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 Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 8:55 am
kouri-chan_xx J4CK 0F 5P4D35 Waking up from one bone chilling night, Agito walked into the bathroom grabbed his tooth brush and toothpaste, he squeezed some on his toothbrush and threw the past back on the sink hearing it hit the mirror and then the sink. As Agito brushed his teeth he started walking to the kitchen to make something to eat. All of a sudden someone knocked on the door, He ran to answer it. He slowly opened the door to see his brother Shou coming from the romen shop with food. When Agito seen the Steaming Wonton's he started to scream forgetting the toothbrush was in his mouth. Shou started to laugh at him saying "You stupid are u that hungry?" Agito replied "NO!!!! Its Freaking cold and i was going to make some romen!" As Shou walked into the kitchen he placed the food on the table and walked away. Agito started walking back to the bathroom bagging a little on the toothpaste, he finished brushing jumping into the shower (*I would add details but some people mite get happy*)and came out, As he came out he slipped on the bar of soap but catching him self Agito thought to himself "Yes that Wonton is worth dieing for " He started to drool as he could taste the the warm wonton's meaty center and the soy sauce that he dips it into. As he changed and ran to the kitchen Shou set the table and said "Umm this foods not for you but for my date i have. Shou then smiled with joy and started to dance. Agito then started screaming "Why must u tease me knowing Wonton is my favorite food" Shou replied "You never asked if it was for u and laughed" Agito then went to the Romen shop and ate Wonton . Lol interesting story rofl Pass but remember to use paragraphs because it was a little hard to read. And is it that hard to write 'you'? D: XD *bows* Yes Ma'am!
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 10:22 am
Daichi Yamada lay in wait, face-down several inches under water in a murky roadside pond, breathing through a small bamboo straw. A thin black thread was tied to one finger, and the other side was tied to a tree on the other side of the road.
Time seemed to stop for Daichi, the suspense was building. He began to doubt himself: This is the right night, isn't it? I read the order correctly, didn't I? . It was the night of the full moon, and he was all alone, the rest of his squad had split up to cover every possible road. There was no guarantee that anybody would come.
Something tugged on the other end of the thread, but before Daichi could think, his body was already reacting. It was automatic, the result of intense training. Chakra, bubbled out from nearly every inch of his body, parting the water as his back arched back and his head pulled up. Chakra formed a shield around his body, keeping the water from his clothes inside, and forcing the water around his body from splashing up. His explosion from the water was dead silent.
Chakra exploded from the bottom of his feet, as well as the palms of his hands, forcing him out of the water, thrusting out into the clear, cool night air. A single drop escaped his chakra suit, and it fell toward the water. Daichi was halfway towards the road, flying forward blindingly fast, but the drop hit the water, and it made a sound.
Daichi focused his eyes, and drew his blade. He never even thought about what to do after he hit or missed, he thrust forward with every fiber of his soul.
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 5:33 pm
RP Sample:
"Nivi, you're going to be late if you plan on meeting Yori at the park." Nivi's mother said on the other side of the door. "Ok, I'm getting up now." Nivi mumbled, stretching. She grabbed whatever clothes she could find and kissed her parents and went out to meet her best friend. As Nivi walked out of the house she waved good bye to her mother and father before walking further. Nivi, still half asleep and yawning, walked to the park getting there just in time. She sat on the swing and wondered where Yori was. As she started to look around she saw her walking from the other direction that Nivi came from. "Sorry, I was getting ramen down at the new place that just opened up!" Yori said reaching Nivi and sitting down on a swing next to her.
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 11:06 pm
Looks good both of you. Nice length and good full detail. I think you should pass, just gotta wait for Kouri to say so.
Oh and ummm I'm holding a training battle for a friend of mine in the Free Battle Thread. If anyone needs some help with the system, just come there and look for me.
@Kouri sorry Kouri if this is innapproriate sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 2:51 am
suddenly a shadow appears on the top of a tree! It jumps and lands right in front of the ninjas!! She's a young girl with blonde hair and a huge shuriken. "Hi I'm Miharu!! Sorry if I scared you but do you know where's the Hokage please?" she said
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 8:04 am
@Khenti: D: Really good, I pass it knowing it would take me quite a while to make up something like this crying Indeed.
@BlackSapphireFairy: This is like a story... can you do another one staying in one place?
