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 Posted: Sun Nov 16, 2008 11:29 pm
Devin got her computer back today! xD (we were chatting 8D )
And I drew the tie picture a while back. xDDDD It's on my DA. 8D
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Posted: Mon Nov 17, 2008 4:16 pm
Hooray! Updates updates updates! *chants*
=P I don't know your DA account, because I wasn't here if you ever posted it. So how am I to know??? crying
*wanders off to hunt foxy on DA because she won't guess what my name is*
Rawr!
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Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 9:00 pm
NEW ONE SHOT OF FLUFF. "I wont tell anyone."It's one thing to have the feelings. Complete other to admit them. Or ignore them. But sometimes you get the chance, the one moment to turn anything into something. Or anyone. Complete - Final Fantasy VII - Fiction Rated: T - English - Drama/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 4,111 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 11-30-08 - Published: 11-30-08 My first Aeris/Tifa kiss, can you believe it?
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Posted: Tue Dec 02, 2008 12:17 pm
FLUFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
But, aww, it was sad fluff. It's got the potential to go on further and turn into a 'discovery' type of fic. I liked the pacing and the franticness of their first kiss was refreshing to see. It wasn't all completely slow or tender, but more.....I felt more anxious about it as I was reading because it was sort of sudden and an 'in the moment' kind of setting, so it leaves one to wonder whether or not there ought to be more behind it.
I really enjoyed seeing Aeris stutter afterwards, even though it was pretty sad towards the end.
Devin!!! I'm happy to see some romantic stuffage going on with your charas, but must it be so sad??? I was having flashbacks of my first heartbreak in there. And I've never been in a haunted hotel or injured with infected wounds. crying
Much love and funnage, glad to see you back XD
There was a scene that I'd love to see drawn, but I still can't find my scanner cable, so I'll just have to ummm...keep it for myself!!! Or, borrow someone else's scanner. Mrrr.
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Posted: Tue Dec 02, 2008 3:36 pm
Why thank you, I wasn't aware I had any other readers other then foxy on the site.
Ha ha -it was funny, my first draft ending was complete opposite, I had it end rather humorous with Tifa making a move after Aerith's rant and Yuffie walking in only to have the flower girl launched across the room - I felt that was in poor taste though with all the other fluff out there playing the: you like me and I've always liked you so every things okay - card. So I tried a realistic approach, and reality is never a happy ending.
Apologies to remind you of your heartbreak, but then again - I was going for realism in a scene so classically done - mission accomplished?
I'm glad to be back, should be writing a lot more frequently to and you should find a scanner at all coasts!
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Posted: Tue Dec 02, 2008 10:10 pm
Yup yup. I commented on Lasting Impressions once when I finished reading it, but that was right before your computer crashed, and then we didn't hear from you for a while on Gaia. Anyhoo.... I joined the guild when your comp crashed, and.......uhhh...have been lurking out and about.
Yesh about the readingness.
I think a sweet fluff ending would have been nice, but the reality of the scene was pretty much all there. She's in shock and not knowing how she should feel, and, of course, burying it down deep. Reality doesn't have happy endings simply because every day is a new beginning. Corny but true.
I'd say mission accomplished with the heartbreak... would be nice to see a continuation of the fluff and see if Aeris can bounce back and accept her feelings for a wounded Tifa, but....updates for the other stories are much more welcomed. Fun and joy stuffs! Yay updates!!
I've got the scanner...just....er...missing the cord. o_O;; Much badness.
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Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 11:34 pm
Mission accomplished. Scanner cable acquired. Deathly afraid of showing the bad artness.....*afraidness* I've almost never been seriously scanner capable. I don't know what to do with myself!!!!
Started the picture from I Won't Tell Anyone.....turning out the way I want it, which may not necessarily be good for anyone...but yes. Can't be any more embarrassing than accidentally flipping through the sketchbook that has naked yuri pics drawn in it. Oops, my bad. >.< Err...
*ahem* anyhoo...yes....scanner capable. Frightened.
