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 Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:10 pm
Scathach13 I actually thought things were going too fast in Ch. 3 - I mean, Sora's just barely starting to consider his feelings towards Riku in this fic, right? Let alone guys... Maybe if he was drunk... Yeah, I have to agree. It was a tad rushed. sweatdrop Though, I don't think the alcohol idea would work, concerning it goes against the rules...^^;
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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:17 pm
Actually there was an interesting twsit to Chapter 3, with what I planned to do. Obviously that would have been fast, especially sine Sora knows nothing about Riku's feelings....
Sora: YEAH! RIKU! *glares*
Anyway there was an interesting twist maybe I should put it up, for the next person...
Alchohol will be mentioned tinie bit. Don' worry. ^_^
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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:38 pm
Yup I'll post that twist. heart heart heart heart
I'm a bit tired so excuse the the lack of language skills if anything goes wrong.
Well anyways.....enjoy!
THE MIN CHAPTER BEFORE CHP. 4
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"Then let's begin...."
Needless to say the night passed with both boys exploring, and feeling one another.
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Until.......
Riku felt himslef being stranggled, and sweating all over. He woke up, from the sudden empact of his dream. The last thing Sora ahd done was......
He cursed as he remembered it was a dream, and nothing more.
Why? Why did he have to get dreams like this evry once in a while?
Why couldn't it be real?
He layed there, silent, to scared to go back to sleep incase it'd continue. He wouldn't want his mom wondering what ahd happend when she washed the sheets the next day.
He ignored the howling wind outside, and if he had not been so distracted by the dream he would ahve paid more attention to the giggles comign from outside his door.
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Outside his mother had been listened to her son. She hadn't heard much, but she had heard ENOUGH to scar her for life on how she was raising her son. "Oh well."
When she didn't hear anything, she pouted. "Guess he woke up, and it was getting interesting"
She looked at her clock reading 6:30 pm. In an hour Riku would be swimming wiht Sora, and his heart could ease a bit at that.
Ding-Ding
She jumped up from her leaning position on the door, to the sound of her phone. She picked it up, almost aware of who'd be calling.
"Hello?"
"Hello!!! It's me Yukita!!!! So excited about the boys night out?"
"A bit. No wait- A WHOLE LOT OF BITS!!"
Yukita laughed, and then stopped.
"Yukita?"
Yukita didn't respond for a while, making the silience creepier than what it should have been. Finally she spoke, but her tone sounded dead serious.
" Tell Riku not to bring Sora far off, or else he'll be lost forever...."
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Well there it is the "twist".
I have this great idea now for the story, but I'll let you guys continue with it before I post a Chapter, k?!
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Posted: Sat Apr 08, 2006 10:42 am
I get to write chapter 5!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: Sat Apr 08, 2006 12:22 pm
WingMirror Yup I'll post that twist. heart heart heart heart I'm a bit tired so excuse the the lack of language skills if anything goes wrong. Well anyways.....enjoy! THE MIN CHAPTER BEFORE CHP. 4 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "Then let's begin...." Needless to say the night passed with both boys exploring, and feeling one another. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Until....... Riku felt himslef being stranggled, and sweating all over. He woke up, from the sudden empact of his dream. The last thing Sora ahd done was...... He cursed as he remembered it was a dream, and nothing more. Why? Why did he have to get dreams like this evry once in a while? Why couldn't it be real? He layed there, silent, to scared to go back to sleep incase it'd continue. He wouldn't want his mom wondering what ahd happend when she washed the sheets the next day. He ignored the howling wind outside, and if he had not been so distracted by the dream he would ahve paid more attention to the giggles comign from outside his door. ~~~~~~~~~~~~ Outside his mother had been listened to her son. She hadn't heard much, but she had heard ENOUGH to scar her for life on how she was raising her son. "Oh well." When she didn't hear anything, she pouted. "Guess he woke up, and it was getting interesting" She looked at her clock reading 6:30 pm. In an hour Riku would be swimming wiht Sora, and his heart could ease a bit at that. Ding-Ding She jumped up from her leaning position on the door, to the sound of her phone. She picked it up, almost aware of who'd be calling. "Hello?" "Hello!!! It's me Yukita!!!! So excited about the boys night out?" "A bit. No wait- A WHOLE LOT OF BITS!!" Yukita laughed, and then stopped. "Yukita?" Yukita didn't respond for a while, making the silience creepier than what it should have been. Finally she spoke, but her tone sounded dead serious. " Tell Riku not to bring Sora far off, or else he'll be lost forever...." ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Well there it is the "twist". I have this great idea now for the story, but I'll let you guys continue with it before I post a Chapter, k?! heart heart ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Dream idea = Perfect explanation Yukita's warning = scary as hell
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Posted: Sat Apr 08, 2006 2:56 pm
I agree. The dream thing was perfect. :3
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Posted: Sat Apr 08, 2006 10:55 pm
Hehehe. I thought it'd be. heart heart heart
Someone had to make the story right. Riku you might get fired if you continue....however Sora hasn't wriiten yet his share.
