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 Posted: Mon Jul 24, 2006 10:13 pm
Ah... that's a tricky one. If it were me, I'd have the Doctor and Jack say "We thought you were dead!" and then smack the hell out of Rose with a couple of frying pans. But I'm sure you're looking for something a little more sensible. whee
Well, I'm interested in seeing how you write your way out of this one...
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Posted: Tue Jul 25, 2006 12:04 pm
:thinks very hard:
:deletes the four pages that I have so far:
:starts over:
gonk
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Posted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 6:15 am
I've finally started the next chapter! For the fifth time... But now I like it! THANK YOU SO MUCH HAIRY PRIEST FOR THE IDEA! :hugs:
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Posted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 9:39 am
And NOW! The seventh chapter is up. biggrin
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Posted: Thu Jul 27, 2006 1:08 am
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2971376/7/You wrote that all up in like a day?! eek Another good one. Some really enticing stuff... particularly with the mystery of how Rose got rescued by Eleven. And the dialog (especially the interplay between the Doctor, Jack, and Rose) continues to be stellar. Any constructive criticisms? Eh... not really. Well, you've gone back to spelling it "Gelf" (though I can't remember if you ever switched to using the official spelling, or just mentioned at some point that you knew it was supposed to be "Gelth"). Also, given that it's from Rose's perspective in the beginning, perhaps it would have been better to replace references to Jackie with 'her mum'. And toward the end you refer to Jackie as 'her mom'... I would have stuck with 'mum' unless you were intentionally trying to indicate a shift in perspective. I love the ginger bit. xd
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Posted: Thu Jul 27, 2006 5:56 am
I really enjoyed that chapter. It was nice to have another point of view to hear from. Can't wait to see what will happen next!
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Posted: Thu Jul 27, 2006 8:45 am
Hairy Priest http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2971376/7/ You wrote that all up in like a day?! eek Another good one. Some really enticing stuff... particularly with the mystery of how Rose got rescued by Eleven. And the dialog (especially the interplay between the Doctor, Jack, and Rose) continues to be stellar. Any constructive criticisms? Eh... not really. Well, you've gone back to spelling it "Gelf" (though I can't remember if you ever switched to using the official spelling, or just mentioned at some point that you knew it was supposed to be "Gelth"). Also, given that it's from Rose's perspective in the beginning, perhaps it would have been better to replace references to Jackie with 'her mum'. And toward the end you refer to Jackie as 'her mom'... I would have stuck with 'mum' unless you were intentionally trying to indicate a shift in perspective. I love the ginger bit. xd
Yep, I wrote it in a day. Actually, about four hours, but I was doing a few other things on the computer in between. ^^ If I can think of what to do, it's really easy.
I love writing the dialouge, too. It's so much fun to try and think of more stuff they would say to eachother. biggrin The mystery... ! Shall continue to get more confusing. ^^ But just to let everyone know, it will all make sense in the end.
I never changed it to Gelth... I decided to stick with Gelf because I didn't feel like going back and fixing it all. >>; I actually meant to stick with mum, but I'm so used to saying mom that I accidently wrote that. But shhh... no one else needs to know. ^^ I'm American. I can't help but think and write American-ish. But... pretend the accents are there! It helps! sweatdrop
I love the ginger bit, too. mrgreen
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Posted: Thu Jul 27, 2006 8:46 am
fredwise I really enjoyed that chapter. It was nice to have another point of view to hear from. Can't wait to see what will happen next!
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Posted: Sun Jul 30, 2006 1:33 pm
My story is now on hiatus. I am going to marching band camp. I wont be able to even get back onto my computer for at LEAST three weeks.
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Posted: Sun Jul 30, 2006 11:57 pm
Hiatus... gonk
Well, have fun at camp. Hopefully you come back brimming with all sorts of new ideas.
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Posted: Fri Aug 04, 2006 7:02 pm
Very nice story. I left a review under my Fanfiction account of PsychoSpiff.
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Posted: Sun Aug 13, 2006 5:55 am
I'm back! But only for a day before I'm off again. I doubt I'll be able to write another chapter... but if I do, you'll see it.
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Posted: Mon Aug 21, 2006 7:59 am
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Posted: Wed Aug 23, 2006 7:48 am
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Posted: Wed Aug 23, 2006 9:46 am
That was a brilliantly written chapter. I liked the 'Rose' POV. How could I not possibly love a story that kills of Rose Tyler twice?
Nice tease about the villain with that last line of his...
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