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Posted: Sun Dec 07, 2008 9:33 pm
Not to be whiny or impatient or anything but......UPDAAAAATTTEESSSSS.... *cries in horrible pit of despair for lack of AerTi.....*
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Posted: Mon Dec 08, 2008 8:14 pm
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Posted: Tue Dec 09, 2008 12:51 am
For Devin? I don't want to be needy or impatient, I swear, usually I'm not, but Lasting Impressions is so fun and happy and I just can't wait for more!!! I suppose I could do something more useful, like write or scan the pics and upload them, but.....but.... i'll think of doing it after finals or something. My written is tomorrow and work is being stupid.
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Posted: Tue Dec 16, 2008 10:12 am
okay okay, sheesh. lol
Foxy has lasting impressions, poke her for it. Or at least I think she has the rough draft of the start of it... right?
I'll work on it today and hopefully get it up tonight (we have the huge storm and no school) BUT!
If I update it, you HAVE to show us your picture.
Fair?
So I wrote this new little thing called Ten Minute Memoir, which everyone is flocking away from like it's a virus except for moi as I adored the style, but that's not the end of my plea.
The end really comes at the beginning of Ribbons and Gauntlets, and me thinking how much I needed to rewrite chapter one. Which I had full intent on doing except when i started I got lost in sandwiches and bombs and time and a completely different style then the original piece and suddenly,
I have no idea what to do with it.
Do I continue it? Do I throw it away? Do I abandon the new style I'm developing, and focus on my others? Do I combine them someway?
So I'm asking you guys, if you could take a look at the rewrite for Ribbons I have and let me know?
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Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2008 8:42 pm
*contemplates*
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*Contemplates some more*
...mmmph....
*Needs a bit more time to think about this*
ARGH....
Okay, fine. You win. If you do an update for Lasting Impressions, I will post the pic I did for it. I can claim that "I Won't Tell Anyone"s' pic isn't done yet, so I don't have to post that one yet, since it's still in its rough sketches, though, even though that one is turning out better, since Lasting was the first fanart I'd ever done of Tifa and Aeris, so it didn't turn out quite how I wanted it.
Ten Minute Memoir was pretty sad, and you captured the feelings of the characters and the situation really well. I think the style does have promise. Maybe people were turned off by how intense it was because it was so short? Lacking any sort of visual cues, maybe readers were just a bit off because they had to actually use their imaginations to understand what was going on in the story and empathize with it. I honestly didn't have a problem with it, and I believe it's worth looking into to help round out and continue evolving your style.
Also re-read the rewrite of chapter 1 for Ribbons. If that was the rewrite....umm.. I couldn't...really...see a major difference...even though it did flow smoother the second time I read it. Then again, I only read Ribbons once and that was...like...months ago, when I first joined the Shoujo-ai and Yuri Guild. O_O;;;;
Ribbons wasn't one of my more favorite stories, so I could have a pretty heavy bias, so I'm trying to be objective, even though my head aches like there's no tomorrow. I really hope I got Christmas week off at work....
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Posted: Tue Dec 23, 2008 12:11 am
DONE! You owe me two fanart pictures when i get that update, which should be soon. I'm on a wave of updates - Nation of Raisins, Statistics of Love, even Ribbons. Deal with the devil. And I can't wait to see them. Yes, Ten Minute Memoir is sad, and you're right about why people probably flock from it. But I'm happy to hear that the style wasn't so bad. Oh, I was gonna post the re-do of Ribbons here, I don't want to switch it out into the actual document because it's SO different. I'll post it below. ***** There are plenty of things one can do in ten minutes. Make a sandwich. Eat said sandwich. Develop the plot for the current playing sitcom while one eats and makes said sandwich. Not particularity in that order of course, but time can always be spent in trivial and compact devises. And one can always argue the best route and efficiency for constructing such time. Blowing up a building in ten minutes is usually not a well-constructed timetable. Or perhaps it is, I guess people could argue it both ways. Which usually happens, especially in this case. I’m not sure where I’d stand on the whole of whether blowing up a building in ten minutes is a good construct of time or not. I’m pretty sure there are better uses to my time, but at the moment it’s hard to say. It’s hard to do anything really. But I contribute that to the smoke building, and the lungs clogging, and that creeping familiar feeling. That familiar feeling was mostly of heat, and the creepy aspect was probably due to the issue that extreme heat and dying was a familiar feeling to me. Which just goes to say something about my life. Not that I’m implying anything. I was beginning to see trends in my life, symbols if you will. And the more I think about it, the more I also began to think that perhaps I’m not spending my ten minutes blowing up a building, but deconstructing my life in symbols to analyze. Which leads me to believe that I’m a very unstable person. But that’s all in the perspective of the company you share, and at the moment, if we were to get caught, I’m pretty sure that I’d come out the most psychologically capable. Which just means I’d get the wrap for the whole thing. But I’m also pretty sure that it takes some firemen ten minutes to get dressed. And hopefully escaping was planned out in our timetable. Because despite what the court and legal system would pin on my “stable” frame of mind, this wasn’t my idea. Which is pretty obvious given what we were doing. And I wasn’t even going to add the fighting between the giant mechanical scorpion. Which, by and by, wasn’t going so hot. But I’d imagine with common sense that anything involving a giant mechanical insect wouldn’t go so according to plan. Perhaps that’s why we won. I really don’t like to give such credit to the blonde helmet haired butcher and his massive dead weight of a butter knife. But then, I was hanging by my foot over a hundred foot drop into a cesspool for most of the battle, so, what would I know?
