market place. Many smells wafted though the air. Daffodil made his way to the old academy it was in need of repair. He opened the old cider door. It made a creaking sound as it was opened. Daffodil found his desk. The desk was very old, maybe as old as the school. He sat down and waited for class to start.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 3:18 pm
Well here's my RP sample:
A kunai knife thumped into the tree trunk and three more wizzed past towards the cloaked figure. The figure quickly turned around, pulling form its side another kunai knife. With ease the figure defelcted each of the knives with his own. The attacker continued to pursue him, two more kunai knives drawn. The attacker forced his fist forward at the cloaked man who grabbed the fist and then punched the man in the chest sending him back into a tree. Quickly regaining his compusure, the attacker stood up and spoke "Kenji I have found you at last..." he lifted up his hand which tightly clecnhed a kunai. Kenji removed his cloak revealing his image. He stood rather tall at 6 feet. His short black hair hung lightly infront of his eyes. The attacker then threw the kunai forward towards Kenji's heart. Kenji did not attempt to move, instead his hands went infront of him forming several hand sings in an instant. The kunai then struck him in the chest and then a second later in a puff of smoke he disappeared, the kunai continuing to move forward and hitting the tree that was behind him. That attacker's eyes opened wide and quickly spun around. Looking straight into his eyes was kenji. The attacker grunted then fell back wards. Kenji's hand clenched a bloody which he then wipped on the side of his pant leg. He then inserted back into the haolster on his side. Paacing his cloak back over his body, Kenji continued forward through the forest.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 4:24 pm
I hope this will be alright for a sample (name and situation are random):
The air was calm, and yet Sakuei saw the whip crash at him. He wasn't fast enough to evade, and it took several blows at his body. One hit right across his face, another on his shoulder. The blood fell down his face as if it was a rain drop, leaving a trail of it down to his neck. His arm felt lighter, as if the blood was being taken out of it. The feeling made him twitch with pain.
Saku skidded on the ground and looked up with blue eyes at his enemy and inticipated his next move. He made a simple hand sign and leaped to his right, then smashed his foot into the ground. The ground shifted up, making a small quake around the area. Saku leaped onto the broken earth, and made a few more hand signs. "Now you will see what I have learned." His chakra formed around his body, and started to swirl in a rapid motion. The ground below the two shinobi was shaking. The wind's gentle breeze became strong gusts of wind. Dust and dirt swirled and surrounded both of them. Sakuei formed his last seal and clapped his hands together, waiting for the right moment to make his move.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Reply
