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 Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 6:31 pm
@Sain, to be honest, i was a little conserned about your posting, since the first one was so short. but, since then i'm really really liking your style, & i love your last post.
now, i wanna address a couple things about the school though.
1. the school is really really open to people, as long as they have powers. You don't need parent consent of anything to sign up, you just have to have powers.
2. students show up all the time, many w/out parents. since, many kids get abandoned because of their powers. the school just takes 'em in, goes through steps of application, and gets then a dorm.
3. the door area is pratically coed. boys on one side, girls on the other (if you look on the map), but, its the same area.
if you look at the second post, and the map it'll tell you alot about the school.
soo, remember that. once your done w/ all your intro post, make yourself open up. i'll get my character ellie some time w. yours (: &, i'm sure Caleb would love to chat, since thats what he does all of the time.
&, when you rp w/ someone, try to add more info in each post so the other can reply. all of your first 3 post could have been consinced into one. we kinda require longer posting than most RPs, since i want everyone to improve. all you have to do is out a lil effort in (i'm not saying your not, btw) and longer post come out easier. its no so much about length than quality, but quality typically comes from lots of details, which leads to length.
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Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 6:56 pm
ElaineeNicolee @Sain, to be honest, i was a little conserned about your posting, since the first one was so short. but, since then i'm really really liking your style, & i love your last post.
now, i wanna address a couple things about the school though.
1. the school is really really open to people, as long as they have powers. You don't need parent consent of anything to sign up, you just have to have powers.
2. students show up all the time, many w/out parents. since, many kids get abandoned because of their powers. the school just takes 'em in, goes through steps of application, and gets then a dorm.
3. the door area is pratically coed. boys on one side, girls on the other (if you look on the map), but, its the same area.
if you look at the second post, and the map it'll tell you alot about the school.
soo, remember that. once your done w/ all your intro post, make yourself open up. i'll get my character ellie some time w. yours (: &, i'm sure Caleb would love to chat, since thats what he does all of the time.
&, when you rp w/ someone, try to add more info in each post so the other can reply. all of your first 3 post could have been consinced into one. we kinda require longer posting than most RPs, since i want everyone to improve. all you have to do is out a lil effort in (i'm not saying your not, btw) and longer post come out easier. its no so much about length than quality, but quality typically comes from lots of details, which leads to length. Sain, I have a bit to add to Elaine's comments. While I do agree that your most recent post is much better than your first, there is one thing you still do, swap back and forth tenses, and personally, it irks me. For example: Sain After Dark Emilia stands. "Thank you very much ma'am." She smiles with mirth. "You don't have to call me 'ma'am'. Come on then, follow me. I'll take you to the girls dormitory." Emilia follows her without speaking. All of these words that are bolded need their tense's changed. According to the rules, we write in the Third Person Limited format only, in past tense. So, stands would be stood, etc. I did notice that you did put past tense on some of your words, but more often than not, they were in the present tense. I would appreciate it if you would do your best to correct this issue in your upcoming posts. Other than that, Glad to have you! xP We need more people!
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Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 7:08 pm
hey guys! today i was in creative writting class, and my teacher explained to us the diffrent point of views mainly used in fiction.
1st person, 3rd person ommisiant, and 3rd person limited.
turns out, we write in 3rd person limited. this means that when one writes the narrator knows all of the feelings and thoughts of the main character, however she cannot tell you the feelings of the other characters besides what the character their writting about assumes by facial features, words, etc. sooooo. i made a mistake. i'm super sorry, & i'm correcting it now...
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Posted: Mon Nov 01, 2010 7:35 pm
@ Shauna and Drakie, idk when i'll be able to post :/
i have this short story i have to write for creative write, and its taking away all the lil bit of my inspiration. sadly, i'm only half way (its due tomorrow :/), and its only the first of a few drafts. sooo, yea. ima try to post as soon as possiable, i cant guarntee that'll be in a few days.
@ rachy, i know i wont be responding asap, but i think you should post any way. bcus, there are people i'm sure are dying to read this. i know i am.
@ kyuubi, i'm sooo excited for the dance (: M&K will be brilliant, at least while it last ; D
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Posted: Wed Nov 03, 2010 8:41 am
I know, it should be exciting.
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Posted: Thu Nov 04, 2010 9:38 pm
Huzzah! I've finally made time (aka forced myself to stay awake until 11:40pm) to write! I'll do my very best to keep up with the weekly posting rule. I hope this one is better than the first O.o
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Posted: Fri Nov 05, 2010 10:53 pm
Hi everyone! This rp is really awesome! I'll do my very very very best to fix my tenses!! I've lost so many marks back at school because of it... sweatdrop
Also, sorry Emilia had such a go at your character Arthuritis592...She'll grow up eventually... sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 12:52 am
Hahaha it's no problem, this is fun!
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 3:32 am
haha, btw, I love the post from just before your character went for lunch...it was funny and awesome! 4laugh
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 9:06 am
Sain After Dark & Arthuritis592, I LOVED Y'ALLS POST! They made me smile, and we're super entertaining. Not to mention, every worry i had about y'all is now gone. I'm so glad y'all are getting active, since everytime we get someone new they leave. Ima get Mitsukai and Ellie and all to RP w/ y'all for sure.
Esp. Ellie w/ Sain's character, ohh goodness, Sain you are so going to be in the bad troupe, no if ands or buts about it(: Your charcters is perfect for it.
&, btw. What are y'alls names? I think Arthuritis told me, but i can't remember :/
i don't like calling people by their usernames all that much. Though, i will if you want me to.
Shauna, i'm taking my learners permit test today, woot woot! once i'm done, i'll respond to Drakie and you, aight.
Everyone, thanks for stepping up. I was soo worried we wouldnt be able to revive after last summer. I'm no longer worried about that.
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 12:30 pm
Yea, sorry about the delay, I was so busy with school and trying to get a job that I didn't make time for this. I finally got one though! mrgreen I work at JCPenney's at the mall. (It's okay, my username is misleading lol. I'm Chris! ninja ) Oh, and on a completely unrelated note, the potato item from the halloween game is most definitely my favorite and barely anyone uses it! Whyyyy?? It's so cute! xd
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 1:28 pm
yeahhh, i'm on the same boat w/ school, as is Rachy.
as long as theres one post per week, its all right. &, when work gets to busy (like, holiday) just tell me.
& seriously? how is a potato cute?
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 1:34 pm
scream POTATOES ARE AWESOME!
DO NOT QUESTION THE AWESOMENESS OF THE POTATO!
xd
seriously, I freakin love potatoes.
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 1:52 pm
Shauna, it is RUDE to type in all caps!
lul. <3
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 1:55 pm
You questioned the potato...it was necessary...
blaugh
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