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 Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 12:27 pm
While I do like this profile and would be more than welcome to accept it, I have to deny it until some changes are made, well mainly just one. Konoha is not currently allowed to take anymore registrants due to the current influx of Genin.
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 12:37 pm
Well actually; Azeiel Made me his second jounin, and advisor as his first advisor is inactive
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 12:42 pm
Did you get a look at mine? Is it good enough?
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 12:45 pm
[ Kiju: } Are you sure you want migraines every three posts? ^ ^;;
Can't you just tone down your sight thingy to simply "Observational ability increased?"
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 12:51 pm
Alright, Tai, approved under the conditioning that Azeiel's taking you in as his advisor. Also you must change your seal attribute so that it states you can perform them one handed, then underneath give it the condition that they are performed weaker as they don't have the same amount of focus as the full seals.
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 12:52 pm
sweet. now to finish drawing himmm * u *
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 12:52 pm
well i only get the migraines when im in combat. And he hates being in combat and mostlikely wont be in it very much. So ya im sticking with the migraines. i know it will suck but it works out.
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 12:59 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 3:23 pm
 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ρ є r ѕ σ η α ℓ • ∂ α т α|├▬
Full Name: Rin Shuuichi Junior
Nickname: Tyke
Age: 10
Birthdate: September 8th
Gender: Male
Height: 4'2
Weight: 98
Nindo: "I'd like to be the hand of justice, but... Justice never returned life back to those lost"
Personality: quiet, keeps to himself, timid to some degree, has a Very strong hate for murderers
Village: Leaf
Rank: new Genin
Class: Ninjutsu
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c σ м в α т • ∂ α т α|├▬
Chakra Pool: 250
Chakra Color: Various shades of blue
Chakra Element: Water, and Lightning
Strengths:
• Speed
• Armed combat (specifically with knives)
Weaknesses:
• His size tends to put him at a disadvantage with adult fighters or average to large fighters in general
• Weak immune system, Rin gets sick and fatigued easily and his fatigue can quickly build up in a long fight
Fears:
• Getting too close to others
• Abandonment
• Losing anyone who is close to him (which is why he fears getting close to others, he does not want to to lose them)
Attributes:
• precision
• agility
Class Attribute:
• C. Attribute - Quick Hands: Jutsu performance speed slightly increased?
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c α r є є r • ∂ α т α|├▬
Ryo: 両 zero
AC: zero
Missions Complete:
D Rank :: 0
C Rank :: 0
B Rank :: 0
A Rank :: 0
S Rank :: 0
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ω є α ρ σ η • ∂ α т α|├▬
Weapon Type: Knives and throwing knives
Weapon Range: the weapon itself is about three inches long but can be thrown at the very least 100meters
Weapon Weight: bout a half a pound per knife?
Weapon Location: usually in his pockets and sleeves, occationally on straps... he carries a lot
• {When you create your profile, you may have any one basic weapon.) ???
Summon Sage: no
Pacts: N/A
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ι η ν є η т σ r у|├▬
• x10 kunai
• x20 hand/throwing knives
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|т є c н η ι q υ є ѕ|├▬
▬▬┤|N i n j u t s u
Maruton {Start with the following six only}
• Henge no Jutsu [Transformation Technique]
• Kawarimi no Jutsu [Substitution Technique]
• Bushin no Jutsu [Clone Technique]
• Suimen Hokou no Waza [Act of Water Surface Walking]
• Kinobori no Waza [Act of Tree Climbing]
• Kai [Release]
▬▬┤|T a i j u t s u
{Style name here}
• N/A
▬▬┤|B u k i j u t s u
{Style name here}
• N/A
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|н ι ѕ т σ r у|├▬
Rouges and pillagers from the border area of the Water country (near the Mist Village) was Rin's True origins... no he wasn't one of them... he was just a piece of merchandise, for such ruffians had a bit of business with human trafficking. They moved their "business" from place to place, just taking measures to not get taken down by Shinobi. However they didn't last long, they'd set up camp a bit too close to Konaha where they'd been slaughtered by a ninja unit.
