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 Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:21 pm
Xanatavian Xavier ques. this has always bugged me about memory loss and amnesia it seems like you wouldnt speak english lol IC.I arouse to a sharp pain above my kidney I stand up and realise i'd on on a rock. i twist the top half of my body and it pops then I look around and notice the greenery instantaneously the synapses in my brain start firing and i get this feeling somthings wrong. After my brain came to terms with that and the panic subsided i realized i need to find ways to satisfy lifs basic requirements. My mouth felt like it was filled with sowdust and stung whenever I moved my jaw. So i set out looking for waterand walked in a straight line until i reached a lake the water on the shore was so muddy that I could aonly get down a gulp or twothat took at least wet my mouthe so i wade deeper into the water and take a large drink ps i will type more if needed ((Ok, first I like to stay away from I, and talk in a third person instead. Try saying your character name or in place of I. You see where I am coming at. There are some spelling errors and grammar errors that make it difficult to read. I thought it would be worse, so you sorta surprised me.))
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:23 pm
Xanatavian Xavier ques. this has always bugged me about memory loss and amnesia it seems like you wouldnt speak english lol IC.I arouse to a sharp pain above my kidney I stand up and realise i'd on on a rock. i twist the top half of my body and it pops then I look around and notice the greenery instantaneously the synapses in my brain start firing and i get this feeling somthings wrong. After my brain came to terms with that and the panic subsided i realized i need to find ways to satisfy lifs basic requirements. My mouth felt like it was filled with sowdust and stung whenever I moved my jaw. So i set out looking for waterand walked in a straight line until i reached a lake the water on the shore was so muddy that I could aonly get down a gulp or twothat took at least wet my mouthe so i wade deeper into the water and take a large drink ps i will type more if needed ((You typed a good amount, but there are a few problems. I see alot of misspells. I is always capitilized, and there are a few places that you could use a comma. Ill re-write it so it will be in a better form. Other than that it is quit descriptive.)) ((Oh and to do Out of Character (OOC) put it in double parentheses)) I arose to a sharp pain above my kidney, I stood up and realized that I was on a rock. I twisted the top half of my body and it pops, then I look around and notice the greenery instantaneously the synapses in my brain start firing and I get this feeling some thing is wrong. After my brain came to terms with that and the panic subsided, I realized I needed to find ways to satisfy liefs basic requirements. My mouth felt like it was filled with sawdust and stung whenever I moved my jaw. So I set out looking for water and walked in a straight line until I reached a lake. The water on the shore was so muddy that I could only get down a gulp or two so my mouth wasn't as dry. I waded out further from the shore for better water. ((Watch the spelling remember spell check = friend. When you are walking about explain what you see. Other than that It is a good post.))
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:25 pm
Snake311 Xanatavian Xavier ques. this has always bugged me about memory loss and amnesia it seems like you wouldnt speak english lol IC.I arouse to a sharp pain above my kidney I stand up and realise i'd on on a rock. i twist the top half of my body and it pops then I look around and notice the greenery instantaneously the synapses in my brain start firing and i get this feeling somthings wrong. After my brain came to terms with that and the panic subsided i realized i need to find ways to satisfy lifs basic requirements. My mouth felt like it was filled with sowdust and stung whenever I moved my jaw. So i set out looking for waterand walked in a straight line until i reached a lake the water on the shore was so muddy that I could aonly get down a gulp or twothat took at least wet my mouthe so i wade deeper into the water and take a large drink ps i will type more if needed ((Ok, first I like to stay away from I, and talk in a third person instead. Try saying your character name or in place of I. You see where I am coming at. There are some spelling errors and grammar errors that make it difficult to read. I thought it would be worse, so you sorta surprised me.)) ((The reason he kept using "I" was because of the situation he was given.))
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:27 pm
Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 Cattra Nightblade Xanatavian Xavier i really hate to sound in patiant but how do i subscribe to forums (I acually have not tried to subscribe to forums for in guilds, i have a folder under favorites for it so i just open a new window in firefox and open the file and select where I want) ((I am on the internet on my Wii. It will take 5 minutes a post min and my spelling might be off. You can not suscribe to a forum topic if it is in a guild.)) (( You can get on the actual internet with a Wii?? Now I want one! lol)) ((Computer reclaimed!!!! Its very cool with youtube. Its like your actually watching a Japanese episode of Naruto on your TV. Because you are!)) (( I envy you... But how do you find Naruto on the computer with you tube? I have tried many times, but I always find music videos, and random stuff.))
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:28 pm
third person seems more like a narrarator than a player to me
and my charecter has memory loss so he doesnt know who he is
what would you like me to do next
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:35 pm
Xanatavian Xavier third person seems more like a narrarator than a player to me and my charecter has memory loss so he doesnt know who he is what would you like me to do next What about he, you can use he if weather you can know the name of the character or not. Sorry its taking me a long time, I just lost internet connection for a second.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:38 pm
((I will continue it just like an Rp with no plot...))
