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 Posted: Mon Nov 08, 2010 6:22 pm
Alrighty, I guess I'll just save it until an official list of fuuinjutsu comes out 3nodding .
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Posted: Mon Nov 08, 2010 7:05 pm
because it's suppose to be a justu of the clan! it's like if you hit a suigestu member and they turn into water on impact, wtf?
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Nov 08, 2010 9:03 pm
That's kind of the point. They do that. The only time they have to be solid is when they want to be solid. Of course, they have to be solid in order to make any attacks or anything like that.
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 1:34 pm
Akura
Encasing Sight: You still haven’t fixed the grammar in it.
Flail: I’m still a bit iffy on this, for one reason. Usually flails are just a tad bit larger than a cannonball. The largest cannonballs were between six and seven inches, and weighed 42 pounds. Apparently the answer to all the questions of the universe is to shoot someone with a cannon. Anyways, a 12 inch ball with two inch spikes, despite crystal being somewhat lighter than cast iron, would still be around 100 pounds. Being that I would expect the user to actually heave the thing with their own strength, it needs to be a tad bit lighter. You could just make it with a minimum and maximum size, and let people determine the rest themselves while using it.
As a tip, I’d also add in that if it hits something solid hard enough, it would shatter, sending shards flying around. That’d make for a nice surprise if someone tried to dodge it.
Clone: Seems fine now. Change the of to or though, you typo’d that. Approved.
Blade: Um, the last few words are a bit confusing. You need to correct that. The range is four feet? That’s a tad bit long for any sword, particularly one you’re trying to form and wield on the spot. The description needs more detail. One sentence is not enough, no matter how simple the technique is.
Flowers: I’d like to see a bit more detail in this one. What kind of flowers are you making? Or is that up to the user? How large are they? And how far apart are they spaced? Can I carefully walk through them, or are they thick as grass? Beyond that, you can make it last longer. Two posts doesn’t really do much for a genjutsu.
I’d be interested to see a ninjutsu version of this as well. It would of course be of a much higher rank though. The thing that really makes genjutsu scary to people in the Naruto universe, is that it might actually be real.
Ruby Light: You didn’t change this at all. Refer to my last post.
Wings: Still denied. No matter how you work it, I really can’t see strapping a chunk of rock to your back as being a viable method of flight.
One overall tip for you Akura. Get a tape measure and use it while doing things with dimensions. It helps a lot to have a visual representation of size.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 1:40 pm
If I may interject, I would like a separate RP sample for each jutsu. Cramming them all into one sample jumbles the descriptions, and makes it a bit unclear as to what each specific one does.
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 1:49 pm
I keep telling him that, but he never really seems to catch on.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 2:04 pm
TT^TT I just don't like making separate Rp samples... I could make different samples in under 10 minutes for each jutsu... But that's just annoying and not challenging...
Also, I didn't find any grammar errors on the first jutsu... Unless your talking about the Rp sample...
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 2:10 pm
Quote: he/she can see and feels as if the user would have It's better to have individual samples for each jutsu, simply because when you try to group them all into one, the judge can't tell which is which. Not to mention that you end up spending very little time on the actual jutsu, and more on reactions for your story. If you want a challenge try making different samples totally unrelated to each other, all showing every aspect of the jutsu. If the jutsu has multiple base uses or effects, you could even make a sample for each of those. An RP sample for a jutsu, should be about twice as long and detailed as you would make your post for learning the same jutsu. You're trying to showcase the technique here, not just give a quick look at it as if it were something you used all the time and were sick of describing.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 2:15 pm
Ahh I see, Thanks Hinote sweatdrop
I'll try it out some time just for fun.
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 1:12 pm
Ok so I take it that I have to make another sample for the jutsu? Or are you gonna check them out like it is?
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 2:50 pm
Your Rank:
Genin
Name of Jutsu:
Sealing style: Cautionary Seal
Rank of Jutsu:
C Ranked { For use by Npcs on people coming into the village } { Iwa Only! ^.^ }
Range of Jutsu:
N/a
Jutsu's Element:
Sealing
Description:
Used on foreign ninja to ensue that they do not make a mess while in the user's village, This jutsu makes them unable to use jutsu over academy rank while in the village.
This works by placing the seal on the palm of the wearer's hand, so that they can not mold the chakra through hand signs. This is a very unorthodox way of controlling people comming into a village, but effective.
Each village has a different chakra signature so that if another village besides Iwagakure were to receive this technique, then their seal would not affect the Iwa seal, and would not function while in Iwagakure.
This Seal can only be removed by the Person who placed it, or a Demon pulsing B Rank worth of chakra through it, causing it to forcefully break. { I'm just going to say that I'd think that a Demon using a cloak is using about a B Rank's worth of chakra to cover their body. } { Demon hosts under Chunnin rank can not break this }
The Seal is not fool proof however, It Takes time and preparation to use, roughly three posts of complete concentration. So really it is just a complete safety measure against foreign ninja having a temper tantrum.
Rp Sample
" Hold on, Before you can enter the Village you have to get your hand's Sealed. Only as long as you are in the village though. " The Chunnin gate guard said smiling. He nodded to his peers and they walked up to the man in question, lightly touching his hands and bringing them to the point his arms made a ninty degree angle with his palms up. The Head chunnin took out some Ink andbit his thumb, drawing a quick seal on the man's hands, he poured the ink on. For the amount of ink he poured on, none of it dripped off. This surprised the man, but not as much as what was to come.
The Chunnin placed his hands on the man's, and a brilliant chakra blazed upon his hands. Fierce warmth flowed all around everything that the chakra touched, but the warmth was pleasant. Suddenly the ink began to seep into the man's hands, causing a slight stinging feeling, but nothing too terrible. aparently the other ninja knew that it would hurt like that, because when the man tried to jump away at the sudden change, the two chunnin held firm. They smiled at the man. " Don't worry, it's almost done. " They said happily, Letting go of the man. If he were to pull away now, it wouldn't end well for his jutsu capabilities.
The Head chunnin muttered some words and his hands blared a bright blue, almost blinding the man. When the light subsided the man looked at his hands as the chunnin removed his own. the Seal that the chuunin had drawn on his hands had become far more ornate, and glowed faintly with blue chakra. The light seemed to be flowing slightly through the seal at all times. " There, If you feel uncomfortable having it on your hands, then I'll remove it when you exit the village, but I'll have to replace it every time you come to Iwagakure. " The man said smiling, letting out a small sigh and focusing chakra into his right index finger he placed it on both seals, which immediatly turned brown like the rocks around them and ceased to shine. " Had to place the Coded chakra in it to make it function. Welcome to Iwagakure. "
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 3:08 pm
Akura: Either way, doesn't matter much to me so long as you make the edits. If you've made the edits, I'll check it again in a bit.
Kumo: Um, no.
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 3:21 pm
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 3:30 pm
First off, it restricts a jutsu to a certain village. Second, its not a real jutsu, its an NPC jutsu. I see too many made up powers with this in the future.
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 3:32 pm
confused I never said Other villages couldn't take it. It just originated in Iwagakure. Like Hidden mist jutsu probably originated in Kiri.
It could be an actual jutsu, just not at this point in time because we don't have an actual list of sealing jutsu.
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