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 Posted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 10:00 pm
Posted your critique in my thread. I'd read the concept the other day and re-read the changes since then. Revised what I'd thought before and posted the more recent stuff.
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Posted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 3:31 pm
Thank you for critiquing me.
[EDIT]: I removed the poll since it was not helping me.
[EDIT 2]: I updated the banners in a new style. I think it looks better. Even though the big banner's dimensions were larger, they weren't even 20 KB more in size. And since I decreased the amount of banners I used, I think that it will load easier.
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Posted: Wed Apr 25, 2007 3:21 pm
<[Update]>
I have added information on the Organization. Who are they? What are they? Why is it such a bland name? All will be answered in the ex-reserved post. But be warned - it is typed in white because it explains a secret about Toronal's Death: it happened to a lot of creatures.
Oops, I said that out loud. Oh well.
It is up, and it has the basic information, as well as a few more interesting facts. Note that I made the Organization up when I wrote the death of Toronal, but have refrained from displaying it in fear that it would leave no mystery to the quest. I compromised by typing it in white.
[EDIT]: Silly me, everyone who sees it will highlight it, so I removed the white to save your eyes.
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Posted: Fri Apr 27, 2007 6:37 pm
<[ Minor Update ]>
Nothing too big, I just fixed grammatical things here and there, added more information in Shedin, a little more history in the brief history of Richard, and a few others. Nothing too big, but I am really happy with where the quest is today.
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Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 8:15 pm
I am now re-writing the death sequence. Same events, but there were too many errors in the original edition.
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Posted: Sun Apr 29, 2007 11:40 am
<[ Update ]>
I have now added the re-written death (which is more detailed and higher quality, methinks) and added four illustrations. I plan to do more.
[EDIT] I have completed all of the illustrations. Critique away!
[EDIT 2] I have cited some resources and quoted them in the Lammasu section.
[EDIT 3] I initiated the three creature aspects in a lesser form for Shedin. A.K.A., I stated his slightly abnormal strength, speed, and intelligence.
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 5:42 pm
<[ Update ]>
I have posted more background for Richard and re-calculated his age. I made him too young. ^^;
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 6:35 pm
Wow! It's a lot better! I really like the death sequence now and the organization bit helps explain some things heart
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 8:51 pm
Thanks, Penden! 3nodding
[EDIT] I have changed the order of the posts so that it makes more sense. 3nodding
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 7:09 pm
<[ Update ]>
I have added a list of likes/dislikes for Shedin, as well as mini-profiles of Aunt Christine and Uncle Mike.
I am now ready for people to suggest specific areas for me to work in, because I am unsure of where to go from here. Please, please help me!
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