At that time Rin was only 7 years old, unlike the other captives he didn't have a home or family to return to. Konaha became his home, he'd spent three years at the academy and was one of the top of his class as far as academic/book work scores... as far as testing his technique he was... meh average. He is probably the Youngest Genin.
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 4:29 pm
Tsuki;
- First, Konoha is no longer accepting incoming shinobi due to their numbers.
- Second, your attributes. Be more specific than just precision or agility. What'll they do? Increase slightly?
Third, 100 meters is quite a distance for throwing knives.
I'm gonna have to shoot this one down for now.
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 5:14 pm
Edited Lemme know if theres more problems Tsuki Hoshiko ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ρ є r ѕ σ η α ℓ • ∂ α т α|├▬
Full Name: Rin Shuuichi Junior
Nickname: Tyke
Age: 10
Birthdate: September 8th
Gender: Male
Height: 4'2
Weight: 98
Nindo: "I'd like to be the hand of justice, but... Justice never returned life back to those lost"
Personality: quiet, keeps to himself, timid to some degree, has a Very strong hate for murderers
Village: Kumogakure
Rank: new Genin
Class: Ninjutsu
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c σ м в α т • ∂ α т α|├▬
Chakra Pool: 250
Chakra Color: Various shades of blue
Chakra Element: Water, and Lightning
Strengths:
• Speed
• Armed combat (specifically with knives)
Weaknesses:
• His size tends to put him at a disadvantage with adult fighters or average to large fighters in general
• Weak immune system, Rin gets sick and fatigued easily and his fatigue can quickly build up in a long fight
Fears:
• Getting too close to others
• Abandonment
• Losing anyone who is close to him (which is why he fears getting close to others, he does not want to to lose them)
Attributes:
• precision
• agility increase
Class Attribute:
• C. Attribute - Quick Hands: Jutsu performance speed slightly increased?
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c α r є є r • ∂ α т α|├▬
Ryo: 両 zero
AC: zero
Missions Complete:
D Rank :: 0
C Rank :: 0
B Rank :: 0
A Rank :: 0
S Rank :: 0
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ω є α ρ σ η • ∂ α т α|├▬
Weapon Type: Knives and throwing knives
Weapon Range: the weapon itself is about three inches long but can be thrown at the very least 48meters
Weapon Weight: bout a half a pound per knife?
Weapon Location: usually in his pockets and sleeves, occationally on straps... he carries a lot
• {When you create your profile, you may have any one basic weapon.) ???
Summon Sage: no
Pacts: N/A
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ι η ν є η т σ r у|├▬
• x10 kunai
• x20 hand/throwing knives
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|т є c н η ι q υ є ѕ|├▬
▬▬┤|N i n j u t s u
Maruton {Start with the following six only}
• Henge no Jutsu [Transformation Technique]
• Kawarimi no Jutsu [Substitution Technique]
• Bushin no Jutsu [Clone Technique]
• Suimen Hokou no Waza [Act of Water Surface Walking]
• Kinobori no Waza [Act of Tree Climbing]
• Kai [Release]
▬▬┤|T a i j u t s u
{Style name here}
• N/A
▬▬┤|B u k i j u t s u
{Style name here}
• N/A
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|н ι ѕ т σ r у|├▬
Rouges and pillagers from the border area of the Water country (near the Mist Village) was Rin's True origins... no he wasn't one of them... he was just a piece of merchandise, for such ruffians had a bit of business with human trafficking. They moved their "business" from place to place, just taking measures to not get taken down by Shinobi. However they didn't last long, they'd set up camp a bit too close to Kumogakure where they'd been slaughtered by a ninja unit.
At that time Rin was only 7 years old, unlike the other captives he didn't have a home or family to return to. Kumogakure became his home, he'd spent three years at the academy and was one of the top of his class as far as academic/book work scores... as far as testing his technique he was... meh average. He is probably the youngest Genin. Edited Lemme know if theres more problems ^^
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 6:24 pm
As I mentioned, you need some work on the attributes. Clarify how much quicker you might move. How much more flexible?
