|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
 Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 12:04 pm
Rpc Name:Letti Mochachiha
Village:Rock
Rank:Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for:Satetsu
What you know about the clan/bl:It will give me control of metal dust, and other metallic objects.
Rp Sample:
Letti just became a Genin of Iwagakure and was meeting her new sensai today, as she waited she at in a field swirling a thin metallic dust threw her finger tips a man who wore a Chuunin's flack jacket appeared in front of her in a swirl of fire. "So your the girl I am to train... what makes you worthy of my time little girl?'
The man had done it Letti was tired of being treated like a little girl so to prove a point she decided to teach her teacher a thing or two.
'Why don't I show you,talking isn't one f my strongest skills.'
With a chuckle the Chuunin jump into and rained down a barage of shurekin and senbon. Letting forth some charkra Letti made a magnetic barrier around her body which forced the Chuunin attack into the ground inches from her body. Landing on the ground a few feet away he looked at the girl stunned, she hadn't moved a inch and yet all his attack lay harmless at her feet.
figuring his ninja tools weren't going to work for him he decided to take it to a taijutsu fight, as he rushed Letti came to a halt only a few inches from her, the shuriken and senbon that once at her feet were now planted into the Chuunin's chest, Letti hadn't hit anything vital however he new she could have ended him she turned walking away simpley saying 'What makes you think your worth MY time"
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 12:26 pm
BluewolfofMibu Rules:1. Make sure to show that you know both the strengths and weaknesses of the clan or bloodline in the rp sample. 2. Let us know that you know the limitations of your bloodline or clan. Also there is no rank limit in your rp sample so show us your best! 3. The minimum length of the rp sample has been moved up to 4 separate paragraphs of 10 sentences each. Remember this is the Minimum... more then that would be awesome but please make sure your rp sample is about your bloodline or clan... not just a rp sample of going to the store or something. p.s. Lance likes it when people don't simply do the bare minimum when it comes to app length Posting the rules that went into effect yesterday
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 12:47 pm
CHA!!! -screams like a teenage girl going crazy for some boy band- Cha, Cha, Cha!! Now I'm an Inuzuka!!
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 1:25 pm
Byakugan is Officially open! though there are limited spots.
@iShayera: Repost your app
@havikthecold: Denied, You did got give suitable information about the bloodline along with lacking in your rp sample and not using any of the bloodlines jutsus or showing its strengths and weaknesses.
Remember people to follow the new rules in place.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 1:33 pm
Rpc Name:Letti Mochachiha
Village:Rock
Rank:Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for:Satetsu
What you know about the clan/bl:It will give me control of metal dust, and other metallic objects.
Rp Sample:
Letti sat in a field waiting for her new chuunin instructor, the last two she scared away and apparently they have now sent the best of the best to train her. After several minutes passed Letti felt the air temperature around her rise,soon after a flaming spiral swirled around her, then suddenly a man in a Chuunin flack jacket stood in front of her, he was of average build and height with blond hair and green eyes. As she looked him over he did he same to her, the dark makeup over her eyes thick, her skin white, and dark hair failing down her back and her bangs covering most of her for head.
As they sized each other up the man said " So what makes you think your worth my time little girl. " His voice was condescending, as if he thought she was just another bratty child. This was one of the most annoying things anyone could do to Letti was belittle her, so she stood and said "Well, for one your here on orders, like a lap dog, so the Kage is the who thinks I am worth your time. " This did exactly what Letti wanted it to, the Chuunin became angry and in his minor flair of anger he attacked Letti. Jumping high into the air the man rained down kunai at Letti, she stood slowly sending a pulse of chakra out which made all the kunai aimed at her fly away scattering several direction.
The Chuunin landed about ten feet away from Letti staring at her wondering how she just did what she did. As he stared at her Letti opened a pouch in her right hip and opened it and a dark dust pored out of her pouch and started swirling around her body. Not being totally sure what to do the Chuunin weaved some hand seals shot forth large fireball. Letti brought the Iron dust together in front of her to block the jutsu using the Ninja Bihin Ejin Giryou to make the sand into a thin metal plate, but it wasn't even near enough the fire melted threw the metal plate and smashed into Letti.
