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 Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 8:20 am
Yuki woke up and rubbed the sleep from his eyes. He second day in Konoha was about to begin. Hopefully it would be better than the first. He sat up and stretched, scratching the back of his head. He made a bowl of cereal and watched kids play outside of his apartment. A gust of wind swept down the bright street and brought with it pink flower blossoms. Sakura blossoms, no doubt. He smiled and looked down, stirring his the milk in his cereal bowl absent mindedly. His mind was clearly somewhere else, thinking about a special person. But his head jolted up and he snapped back into reality the second he heard screaming children down the street running away from something. He stood up and watched them pass his house, their hands flailing in the air wildly and still screaming bloody mary. He walked over to the door, opened it, and gasped in amazement at what he saw.
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 9:04 am
hmmm since we are not supposed to be able to join a village until we graduate i will give you a sample of my sp i suppose... my chars name is Akatski Zakari
Calmly assessing life from his secluded spot hidden amongst the trees. Zakari thinks deeply of his future and the workings of the world. "Hmmm aye maybe today will be an actually enjoyable day filled with friends and laughter and hard work" he spoke out loud as he stood up on the branch he had been resting on "or it could be like any other day were my training to be a hunter-nin consumes me and i remain alone". Nimbily moving from branch to branch he moved closer to his destination, only to stop and watch the students play with their friends and the villagers going about in their daily routines. His emotions began to rise, and feeling this he began to speak to calm himself. "Hmmm......this is what i was made for.....to protect these people, reguardless of status i will do whatever it takes to ensure their safety even if it means losing the enjoyment of friends and relationships". Blinking away all remainder of his visibile emotion he continued onward toward his destination at the training grounds.
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 9:34 am
It was clear night. The only things in the sky were the stars and the full moon. Izumi dashed through the forest as fast as he could, silently cursing himself for being so careless. He had failed to kill the target and now a small army was after him. He could hear the shouts of his pursuers as they chased after him. Izumi realized that he couldn't run forever and stopped, turning to face them. Clenching his fists he charged preparing for the toughest fight of his life.
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 9:46 am
Takauro walked confusedly through the pitch black woods wearing a riped black t-shirt and baggy blue pants he looked like he hadn't eaten in weeks but that was because he hadn't. He'd been wandering the woods for weeks ever since he had gotten abandoned during a large thunderstorm all his other classmates were probally safe and sound in there houses sipping tea and eating crumpets. He sighed and lazily took a seat on the ground to rest he looked around the woods with his pale face and smacked his lips to feel the dryness.
He looked up at the bright sky wishing he could just fly away he sighed ounce more .He barely had any more chakra left it was completely hopeless .He laid his back on the ground looking up at the sky and his arms to the side of him suddenly....He was attacked a kunai came flying from the trees Takauro couldn't react fast enough it impaled him in the left shoulder. Takauro pulled himself together and ran for the hills the girl pursued him . He tripped on an old tree root coming out of the ground .It was over game over game over man he thought to himself .He grabbed a kunai from his right pocket and used all his might and threw it the kunai missed and lodged it self in a tree.
He had fear written all over his 10 year old face he grabbed a tree trunk to pull himself up and ran ounce. More with a tear in his eye he whispered to himself I don't wanna die I don't wanna die .
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 1:06 pm
Character Name: Jin Enkai (No village yet. eek )
Jin awoke to a loud noise outside his window wondering what it was he threw his favorite green shorts on and the gray long sleeve shirt his father had given him. After Finally finding all his clothes he quickly ran outside to pursue whatever had made the noise. Immediately as he stepped out he saw his sisters annoying little dog chewing on some of his other pants. Seeing as he didn't want to have to run after the dog Jin went back inside and crawled into bed.
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 4:35 pm
Well, here goes..If you see a spelling mistake, sorry. My keyboard is acting up..i need a new one...anyways:
RP Sample:
Kenji searched the forest, looking for his missions "package". He looked aimlessly for a clue or a sign that could set him an a direction, but he had no luck. He then began thinking to himself on whether or not he should continue, but he never gave up in his life, so why would he stop now. He continued to look around and even though his Luck was usually bad, he spotted a broken twig. He stopped hopping along the trees and searched the area. He then saw a trail of broken twigs and such, so he began following it. He made sure that he stayed a short distance away from the actual trail, just in case there were traps set up..
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 12:10 am
grimmnjow jaggerjack Takauro walked confusedly through the pitch black woods wearing a riped black t-shirt and baggy blue pants he looked like he hadn't eaten in weeks but that was because he hadn't. He'd been wandering the woods for weeks ever since he had gotten abandoned during a large thunderstorm all his other classmates were probally safe and sound in there houses sipping tea and eating crumpets. He sighed and lazily took a seat on the ground to rest he looked around the woods with his pale face and smacked his lips to feel the dryness. He looked up at the bright sky wishing he could just fly away he sighed ounce more .He barely had any more chakra left it was completely hopeless .He laid his back on the ground looking up at the sky and his arms to the side of him suddenly................ Crumpets rofl Why suddenly?
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 12:12 am
@Heryn: Nice!! Pass. :3
@Junoichi: Lovely >< Pass.
@Aigyouikioi: Scary mum o_O Pass lol.
@Kevin0: Pass :3 I like the end.
@waterfallshinobi: Pass!
@Kuma_Izumi: Ooh I like pass :3
@Serath-Howle: Strange... o.o can you do another one? It is funny though XD
@Darkshadow: Pass!!
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 7:52 am
Nice but where did the punctuation go? :Sweat:
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 7:57 am
kouri-chan_xx Nice but where did the punctuation go? :Sweat: puncuation damn I forgot i'll fix it
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 8:03 am
:Sweat: It's still confusing... somehow it feels like it's going WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY too fast. Also your full stops seem to be in the wrong places >< Yeah anyway could you perhaps slow it down a bit, cut down that scene to like seeing the girl throw the shurken or something..
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 8:24 am
kouri-chan_xx :Sweat: It's still confusing... somehow it feels like it's going WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY too fast. Also your full stops seem to be in the wrong places >< Yeah anyway could you perhaps slow it down a bit, cut down that scene to like seeing the girl throw the shurken or something.. what do I need to do to pass.
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 8:42 am
SOrry, I'm doing a History essay right now, it's due tomorrow, it's close to midnight here.. lol... I suck at time management XD
Anyway. 1) slow it down, 2) work on grammar, 3) make it easily readable, 4) maybe not so godmoddy. SOmething like this.
Suddenly a kunai came straight from the tree on his side. It was coming at him too fast for Takauro to react and although he tried to dodge it at the last moment it impaled him in the left shoulder. Pinned to the ground, he braced himself for the worst, and suddenly a Rain ninja appeared; a girl actually. She really was quite pretty, wearing short shorts, a hot pink T-shirt and a demon shuriken on her back, but there was a hardness in her expression.
Pulling himself together Takauro got up and ran for the hills as quickly as he could. Unfortunately he was going so fast that on the way he tripped on a tree root just protruding out of the ground. The girl was following him and when he fell she threw a shuriken at him. It soared like a comet through the tree, going straight for Takauro. 'It's all over, it's all over,' he thought, closing his eyes...
I left out the sensei because I gotta get back to work >< Of course it doesn't need to be that proper in grammar but it has to be readable D: Why don't you do a different scenario.
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 8:56 am
Awesome, Thanks! xp
Now I can apply for a Village...which village...oh right..Rain.
*Runs to Rain Village*
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