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Posted: Tue Dec 23, 2008 10:53 am
Yes, yes. =P Fun stuff. I've already gotten one of them scanned, it turned out darker on my scanner than I'd originally thought, so m' going to try and clean it up on in photoshop first. Which, because I can't remember any of the photoshop techniques I was taught, is going to be a very...interesting endeavor. One of them is on the computer, though, and if I give up, I'll just upload them somewhere and then fix them later. XD The second one still isn't done yet, been busy with Christmassy things and WoW achievements, but will definitely get back to work on that and upload it, too. =P
Okay. I didn't want to feel like I was going out of my mind with Ribbons because I was all...."Err...did anything change?" So, that eases my mind slightly.
The last line made me smile.
Is ten minutes going to be a theme of Ribbons? The rewrite makes it seem like it is, setting everything up in a span of ten minutes and the sheer amount of time she takes talking about ten minutes, but I also see how it relates to the actual events in the story, so readers may not get confused about that.
"The plan was to get in, blow up the building and get out in ten minutes" right? Nothing much more complicated then that. Minus the giant mechano scorpion that almost sent her over railing. Ah, memories.... Anyhoo. Having her addressing the reader in a much more direct way does make me feel closer to her as a reader and perks my interest in what exactly her commentary is on her current situation without her explaining every drawn out detail or even explaining why they're doing what they're doing yet.
The opening puts us in the action in a slight lull, as I read it, I feel like the battle is still unfolding and this is just a pause in it that we've come into. That's really fun and makes me feel closer to this character because she's trying to rationalize just as we're trying to figure things out, too.
All in all, I still like the style and I think it does have potential to work with your style into a more active narrative, showing both the character's inner thoughts as the outside action is still continuing.
It is a bit heavy on the metaphors sometimes as she's thinking, which sort of makes her seem like a ranter. You may want to watch out and make sure the narrative doesn't run away from you and she ends up going off on a tangent, but there was nothing really standing out like that in the opening; just a thought for the future, in case she does get too wordy.
I enjoyed reading the rewrite, and look forward to seeing the future updates.
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Posted: Sun Dec 28, 2008 5:18 am
WAIT BEFORE YOU DO ANYTHING -jumpleech-
I enjoyed reading the rewrite, but I must say that it differs so immensely from the original that I have to say to put it back on the shelf.
The rewrite reflects more of the style you use for Statistics and LI, but Ribbons was written in a much more descriptive style, focusing on details more than thoughts (at least from what I remember; I really should re-read it).
And the rewrite sorta has an anti-Cloud air about it, and I'm pretty sure I know why... -pokes Devin-
The original had a Tifa that was very much infatuated with Cloud, which is why I found it to be very charming. That Tifa, who loves Cloud in the beginning, could fall in love with Aerith later. (She hasn't yet, but, well, they do keep commenting on each other's beauty, and knowing you... xD )
Your rewrite has less details, which might be nice for some, but I think it takes away the things that I loved about Ribbons in the first place. The constant descriptions, explanations and comments from Tifa were very unique, and I would be devastated if that was changed.
-clings to-
(Although if you post this as an Omake or something, I won't mind. :3 )
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