@Carlos: No this is le fine!
@Rikku: Umm too short sorry sweatdrop Although Miharu seems quite cute and hyper :3~ Capitals and full stops lol. And overuse of exclamation marks... but those are small problems the main problem is the length, can you do something longer?
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 9:30 am
Here is mine by the character name Yura Kaleb,
Kaleb woke up from his nap under a tree near a stream. He walked over to the clear blue stream and put his hands into the water. The water felt cool on his hands and he put his hands to his face to awake himself more. Kaleb stood up and looked around the place he was standing in. He was on a road that led two ways with the stream running along side it. There were trees on both sides with deep green leaves and dark tan bark. The grass around him was soft and lime green with patches of darker lime every so often.
Kaleb rubbed his eyes and followed the path in front of him. It was a dirt path with light brown dirt. Halfway down the path Kaleb saw a brown rabbit hopping away from a set of trees whimpering. He ran to the bunny and soothed it by petting it. There was a loud roar like thunder from the trees to his right and he started to run down the path. He was running so fast and looking back every so often that he didn't see a rock on the ground in front of him. Kaleb tripped on the rock and scratched his face very hard on the gravel in front of him.
When he hit the ground he saw the thing come out of the trees and ran after him. It was a brown bear with orange eyes and claws as long as a ruler and as sharp as a kunai. Kaleb picked himself up and started to sprint towards a gate that led into a village. The bear tripped on the same rock as Kaleb but he tripped toward the stream and fell in. The current took the bear downstream to where he was earlier.
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 9:45 am
Suddenly a shadow appears on the top of a tree. It jumps and lands right in front of the ninjas. She's a young girl with blonde hair and a huge shuriken. "Hi I'm Miharu!! Sorry if I scared you but do you know where's the Hokage please?" she asked."WELL ANSWER ME!!! *sigh* The people here are so unhelpful... Anyway I'll find him myself!" Miharu ran to find the Hokage.
Her only chance of to graduate and she couldn't find him. "Maybey he's a pervert and he's spying girls in the public baths. No no, maybey he's too old and he can't get out of his bed! MAYBEY HE'S A SHE!!! YAY!" Miharu though outloud while laughing.
She wasn't able to find him in none of those places and when she asked it was told that it was a HE.
"THAT OLD PERVERT!!! WHERE ARE YOU???" she yelled in the street.
hehehe sweatdrop sorry but sometimes I get carried away and I put lots of exclamation marks
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:46 am
kouri-chan_xx bakuretsuai "Okay Mom, I'm leaving now," Kaiho said as she moved towards the door. "Oh, Kai, your father and I are so happy you've finally decided to actively pursue your career as a ninja! Though I wish you'd rethink your wardrobe..." Miyaki smiled as she looked her daughter's all black outfit over disdainfully. "Mom, you and dad have wanted me to be a ninja since I was born. I had a shuriken plushie!" Kai growled. "And you were absolutely adorable!" she squealed as Kai turned for the door. She felt a sudden breeze and Miyaki stood before her blocking her path. Reaching up, she felt her hair no longer loose about her shoulders but pulled tight into a high pony tail on top of her head and secured with a green ribbon. "Mom!" "Oh, but sweetie, it goes so well with your hair color. Don't try to take it out, now off you go!" Miyaki chirped as she ushered Kai outside. Not wanting to risk whatever her mother had done to ensure her hair stayed as it was, she merely sighed and walked out the door. Just as she left the yard she turned and caught sight of her father in the garden, assembling a large bouquet. He grinned and waved her out, having already given her a speech the night before. "I wonder where my brother is..." she thought as she walked towards the academy. ((@.@ I think I overshot a bit...)) PAss :3 I love your NPC family~ Nah it's fine! Domo arigato gozaimasu Mod-sama!
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 3:02 pm
My character is Nivi
As Nivi sat under a large tree in a forest she wondered if she would ever accomplish the Doto: Doryu Heki (Earth Release: Earth Flow Rampart) jutsu. As she took a break she silently focused on the summer breeze.