The Chuunin laughed as he walked over to Letti and said "Well, well, you aren't that tough are you?" Letti slowly brought herself to her feet with her head down and said "Turn around" the chuunin chuckled and looked behind him was completely stunned when he saw kunai at eye level floating in front of him. Studering he turned around to see three more kunai aim at his head, Letti then turned saying "Looks like you weren't worth my time.'
The new rules were posted before I posted so ya its fixed or at least I think so.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 1:40 pm
RPC Name: Sayuri Hageshii
Village: Kirigakure no Sato
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline: The Byakugan doujutsu of the Hyuuga clan
Current Knowledge: The Byakugan provides the user an almost-360 degree field of vision, the exception being the back of the neck where the third vertebra is located. It also provides a degree of telescopic vision, which varies from person to person. The Byakugan can sometimes see underground when the second stage is reached. The greatest ability that comes with the Byakugan is the ability to see both chakra and the chakra circulation system within the body. Using Gentle Fist, the user can close or open an opponent’s chakra points, giving them control over a person’s ability to use jutsu. (In order to do this, a significant amount of points must be closed.)
RP Sample:
(*Note: Any and all references to any persons is purely due to the fact that I do not have enough of an imagination to create characters to provide interaction with my future RPC. These interactions are fictitious and did not actually occur ^^)
I should have just ignored him and I wouldn’t be here. Sayuri grumbles to herself as her body effortlessly moves into the Juken stance. She activates her Byakugan before she attacks, standing with her weight back on her right leg, right hand outstretched palm-up, left hand cocked back behind her palm-up. Her mind, with its sick sense of humor, plays back the moment in her head as she readies to perform her taijutsu.
“Sayuri, Lord Mizukage requests your presence in his office immediately.” A level voice had spoken across the training field to the petite kunoichi. Sayuri turned her head, but Yamatano was already gone, moving faster than anyone she’d ever seen. That boy. I swear, he never stops moving, she mused silently, watching Yamatano depart as she continued to stand in her fighting stance. She eventually sighed and picked up her things, shoving her hands into her gloves with an almost angry vigor.
If I had just ignored him, I wouldn’t be here. I would be speed training and practicing chakra control to my hands, not here being displayed like a show dog to the Mizukage, she gripes as her vision changes to a sweeping nearly-360-degree, telescopic view, with the exception of one spot, at the back of her neck where the third vertebrae is located. Her pale lavender eyes focus on the internal threads of chakra running through her sensei’s body, on the 361 Tenketsu, little pinpricks within the chakra system. She flexes her hands quickly before focusing her chakra into the tips of her index and middle fingers. His face lights up with a wicked smile behind his mask as he feints forward, Sayuri shadowing him. She keeps a straight face effortlessly, showing the older man that she isn’t laughing.
“So, little Say-chan, how would you like this done? Taijutsu against taijutsu?” He teases, dodging as she lashes forward, aiming for the main Tenketsu in his right shoulder joint and the one in his left wrist simultaneously. She curses and grumbles something about closing the Tenketsu in his brain, before pivoting quickly and lunging at him again. Her sensei’s laugh dies in his throat as her chakra-infused fingertips painfully force the Tenketsu in the crease of his left elbow and on the vein of his left forearm to shut. The light green eyes narrow at Sayuri as she returns to her stance.
“Eight Trigrams, Two Palms.” Her usually shy, gentle voice snaps with uncharacteristic fierceness as her eyes, enhanced by her family doujutsu, focus back on the chakra pathways in his body. The older man’s left hand itches towards his katana, resisting the urge to draw his sword and run his student through with it. Sayuri’s eyebrows rise up in mocking disbelief. “How’s it feel when your student gets the best of you?” She taunts, feinting to the left and lunging at him again, aiming for the Tenketsu in her sensei’s right shoulder and the one in the joint of his thumb. He pulls his hand back, trying to wrench it out of her reach futilely. Her sharp eyes, enhanced by the Byakugan, watch as the chakra points close, stopping the flow of chakra to his thumb and slowing the flow to the rest of his right arm. In the same movement, she forces the Tenketsu in the right side of his neck and on his left knee closed. His leg begins to shake as she murmurs, “Eight Trigrams, Four Palms,” and he swears a blue streak.
