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A City Of Fools Vice Captain
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 Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2010 8:51 am
First of all, the volume for the spores needs to be way smaller. This leaves for very little chance to fight back without fuuton jutsu. Second of all, restrict the amount of endurance lost by much more. Say... 5 for every post they linger in it.
The volume applies to every spore attack except the countess, but that wont blind anyone it will just be such a thick smoke screen that you cant see. Also this can only be used before a battle has really initiated, meaning that you cant attack back if someone attacks you, you have to immeditely summon this before it becomes a real fight.
As for the prince, the loss of motor functions is pretty much an instant kill, so no to that. Think of something else.
The dutchess seems fine. Oh, but for that second genjutsu it cant affect touch.
As for the marquess, she seems fine except for the reversal stream, take that out. If its not of their element then they cant use it.
The barons abilities will not be allowed. Increasing it by that size is quite a bit to much. :/
Also, dont forget to give each summon a proper rank in which you can summon them.
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2010 9:38 am
M o u r n ii n g W o o d First of all, the volume for the spores needs to be way smaller. This leaves for very little chance to fight back without fuuton jutsu. Second of all, restrict the amount of endurance lost by much more. Say... 5 for every post they linger in it. The volume applies to every spore attack except the countess, but that wont blind anyone it will just be such a thick smoke screen that you cant see. Also this can only be used before a battle has really initiated, meaning that you cant attack back if someone attacks you, you have to immeditely summon this before it becomes a real fight. As for the prince, the loss of motor functions is pretty much an instant kill, so no to that. Think of something else. The dutchess seems fine. Oh, but for that second genjutsu it cant affect touch. As for the marquess, she seems fine except for the reversal stream, take that out. If its not of their element then they cant use it. The barons abilities will not be allowed. Increasing it by that size is quite a bit to much. :/ Also, dont forget to give each summon a proper rank in which you can summon them. 1. I reduced the damage the poison does by one rank. Considering he's the S-class summon I figured it would be okay for him to still have at least that much. 2. I reduced some of the volume but they are rather large butterflies. I don't see why it has to be at the start of a fight but It's not totally impossible to escape it. I will edit it to say that it reaches full volume two posts after the technique has been activated if that's fine with you. 3. I figured that you would say that, so My back up plan was a reversal of motor functions. Still something you can work around but is still worthy of an A-rank. 4. I edited it to no longer affect touch but still affect taste. If you'd rather it to affect both I can fix it. 5. I changed it to a mineral stream. making it a Doton technique. Marquess is a masculine title by the way. Marchioness is the female version. 6. I meant to erase the 1's before the 5 but it must have slipped my mind. I also lowered the height a bit. 7. I gave each of them their rank. If there are any further problems let me know and I will fix them when I return from work. 8. IMPORTANT NOTE: Only the summoner has been stated to be immune to it's effects, not his allies.
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A City Of Fools Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2010 9:44 am
First summon is fine.
Reversed motor function is fine.
Dutchess is fine.
Marquess is fine
And sorry, most titles ending with ess are usually feminine.
Well no combat use for the countess because its an escape vehicle. Its kinda like saying "Ok so I'm fighting this guy forever and when it seems like hes gonna win I'm just gonna poof myself away while he's struggling to even see." You know? Its just kinda cheap.
The baron is fine.
So overall its accepted, and I don't really care about the reason. It was an overall welldone summon, and thats good enough for me.
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2010 2:18 pm
My Info
Username: PsychoCrow
Rpc Name: Rei Hyuga
Rank: Jounin
Element(s): Lightning, Water
Clan: Hyuga
Bloodline: Byakugan
Summoning: Based on Kirigakure's "The Infinite One Sword Style (Mugen Ittōryū)"'s Tobidōgu (Flying Tools), just using special sword types that can be controlled
Demon: N/a
Requesting
Summons Name: Kagirinai: Graveyard of Blades
Type of Summons: Weapon
Special abilities: Magnetism, Lightning
Description: While training with the Mugen Ittoryu style, Rei Hyuga had a special blacksmith he knew create 100 long blades that looked similar to the Lightning Blade of the Mist, just longer. Once they were all made, Rei infused them all with his own special lightning chakra, using his better control over chakra as a hyuga clan member. Each has been infused with a special seal that works with a specific scroll carried around by Rei and only Rei. He throws the scroll into the air and the weapons are summoned forth, raining down across the battle field. Ten blades (which become unusable) slam into the ground with great force in a good position around the battle field. Their electric filled chakra connect around in a circle, and erect a barrier dome around everyone within the circle. The barrier is electrified, meaning anyone including the user who touches it gets high voltage shock, no escape until the summoning disappears (which it does after 3 turns from the user, 3 turns then on the forth turn) or it is dismissed. The remaining 90 blades are infused with Rei's special chakra, meaning anyone besides Rei who touches them gets a powerful shock. As well as they are all magnetized by the chakra and react to his touch, allowing him to control it as he controls his own chakra (-1 chakra point per blade controlled, per turn). This makes the summon the best summoning technique for his ultimate sword style.
