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 Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 4:29 am
Meta Fish No offense, but it's just getting a bit weird now, in my opinion. I liked how they may be going through an empty ancient, booby-trapped civilization, but now there are undead people that may be invincible in there, and they seem to love killing us? I don't know, it's just now what I was expecting, I guess. Still, it's fun to read, and it's very well written. It tore at my heartstrings when Christina died. It really, really did. No offense taken. It is getting more and more weird, I agree, but this is what I have had planned all along. The deaths are increasing, but I hope that each character had a fitting death that allowed the reader time to feel sad. Raui has been playing with the characters all along, mostly for his entertainment, the other people of his city don't really want to kill anyone, but they will if it means they can finally die themselves (eternal tornment and all that). TBH Raui is really the only genuinlly crazy one. I know it's not what you're expecting, and I did consider keeping a pace of traps and so on, but as a writer I think it is my job to bring you the unexpected. You, the reader, were becoming confortable with the whole "traps and riddles" thing, and so I deliberatley shook the entire story up, and turned the entire pacing and scenario around. By doing this, the reader would (hopefully) feel as shocked and confused as the characters themselves. Well, that's the idea anyways, I don't want you to be confortable, I want you to be on the edge of your seat, wanting more mrgreen . As for Christina Carol, it was sad, I agree. In all of my earlier plans, Fisher and Carol both lived, but her death was just the shock I needed to set up the events that would bring the entire story to a close. Let me just say, that Fisher will have his revenge, in a very fitting way. Anyways, sorry for the long post, but I always feel the need to justify my choices and such. Thanks for reading too (everyone), I can be a difficult writer to stick with, due to the way I write, but I have managed to get a few dedicated readers, and that means a lot to me. TBH, if no-one was reading, I wouldn't have finished the story.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 7:32 am
O.O daaaaaaamn. they are SCREWED! unless Fisher's got something extremely awesome planned to pwn Raui.
xd also, I rather like the irony in Allwing's death. xd it REALLY fits his character.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 7:34 am
Koosei O.O daaaaaaamn. they are SCREWED! unless Fisher's got something extremely awesome planned to pwn Raui. xd also, I rather like the irony in Allwing's death. xd it REALLY fits his character. you cant Pwn Raui, Raui is awesome Raui for Prime minister paid for by the lovers of mass hysteria
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 7:48 am
Sauvie Koosei O.O daaaaaaamn. they are SCREWED! unless Fisher's got something extremely awesome planned to pwn Raui. xd also, I rather like the irony in Allwing's death. xd it REALLY fits his character. you cant Pwn Raui, Raui is awesome Raui for Prime minister paid for by the lovers of mass hysteria sure you can. just counter with a dose of sanity.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 8:06 am
Koosei Sauvie Koosei O.O daaaaaaamn. they are SCREWED! unless Fisher's got something extremely awesome planned to pwn Raui. xd also, I rather like the irony in Allwing's death. xd it REALLY fits his character. you cant Pwn Raui, Raui is awesome Raui for Prime minister paid for by the lovers of mass hysteria sure you can. just counter with a dose of sanity. Sanity is boring
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 8:27 am
Sauvie Koosei Sauvie Koosei O.O daaaaaaamn. they are SCREWED! unless Fisher's got something extremely awesome planned to pwn Raui. xd also, I rather like the irony in Allwing's death. xd it REALLY fits his character. you cant Pwn Raui, Raui is awesome Raui for Prime minister paid for by the lovers of mass hysteria sure you can. just counter with a dose of sanity. Sanity is boring ....... ninja true .....
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 9:40 am
Koosei O.O daaaaaaamn. they are SCREWED! unless Fisher's got something extremely awesome planned to pwn Raui. xd also, I rather like the irony in Allwing's death. xd it REALLY fits his character. I died like a man 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 10:16 am
Chapter 37 will be online in roughly one minute
Chapter 37 is online
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Draken [The.Spork.Ninja.]
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 10:20 am
Lul Raui got pwnzorzed.
>_> bye bye City, have fun in hell.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 10:22 am
city of sapphire, in hell, sweet I got a new home. Great chapter FS as always.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 10:23 am
Fisher is badass. 'Nuff Said.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 10:28 am
This story is deep, but that could just be me.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 10:33 am
Seaphron This story is deep, but that could just be me. Thanks, that's a really nice thing to say.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 10:39 am
ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron This story is deep, but that could just be me. Thanks, that's a really nice thing to say. It is so true though, it just seems like it is too me. Are you going to try and get this published? I mean isn't that a possibility?
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 10:40 am
ForsakenSwordsman Meta Fish No offense, but it's just getting a bit weird now, in my opinion. I liked how they may be going through an empty ancient, booby-trapped civilization, but now there are undead people that may be invincible in there, and they seem to love killing us? I don't know, it's just now what I was expecting, I guess. Still, it's fun to read, and it's very well written. It tore at my heartstrings when Christina died. It really, really did. No offense taken. It is getting more and more weird, I agree, but this is what I have had planned all along. The deaths are increasing, but I hope that each character had a fitting death that allowed the reader time to feel sad. Raui has been playing with the characters all along, mostly for his entertainment, the other people of his city don't really want to kill anyone, but they will if it means they can finally die themselves (eternal tornment and all that). TBH Raui is really the only genuinlly crazy one. I know it's not what you're expecting, and I did consider keeping a pace of traps and so on, but as a writer I think it is my job to bring you the unexpected. You, the reader, were becoming confortable with the whole "traps and riddles" thing, and so I deliberatley shook the entire story up, and turned the entire pacing and scenario around. By doing this, the reader would (hopefully) feel as shocked and confused as the characters themselves. Well, that's the idea anyways, I don't want you to be confortable, I want you to be on the edge of your seat, wanting more mrgreen . As for Christina Carol, it was sad, I agree. In all of my earlier plans, Fisher and Carol both lived, but her death was just the shock I needed to set up the events that would bring the entire story to a close. Let me just say, that Fisher will have his revenge, in a very fitting way. Anyways, sorry for the long post, but I always feel the need to justify my choices and such. Thanks for reading too (everyone), I can be a difficult writer to stick with, due to the way I write, but I have managed to get a few dedicated readers, and that means a lot to me. TBH, if no-one was reading, I wouldn't have finished the story. I know, I'm just saying. I know what you mean, it's just my reaction, as you took me out of my comfort zone. Nice new chapter, I can't wait to see how it wraps up.
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