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 Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2011 7:15 am
Cobra_X Blood Clone: Well the contract is formed in blood, and the summon summoned by blood... so the summon would definitely come and respond, once the clone is dispersed however, the summon would poof. And the clone has the ability to do that and the chakra to do it essentially because I said so... the 9 Stamina cost is enough to legitimize such a thing, imo.
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Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2011 2:58 pm
So, does it meet your approval then?
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Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2011 3:22 pm
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 6:19 am
Do I need any more approvals?... or am I good to go?
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 7:34 am
Crits approval is better than most, I would say your g2g
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 5:07 pm
((Add claws to the ends of the fingers)) ((Imagine the same thing for the left hand except instead of black and red it is silver and blue))  Name of Weapons: The Thief and the Knight Who Owns the Weapons: Raynn Shouran Where it Was Found?/ Who Made it? Raynn's Grandfather fought in the last Great Shinobi War and used this pair of gauntlets unique abilities to fight nonstop. Raynn then modified the Gauntlets to fit his one of a kind combat style. Range: the claws are one inch each Weakness: The underside of the Gauntlets offer no protection and if the focus crystals break the gauntlets lose their abilities until the broken crystals are replaced. The Thief cannot absorb the chakra of a bijuu, cursemark or The Knight. Weapon Description: They are made primarily of hardened steel and black or blue dyed leather. There is a plate on the top of the forearms and spikes protruding from each side. There is layered steel over the top of the hands and fingers as well as small spikes on the knuckles. Each finger has an one inch claw made of hardened steel. A blue or red crystal is on the palms of each gauntlet. Special Properties/Abilites: The red and black gauntlet on Raynn's right hand is the thief. It has the ability to absorb the chakra that is naturally emitted from a ninja's body and can store up to 5 chakra points. The amount of chakra absorbed is shown in the rules listed below. For every ninja (including the wearer) within 10 feet of the wearer the Thief absorbs a quarter of a chakra point and, for every ninja within 10 feet that is actively using chakra the thief gains an extra quarter of a chakra point. Any member of the Konaga Clan within 10 feet of the Thief offers a half of a chakra point passively and three fourths of a chakra point actively. the Knight simply has the ability to use the chakra The Thief has absorbed and can ether preform a jutsu using only the gathered chakra or can use chakra from the wearer in combination with the gathered chakra. Rp Sample:Ninjutsu/Genjutsu used: - Kirigakure no Jutsu (Hidden Mist Technique) - Bunshin No Jutsu (Clone Technique) Taijutsu used: - Vicious Elbow ((First Sentence)) - Rolling Thunder ((The trip then attack)) - Fox Fire ((The rapid slashes at the man as he was on the ground)) - Fox's Paw ((The trick with the clone)) Raynn blocked the man's strike with The Knight and jabs the man in the ribs with his right elbow. The man stumbles back trying to catch his breath. Raynn drops into The Fox Stance and eyed his opponent. He was about 6 feet and muscular but slow, and that's why Raynn knew he would win. The man falls into a more defenses stance waiting for Raynn to make a move. He dashes forward swaying from side to side but trips and falls to the ground. The man relaxes slightly confused. Raynn takes the fall and rolls before springing into the air and slams both his feet into the man's face. The man puts up his arms in effort to block the unexpected and lightning quick attack but only succeeds at having his own arm break his nose. Raynn shoves off the man knocking him to the ground stunned and in pain. Raynn catches himself and presses his attack by instantly leaping back on the man slashing and clawing at his face, chest, and arms with the claws on The thief and The Knight. The man manages to shove Raynn off and end his savage attack. Raynn uses the chakra in The Thief to use Kirigakure no Jutsu (Hidden Mist Technique). Raynn backflips into the mist. The man stands holding his nose and spins around trying to locate Raynn. The man hears very faint and distorted footsteps from his right. He spins sees a shadow sprinting towards him. He punches at the shadow hitting its center. The shadow disappears revealing another shadow that then flies past the man's extended arm. Raynn dashes right of his clone at the last moment and lunges at the man stabbing into his throat with the claws of The Knight. Raynn kicks the man in the chest dislodging his claws and releases the Hidden Mist Technique. The man falls to the ground gurgling blood. Raynn wipes his claws off on the moist grass before leaving the man to die.