“Watch her closely. Her attacks are becoming reckless.” A voice mutters behind her. Her nearly 360-degree vision shows her that a man she’s never seen before is standing next to the Lord Mizukage, scrutinizing her shrewdly. Her movements increase in speed as she lashes at her sensei again and again, increasing the number of closed Tenketsu from two, then to four, then to eight, then sixteen, and thirty-two. She falls back, panting slightly, so she can catch her breath and give her sensei a chance to strike back. His fist catches the side of her face, sending her sprawling before she jumps agilely to her feet.
“Sayuri. Enough. End it now.” The Lord Mizukage’s voice sounds form behind her and she barely notices Kaizen and Kanzuki watching her. She dives at the older man, striking sixty-four of his chakra points and stopping the flow to his hands entirely. A hand on her shoulder snaps her out of her rage and she blinks, confused. The Lord Mizukage directs one of the medical ninja to her sensei and they begin healing him, re-opening his Tenketsu. Sayuri stares at the leader of Kirigakure as he shakes his head, staring into her eyes. She bows quickly, still confused. “When you cannot control your rage, you lose touch with your body.” He murmurs softly, watching the medics tending to her sensei. Sayuri places her fingertips against her cheek, nodding.
“I know… I don’t like being teased.” She mutters, shrugging off Luo’s hand and bowing to both him and the strange man before she walks away, heading home to the Hyuuga complex for more meditation and speed training. The things I do for power, she muses on the walk back.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 1:50 pm
@iShayera: Could you focus a little more on Gentle Fist? there's not much use of that in your sample.
@havikthecold: Denied, You did got give suitable information about the bloodline along with lacking in your rp sample and not using any of the bloodlines jutsus or showing its strengths and weaknesses. You did show the weakness to fire... but it was in a poor way.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 2:06 pm
I edited a bit and made the gather of iron sand a jutsu, and I get I didn't use any jutsu but I did use the ability of he clan... alot, and I don't understand how I showed the fire weakness poorly in the clan description it states that fire melts threw your metal
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 2:17 pm
Use jutsus... use the iron sand.. that's the point of the bloodline.. if you don't show jutsus then your not showing that you know how to use the bloodline. I know it says that but be realistic... You know that your metal melts against fire... yet you use your iron sand to 'block' a fireball you could dodge... making you get rid of your huge advantage over the other person... Be creative about it... not just "oh he uses fire jutsu.. my sand melts.. the end" >.> iv seen that ALOT.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 2:21 pm
Rpc Name: Etsushi
Village: Sunagakure
Rank: Chunnin
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Hyuuga!
What you know about the clan/bl: EVERYTHING! (*Get's ready to be shot*) The Hyuuga clan has a main branch, consisting of the leaders, or head of the clan. Then there are branches to this clan, consisting of the "lower" Hyuugans, which are branded with the "Caged Bird Seal"; which when activated by the heads of the Hyuuga clan, will force a specific branch member into extreme pain and submission. The Hyuuga trademark is pupil-less, pure white eyes, which is the source of their power; the Byakugan. The Byakugan allows the user, when activated, to see the Chaka Pathway System, in which the Hyuuga uses a fighting style (Gentle Fist) to block the chakra's pathway, and stop most, if not all attacks. Because the Gentle Fist also attacks the inner body, organs are damaged when attacked. There is no defense against this, since as Rock Lee (or was it Gai or Kakashi?)put it, you can build up you external body, but there is no possible way to train your internal body (organs and such) The Byakugan also gives near perfect 360 degree vision, except for a small blind spot on the back of the neck. The Byakugan can see though almost anything, but it has been known to be thwarted before. (Like Neji couldn't see inside that barrel that the four Sound ninja had placed Sasuke in, while he was dying of the curse mark. I forget what that jutsu is called though. o_o )
Rp Sample: Soft pink lips frowned, against delicate pale skin. Of all the days.... she sighed in frustration. It wasn't as if she was going around picking fight with people, but honestly, there was only so much that she could with stand before she kicked somebody where the sun doesn't shine. Unless you're outside naked, in which case.... she mused silently, a small smirk of a smile twitching the sides of her lips. The next second it was gone, as somebody decided they were power hungry, and place a hand on her f*ckin' a**!
