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 Posted: Sun Jul 14, 2013 8:46 pm
Shiro no Kitsune Color Me Fubar Shiro no Kitsune You don't~ thats why its fun <3 -pats lap- There there.
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Posted: Sun Jul 14, 2013 9:31 pm
Color Me Fubar Say, Character A asks Character B a question - an important one, not just idle chit-chat. Instead of waiting for a reply, they write three more paragraphs of the characters doing things and move the scene along instead of just STOPPING.
So many people seem to take literate as "look at how much I can write", which drives me up the wall.
I totally agree here. I include that kind of phenomenon in "non sequitur dialogue," which is something seen across all writing levels. It usually goes something like this:
Billy: "Greetings, good sir! I don't mean to be rude but it appears you are stepping on my dog."
Bob: "Oh! My apologies!" Removes boot from dog. "You know, that's the trouble with small dogs. They are always underfoot. Quite a beautiful dog, once you smooth out the footprint. Size eleven - don't worry, Yorkies these days are built like rubber." Squats down and pets the dog. Sighs heavily. "My last dog was the most unsightly mongrel you had ever seen. Fibbens, its name was. Too bad he got stuck in the boot of my car!" Stands, smiles. "Sorry again, sir. I have to errands to run for my wife. Have a good day!"
Billy: "wtf just happened"
Hrmm.... That's a bad example. Here's one I pulled from Barton Town:
Character A falls nearby.
Character B: "You okay, wonderdog?" Bends over. "I think you managed to land on the only bare bit of floor in here." Plops down, chuckling. "You didn't hurt your hard head, did ya?" Rubs Character A's forehead. "I wonder how hard you'd have to hit it to get a concussion..." Thinks to self. Rolls onto back to stare upwards. Suddenly snorts, "I guess you won."
Seriously. This was all from one post.the "actions" weren't even actions, just useless filler to try to distort the fact that it's one block of nonsequitur dialogue. I see this s**t and I want to punch a melon.
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 8:05 am
CaptainTapole EXAMPLEMaster C wants Slave F. You write as Slave F.
Click to edit Slave F's profile post. Copy the WHOLE profile of Slave F from "Merchandise" thread.
You create a new post in Master C's thread and paste Slave F's profile. Post.
Go back to "Merchandise" thread. Edit once again and delete profile. State the post as "Profile moved to Master C". Save and ta-da! No need to redo everything, just merely copy/pasting.
Obviously, Slave F and Master C will be the actual names, but I figured it would be easier to show ya that way.
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 5:53 pm
Shiro no Kitsune ; ~ ; my lover abandoned me.
I DID NO SUCH THING ; n ;
-pulls in close for all the loves-
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N o i r Wafflesaurus Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 5:55 pm
N o i r Wafflesaurus Shiro no Kitsune ; ~ ; my lover abandoned me.
I DID NO SUCH THING ; n ;
-pulls in close for all the loves-
-huggles you to death-
; ~ ; I missed you ; ~ ;
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 5:55 pm
I was on a mini-holiday, hurrr >w<
OKAY!
What I was waiting for was more profiles, but since we have this huge lump of active people now, I'm just going to open all the threads and let everyone have at it.
I'm too keen for all this to start again.
p.s. your link for your last slave - I think it's an alternate image - isn't working. Guild coding, ey?
p.p.s. I'm claiming him if someone else hasn't emotion_dowant
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N o i r Wafflesaurus Vice Captain
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N o i r Wafflesaurus Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 5:56 pm
Shiro no Kitsune N o i r Wafflesaurus Shiro no Kitsune ; ~ ; my lover abandoned me.
I DID NO SUCH THING ; n ;
-pulls in close for all the loves-
-huggles you to death-
; ~ ; I missed you ; ~ ;
- hugs you to death-
I MISSED YOU MOAR ; n ;
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 6:10 pm
N o i r Wafflesaurus Shiro no Kitsune N o i r Wafflesaurus Shiro no Kitsune ; ~ ; my lover abandoned me.
I DID NO SUCH THING ; n ;
-pulls in close for all the loves-
-huggles you to death-
; ~ ; I missed you ; ~ ;
- hugs you to death-
I MISSED YOU MOAR ; n ;
-dies- XD
Okay, I can deal with that, I love being missed the most <3 xD
I MADE A MASTER THE ONLY NORMAL MASTER!
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N o i r Wafflesaurus Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 6:12 pm
Shiro no Kitsune -dies- XD
Okay, I can deal with that, I love being missed the most <3 xD
I MADE A MASTER THE ONLY NORMAL MASTER!
Ehehehehe~
- revives for more deathly loving -
OMG I SAW. XDD
He's definitely interesting, I'll give you that.
AND HE'S SO NORMAL TOO XDDD
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 6:28 pm
N o i r Wafflesaurus Shiro no Kitsune -dies- XD
Okay, I can deal with that, I love being missed the most <3 xD
I MADE A MASTER THE ONLY NORMAL MASTER!
Ehehehehe~
- revives for more deathly loving -
OMG I SAW. XDD
He's definitely interesting, I'll give you that.
AND HE'S SO NORMAL TOO XDDD
xP
-enjoys this and returns the favor-
XD He is funny as hell too
NORMAL COMPLETELY NORMAL
He is like..the only human person with no special amazing abilities or skills like clinging to walls like spider man! D:
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 6:33 pm
Wafffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffflesssssssssssssssssssss
I was thinking of making Roo here, you know her. >> You think she'd do good here? She's just so adoooooooooooorable.
And I was thinking of making another master. Or is that too much?
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 6:36 pm
ROO WOULD BE SO GOOD. emotion_kirakira
AND YES. MAKE ANOTHER MASTER emotion_awesome
I'm torn between claiming `MaliceMizer's latest slave with a sweet little female, or a scary-funny female twin act. I'm heading for the twin idea because it'll be hilarious.
I CAN'T DECIDE. I HAVE SO MANY IDEAS.
But yush, Roo needs to be made. She's so adorable and NORMAL! <3
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N o i r Wafflesaurus Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 6:40 pm
Shiro no Kitsune xP
-enjoys this and returns the favor-
XD He is funny as hell too
NORMAL COMPLETELY NORMAL
He is like..the only human person with no special amazing abilities or skills like clinging to walls like spider man! D:
Dem norms emotion_dowant
Color Me Fubar has the most adorable and most normal girl ever.
AND HER NICKNAME IS ROO WHICH IS EVEN BETTER.
... It reminds me of 'kangaroo' okay? >w>
-lovelovelovelovelove-
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 6:43 pm
N o i r Wafflesaurus Shiro no Kitsune xP
-enjoys this and returns the favor-
XD He is funny as hell too
NORMAL COMPLETELY NORMAL
He is like..the only human person with no special amazing abilities or skills like clinging to walls like spider man! D:
Dem norms emotion_dowant
Color Me Fubar has the most adorable and most normal girl ever.
AND HER NICKNAME IS ROO WHICH IS EVEN BETTER.
... It reminds me of 'kangaroo' okay? >w>
-lovelovelovelovelove-
XD lol
> o > I know nothing of this person.
....kangaroo....
-smirks-
I'm still looking for someone that meets Liam's needs so I'm watching out for this "Roo" now.
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Posted: Mon Jul 15, 2013 6:46 pm
emotion_awesome
Roo is just.
So cute. And her nickname is supposed to remind you of a kangaroo, hee hee.
I WILL MAKE HER FOR SHIRO, haha, and she can see what she thinks. But it will be tomorrow.
Because I have a doctor's appointment in the early morning and am in pain now. ;-;
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