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Include the Yuffie materia hunt in wutai?
  YES! i want to read how everyone chases after yuffie ((yay!))
  No, we can just pretend she never stole out materia.
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AsukaTerra

PostPosted: Wed Feb 15, 2006 4:47 pm


well, I, myself, am not sure personally of the actual date. I've visited a bunch of sites that all show differnent preorder dates for the movie. However, I would believe that having seen an ad for the movie in the Official PS magazine in December should be enough to say it's coming out this year. >.>;

Anyways, can I get some feedback on my section of the story there?
PostPosted: Wed Feb 15, 2006 5:07 pm


Thank you for placing me as an editor, I really wish I had more time to dedicate, but between school work and keeping my grades up, learning songs on the drums, and other things...my time is limited. I will be the best editor I can be. 3nodding

Return Of Say


Return Of Say

PostPosted: Wed Feb 15, 2006 5:12 pm


SephiOverlord
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"Sephiroth...Black Materia...hahaha..."

At that point, I'd lost my mind. Simple enough, I couldn't control it. My memories now began to haunt me. They absolutely refused to quit. To no end did the monsters of Sephiroth and Jenova force me to obey. I was their toy. I belong to them and no one else.

"Give...haha...Sephiroth...ha...summon...Meteor...haha!"

I was no more. The man once called Cloud Strife had faded from all existence, just as Sephiroth had 5 years previous. We once shared such similar lives. Yet now we were brothers, sons of Jenova. My eyes slanted and I could only think of Reunion.

Slowly I stepped toward the large blue crystal before me. Laughing madly, I placed the Black Materia within the crystal. There was someone inside the crystal, Sephiroth. He did not stir as I placed the Materia inside. He won't right away. After all, he's sleeping, only just sleeping like he had been for the last five years. Yet, if that is the case, then who was the man we were chasing for so long? A ghost? Perhaps a an imposter Sephiroth beign controlled by the real thing? I couldn't say.

I cackled insanity as lighting pulsed through the room. The ground shook and cracked. With that, my friends were herded out by the Turks. I think I might have heard someone, probably Tifa, scream, but at the time, I was deaf to the world. Deaf even to myself. The blue light of eternity pierced my eyes. I heard monsters emerge from the light of darkness surrounding me, but nothing mattered to me any longer.

Now I was falling as the earth below my feet finally split wide open. I continued dropping into an abyss of green. As I plummeted towards the Lifestream below, I grinned and emersed myself in the laughter of one who was clinically insane. What was left of my sanity allowed me tear. As my face dampened, I could not have known I was the only one who was crying. As my laughs echoed on the walls, the gods up high wept, for their hero had fallen.


There's what we got so far. I'm actually gonna call this draft #2 cuz I changed and added some stuff as I was typing the post. comments and criticism much appreciated, thanks!


Edit note one: Byim, yes, you were, or more, will be very helpful with that info (I haven't started working on that segment yet)

Edit note two: Suka, I'd put the banner in my sig, but it won't fit xd sorry

It's pretty good, you're spelling and grammar at the end of the third paragraph and the start of the fourth should be double checked. I felt like you used a lot of description in some places, but maybe not enough in other portions. You very well described Cloud's mental state, but I felt like you didn't describe very much Sephiroth or the area that they were both in, as in what was around them. (i.e. The Weapons, Rufus, Scarlet, Tifa and the others.)
PostPosted: Wed Feb 15, 2006 5:46 pm


I'll check the spelling and such (didn't run it through Microsoft Word) and I was actually trying not to be to descriptive. Especially with the group, the Turks, etc. because Cloud was insane and didn't give two $#!+s about everyone else, only Sephiroth and the Black Materia. However, I will agree that I should TRY being a little more descriptive of Sephiroth, I guess. (you'd have to tell me what you're looking for cuz quite frankly I don't think there's much else to describe about him.) I only started from where I did because I was trying to just let you pretty much write your version. Again, this is only from his point of view, but I think I can add another paragraph or two to the beginning regarding his entrance to the Great Northern Cave and being more discriptive of everything else.

I'll work on draft 3 in a little while. I'm tryng to mess with a new account I got (wanted different eyes, hair and name, so I got a new account w/o realizing I could change all those but the eyes. Still, the eyes were a main reason I wanted it, so I'm keeping it.) If I can get him in the guild, I'm gonna continue this on that account.

EDIT: I'm not keeping the other account after all, just so people working in this thread know. I'm changing my actual name, though, so don't be surprised if it's different.

AsukaTerra


Suka Strife

PostPosted: Thu Feb 16, 2006 10:17 am


please do not forget to email me your writing!! by the end itwill be too difficult to track it all down in the thread, but make sure that you put FFVII in the subject bar, then i can filter it. also include what section you are writing, and who you are.

EDIT: be prepared for any changes, i will send you an email regarding the changes, but i will change writing as i feel fit (so will the other editors i am sure) so do not get angry with us if you find any changes to your original work.
PostPosted: Thu Feb 16, 2006 10:21 am


and that reminds me, Return of Say, would you still like to write, or should i assign that piece to reign of blood? ((i will edit your name in the first post))

Suka Strife


AsukaTerra

PostPosted: Thu Feb 16, 2006 4:23 pm


thanks. I'll e-mail it to you only when it's done completely. Same with the rest of the junk. I'll finish it now and post it here again for additional criticism.
PostPosted: Thu Feb 16, 2006 5:06 pm


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AsukaTerra


Suka Strife

PostPosted: Fri Feb 17, 2006 2:53 pm


just make sure the final draft (whatever one it is) makes it way into my email inbox, okay?
PostPosted: Fri Feb 17, 2006 2:56 pm


Don't worry, I will. You worry about that too much, lol. I just want to see what others think before I really send it. I'm sure you understand, right?

AsukaTerra


Suka Strife

PostPosted: Sun Feb 19, 2006 12:30 pm


....
yes..... i just want to make sure everybody sends it to me....
PostPosted: Sun Feb 19, 2006 5:49 pm


I think we get it by now, lol. *pats Suka on the back* well...at least i do >.>;

Actually, I think I'll send it to you in a moment. No one's commenting on it and I ran it through spell/grammer check on Microsoft Word and everything checked out. (except for a few small things that I knew the program picked up on accident)

AsukaTerra


Suka Strife

PostPosted: Mon Feb 20, 2006 3:36 pm


excellecnt!! perhaps i should collect the emails of the editors...

also i managed to collect another writer! he is a personal friend of mine offline, and his name is The Advent Cloud Strife , but i do not think he is a member of the Guild, so please, do not hesitate to collect writers outside of the guild!!! any one is helpful.
PostPosted: Mon Feb 20, 2006 4:24 pm


sounds like a good idea to me. Do what you can and I'll start working on my other segment soon. I'm gonna try playing through the game at that point a good couple of times first, to refresh my memory and take notes, so I won't have that part in for a few weeks probably. Possibly even longer. I'll post when I have more information about this next part of the writing.

AsukaTerra


Suka Strife

PostPosted: Mon Feb 20, 2006 4:41 pm


excellent, thank you, you are doing a great job. you rock ^^

also i would like any one to tell me if my attempted newsletter automatic message worked or not, if it did please tell me.
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