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Sorry about this, but could you Pm lance and tell him to talk to me? He seems to avoid the subject of a clan appearing out of no where.

Orchid, it's not spoon feeding, it's constructive criticism. All you do is deny people with the sole reason that "they don't understand the bloodline fully" which is ridiculous. You're supposed to try to help them understand instead of just denying them for something. Cobra is helpful and points out the flaws when he denies something, which I can show you from PMs.

(*sigh* lets try again after clearing my head on how I should do this)

Rpc Name:Makkura(Chiroku if accepted), Yoarashi

Village: Kumogakure

Rank: Academy Student

Bloodline or Clan applied for: Chiroku(Anigan)

What you know about the clan/bl: Allows you to use certain traits of animals while Anigan is active. The Higher your ninja rank, the less chakra you have to use. gives a small increase to the five senses when using animal traits be aware of the good and bad that comes with it. you can not mix different multiple animal traits until stage four. You can use multiple traits of the same e.g: Chameleon's abilty to blend into an enviorment, and to look in different directions. All Chiroku members should respect animals like they would a human friend.

Rp Sample:

Yo walked out into the lower forest regions of the mountains of Kumogakure for training his Anigan. The forest was quieter than usual. The forest would occasionally have the sound of a wolf howl, condor call when it was searching for food, or a chinchilla scurrying across the crunching leaves of the forest floor, but Yo hadn't heard a sound yet, other than his own. Yoarashi seached the forest finding no animals in sight. Then a wolf covered in blood came along, but it wasnt blood from a hunt but its own blood instead. Yo looked it in the with the Anigan for appoximately 5 seconds using the Chiroku Animal telempathy jutsu. " What happened here, where are all the animals," Yo spoke to the wolf using the jutsu concerned about the silence in the forest. The wolf replied back, its mental voice," There are poachers to the far north of here, and they've been killing animals to collect their fur. Some of the other animals have went into hiding and hadn't made a sound since then. It started about five hours ago, we thought someone would arrive sooner, but you're the first," the wolf's voice sounded raspy and weak, no doubt that it had in custody of the poachers, and risked its life to escape, and bring this message. By the looks of the wolf it was bound to die soon. " Please help my friends," the wolf pleaded with the last bit of energy that it had. Yo gave it a nod of agreement before it died. Yoarashi gave the wolf a warriors funeral like you'd a human warrior. Yo started to make his way to the campsite of the poachers his blood boiling for revenge.

Yo ran to the campsite in a matter of minutes using the animal sense technique, and his own natural speed to get there. He stopped a a couple of meters away to get a look at the campsite to make a plan of attack. The poachers seemed to be wealthy buisinessman. He had apparentlly hired two rouge ninjas to do his dirty work. Yo had saw a Chameleon try to blend into the shady wood of the tree. Taking some steps away from the camp, he eyed the chameleon to use its ability to blend into the enviorment. Crawling along the ground he was in plain sight and anyone could see him, but when he was completely still he blended into the grass and ground on the floor. Yo made his way slowly to one of the rouge ninjas. The tent was huge and seperated the ninjas' vision of each other which made it easy for Yo to sneak up on them. Yo made his way to one ninja by walking a couple of steps, then blending into the ground. This ninja must have been a very low class ninja for Yo to sneak up on him like he did. The rouge would hear the rustling of the ground, but would check to see what it was. Yo had killed this ninja by delivering a swift blow to the neck. The ninja fell to the ground with a load thump, alerting the other. When he came around Yo had already blended into the ground again, but he was different, he saw Yo move his foot and immediately realized what he was. He threw a kunai infused with raiton chakra, not at him, but on the side of him which realeased a large electrical current, disabling his Anigan.

Yoarashi quickly got off the ground to gain his footing. He was trembling from the shock still. The rouge charged him another kunai in hand, this time using it as a hand-to-hand weapon. Yo picked the one off the ground that shocked him and prayed it didn't have anymore electricity running through it. The kunai appeared to be ok when he touched it and picked it up. In the same motion he picked it up, he used it to block the Rouge ninja's kunai. Yo had held the kunai to where the pointed edge was facing the outside, and the hilt in his right hand. The rouge went low then high try and get Yo off balance. Yo preformed a basic clone jutsu to confuse his enemy. Several clones had surrounded the rouge from every angle, and somewhere in the mix was the real Yoarashi. The clones and the real Yo attacked at the same time The rouge swung at three clones until the real Yo came and stabbed him in the back, then drove his face into the floor by pushing him forward, bringing his left leg forwards, then backwards, in a hooking motion tripping him up. The blood ran from the rouge's mouth, lying down, dying.