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 6:52 am
Kuro:
First off, no one likes to read an RP Sample in a block of text... and also, you need to work on the flow of your writing. You have a lot of stops in the post, so it makes reading the story choppy. Those are just general RPing suggestions though... on to the weapon:
1. If those are Taijutsu/Kenjutsu techniques, you need to define them more specifically, what each one does, etc... or if they are already a part of something, then they need to be linked to those styles.
2. Secondly, this weapon counts as chakra battery which is against the rules I've set forth. I understand that the values are low and it only stores up to 5 chakra... and that on average it would only yield two extra jutsu in a combat (1 from the max charge attained in between battles... and 1 which could be charged during combat after about 3-5 posts), but that's still a chakra battery which gives an unfair imbalance to a user's chakra values... especially as a Genin (as this gives you access to C-rank abilities for free)
...plus the fact that you can trigger the techniques with your own chakra...
I'm afraid I can't allow that. I'm not against you re-working your weapon, but as it is written it's too powerful and it's too easy to gain charge. If you alone were channeling the chakra through the weapon, I wouldn't mind, but it would need limitations on how often it can be used, since a Custom Weapon isn't meant to be a way to simply give your character more access to jutsu.
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 7:12 am
When I said I could combine it I meant I could put my chakra into The Knight so I could use the chakra for higher level jutsu, the chakra The Thief gains can't be added to my chakra pool. I have two ideas what would make them be less powerful, I could cut the amount gained in half so it gains 1/8 a point instead of 1/4, and/or I could make it where I can't add chakra to the total so the chakra gathered can only go towards low level jutsu.
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 7:36 am
kuro-uchi When I said I could combine it I meant I could put my chakra into The Knight so I could use the chakra for higher level jutsu, the chakra The Thief gains can't be added to my chakra pool. I have two ideas what would make them be less powerful, I could cut the amount gained in half so it gains 1/8 a point instead of 1/4, and/or I could make it where I can't add chakra to the total so the chakra gathered can only go towards low level jutsu.
Effectively, you're getting two free techniques per battle because of your custom weapon, and that's the kind of thing I want to try and avoid. The thing is, it happens passively and it doesn't drain your own chakra to use it. Then beyond that, the Hidden Mist technique is a jutsu you'd have to otherwise train and use... so by making this weapon, you're giving yourself a free C-rank jutsu slot as well.
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 10:13 am
  Name of Weapon:Mighty Moss Who Owns the Weapon: Daichi Mayu Where it Was Found?/ Who Made it? Daichi, being the genius that he is, liked to experiment with all sorts of stuff, and bio engineering was one of them. One such experiment was to create a moss that could live in an enclosed environment so long as it had carbon dioxide and a fuel to live off of. This particular moss is the cream of the crop of his experiments. Range: from the head down to the middle of your shoulder blades/sternum. Weakness: This moss is sensitive to heat, and will die if struck with a B-rank chakra attack. Weapon Description: It's green squishy moss about 3 centimeters (a little over an inch) thick. It's soft and pleasant to the touch. It coats the inside of the airtight helmet pictured above, but the lense has a couple differences. The lens you look out of is about twice as wide and long, and is made out of Polaroid (material sunglasses are coated with). Special Properties/Abilites: This custom bio-engineered moss is able to undo the carbon dioxide bonds as fast as the body creates them, thus creating a replenishing supply of oxygen in an air-tight space. This moss feeds off the moisture of the wearer's breath and the chakra that naturally radiates off the body part(s) it surrounds. The extended helmet provides moderate protection against most weapons (kuni, senbon, swords without chakra edges. etc.). Rp Sample:Boy, it sure is difficult to see what you're pissing on without being able to look down. Daichi had left the village today to deliver a custom sword to someone who loved just outside the village limits, but had seriously needed to take a leak. He felt the same three mental presences go in and out