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 Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2007 9:34 pm
Kin paussed for a moment, watching with unblinking eyes, studying her, before confirming to himself that she was alright. His attentive gaze immediately faded away back into his laid back form, smiling malignantly and confident. He stood up, and placed his hand over his brows, looking up into the clear sky, "Don't know. I managed to seep in a little info from the two guys who came by and retrieved the names 'Ferero Rochere Golf Club Private Reservation' and 'park'. Hm... sounds like fun." He crossed his arms as he lightly gazed over the vast grassland and the outlaying trees in the edges. There were some benches around as well as some clean dirt. He smiled as he closed his eyes and felt the calm breeze unto his face, satisfied after an enjoyable juicy battle. "So what did you do?" He asked calmly, glancing over as he tilted his head, "I never knew you had an exploding talent in you."
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Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2007 10:06 pm
~*~♥ ♥ ♥~*~ "what should we do with 'er?" the gaurd asked. "I don't know! Just dump her outside or... something..." was the reply of one of the occupants of the pentagon. The gaurd shrugged and dragged her outside, and left her just beond the gate.
About five/ten minutes had passed after the gaurd had left Izzy almost beside the main gate; when the pentagon blew up, the force of the explosion moving her farther away from the remanants of the pentagon. The loud, 'KA-BOOM!!' and the flying debris had waken Iz up. She carefully sat up, her muscles were tired and they threatend to collapse, but she forced her self to sit. She yelped in pain when she moved her shoulder, and when she was sitting properly, she gently pshed back the sleeve of her t-shirt to examin her shoulder.Her shoulder was terrribly bruised, and it was starting to swell. Oh, how she wished Ryn or Nendir was there. It had only been three days since the whole thing with her family, (i.e., the crazy murderer episode.) but so much had happened since then and more or less, Ryn and Nendir were pretty much family to her and it would have been helpful to have them around.
Izzy carefully stood up, trying to move her arm as little as possible, and looked around at her surroundings. her right hand subconsiously tryied to clasp onto the dragonfly pendant around her neck, but it was nowhere to be found. She looked on the ground around her with no such luck. 'oh well. just the last thing familiar to my old life gone.' she thought, somewhere between being sarcastic and depressed.
(( gonk Ahhhhhh!!!!! I can't think of anything else to type so it's ending all wierd-like!!)) ~*~♥ ♥ ♥~*~
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Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2007 10:13 pm
Moaning Ryn slowly sat up, and looking around vaguely he spotted Izzy. A light grin came across his blood splattered face, as his thrashed body slowly pushed itself to his feet.
"Izzy...", he croaked, so quietly he didn't think she could possibly hear him. Slowly he stumbled forwards, still almost twenty feet from Izzy, slowly unbuckling the sheath to his now lost sword.
"Izzy...", he mumbled again, collapsing to the ground, his wings shaking, as blood continued to trickle off his body onto the ground. He had lost to much blood to keep moving. He moaned again, and slowly tried to crawl forwards, using only his right arm.
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Posted: Mon Sep 03, 2007 3:17 pm
HP: 30
Mark shook himself, standing slowly from the explosion. He looked down to his arm; it was bleeding, a piece of steel driven all the way through his left bicep. He pulled it out; there was a little blood on it, but it had sealed itself rather quickly, so he wasn't too worried about bleeding out.
What he couldn't ignore was the significant muscle damage to his chest, stomach, and arms. He wouldn't be able to fight for a while now. Already he could see the beginnings of fresh cells multiplying to seal the wound, but it was just beginning; he wouldn't see results for perhaps days. In the meantime, there was a soldier who had bravely helped him.
He crouched down next to Amadeus, holding out his hand to help him up. "You alright?" he quizzed.
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Posted: Mon Sep 03, 2007 7:13 pm
Craig looked as the building exploded, he gave no sign of happiness or sadness. He looked to the soldier. "I cannot promise anything, allow the explanation to happen before the decision of combating the Purifiers..." He then followed the Soldier to where ever he went for the explanation.
((sorry for not posting sooner, there. Weekends are busy for me))
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 11:39 am
Being dropped off randomly, not to his suprise, the Military Medic Magnus arrived. With his book under his right arm he scanned the area. On his left arm in the form of a bandana was a first aid symbol which marked what he was supposed to be there for. "Now.." He lifted his glasses and began walking without hesitation. "Where are the bodies.." He asked himself..
(Just joining, Im at the library PC and I dont know of the setting or current events. Bleh)
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 2:42 pm
~*~♥ ♥ ♥~*~ Izzy thought she heard someone behind her, but she wasn't sure, and afraid that it was another enemy that she had accumulated, she carefully turned around. As soon as she saw that it was Ryn, that fear was turned into relief and joy, and she rushed toward him, and pulled him into a hug, trying to move her (left) arm as little as possible. She pulled away as soon as she realized that he was injured and bleeding. "are you ok? ..that was a stupid question, of corse you're not ok. But what happened? when I left you were still fighting with a couple people that had seemingly fell from the sky?" Her voice held obvious concern. 'if Ryn is in this horrible state, then what about Nendir? Was he still in the building when it exploded? Or was he out here fighting?' she couldn't stop the flood of thoughts that raced through her mind, but of corse, this was somewhat expected. She already had a stream of thoughts going through her mind before she saw Ryn, the thoughts just changed. ~*~♥ ♥ ♥~*~
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 2:52 pm
Ryn winced, and slowly sat up, looking Izzy straight in the eyes, as blood slowly trickled down his face, before whispering,"I'll be fine.... I got caught up against a being far more powerful than I have ever met.... and the explosion didn't help my injuries...."