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Posted: Sat Apr 30, 2011 10:10 pm
Mana_ecl Zetsuya As I mentioned, you need some work on the attributes. Clarify how much quicker you might move. How much more flexible? what do you mean as in seconds per move???
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Posted: Sun May 01, 2011 11:06 am
Not in an expressed numerical system. Use something simple like "moderately" or "simply".
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Posted: Sun May 01, 2011 3:48 pm
Better or am I still missing something? Tsuki Hoshiko ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ρ є r ѕ σ η α ℓ • ∂ α т α|├▬
Full Name: Rin Shuuichi Junior
Nickname: Tyke
Age: 10
Birthdate: September 8th
Gender: Male
Height: 4'2
Weight: 98
Nindo: "I'd like to be the hand of justice, but... Justice never returned life back to those lost"
Personality: quiet, keeps to himself, timid to some degree, has a Very strong hate for murderers
Village: Kumogakure
Rank: new Genin
Class: Ninjutsu
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c σ м в α т • ∂ α т α|├▬
Chakra Pool: 250
Chakra Color: Various shades of blue
Chakra Element: Water, and Lightning
Strengths:
• Speed
• Armed combat (specifically with knives)
Weaknesses:
• His size tends to put him at a disadvantage with adult fighters or average to large fighters in general
• Weak immune system, Rin gets sick and fatigued easily and his fatigue can quickly build up in a long fight
Fears:
• Getting too close to others
• Abandonment
• Losing anyone who is close to him (which is why he fears getting close to others, he does not want to to lose them)
Attributes:
• precision
• agility moderate increase
Class Attribute:
• C. Attribute - Quick Hands: Jutsu performance speed slightly increased?
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c α r є є r • ∂ α т α|├▬
Ryo: 両 zero
AC: zero
Missions Complete:
D Rank :: 0
C Rank :: 0
B Rank :: 0
A Rank :: 0
S Rank :: 0
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ω є α ρ σ η • ∂ α т α|├▬
Weapon Type: Knives and throwing knives
Weapon Range: the weapon itself is about three inches long but can be thrown at the very least 48meters
Weapon Weight: bout a half a pound per knife?
Weapon Location: usually in his pockets and sleeves, occationally on straps... he carries a lot
• {When you create your profile, you may have any one basic weapon.) ???
Summon Sage: no
Pacts: N/A
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ι η ν є η т σ r у|├▬
• x10 kunai
• x20 hand/throwing knives
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|т є c н η ι q υ є ѕ|├▬
▬▬┤|N i n j u t s u
Maruton {Start with the following six only}
• Henge no Jutsu [Transformation Technique]
• Kawarimi no Jutsu [Substitution Technique]
• Bushin no Jutsu [Clone Technique]
• Suimen Hokou no Waza [Act of Water Surface Walking]
• Kinobori no Waza [Act of Tree Climbing]
• Kai [Release]
▬▬┤|T a i j u t s u
{Style name here}
• N/A
▬▬┤|B u k i j u t s u
{Style name here}
• N/A
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|н ι ѕ т σ r у|├▬
Rouges and pillagers from the border area of the Water country (near the Mist Village) was Rin's True origins... no he wasn't one of them... he was just a piece of merchandise, for such ruffians had a bit of business with human trafficking. They moved their "business" from place to place, just taking measures to not get taken down by Shinobi. However they didn't last long, they'd set up camp a bit too close to Kumogakure where they'd been slaughtered by a ninja unit.
At that time Rin was only 7 years old, unlike the other captives he didn't have a home or family to return to. Kumogakure became his home, he'd spent three years at the academy and was one of the top of his class as far as academic/book work scores... as far as testing his technique he was... meh average. He is probably the youngest Genin. Better? Or am I still missing something?
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