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Everything that you have looks good so far.

As for how he got the island... I'll think up some ideas. You have it pretty open ended. The problem being he has a lot of connections to the "real" world, being he would play soccer and has an average family.

Maybe... his bus with his team was in a terrible accident - only a few survivors. In the chaos, if Feral Labs was one of the hospitals/medical teams in the response, they could easily whisk someone away unnoticed, and say they were killed in the accident?

Character: *stamp* All's well.

As for how she got to the island. How you describe it now seems more like a job offering than a subject, so I would suggest some rethinking. Perhaps she signed up for a medical study? Those tend to pay well.

Though a note - watch your grammer, punctuation, and sentence structure. I noticed a lot of run-on sentences in your quest thread. And you need to look at some of the formatting in your first post. It says a lot to us when a first post is following the rules exactly or not. 3nodding

First of all, I don't know if this was intential or not, but just for reference the name (because its not a common one) Alphonse was the name of the dorctor in the original novel The Island of Dr. Moreau.

As for the character... thats quite a listing of traits there. sweatdrop Generally speaking, in leau of making a character that seems over the top I would reccomend sticking with Albinism OR AS.

The most problematic part of this is the way he got the island. You mention he wrote two books, but only one dealing with lycanthropy. Well, there are THOUSANDS of books written dealing with lycanthrophy, so it makes little sense to me that Moreai would single Alphonse out from one book.

Secondly, "Alphonse was flagged as a person who might take well to the concept of transformation." To be frank, Moreau doesn't CARE if they will take well to it or not. If anything, Moreau is a masochist and likes it LESS when they do.



Moreau never gives people the choice.



Moreau would never agree to that, either. He could write it... Moreau might even "publish" it - for the islanders.

And, about the animal. Why a Jackal/Maned wolf cross? What would be the point to that? Quoted from the front page:



I would suggest you do some reading in the Guild, especially the Duplexes. Get a feel for the characters and how the island workds a bit better though reading some of the RPs.

I like the added note on her appearance in the striking similarities to her mother, a point of frustration for her father and another explanation of the man's verbal abuse after her death in seeing Kikue as a constant reminder.

It is also interesting to see the music in her life as the common thread of her different 'lives' - from child in London, to Japan, after her mother's death - it is the one common activity and I could see it very much being a catharsis and a "safe place" more than any location for her. which would explain why even though she was coached into the skill as such a young child why she did not resent it.

The injury, then, is such a blow to her - and makes sense why she would rebel against her father with this last straw to try to repair it. It is a loss of her identity as much as anything else.

It also makes sense that since her father wouldn't pay for the medical research that she went to smaller clinics - Feral Labs sponsors some of the low-cost urban clinics that she could have visited and got onto their radar.

I like the feigned death, though do be wary it is VERY difficult to falsify an identity of a deceased person, especially shy of complete immolation of the body and forging dental patterns convincingly. Especially when murder is an issue, as coroners would do pretty thorough examinations of the body.

But yes, falsifying a death, framing the father who would be known to have been abusive and drunk, and quite possibly unaware of his own actions works well into the story. You could just have her go missing, and the tabloids picking up the story (think Jean Benet Ramsey) and most people would blame the father.

It also makes sense Moreau would want to test regenerative propertis of damaged limbs- beyond just lost ones. The only question that comes to mind with this reasoning is the selection of a snow leopard - felines have very different frontpaws/hands than humans - the claw digit giving an awkwardness when it woudl come to manipulation. - as opposed to something like a monkey, lemur or raccoon-relative that have comparitively dexterous hands. If you want to go with the snow leopard, then SHE Might think that she went for reconstructive surgery, but in essence she was just easy to disappear.