Slowly he reached around Izzy, and pulled her closer, saying,"I don't know where Nendir is... But I'm sure he isn't dead, and since he didn't end up in the fight, he should be fine..."
He did his best to grin, slowly trying to stand, knowing that they had to get away from here, before more people arrived.
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 3:27 pm
[[I think Rayne quit... But, I can't be certain, so just pretend that he disappeared, or make your char THINK he died. idk... Rayne has alot on his plate, so try and work around it. If he's really too busy then we'll confirm he's dead, but until then. We only think he is.]]
Sakeri was still in the process of taking it all in, her eyes reflecting the unbearable amount of confusion she was going through.
"It..." she breathed heavily, looking around. "wasn't me. It was some kid -a purifier." A chill ran up her spine at the thought of him. She rubbed her arms desperately, trying to rid herself of goose bumps.
His eyes were so empty... almost inhuman, she shuddered. She calmed herself quickly, shaking her head in the process. She stood quickly on her feet, Amati following soon after, and began to walk. There was something about that child... how could he be so powerful.
"We need to get out of here and start training," she said quietly. "Otherwise we'll only end up as foot soldiers in the annihilation of mankind. We'll be the first to die."
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 4:11 pm
Kin chuckled darkly, amused at the palpable fear in her eyes. There seemed to be a certain sparkle in them that fascinated him even more than the depth and shallow that they already had to begin with. 'Perhaps it has something to do with the purifier...' He thought, and asked, "Training? Now now... what about that purifier again?"
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 6:12 pm
Amadeus was about to respond to the Craig (though he did not know it's name yet) and ask about "Purifiers", when another human-ish person approached him. He looked human enough, but there was something about him that made Amadeus feel he wasn't 100% normal. Maybe it was the fact that his skin seemed to be literally crawling. However, Amadeus wrote off this phenomenon as after-effects of nearly suffocating. Hypoxia tends to make you see weird things.
"You alright?"
Amadeus looked from the newcomer who had just spoke, to the other strange being, and back to the newcomer. He wasn't sure if they were on the same team, but since neither one seemed to be trying to kill him, he figured they were both alright... for now, anyway.
"Sort of. Being choked to death by living dirt tends to have an effect on you." He chuckled a little bit, trying to lighten the very, very weird situation. "But I'm getting better by the minute. I don't think that there was any lasting damage. But I'll have to see a medic to be sure of that.
"Now..." He turned back to the one who had approached him first. "You mentioned 'Purifiers', and I heard that word spoken a few times during the battle back there." He jerked a thumb over his shoulder towards the remains of the Pentagon. "What exactly are they? I'm assuming they don't exactly appreciate the existence of mankind, but why? This question is open to both of you, by the way." He added, looking back over at Mark.
((Sorry if Amadeus seems a bit scattered in his thought process... I'm trying to make sure he talks to both Craig and Mark.))
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 6:52 pm
((Aagh. -_-; Missed my chance to contain the explosion. I'll try and figure out a post today or tomorrow. See what I can do.))
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 7:14 pm
~*~♥ ♥ ♥~*~ Izzy stood up (I know I didn't say she was sitting, but I implied it.) and held her hand out to help Ryn.
She could tell that they needed to leave as soon as they could, that's pretty much what had happened since the 'episode'.
Not just that but, the more people that came, the more people would see Ryn.
And somehow he'd probably get tied into the pentagon and the bomb,
and, her guess, would be that a really tall half dragon half person would be pretty easy to track or follow.
"I'm guessing we're still gonna try to get to Canada?" she questioned. it was either Canada, or her old town. It would probably be deserted by now, but Canada still seamed like the better option. ~*~♥ ♥ ♥~*~
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 9:23 pm
Craig nodded to Mark, for some reason his opinion changed out of combat. Now that the mission was successful, he could focus on his interests until he had to chose at the next declaration of the Gods. He looked Mark up and down, then looked to see if anyone was listening in. He spoke quietly enough for only the other two to hear. "Purifiers are creations of the gods still loyal to them. They are built out of man's own fears. Their intent is the same as the gods, to destroy mankind..."
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Posted: Tue Sep 04, 2007 9:52 pm
"Yah... Lets head... For Canada... So... Thataway!", Ryn said, as he slowly stood up, and pointed off towards the north, around the ruined Pentagon. Wincing as he stood, he folded his bloody wings behind him, and looking down slightly at Izzy, said,"This isn't going to be easy... and I can't fly now.... Any chance you know how to drive and we could get a nice, open air car?"
He winced again as he took a step forwards, his thoughts vaguely on the topic, while wondering where the Purifiers he had fought with had gone to now.
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