It was quiet now because everyone had left for lunch. Nivi slowly got up to try the jutsu once again. As she started to focus on her chakra she heard the snap of twigs behind her. As she spun around she pulled out a kunai. "Who's there?" she yelled fiercly. Everyone is busy eating, so why would anyone be back so soon? Nivi thought to herself. She waited for them to step out of the shadows of the trees. "Are you coming out? Or.." she started to say but was cut off by laughter. "What? Try to kill me?" just as he said that at least 5 kunais were thrown at Nivi. As Nivi tried to dodge all of the kunais one pierced her in her shoulder. She tried to remember where the kunais had come from but it happend so fast she didn't even realize what had happend. Not trusting the jutsu she was practicing she hid up in a tree, tying a piece of cloth on her shoulder to stop the bleeding. "See? I told you, you couldn't kill me. You'll be lucky if you make it out of here alive." the voice said, chuckling. "Oh yea? Wanna bet?" she mumbled as she grabbed 3 of her own kunais and 4 or 5 throwing stars. She jumped tree to tree in silence, trying to make him think she had fled. When in reality all she wanted was to defeat him. As she circled around them, trying to find where he was hiding she jumped tree to tree in silence. Even when her wound got aggrivated from being moved so much she kept silent.
After she found her attackers, which were two male ninjas, she took her throwing stars and threw them at them in one graceful movement. One fell to the forest floor immidiately. Two throwing stars in his back. The other ninja caught on quickly just as one flew by his hand. Nivi quickly threw her kunais as the male ninja retreated. "That wasn't so.. hard." she panted.
[[[[[[[[Doto: Doryu Heki (Earth Release: Earth Flow Rampart) -- it creates a hard shield of earth to protect the user from attacks.]]]]]]]]
i hope this RP sample is better ^^
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jun 21, 2007 2:58 am
O: Everyone passes, sorry for the lack of constructive opinion but yeah >.< Shizuka where are you?? D: (Final_Solace)
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 1:23 am
((I tried to avoid saying what village she's in. xd ))
Mayu hugged closely to the tree, the rough bark scratching her cheek, leaves tickling the skin where her legs weren't protected from the branches they were dangling through. Although it had been several weeks now, she was still very aware of the slight heaviness on her upper arm where she'd tied the band. Mayu let go of the trunk to touch the cold metal and the dent where the symbol of her Village had been engraved.
It really was there. A ninja. After all that time of waiting, and all that time of insecurity that she wasn't 'ninja material', she had passed and had a team. Although she didnt' know much about them yet Mayu refused to let that bother her- she had time to get to know them, after all.
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 2:06 am
A pale blue glow washed over a dark, sullen face etched with wear. Cerulean locks framing two darkened hues of midnight navy billowed lazily in the occasional vibrant wind gusts-- characteristic of the shaded clifftop below a large oak tree. The quiet mesa sat overlooking a meandering stream that produced a tranquil, melodic sound almost soothing enough to cure any ailment. But the problem ailing Sato Junoichi wasn't one to be cured simply from the beautiful sound of a babbling brook. This ailment was simply nerves. Today, Sato Junoichi would find out whether or not he would proceed closer towards his goal of becoming a shinobi. Test after test fell beneath his worthy academic prowess. Problem after problem crumbled beneath the subtle might of his pen. So why, then, were his nerves crowded within him-- struggling to get out at the gentle pace of the trickling stream of water below. But impatience and anxiety are signs of weakness; and an indicator of instability. A ninja had no time for that. The wait would inevitably continue on.
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 8:15 am
koigokoro kyohaku queitly creeped into her house. It was well past midnight, she was supposed to be home an hour ago. she was dressed in a black skirt and black vest that showed off her flat stumach. Her body was shaking with anxiety. hopefully okaa-san went to bed early and didnt notice me hot coming home on timeshe thought to herself she had almost made to her room when the lights were turned on to show a very displeased mother. Kyo gluped her mind raced to try to come up with an excuse for being late.
"Okaa-san, um I was just getting a drink of water because i couldnt sleep." Kyo lied brushing her black hair out of her eyes. She looked up at her mother agian. She knew hor mother didnt believe her lie. Kyo backed away slowly as her mother stepped toward her.
"Kyohaku what have I told you about coming home late? remember you promised that you would never do it again. Well this time there is nothing stopping me from killing you." Kyos mother had a thing for over reacting and did so often. Kyo continued to back away. After a couple minutes Kyo turned full around and ran out of the house. As she tried to get as far away as possible sh ecould still hear her mothers evil laugh.
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