Picture(optional): All 100 swords look exactly like a longer version (by about four inches) of this: [x]
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A City Of Fools Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 1:23 pm
@Crow: Accepted, but you know thats gonna be 100 chakra per turn, right? Lol.
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 1:50 pm
I said he can control. That doesn't mean he will. He can use them at will on and off, and it only is subtracted if he decides too. Like if I want a blade from twenty meters away to come to me, I control it and drag it over too me. That'd be -1. But say I wanted too use 10 swords at once, yet I only have 2 arms. Well then I hold two swords and magnetically control the 8 other blades with my chakra. That'd be -8 points for controlling that many on that turn alone.
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A City Of Fools Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 1:53 pm
Hmmm.... Well then I think it should take off a minimum because you have to keep them infused with your chakra, and the barrier will cost chakra. A ranked chakra for the barrier each turn, and then -2 chakra for each sword controlled magically at once.
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 3:32 pm
The chakra is already sealed inside of the blades so its pretty much just chakra control. It was sealed inside when they were made, as said in the description. And once the summon ends the chakra starts to return to them, which wasn't stated. All in all think of them all as living swords with their own chakra set.
As for the barrier, that uses up all of the chakra in those ten blades making them unable to anything else besides hold it up, not even being able to be used or controlled. Thats why it needs all ten.
Though I did forget to say that the summoning automatically ends in 3 turns.
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A City Of Fools Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 3:46 pm
Well write down that it auto ends in 3 turns then has a 2 post cool down so you don't spam it. Otherwise its accepted.
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 4:04 pm
I realized... It did say it ended in three turns. I forgot Quote: no escape until the summoning disappears (which it does after 3 turns from the user, 3 turns then on the forth turn And no It cant for it takes a full day for the chakra to return, rest is needed which is why it's like living being. So all in all, it can't be used more then once every day. And as his ultimate technique, why won't use it constantly. He does still have the original none special blade version *nods* Not to mention he will most likely use his seven blade of the mist before he uses this, this being much stronger then the single blade. Though when used in combination...
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A City Of Fools Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 4:15 pm
Sorry, I missed that part. Accepted.
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 4:18 pm
Its ok man *waves hand* Thank you. Now my character is complete... Well once I post my techniques.
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A City Of Fools Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Oct 05, 2010 2:45 pm
Quote: My Info
Username: Morning Wood
Rpc Name: Vercingetorix “Orca” Saishuu
Rank: MizuKage
Element(s): Water, Sound
Clan: Saishuu Clan
Bloodline: None
Summoning: Water Beast
Demon: None
Requesting
Summons Name: Liam
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Chunnin
Special abilities: The ability to ride water currents in the air, allowing it to look like it's flying when it's really riding water particles
It can also sense genjutsu and dispel it if it’s the same rank or below.
Description: It summons a rather long crossed water beast that are a cross between a frog, a shark, and a water dragon. It can ride water currents and the water particles in the air to help the user to fly if they ride on them
Picture(optional): [x]
Reason: Quote:
Summons Name: Bones
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Chuunin
Special abilities: This Dragon may be summoned in softened up earth or mud, and then can travel under and on the land, pretty much eating the dirt. The more dirt it eats, the large it's stomach becomes. Once it gets full enough (Eats dirt for one whole post) It can blast a geyser of sticky mud at the foe that can cause temporary immobilization
It can also sense genjutsu and dispel it if it’s the same rank or below.
Description: After softening up the ground with a water type jutsu, the user can summon a ground shark from the mud. The user can also summon them from a source of water, but as long as it's submerged in water or mud then it'll be fine.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Gyarados
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: S
Special abilities: It can shoot extremely large and powerful Geysers of water from it's mouth, as well as it can ride water currents and fly. Incredible strength as well.
Description: Must be near a lake or something to summon. A large Geyser of water bursts from the surface and from that, out forms an extremely large Dragon of water. It's terrifyingly huge, and can swallow someone in one gulp.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Skips
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Jounin
Special abilities: This summon creates a freezing cold aura around it which makes it harder for the opponent to fight back unless they are used to cold weather. He also has immense strength.
Description: The ice pact of the water beast summon also requires a lake for the summon. A large splash bursts from the water and then freezes over, a form taking shape inside. It then breaks free of the ice, trying to attack the foe(s).