She closed her eyes, breathing in deeply. It's was okay... call down Etsushi. The poor b*****d didn't know that you were a ninja, and could kill him. She paused, before thinking again, unless it was Toji, in which case, he's going down.
She turned around slowly, already regretting taking a mission in the worst part of town. Her eyes blazed with fury that swept over the crowd of perverted, drunks, before landing on the culprit; a smiling man whose smug look showed he clearly didn't know who he was messing with. He caught her glare, before her fist collided with his jaw and sent him flying into a table which cracked and splintered, collapsing under his weight. She sighed, exiting the bar she thought she saw her target go into, before she got lost amongst the hooting, drunken, unshaven men.
Maybe if she donned the disguise of a man, and reentered, she would be able to find her target better. She smiled, satisfied with that plan, and exited around the back of the bar, into an alley that smelled of fresh urine, and must. There were three men standing in the back. They looked up at her, and she stiffened, as perverted grins spread across their faces. She turned around, and found her way blocked by four more men. Well...five... if you counted the one nursing a broken jaw. (With a "Sh-," she realized with a clenching chest, that it was the man she hit earlier.)
They took a step toward her, and she backed up, only to remember the men behind her. Her muscled flexed, and she readied herself to make a mad dash to the back door of the bar. Her eyes quickly found said door, and with a dropping heart, she realized that the three men were standing between her and the door.
She weighed her odds, looking the men over as they moved slowly toward her, their intentions obvious by the perverted, drunken grins, and lust filled eyes. She took a step back towards the wall, hoping to shrink against it, and hope that they weren't looking at her, but rather each other. No such luck. They formed a half circle around her, blocking her against the wall. Good going Etsushi, make it easier for them to do... stuff, to you.
"You about nearly broke my jaw," A ruff voice, slurred with the effects of alcohol, spoke to her. Her head snapped towards the voice, though she couldn't see the faces of the men, because the shadows of the night were casting blackness over their faces.
"You shouldn't have grabbed my a** then," Etsushi retorted, her voice strangely clear, with a growl to it. A lanky hand reached out and grabbed her shoulder. The force of it, was enough to send her back into the wall, and her head banged against it, causing stars to burst in front of her eyes.
She reached out to his wrist and pulled it up above her head, shoving her foot into the guy's chin. There was a crunch, and then a scream of pain, before she realized she had kicked the guy whom she had already punched. Somebody grabbed her, and she was twisted, thrown into the wall again. She couldn't fight in the dark, like this. Her mouth twitched into a sadistic grin, before she formed hand seals, "Byakugan!"
The world around her faded into something light, and she could see the men around her, including their features. The one who grabbed her, reached toward her again, and she frowned, ducking underneath his arm, and shoving her pointer finger into his chest, before flattening her palm and pushing it back into his chest, sending a shock wave of chakra into his body.
He fell, his body twitching and shaking under the strain of his chakra being blocked. Off to the side, somebody threw a punch towards her head. She ducked that again, sweeping her feet underneath of him, and poking her fingers into his temple, blocking that flow of chakra. She smiled; his hang over would be worse in the morning.
Three down, five to go.
Two men lunged at her, and she stepped backwards, a sickening crack resounding the small alley, as they crashed into each other.
So, three to go.
