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Rpc Name: Yamamura Ryori
Village: konahagakure
Rank: academy student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Origami no Dara
What you know about the clan/bl: (If you put everything it will be denied on the spot) They manipulate papers to create a weapon or even bombs,thier major elements are suiton and doton.Thier weakness is lightning,fire and water
Rp Sample: (at least 2 paragraphs of at least 10 lines using said BL or Clan)

As Ryori came strolling over into an open field in a forest outside konohagakure, He wanted to improve his 爆発を削減する芸術作品 (Art of Cutting blast) jutsu. Because Ryori wanted his bird paper weapon to become more bigger. Nonetheless, he continue to stroll down the field as he stopped in the center of the grassland field. Preparing himself to improve a new technique he recently learned, Ryori began to take several deep breaths.

After taking a few deep breaths as well as stretching my fingers and limbs, he began to first mold and channel chakra from within his central, inner core as Ryori had to provide more chakra then he had previously done to create a bigger bird made out of solid papaer. As he continued to mold chakra from my body, Ryori quickly finished as he began to quickly form the required hand seals at high speed. Just as the hand seals were formed, Ryori released the stored and molded chakra off him,creating and merging to create something bigger and more deadly paper bird.

Releasing the chakra off, only a brief moment would pass before something happened. A brief moment later, thousands of papers came out inside his clothe, as a total of 1000 papers,1500 papers were created and start to revolve around Ryori. Stopping after realizing that he didnt created enough, Ryori began to mold even more chakra from my central core as he had to gather an even larger amount of chakra then previously to form the right amount of papers to create a bigger paper bird bomb.

Being more patient and taking more time in molding my chakra, he began to then slowly released the molded chakra off me and created more papers. Then Ryori would suddenly form the required hand seals and the papers begin to merge with one another they slowly created a bird about 40 feet in height. Emerging from the papers, Ryori noticed that he had created a much bigger bird bomb about 60 feet high.

He began to control the bird and make it fly above the grassland,but Ryori notice that my chakra level is decreasing due to the amount of chakra to form it and to manipulate it, he quickly execute the bird by striking a nearby tree at the other end of the grassland, Ryori saw a big flash of light then it follows a loud explosion about 2 seconds after the flash he was amazed that his jutsu worked!,after seing the spectacular explosion, Roriy layed his back on a tree,he was exausted!, Due to the amount of chakra to create and manipulate it.after resting, Ryori quickly got back to konohagakure about an hour and making a stop in the ramen house to eat."this was a good training"

what do you want me to do? remake again?

Just change it to 3rd person first, then I'll look at it.

Is there anything else to change, oh bearer of almighty knowledge?

Oh, btw that same quote from narutopedia, is used in the bloodline description, exactly as I posted here.

Actually, you can drop the attitude for one.

Second, she's just trying to make sure that you know what you're doing. We don't want a whole bunch of people running around with powerful bloodlines, and then someone RP's and fights your charry, killing it, and you didn't know how to prevent it.
Chillax, and do some more research. No copying and pasting. Put it in your own words. And make it epic. Because... epic... is well, epic. o.o

The weakness was stated, used in the RP sample as you asked. What else is there that you want to impose me to add? Also, if you pay attention and read carefully the bloodline page, when it comes to Chakra Mouth, it is copied and pasted from Narutopedia. It even has the Eye Enhancement from Deidara, which isn't a part of his Chakra Mouths, it is a scope. If using Narutopedia as a base isn't something good, then the bloodline would have to be reviewed aswell. Instead of just suggesting, you should read the bloodline page aswell.

Shirahime, if my character dies in a fight, because I didn't know how to prevent it, it will be my own fault. It will be because of lack of RP experience, not lack of knowledge about a bloodline. I don't think there is more to research, what is there more about this "bloodline" other than the chakra mouth itself that is used to create the explosives.

As it looks like you can't explain what you want as a "fully bloodline understanding" since you don't say what else you want me to add to the sample, I will stick with my Hyuuga application once it becomes available.