of his telepathy range occasionally, which could only mean he was being trailed. Who CAN'T trail me? he wondered for a moment. You could hear the whirl of his fan in his air system from quite a distance, and his head was one big reflective surface. He could feel the three presences break off so that there was one behind him, and one to either side. He decided he should listen in on the man's thoughts as he let loose a stream of gold. I need to get this done soon anyway. I need to get this mission done soon in order to get the extra credit for a speedy delivery.As it turned out, the three people were using headsets to talk to each other. This was perfect for Daichi, because when one hears the others on the radio, that person thinks momentarily thinks about what was said. In essence, he could hear their entire battle strategy just from hacking one mind. Behind: Are you two in position yet?Side 1: [silence for a moment] We're in position. Which move we going for, boss?Behind: Since he's distracted, let's go with the poison-bomb combo. You guys spring if he leaps.Daichi shimmied himself comfortably back into his pants and went to buckle his belt when he heard behind think Bombs away! Daichi immediately started a mental timer in his mind, and bent over to pick up the weapon he had put down (the one he was carrying for the mission). He saw a poison canister hit next to him, and stopped the timer. The poison went off next to him and not until it obscured him from vision did he throw up the light telekinetic shield. Within a split second he saw the tag glow right before exploding, and that glow revealed to him the angle and direction from which it had been thrown. Poison had gotten into his shield because he activated it after the canister deployed its toxins, but his moss filled helmet allowed him to not be exposed to the toxins. He used his legs and levitation to leap into the air and, while doing so, grabbed to kuni and went through a rapid series of calculations only possible through sheer brain power in such short time. According to the acceleration of gravity minus air resistance on an average gas canister multiplied by the 2.24 second drop time gives me the height. The angle of the kuni’s path according to the factors the tag, the angle it landed, and how far it went means he is "that" far back. According to the average height of a post war sound hunter ninja, who normally prefer this sort of attack pattern, his vitals are at approximately "these" locations. In a split second, Daichi managed to use the info gathered from the ninja's weapons and attack pattern to dictate the most likely location of his target's vital points assuming he was still in the same spot watching and giving orders. Daichi turned with his levitation and released a group of three senbon. By using telekinesis with his right hand, he increased their speed and then turned his attention to his other two attackers. He accelerated his body downward with his levitation powers and, in doing so, as able to cause the attacker in front of him to miss with his chakra coated sword, but the foe behind him had been luckier and cut clean through the calf muscles in Daichi's right leg with his extended sword. At the same time he felt the mental presence of one foe, the one he had attacked, disappear. While it was a good thing that senbon aimed at the ninja's head had managed to get the foe, Daichi didn't have time to celebrate as his calf was sliced open. And if that wasn't bad enough, that sword had been laced with raiton chakra for the edge, which meant most of Daichi's defenses were then shut down for the most part momentarily. He landed hard on the ground because the pain made him momentarily lose control of his levitation. One of the enemy swordsman took advantage of the situation and kicked off his partner as they met in mid-air so he could lunge at Daichi. With his sword coated in raiton chakra, the man cut when he got near so as to cut Daichi from shoulder-to-hip. In a blur of quick thinking, Daichi grabbed an explosive tag from his pouch. As the ninja's attack almost struck, Daichi used light telekinetic push with his other hand to slightly slow the strike and raised the hand with the tag. The enemy, having been slightly slowed, had missed his mark and hit the bottom of Daichi's helmet. The blade cut through the helmet and about an inch into the side of his neck His opponent, however, got slapped by the tag and rolled several feet past Daichi. With his mind groggy from the pain searing between the base of his neck and shoulder, Daichi detonated the tag. The first weapon master died then by being taken from one place and being sent to many places at the same time. The explosion