Something collided with the back of her neck, and she fell to the ground; clutching her neck, as waves of fresh pain rolled across her body. She musta been hit in her blind spot. But before she could figure out, how, somebody grabbed the scruff of her neck and picked her up; throwing a punch into her face. She fell to the ground again, feeling her lips split; the taste of blood mixing with saliva.
He was coming at her again, and she pushed herself up with her hands, catching his arm with her sanduru, twisting her ankle, so his arm was forced to twist. There was another snap, and he cried out in agony. She let his arm drop, before she landed on the balls of her feet and pushed off, and into him, pushing her palm into his chest, chakra aggravating his organs and Chakra System.
Two more...
She turned, and found only one, already passed out due to the effects of the alcohol. Her frown increased. Where was the... Oh! There he was.
The was down the other side of the alley; sneaking away. She ran at him, and he jumped, taking off down the alley and out into the open. She ran after him, her kunoichi skills, coming in handy, and caught up to him in a matter of seconds. She smiled, realizing it was his target, as he shouted in surprise, seeing her.
She grabbed the back of his neck, "Hey there," she smiled, a vein in her face throbbing in annoyance, as she wiped away the blood flowing down her chin with her other hand. She blocked the chakra points in his neck. His eyes rolled in the back of his head, and he collapsed. She smiled, and grabbed the back of his shirt and dragged him to the Kazekage's office.
Once she got there, she threw open the door, and stepped inside; knowing for a fact that he was in a meeting, due to her seeing through the door. The Kazekage stood up, feeling killing intent radiating off her person.
She threw the man into the his desk, glaring at him, "A ranked mission my A-S-S!" She glared at everybody in the room, before turning around and exiting the room, slamming the door shut behind her with enough force to rattle the walls.
"Hell hath no fury," she heard somebody say inside the room, before she disappeared and went to the hospital to get the cut looked at.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 2:50 pm
@LadyShirahime93: Accepted!, This made me laugh as well as showed that you know the bloodline and Cobra Ok'd this in another place and he's awesome so I'll take his word on it. Though I would of liked to see more Gentle Fist used... but i guess it would be over kill against a bunch of old drunks.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 2:53 pm
Indeed it would. That's why I put it on the "What I know" part. >w<
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 3:17 pm
Orchid Moon Use jutsus... use the iron sand.. that's the point of the bloodline.. if you don't show jutsus then your not showing that you know how to use the bloodline. I know it says that but be realistic... You know that your metal melts against fire... yet you use your iron sand to 'block' a fireball you could dodge... making you get rid of your huge advantage over the other person... Be creative about it... not just "oh he uses fire jutsu.. my sand melts.. the end" >.> iv seen that ALOT. It was a trap, Letti got hit acked hurt then used her ability to trap her opponent. I thought it was creative Letti used her ability and turned her opponents own ninja tools against him. I kinda see what your getting at hen you say if I don't jutsu i don't know how to use the bloodline but thats not entirely true. The bloodline is mostly about using the iron sand, using the jutsu doesn't show I know how to use any other aspect of the blood line it shows I can use jutsu. I would still use jutsu with out the bloodline it would just be different jutsu. I don't mean to complain but I used the weakness the exact way the description as in he guild blood line section, I used the ability to guard myself and set up a trap at the same time, I used the weakness to draw a opponent into a trap.... I don't see how I showed that I don't understand the bloodline well enough.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 3:23 pm
... I swear if one more person argues with me... I'm shut down the thread. There are rules and standards I hold to these apps, and to be honest... your rp sample blows chunks.. and your information about the bloodline is still lacking. Instead of Arguing about stuff why not just work on your app for more then 2 minutes and give me the best work you have ever typed up?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 3:30 pm
I'll work on it fine, however you tell me I used the weakness poorly when I trapped someone with it, but ya i get how you come to that conclusion.
You also say I don't show enough of the ability's when I used two of the three listed.
And it is only a simple application I shouldn't have to think of a epic battle if the point is to use the ABILITY'S of the bloodline not the epicness of it.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Reply