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: The Shark Sage
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: S
Special abilities: The shark sage is the only summon that can be summoned at the same time as another summon. He is a sage that was born under the ocean with a human body but inhuman features. The sharks raised him and he learned their ways and taught them things they couldn’t think of themselves. Because he can convey knowledge to the sharks like no one else can, he can convey orders and such. This ability grants every summon the same stats as the summoner unless the stat is higher, as well as allowing them to use his knowledge to use his jutsu’s. Unfortunately this makes every summon an S ranked summon.
It can also sense genjutsu and dispel it if it’s the same rank or below.
Description: The user performs a simple handsign and the shark sage emerges from any of the other shark summons mouths.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Gengen
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Jounin
Special abilities: With its immensely great eye sight, smell, and hearing, it can sense out genjutsu and with the star on it's head, once it glows onto the summoner, the summoner is released from any genjutsu that's been afflicted on him, as long as it's the same rank or lower.
Description:The user summons the shark in the water, it looking like a normal summon but staying underwater until sensing a Genjutsu. Once the genjutsu is released by means of the shark, the summon disappears.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Elder Blastoise
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Kage
Special abilities: The turtle can retract into its shell and release a devastating spinning attack, as well as unleash hydro cannons.
In a war it can serve as an immense fortress against attack as well as acting as a mobile fortress for invasions. It can hold up to a town of people with its immense size, but there are many openings to get inside, unless it sucks in its head and limbs.
Description: The user summons the great water turtle to the land, and every step it takes turns the ground to much (like mud) making anything around where it steps hard to walk on.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Cobradile
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Jounin
Special abilities: This cobra/crocadile cross crawls onto land from the water and has a very very powerful grip for teeth. It also can spew acidic water from it's maw.
Description: It crawls to land from the water where it's summoned
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Aquas Arc Blade
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Chunnin
Special abilities: It has as high a speed as the person who summoned it, and has razor sharp arm scythes
Description: The user summons the blades monster from the water, a small sphere of water coming from the top of water and slicing out of it.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Jet Shark
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Chunnin
Special abilities: It has a hyper chakra aura that allows it to burst around like a fast jet to bite the opponent
It can also sense genjutsu and dispel it if it’s the same rank or below.
Description: The user presses their hand into a water source and out blasts a hyper shark that bursts like a jet at the foe, being 1.5 times as fast as the user who summoned it.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote:
Requesting
Summons Name: Moby d**k
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Kage
Special abilities: Once summons it can release a high pressured water cannon from it's mouth that it spurts into the air. With it's high chakra, it molds a dome of water around the user of this summon and the foe, with the water created from the cannon. This helps in creating many more summons.
It can also act as a transport by floating through the air with the summoner and possibly 2 or 3 others within it.
Description:
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Frozen Colossus
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Kage
Special abilities: Everything it touches and every step it takes makes the ground freeze. It can survive both under water and on land. He is cold blooded and so much so that he has a protective layer of ice over his skin. When he roars bits of the ice in his mouth break off and shoot out like blades. This summon cannot be put back away unless it is resealed by a sealing master. This summon is over 25 feet tall and 50 feet long.
Description: The ice becomes chilled once this summon starts and from the air, a great beast made of ice is created to roam around freely.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Vicious Temptress
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Jounin
Special abilities: It has the power of human speech and can speak in any language. It can walk upon land with two feet. It has a charm ability, allowing to capture the hearts of men and lesbians. It can be very useful in misguiding opponents away from one's self... Or used for "personal" needs. She does love to please her summoner. The Charm ability disappears when the summons ends, and if a person has been charmed once then they cannot be charmed again. The charm ability can only last three posts at max at S rank and will not work if the opponent is a genjutsu specialist.
It can also sense genjutsu and dispel it if it’s the same rank or below.
Description: The summoner pushes their hand to the water and from the surface a small bump on the water forms and rises. Once risen to the top a beautiful temptress comes and immediately cast's her Charm spell on all Men and lesbians in the area.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Acid Dragon
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Jounin
Special abilities: It can form out of the water and fly around in the air. It's skin is harmful to touch... Causing acidic like burns if done so, including to the user. So it's best if no one touches it... Accept the enemy.
Description: In a spiral of water out forms the dragon of acid that burns to touch and is scarce to look at.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Silent Serenade
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Chunin
Special abilities: She can sing and play the harp sending out siren like screams to distract the enemy and possibly destroy their hearing. She also controls a vicious ability called Aqua Comet. This comet is composed of highly condensed water that is so pressurized that on impact it will implode, causing everything around it to fly towards the source instead of away from it. Multiple comets can be used at once, but it also affects the user. This summon can’t use any abilities unless it’s completely still.