I'm gald people thought the dream was perfect. ^_^ heart heart heart heart heart
Yukita's warning= is suppose to be scary, scary it is.
Whos' writing Chapter 4-Shadow15?
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Posted: Sun Apr 09, 2006 7:31 pm
I suck at writing so here is my try, okay? If it doesn't cut it WingMirror, you can trash it.
Chap. 4 A Confession Too Quick
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Yukita didn't respond for a while, making the silience creepier than what it should have been. Finally she spoke, but her tone sounded dead serious.
" Tell Riku not to bring Sora far off, or else he'll be lost forever...."
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Riku mother looked at the phone as she heard Yukita's warning.
"What do you mean? Riku justs plan to swim with him. Nothing else."
Yukita stayed silent as she spoke again. Her tone still dead serious.
"Just do as I say...Riku is quite serious all the time. And I am just watching out for Sora."
Riku's mom gave an angered look at Yukita's response.
"Are you accusing Riku of being a rapist or something?"
Yukita spoke again, but now in a reassuring and kinda happy tone.
"No, no dear..just don't let things get too overboard, okay? Hope they have fun."
Yukita and Riku's mother hung up from each other. What was Yukita's problem? Riku's mother sighed as she stood up. Its no use for her to get so worked up over things that were to happen that night. 'He's just coming over for a swim and to stay the night right? No big deal..' She walked upstairs and knocked on Riku's bedroom door.
"Riku ,honey, get up and go get your loverboy."
She walked back downstairs and went into the kitchen. She took ot a bottle of wine and poured herself a glass.
"Better drown out everything..no worries for me!"
She began to drink happily, to herself.
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Riku casually walked over to Sora's house. After his mother woke him up from his nap, he threw on some clothes and went to get Sora. 'I hope Sora doesn't wear swimtrunks. We are supposed to swim naked.' Riku walked up to Sora's door and knocked.
"Hello? Sora?"
Yukita answered the door and let Riku in. She smiled at him and called upstairs.
"Sora, get down here! Riku's here! Hurry up!"
She smiled and returned to the living room. Sora, minutes later, came trudging down the stairs wearing easily removable clothing. He smiled at Riku as Riku opened the door and led Sora out. Sora walked alongside Riku, quietly. He wasn't exactly ready to swim naked in front of his best friend. I mean, it felt wierd to him. 'But then again Riku is hot, so it didn't really matter. And they were friends right? But why had Riku suggested swimming naked? Did Riku like him or something? And why had he just considered him hot? Was he gay?
Riku touched Sora's shoulder snapping him out of his thoughts. Sora twitched then looked at Riku.
"Sora, are you okay? You seem upset or something."
Riku looked at Sora wrriedly. 'He didn't find out I like him, did he?' Riku stared at Sora for a moment then returned his gaze forward.
"No, no I'm fine Riku just thinking."
Sora sighed as he saw Riku stare at him. Riku always was staring at him, not that it mattered. He continued walking as both boys stayed quiet. Suddenly, Riku stopped Sora and shouted.
"Sora! We're here!"
Riku looked at the beach and began removing his shirt. Sora looked and realized they were already there. Sora looked around nervously. He was still scared of the fact of swimming naked. What if people at school saw him? Wait that was probably why Riku suggested it at night time. He watched Riku remove his clothing, then suddenly stopped him. 'I gotta find out what's gong on. Why is Riku acting so wierd?'
"Riku, what's going on?"
Riku looked at Sora, puzzled. Sora just stood there waiting for Riku's reply. He had to find out.
"What do you mean? Sora, why aren't you getting ready?"
"Riku, why did you suggest we do this? Why are you acting so strange around me? Its like your hiding something from me?"