As you are out in the water, a man dressed in black robe comes to the lakes edge. He looks out at you, his eyes are dark and demonic, but there is some thing about them. "What are you doing here?" He just stares at you.
((Continue this just like you where with the other one, depending on what you say will depend on what he will tell you.))
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:38 pm
veinkiller Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 Cattra Nightblade Xanatavian Xavier i really hate to sound in patiant but how do i subscribe to forums (I acually have not tried to subscribe to forums for in guilds, i have a folder under favorites for it so i just open a new window in firefox and open the file and select where I want) ((I am on the internet on my Wii. It will take 5 minutes a post min and my spelling might be off. You can not suscribe to a forum topic if it is in a guild.)) (( You can get on the actual internet with a Wii?? Now I want one! lol)) ((Computer reclaimed!!!! Its very cool with youtube. Its like your actually watching a Japanese episode of Naruto on your TV. Because you are!)) (( I envy you... But how do you find Naruto on the computer with you tube? I have tried many times, but I always find music videos, and random stuff.)) Type Naruto then the episode number. Just that.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:39 pm
Snake311 Xanatavian Xavier third person seems more like a narrarator than a player to me and my charecter has memory loss so he doesnt know who he is what would you like me to do next What about he, you can use he if weather you can know the name of the character or not. Sorry its taking me a long time, I just lost internet connection for a second. ... I didn't think of that... but he can switch to he if he wants too.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:40 pm
Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 ((I am on the internet on my Wii. It will take 5 minutes a post min and my spelling might be off. You can not suscribe to a forum topic if it is in a guild.)) (( You can get on the actual internet with a Wii?? Now I want one! lol)) ((Computer reclaimed!!!! Its very cool with youtube. Its like your actually watching a Japanese episode of Naruto on your TV. Because you are!)) (( I envy you... But how do you find Naruto on the computer with you tube? I have tried many times, but I always find music videos, and random stuff.)) Type Naruto then the episode number. Just that. ((Oh so its just like "Naruto: 5"?
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:40 pm
veinkiller Snake311 Xanatavian Xavier third person seems more like a narrarator than a player to me and my charecter has memory loss so he doesnt know who he is what would you like me to do next What about he, you can use he if weather you can know the name of the character or not. Sorry its taking me a long time, I just lost internet connection for a second. ... I didn't think of that... but he can switch to he if he wants too. ((Third person makes the sentences flow better.))
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:41 pm
veinkiller Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 ((I am on the internet on my Wii. It will take 5 minutes a post min and my spelling might be off. You can not suscribe to a forum topic if it is in a guild.)) (( You can get on the actual internet with a Wii?? Now I want one! lol)) ((Computer reclaimed!!!! Its very cool with youtube. Its like your actually watching a Japanese episode of Naruto on your TV. Because you are!)) (( I envy you... But how do you find Naruto on the computer with you tube? I have tried many times, but I always find music videos, and random stuff.)) Type Naruto then the episode number. Just that. ((Oh so its just like "Naruto: 5"? ((Yeah...I am on Naruto 192, America is in the 80's. I once watched 50 episodes in two days once.))
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:42 pm
Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 ((Computer reclaimed!!!! Its very cool with youtube. Its like your actually watching a Japanese episode of Naruto on your TV. Because you are!)) (( I envy you... But how do you find Naruto on the computer with you tube? I have tried many times, but I always find music videos, and random stuff.)) Type Naruto then the episode number. Just that. ((Oh so its just like "Naruto: 5"? ((Yeah...I am on Naruto 192, America is in the 80's. I once watched 50 episodes in two days once.)) ((Dam 50 episodes in 2 days? O.o wow.))
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:43 pm
Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 Xanatavian Xavier third person seems more like a narrarator than a player to me and my charecter has memory loss so he doesnt know who he is what would you like me to do next What about he, you can use he if weather you can know the name of the character or not. Sorry its taking me a long time, I just lost internet connection for a second. ... I didn't think of that... but he can switch to he if he wants too. ((Third person makes the sentences flow better.)) Meh... True... Ok switch to "he" then... He is the one that is writing the book on how to Rp...
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:44 pm
veinkiller Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 veinkiller Snake311 ((Computer reclaimed!!!! Its very cool with youtube. Its like your actually watching a Japanese episode of Naruto on your TV. Because you are!)) (( I envy you... But how do you find Naruto on the computer with you tube? I have tried many times, but I always find music videos, and random stuff.)) Type Naruto then the episode number. Just that. ((Oh so its just like "Naruto: 5"? ((Yeah...I am on Naruto 192, America is in the 80's. I once watched 50 episodes in two days once.)) ((Dam 50 episodes in 2 days? O.o wow.)) ((I was sick those two days, so I was not going any where. lol. I am still not at Shippuden....
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