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Sal walked over to the dragon hatchling and picked it up.
"Hey, no more crying, ok?" he said softly. "Im here for ya."

The hatchling looked at Sal for a second and licked him

"Hey, that tickles" he said playfully.

Sal had a big smile on.
"You what i have a name." he said witrh pride. "Boy or girl i done care, Im going to name it Brrrrrrrrr. It femine but strong at the same time."

The dragon looked at him with confusion in its face. is this fo for real? man i really hope he is joking, I mean come on. Im all for jokes, but this is wack. It pipped a small sound and cocked his head a bit.

Darkheart awoke from his slumber. He stood and walked to the cave entrance cautiously. He used his werewolf senses to survey make sure there is no one around. Darkheart walked over to Drakonth and gently shook him awake. The dragon responded with a low growl and went back to sleep.

He proceeded outside and saw 3 deer grazing on the grass near a glistening lake. He transformed into his werewolf form and silently snuck up behind the deer. Darkheart attacked them, killing 2 of the deer, and his gentler side let the young one go. Then he proceeded to the lake carrying the deer and skinned them. He then returned to his dragon, picked him up in his arms, and jumped to a nearby tree. He advanced the deer he killed earlier and feasted on their carcasses.

Darkheart laid a piece of the bloody deer meat in front of his dragon trying to wake it. Drakonth smelled the meat and rips it from Darkheart's hand. The little black dragon proceeded to eat one of the deer itself and when finished, it burped and set his deer fur on fire. Darkheart quickly threw it into the lake and pulled it back out when the fire smoldered. "Say excuse me next time or you wont have extra," he reprimanded the dragon. Darkheart returned to human form and grabbed the dragon. He threw it into the lake and said, "Bath time old friend". Darkheart jumped into the lake and joined his dragon. He whistled a tune while scrubbing his dragon to clean it. He then swam under the water to search for some form of rock to sharpen his blade. He finally found one after some careful searching, returned to the surface, and threw it near the furs.

Darkheart finished cleaning himself and his dragon, so he walked out of the lake. He used his magix to dry him and Drakonth. They both returned to the cave, and Darkheart began sewing the furs together to make a sheath for his blade. He dressed himself and strapped on his blade to his back. Then he grabbed a small coin bag from his dragon's resting spot and reached for a chain that was laying next to him in his sleep. Darkheart proceeded outside while attaching the chain to his wrist. He called for his dragon which landed on his shoulder and walked into the forest below. Darkheart then followed the smell of elves to try to find a city and to see if the world finally has peace once again.

Edited by aznanniec by a request from SureinDragon.

Tips:
1. It's better to use the past tense when roleplaying, because by the time you've done the action it would already be in the past.
2. It's alright to alternate nouns with pronouns, but try not use an obvious pattern such as noun to pronoun to noun.
3. It would also help to use some more colorful vocabulary to describe what you do.
4. Just like in any story or essay, separate different ideas by splitting the text into paragraphs.
5. You should also check your spelling (this applies to Surein too), most people would judge your intelligence through spelling, and the more chatspeak and spelling mistakes, the more unintelligent people will think you are. (no offense, but this is true for most)
6. For sequences of events, join the separate events with commas and the last event with and. try not to use the same verbs over and over again, it gets redundant.
7. Commas go after the speaking verb or at the end of the quote if it ends in a period followed by a speaking verb.
8. Use an apostrophe [ ' ] before an s to signify possession. The only time this rule is broken is when it comes to its. It's means it is whereas its means that the item belongs to it.

"Huh, whats up Teresia, you look... Annoyed." Arya asked Teresia. She looked around but could see nothing. Since Elves dident have the same sense of smell as Vampires, she couldent smell the werewolf near by.

(Neh, tnx for the tips~! Neh, i cant make it much better than this atm ^^;; srry))

Teresia gripped a nearby rock so tightly that it turned into dust under her hands. "IT'S THE STENCH OF A WEREWOLF!" she shouted hysterically, her amber eyes glowing with anger underneath her hood. The young dragon in the pond dove under with a plop, hoping to escape from her master's wrath. "Disgusting mutts with no sense of decency! They seem to have the delicious scent of blood... but that wet dog smell is so disgustingly powerful that it drives all vampires insane with anger!" She calmed down slightly after her rant and reached for her dragon. "Come here, Arethusa, it's alright. I won't hurt you..." she said gently, feeling guilty about frightening her companion. "Nevertheless..." she continued to Arya without meeting her gaze, "there's a werewolf close by, and I'm very tempted to rip his throat out with my teeth and feed his remains to the rest of the dogs."

((Hee hee, no problem 3nodding ))

Darkheart had just caught the scent of the elves again and quickly grabbed his dragon. Darkheart that he was getting close to them so he decided to transform into his werewolf form just in case it was needed. He let his dragon wrap itself around his neck and they continued to walk around the pond nearing the scent. Just as he got half-way around he smelt the scent of something else. He couldn't tell exactly what it was till he got closer to the elve scent.Darkheart grabbed his dragon and set him on the ground and said,"Not this time old pal. Im going to deal with this myself."Darkheart walked close to the elve scent and could tell exactly what the other scent was.He lets out a growl that would fear the mightest of dragons and yells out," COME OUT YOU BLOOD SUCKING CREATURE. I WANT TO SEE THE YOUR FACE BEFORE I HAVE TO TEAR IT OFF!" He pulls out the sword from his back and ready himself for battle.

Arya shook her head calmly "I dont want any more fighting today, theres been enough of that between you and Sal" She exhailed, and cold air swirled around her and floted harmlesley to the ground. Then, as if it was alive, the cold air slitherd tword Teresia and the Werewolf, and up the there knees. It Clasped itself around there legs, and froze them promptly to the ground. Arya calmly stood between the to after picking up her bow and arrows. "What brings you to are camp?" She asked the werewolf.