was somewhat muffled by the helmet, and he opened up a telepathic link with the last foe now that the stun from the raiton attack was over. He was greeted by nothing but sheer killing intent. It took Daichi a little longer than usual to think things through because of his wounds, but thankfully his tactical skills hadn't waned. He threw up a telekinetic shield just as his mind recovered enough from the last one to do it again, and was greeted by the sound of blade grinding against his mental barrier. The enemy, wise to this act now that he had seen it twice, used his most powerful slash augmented by a chakra coating to break through the shield. Daichi, in a last ditch effort, used two telekinesis moves at the same time. One on the fellow's blade with the hand on his dangling injured arm to slow it down just like the other weapon user, and another at one if the kuni that had been blasted off the deceased enemy shinobi. The kuni came and, as the enemy turned to look at it, cut through the jugular. The enemy ninja flailed around, spraying blood all over Daichi's helmet before finally passing out from blood loss. Dachi lay there for a moment, breathing heavily from the pain in his shoulder and his mental exertion. He floated over to the weapon he had been sent to deliver, and hooked it to his belt. Then, with the blood of his foe dripping from damaged helmet Daichi sealed the bodies in a scroll and headed back to the village. Although it looked like he was walking with an injured leg, he was really using his levitation to support his weight. I need to get this leg looked at. Lady Misuki won't be too happy that I had to come back instead of delivering the sword, but I think her tune will change when I show here what else I bring back....
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 10:43 am
Name of weapon: Shadow Blade (The Assassin's Edge)
Who owns the weapon: Konaga Sai
Where it was found/Who made it: After his exile from Kirigakure, Sai wandered for some time through the Wave Country and the outskirts of it's territory. At one point, Sai was targeted by an assassin who had been hired by a local villager whose son had been killed under Sai's command on a mission. During his battle with the assassin, Sai found that the ninja was continually fading in and out of the shadows, his strikes appearing from odd angles, and seemingly out of thin air until he realized what was going on.
Playing on the assassin's hit and run tactics, acted nervous, constantly looking around while exposing his back frequently. As the assassin arrived from the shadows again, Sai spun around and took a hit purposefully through his shoulder. Grabbing the assassin's wrist as the blade dug into his shoulder, he pulled the ninja closer, driving the blade further into his body until it tore out through the other side of his body. In a feat only a Konaga could achieve however, he gripped the assassin's wrist firmly, seemingly unaffected by the immense pain such a would would inflict, and ignited his hand in chakra as he triggered the Chakra Overload augmentation and struck his assailant in the chest.
Writhing in pain on the ground due to the shared agony the Overload technique creates, the assassin was incapacitated and Sai could easily finish the assassin off. Removing his opponent's own weapon from his shoulder, Sai took the blade in hand, twirled it around and dug it into the assassin's heart killing him instantly. Sai kept the blade as a memento, and eventually, it began speaking to him in odd ways, telling him things about the shadows. The weapon's origin is still unknown, but there are markings on the blade's hilt that appear only on when exposed to the moonlight that give a clue to the blade's origin, though it is in a strange language he cannot read. After examining the blade further and hearing the voices of the shadows, Sai began to unlock the blade's secrets and has developed a style with the blade that has so far proved to be completely unique in it's abilities.
The Range of the weapon: Short, ~5 feet (The reach of Sai's arm + the blade's edge, which about 17 inches.)
Description: The blade is about 2 ft long in total, with a 7 inch hilt, and a 17 inch blade (see picture above). depending on how the light hits the blade, it is either black as night, or a semi-translucent, almost crystal like color. The hilt it intricately carved with runes and symbols, but they can only be seen when held up to moonlight. Though the blade's semi-translucent appeal can at times make the blade seem weak and fragile, it has been remarkably well tempered, and is incredibly sturdy... having held it's own against many much larger weapons, while still maintaining it's sharp edge.
