Welcome to Gaia! ::

I really like your Bio, Ard, she's got an interesting history, and a different personailty. The one thing that needs fixing is your mention of her growing up on the Hymn. That would be rather impossible as the Hymn isn't even a year old. Growing up on a starship, however, is a neat idea, and I like it. Change the ship she grew up on and you'll be good.

Character is OK to RP with, bio is pending minor changes.

You sure can join, Animeyumichan, Simply post in this thread with a biography in the format i've posted on the first page. I'll give it a look-see to judge your writing style and make sure you don't have any big inconsistencies with the world i've been trying to create with my players' help.

oooh yay!! thank-you very much!! I shall make it right after I post this ^.^

ooh and I'll skim the RP first too...*nods*

Ard's Charachter is Approved. Thanks for making the changes, Ard.

Animeyumichan, If you want to be in the fighting and up close with the rest of the characters, choose intelligence agent, since they regularly are on the battlefield and in direct contact with everyone else. if you like being away from ground battles, choose bridge crew, your character will stay safer and be able to help flesh out ship battles. At the moment, we're just starting a major ground battle, so it may be a while before bridge crew can be utilised. In the end, it's your choice, just depends on your preferences.

Gaian Name: animeyumichan

-General
Name: Still Sehene [Pronounced seh-hee-nay]
Age: 31
Height: 5’ 4”
Weight: 146lbs
Species: Terran
Job: Intelligence Agent
Rank: Private

-Psychological
Personality: She is usually quite happy and cheerful, but when need be she will become serious and thoughtful. She is expert at concealing her emotions, and therefore it is hard for others to tell what they really are. She trusts no other species than humans, and tends to trust the humans she knows too soon after meeting them, which can be a huge weakness. She cares deeply about those she knows, and tends to worry about them often.
Likes: Techno and dance music, dancing (shuffling, rave, generic dancing), good food, the old-earth picture-box show ‘Star Trek’.
Dislikes: The war, Drathonians, traitors, communications officers who just cannot get the message right, slow music, engineering (she hates trying to figure out how on earth the machines work), natural light (it hurts her eyes and burns her skin).
Goals: To help attain the end of the war and aid humanity’s quest for peace, and to find the perfect formula for scrambled eggs.

-History
Short History: Her family was among a colony of Terran settled on an ice planet with no natural light able to reach the surface (resulting in her appearance [see ‘appearance’]). Her parents had never married and she never met her mother, having lived with her Father most of her life. She was schooled by a combination of the archival teachings and her father’s knowledge.
When the Drathonians betrayal came, her planet was pillaged for its stores of goods and trade. She woke up one morning to find all the artificial beamers off, and the sounds of fighting near. After the Drathonians left, she found bodies of many she knew. Anyone remaining had to use night-vision goggles and small beamers to see. She and her father were among the last to leave, as they helped to supervise the departures of the weaker. The planet was almost deserted when they left. They were to escape to the nearest safe port. They did make it to a port, and managed to live there for a year and a half among other surviving Terran. It was a hard life; filled with many battles with attacking Drathonians and shortages of food, housing, and supplies, but they survived. She set her mind on become an intelligence agent, and underwent the training needed and was accepted.
A year and a half after their arrival at port, her father was betrayed by a filthy Terran who had turned to the Drathonians to keep himself alive. He was killed one night while entering their housing unit, and Still was the one who found his body. She was devastated, and still has nightmares about the sight of his body lying in front of her, cold and dead. She vowed to help end the war. She requested assignment, and was given a placement as a new ‘recruit’ into the Drathonian Empire. Disguise technology was used to give her the appearance of a normal Drathonian, and she spent 10 long years working her way up to a ‘Drake’. She found out many secrets in her place, but was forced to leave the posting early (it was supposed to last 15 years) due to some Drathonians suspecting her and targeting her.
She returned to Terran territory and served on a ‘Destroyer’ for awhile, until her new posting on the ‘Hymn’ was given to her.

-Notes
Appearance: She has albinistic qualities in her colouring, due to her planet having no natural light. Her hair is shoulder length and slightly wavy, with an almost-white bleached-blond colour to it. Her skin has no pigment, and therefore she is extremely pale. Her eyes are slightly large for her face, giving her a childish look, and are coloured a pale purplish-blue hue. She has a curvy build. She wears the standard uniform for Marines, but also has a small amount of regular clothing that she has saved.
Distinguishing characteristics: The sunglasses she wears almost all the time to protect her sensitive eyes from the harsh bright lights of the ‘Hymn’. Her pale skin and hair.


there we go!! *courageous pose*
This was one of my most complicated and well thought out characters, so I am quite proud of myself, but also sorry for making you wait for so long!! *bows*

If there is anything you wish to be changed or added,etc. please let me know.

And uhm...I am going to try and draw a picture of her because I am not sure I'm very good at describing characters, so if I remember I'll draw/scan and put it up....

ooh and I hope she seems realistic(considering the RP XD). I did some research on albinism and skin pigmentation, and theoretically it would be possible for a colony of humans not getting any natural light to have a form of albinism. *nods proudly*

is it really?? o0
I hope it's not too long...*looks around innocently*
heh thanks ^.^

I thought that maybe beamers would be something that they would say in the future, and the large lights used to light crime scenes and excavation sites, etc. are called beamers. Those are the kind of lights I was thinking, sorta gigantic bright lighty-type-things...^.^
o0o yay!! heh thanks!! ^.^

yeah, my punctuation isn't the greatest, but it's a lot better than it used to be (thanks to RPing ;D)...heh
I will admit right now that I am a comma freak, I love commas, and use them all the time. sweatdrop
^Example above. XD

YAYYyyy...*dances*
thank-you very much!!! ^>^
And will do!! *nods*

This is the damn picture xD The original character is called Hatsune Miku, she is a fictional voice actress from a Japanese music program called Vocaloid. She's only like, the most awesome anime character ever conceived. She can even catch leek rockets with her hair!

Glad to see someone new.
But you're right, I am a bit strict when it comes to characters. I need something that is clear and easy to read, but detailed, so that other players can get an accurate idea of your character from the Bio.

Species is 'Terran', I know minor typo, but I still need to make sure you know that.

I'd like you to elaborate on his personality. what kind of manners did he learn? table manners? proper speech? why does he react so much to hurting a friend? if he is kind, wouldn't he be more willing to find a nonviolent way around things? that's what i want to see.

You have several grammar and sentence structure issues in your history. if you could fix those, that would be nice. why did his family need to steal a car? at this point in the future cars would be like bicycles, very cheap. what fired the energy missile? Drathonian troops? a fighter? a tank? accidental friendly fire maybe?
what about this T.R.S. Chaos? what happened to it? is it still in service? what kind of ship is it?
Why is he such a natural at engineering and repair? what interests him most about it? if he learned little other than manners, why is he such a good engineer?

Where did his family go?

Also, can I get a written discription along with the picture? I prefer written to pictures, because of possible copyright issues, and because it makes a character more unique.

The only reason I seem to be being so harsh is because I want to know that you are serious about this, and that you are capable of writing to a high standard if needed. also knowing as much about a character as possible is always a good thing.

From what I get, it's a good idea, and just needs some refining.

nice revision, Straken. i'll go and replace the original with this.