Description: A beautiful mermaid rises from the sea her harp made from the water itself, she looking shimmering in the light of the sky who plays a deadly sound to those who oppose her.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Frost Lobo
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: jounin
Special abilities: It has super speed and the ground it walks on is turned to ice
Description: using it’s super speed it forms from the air of the ice having keen animal instinct, it may attack and cost frost burns to those who try to touch attack it.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Shark Man
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Jounin
Special abilities: It can walk and knows a small amount of language... It knows it, it's just not all that smart with it. It also is immensely strong. Its strength is equivalent to a character with 300 base strength. [However if the summoner has 300 strength or more then this summons strength will always be 100 more than the summoners] However its speed is always 50 stat points lower than the summoners.
Description: Like a missile it bursts from the water, landing on the ground with great force enough to crack earth. It's body is massively ripped and it looks rather menacing.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Selkie
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Chunin
Special abilities: Besides the fact that it has arms, can speak some but not greatly, and can swim, it doesn't have many powers. Though, useful for drowning someone and helping to not drown.
It can also sense genjutsu and dispel it if it’s the same rank or below.
Description: A shark lurks deep in the water, a form taking it's place and seeming to be somewhat human.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Shark
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Genin
Special abilities: None...
Description: It has razor sharp teeth and can chew you inside and out before you can even rise to the surface.
It can also sense genjutsu and dispel it if it’s the same rank or below.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Leviathan Dragon
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Kage
Special abilities: It can create torrent of water to surge around it and use the power of an entire lake against someone, by pretty much picking it up and sending it flying at something (though in a geyser form)
Description: The water seems to split apart itself as the sea seems to open, and out forms a giant sea serpent to feast upon those who oppose it's summoner. It does though have a rather nasty temper.
Picture(optional): [x] Quote: Requesting
Summons Name: Great Claw Knight
Type of Summons: Water Beast
Rank: Jounin
Special abilities: It can hover over water surfaces as well as swim, and control water with it's lance. Can say basic words but is a rather quiet guy. It also has an extending lance, as long as it fills with water before hand. It also has an extremely powerful claw to keep the opponent still in the vice-like grip, or even crush them to death with it. His claw and lance are made of superheated water, while the rest of his body seems to have a metal like texture; however it is only his shell.
Description: From the water rises a menacing figure that has a grip as powerful as a sharks bite, and a lance that can reach you a mile away. The water will surge around it as it controls it with ease
Picture(optional): [x]
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Posted: Tue Oct 05, 2010 3:22 pm
wow, ok, this is actually a good idea. i might make something like this..... i may approve it, but you gotta realize why i'm a little wary. maybe you should be required to be summon specialist. if not, you better come up with a damn good reason why i should let you have 20 something summons.....
ok, first of all, if i do approve this, all of them need to be near water. and i'm not talking about a small lake. i mean like a river water. you can make it manually using a jutsu or something, but it has to be enough water to hold a couple of these beasts.
second, the ability to cancel out genjutsus is not happening. i might allow it in Gengen, but really, there is no reason why any other should have the ability to basically negate any genjutsus used against them/you.
Shark Man can't have 300 strength. 200, maybe 250. but 300? Frost Lobo needs to be jounin. Jet shark can't have twice the agility as the user. maybe 1.5 or something. fix those things and i'll take a look at it again
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A City Of Fools Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Oct 05, 2010 5:05 pm
@Nerd: Well, there are no rules at all about the amount of summons. The only perks summon specialist gets is sage mode. You can have as many summons as you want no matter what class.
Yes, every one jounin or above needs a water source, but the others aren't strong enough to need much water.
Actually that ability is scientific. Sharks have supersensitivity. It allows them to smell things all around them but whats really extraordinary is that they have these pores that allow them to trace even the tiniest of electrons, meaning that they can sense anything within a mile of them [and thats the smaller sharks] that has electrons meaning humans, animals, electronic devices, raiton jutsu, etc. Which pretty much makes genjutsu useless. I can use this science to prove why the genjutsu's are inneffective against my summons in the middle of a fight, but I figured it would be easiuer to just have it as an ability to stop confusion. O:
Oh and the shark sage has been raised by the shark and has grown the nodes to allow the supersensitivity.
Well his only ability is pure power so I think 300 would be good. They would have to move pretty slow to be hit by him even with his wide reach. If I change it to 200 or 250 can he still have the thing where if they have the base equal to his its always exactly 100 more than their strength?
I'll change the frost lobo [Even though he's not very powerful..] and I'll change the jet shark one to 1.5
O:
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