Weakness: The blade's one weakness is that the user loses all of it's granted abilities if there are no shadows in the vicinity it is being used. It also cannot use it's own shadow or Sai's shadow as a source for it's granted techniques.
Special Ability: Beside granting access to the Shadowplay Kenjutsu, the Shadow Blade itself gives Sai an innate knowledge of the shadows around him. This allows Sai to detect any presence within a shadow that is not it's own within a 25 ft radius of himself. Those within the shadows appear as a thinly outlined image within the shadow, which reveals their position and general shape/size.
- This cannot detect ninja in [Stealth] within a shadow, but can detect those with the Stealth Specialty.
- This does not apply to complete darkness, as shadows cannot truly exist without light.
Associated Weapon Style : [Shadowplay]
Rp Sample: (Hopefully not needed, but can be supplied if required)
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 10:50 am
I am going over and making sure nothing gor skipped, ALL apps are being looked at and will be responded to in the next 2-3 days.
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 11:24 am
Cobra_X kuro-uchi When I said I could combine it I meant I could put my chakra into The Knight so I could use the chakra for higher level jutsu, the chakra The Thief gains can't be added to my chakra pool. I have two ideas what would make them be less powerful, I could cut the amount gained in half so it gains 1/8 a point instead of 1/4, and/or I could make it where I can't add chakra to the total so the chakra gathered can only go towards low level jutsu.
Effectively, you're getting two free techniques per battle because of your custom weapon, and that's the kind of thing I want to try and avoid. The thing is, it happens passively and it doesn't drain your own chakra to use it. Then beyond that, the Hidden Mist technique is a jutsu you'd have to otherwise train and use... so by making this weapon, you're giving yourself a free C-rank jutsu slot as well.ok, I understand, then how about they just give me a plus one to strength when I preform a taijutsu attack with them?
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 11:39 am
kuro-uchi Cobra_X kuro-uchi When I said I could combine it I meant I could put my chakra into The Knight so I could use the chakra for higher level jutsu, the chakra The Thief gains can't be added to my chakra pool. I have two ideas what would make them be less powerful, I could cut the amount gained in half so it gains 1/8 a point instead of 1/4, and/or I could make it where I can't add chakra to the total so the chakra gathered can only go towards low level jutsu.
Effectively, you're getting two free techniques per battle because of your custom weapon, and that's the kind of thing I want to try and avoid. The thing is, it happens passively and it doesn't drain your own chakra to use it. Then beyond that, the Hidden Mist technique is a jutsu you'd have to otherwise train and use... so by making this weapon, you're giving yourself a free C-rank jutsu slot as well.ok, I understand, then how about they just give me a plus one to strength when I preform a taijutsu attack with them?
...it would have to cost something and have a high cooldown, plus you'd have to keep the stacking concepts in mind.
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Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2011 11:51 am
Cobra_X kuro-uchi Cobra_X kuro-uchi When I said I could combine it I meant I could put my chakra into The Knight so I could use the chakra for higher level jutsu, the chakra The Thief gains can't be added to my chakra pool. I have two ideas what would make them be less powerful, I could cut the amount gained in half so it gains 1/8 a point instead of 1/4, and/or I could make it where I can't add chakra to the total so the chakra gathered can only go towards low level jutsu.
Effectively, you're getting two free techniques per battle because of your custom weapon, and that's the kind of thing I want to try and avoid. The thing is, it happens passively and it doesn't drain your own chakra to use it. Then beyond that, the Hidden Mist technique is a jutsu you'd have to otherwise train and use... so by making this weapon, you're giving yourself a free C-rank jutsu slot as well.ok, I understand, then how about they just give me a plus one to strength when I preform a taijutsu attack with them?
...it would have to cost something and have a high cooldown, plus you'd have to keep the stacking concepts in mind. how about I can equip weights to them that will give me a minus one to speed but a plus one to strength?
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