Yo made his way to the tent, moving slowly, inch by inch. The man came out of the tent in a rage," Are you damn idiots done yet, I need to start skinning these things so I can make a damn good profit off them," His voice was a somewhat baritone pitch. Along with that, his voice had that sound to it when the rich become too greedy, and they lose themselves in it. He was about to yell at the top of his lungs when he turned to Yoarashi and suddenly trembled in fear. Yo appeared to have glowing red eyes in the dark shade of the tent; Yo was going to erupt with anger when he heard him. The Businessman ran inside the tent, Yo followed shortly after him. " Animals are your friends you know, you shouldn't treat them badly," Yo held his head down, his bangs covering his eyes. Yo got in the man's face slowly as if trying to torture him. He leaned closer to the man showing his sharp fang on the right to fake he was using his Anigan," It would be a shame for all these animals to die just for a profit wouldn't it," he said it in a dark tone to put fear in him. Yo did scare him enough to open the cages containing animals, for the man was literally wetting himself doing so. " Now leave, and I might not tell my animal buddies here not to eat you," Yo's expression was suddenly very bright, showing to the man he might be insane. As soon as Yo said that sentence though The businessman ran off screaming into the forest. Yo told the animals not to eat the man as soon as his Anigan came back. out of deep respect they went on without his business. Yo went to train more seeing he still had much to learn about his Anigan.
(How's this one)

@Tsumi: I don't know if you're going to see this or not, but I'm going to say it anyway. I read your rp sample, and I would not have approved it either. I'm not going to say that you don't understand the bloodline, because you understand the basics, that it creates explosive clay. But the problem isn't necessarily that you understand the concept, so much as your rp sample just isn't that good. What I guess I'm trying to say is that it's not strong writing, and a sign of a good rp-er is that they can write well. I don't expect a full length novel, but there should be a story there, I should be able to tell that some amount of effort was put into writing it. When I read your rp sample I thought to myself, "oh she just knows the list of techniques, she doesn't know the bloodline", there's a big difference between knowing how a bloodline works and being able to read a list of jutsus and put them in a paragraph.

((Ok I will fix and resubmit,but I didn't copy anything.to tell the truth I've never actually read over the nara clan in this guild or any other that just happen to be the first few things that came to mind.that's also why there are only two jutsu.I don't like reading so I just write with what I know which works.Anyways imma edit real quick.))

Rpc Name: Chihiro Geitou
Village: Sand
Rank: AS
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Wind Sage
What you know about the clan/bl: I made it, I think I know enough about it. But just to humor you it gives the user control over the wind to the extent of their rank, makes them one rank faster in the air, and allows them to use powerful wind jutsu without the use of a fan. It also makes you weak to fire, but whatever. Also it came from a clan who followed the Sage of six paths, wind being one of the paths.

Rp Sample: Chihiro soared through the sky over Kumogakure, and without the use of any wind riding jutsu or aircraft he was getting some looks. He didn't mind though, as he liked the attention. However, too much attention can be a bad thing, and suddenly a lightning blast just missed him as it was fired from the ground below. Several dozen followed it, but Chihiro weaved in and out of the blasts as he shot down to the ground.

As soon as he landed two smoke bombs landed near Chihiro's feet and the entire area was engulfed in a purplish fog. Chihiro closed his eyes and concentrated on reading the wind around him, identifying two shinobi who were quickly making their way into through the smoke. Knowing that he'd need to see, Chihiro used a surrounding breeze to push the smoke away from him, giving him some room to see. Moments later the two ninja appeared before him, wielding kunais and posed to strike. "You're under arrest, spy. Come quietly or we'll be forced to use action." Chihiro grinned and playfully brought his hands up behind his head. "Nah, that's ok." Suddenly the two cloud ninja were blasted up into the sky by a sudden wind. They soon flew up so high that they disappeared from sight. Chihiro simply whistled as he walked away from the scene.

can't find it

yea I found it on there. I realize there is a jutsu but Ryuu can't use it. He's not a genin.