Riku looked at Sora, nervously. Sora knew something was up. He couldn't keep it secret forever. Riku looked at Sora then the ground. Sora looked at Riku's expression and crossed his arms, waiting for an answer.
"Sora..its because..because I-"
Riku took his shirt and put it back on. He knew if he told Sora, that Sora would probably ignore him or maybe accept it, but just to be on the quick side, he got dressed again.
"Well..why Riku? Be honest."
Riku breathed one last deep breath as his eyes met Sora's eyes.
"Why? I've been acting like this because I am keeping a secret from you. one that is hard to say. So you really wanna know?"
Sora looked at him and nodded. He had to know what was always going on in Riku's mind all the time.
"Its you Sora. I love you okay? I asked you to do this with me tonight because I figured we could get close and I could tell you. But I see that would've bothered you. Well at least I told you. Are you happy now?"
Sora's heart fluttered, strangely as he stood in shock at Riku's statement. So it was true. Riku had liked him. Now he understood his mother's jokes. Sora just looked at Riku with a look of nothing. he couldn't answer.
"Well now you know..so does that mean you hate me now?"
Riku was quite upset that things didn't turn out the way he wanted. he was hoping Sora to say 'I love you,too' or something ,but he knew he had messed up.
Sora still looked at Riku, shocked. He was so confused now. He didn't know what to respond back. He didn't know what his feelings for Riku were. Yeah, they were great friends, but did he like him this way?
"No i don't hate you..I just don't know...I'm confused Riku..I'm sorry"
Riku looked back at Sora and sighed. It was no use.
"Well..i'm sorry I bothered."
Riku turned to go back home. He began walking back up the slope to his house.
"No Riku wait! Don't leave! It wasn't your fault!"
Riku turned around and looked at Sora. He slowly walked back up to Sora.
"Well?"
"Riku..I'm sorry. I just was confused. Hearing you say that kinda caught me off guard."
Sora sighed as he looked at Riku. What was he gonna tell him.
"Well..you asked."
"I know and I wasn't expecting that..well I sorta was. Riku, i understand you like me and.."
Riku looked at Sora as he sighed. Poor Sora, now finding out Riku's feelings was really screwing up his mind. Riku waited as he watched sora nervously search for an answer.
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Well, there ya go..tish Chapter 4. Yeah it sucked isn't that great, but I tried right? Well coment on what you think and I hope it was good enough!I liked the confession. ^^ Tee hee...
Signing Out,
Shadow15
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Posted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 8:20 am
Shadow15, no it's GREAT!!! And I would NEVER delete any Pm, unless it came from Kairi.... twisted
heart heart heart I'm very glad you didn't do them swiming in the ocean yet. That i liked.
Also, I like the whole confession, and Sora wondering.
But No it was good!!! It wasn't cr*ppy one bit. Nope I enjoyed that!!! ^_^ heart heart heart heart heart heart heart
Riku's mother kinda knows what's up with Sora's mother...I mean Sora's mother is ...well you'll see. Anyways, it was still good. I say WONDERFUL HUNNY!!! heart heart heart heart heart 3nodding 3nodding 3nodding
Comment from the boys,
Riku: I didn't get anya ction. *pouts* Man, I'm so...so....argh Wing-chan I hate you for not making me get laid with Sora.
Sora: I for one think it was good. I'm like that. Yup!! Unlike some people who have *shaddy* thoughts all the time....*glares*
Riku: Other than me not having action, yeah it was good. A good way to end it for the next person. ^_^
Sora: I liked it!! heart heart heart
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Posted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 3:57 pm
sweatdrop Thanks..I thought I would make it hopelessly stupid..
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Posted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 4:00 pm
That was kinda painful to read - sympathy wise, I mean... Other than that, it was good! *nods*
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Posted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 4:02 pm
*confused at your post* Huh?
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Posted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 4:04 pm
I mean I like it - but I felt really bad for the two of them. BUT DEFFINITLY LIKED IT!!! SO DON'T THINK I'M CRITISING YOU BECAUSE I'M NOT!!!! gonk
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Posted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 4:06 pm
I know..hopefully the next person makes Sora love riku. wink had to make is angsty..I think it is..
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Posted: Thu Apr 13, 2006 12:33 pm
Maybe... maybe I could, if no one else wants too... But it's kinda risky to have me right it... *lopsided smile*
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