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Posted: Sun Jun 13, 2010 6:45 pm
Gazma You shouldn't put yourself down so harshly... sweatdrop Poetry is as unique as the writers who create it. Each poem speaks to a different group. You have to believe in what you are writing, or you will never be able to create a piece that can speak to people. Have faith in your work and keep at it. No one is a lost cause. We all have something we wish to express whether we know it or not. mrgreen You know, you may well have nailed the very essence of poetry. And the real meaning of any self expression for that matter . . . .
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Posted: Sun Jun 13, 2010 10:08 pm
Why, thank you. mrgreen Every now and then I'll get these very insightful epiphanies that just ooze out of me. It's nice to have people say, "Wow, that was cool." or something similar to what you said. Thank you.
Yui you put whatever you want. Size is not an issue here. This is the mixing pot (mixing pot? melding pot? can't remember...) of poetry, so go ahead and put any of your work here that you want.
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:00 am
I believe you're thinking of a melting pot? And I know what you mean- every once in a while I get those. More often than not people just kinda stare at me with that almost-slack-jawed "what the heck?" kind of way and pretend it didn't happen because it totally flew over their heads. And I'm glad I can post more! It's really great to put your stuff out there for everyone to see- you get all kinds of perspectives. I'll put something in the next post!
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:18 am
forgive_what_ive_done You are here The wind calls your name. It is, to the wind, all the same. It drags over my skin so nothing I can see nor hear, I only know that you, my love, are near.
Door to door, I can speak no more. Room to room, All I find is a lonley broom. Wind drags over my skin so nothing I can see nor hear, All I know is that you, my love, are near.
I hear your lonley voice over all the noise. I feel you next to me. I am full of glee. Wind drags over my skin so all I can see and hear. I now know that you, my love, are near.
((I wrote this in 2000 lol. It isn't very good, however.)) Pre~tty~!
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:26 am
Wrote this a few years ago on a vacation with my family. Interpret it as you will- I wrote it vague on purpose. I like the idea, but some of it's a little awkward. What do you all think? Quote: Yui of Morgance wrote:fragments of reflections dance in your eyes; fleeting glimmers of times long since gone by you embrace them, you chase them through vaults of faulty memories what for that they'd come back, visit you once more Bits and pieces; The shattered remains: All you have left not Fast vanishing, Nor lost in disarray one watery mirror reflecting you back: two skies of midnight powdered with stars above or below you can differentiate no more between the two twin moons each one pockmarked with unrepentant scars a pillar of oak in a sea of birch and all their boughs whispering In winter’s cruel breath; to light your way There is naught but dark a bloom of rose a blossom of lily a stalk of lavender are those plucked from flowering fields of wavering eternity the unending grass waves beneath a dome of sky and a sphere of sun a living, waving sing-song sussurating on the air You are weeping with willows and laughing with larks: walk with your hand in nature's as you trod to the ends of the world and but a yard beyond the cement and the rain and the rush of the cars all around you suburbia but it's not so far when you capture that image when you chase down that thought of a million places a thousand faces and the days long gone by look to your palm count the lines that map it and splinters of yesterday hand in hand with your dreams will spin their circles of whirling wreaths inked in your irises encased there evermore are fragments of reflections refracting away as you while away day after day after day after day This one's from this year. Quote: Yui of Morgance also wrote:Look Back The first step Forward The last step Back And every leap Of faith taken Blindly; without question Will you find the Land ahead Or fall unto Abyss? The first new Friend The last old Nemesis dead: They wear the same face They share the same space They are forever not together, Intertwined in your thoughts, your heart Your mind The first lie Forgotten The last defense Fallen And all your secrets stripped Bare to shiver in the Cold wind of Distrust The first promise Made The last farewell Bade To a man you thought to Hold to love and Know- Not any longer The first oath Broken Your last hope Stolen And no chance To see the world As pure again Like glass shattered On the floor Like so much cold Let in the door Like the breath of love Departed And broken hearts that once united Lying forlorn in the sand Like all the waves that Crash down on us As we wait for dawn To find us Running reckless in the Icy salt-laced spray The first move Forward The last glance Back At a past Left scattered in the ruins; There can be No turning back
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:35 am
I really do suck!! Aggh knew it , just like my singing i crash and burn sad . Once again crash an burn!! agg maybe i should stick to songs , but those suck to.I'm confused now! crying
ROAR!!
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:48 am
Gazma You shouldn't put yourself down so harshly... sweatdrop Poetry is as unique as the writers who create it. Each poem speaks to a different group. You have to believe in what you are writing, or you will never be able to create a piece that can speak to people. Have faith in your work and keep at it. No one is a lost cause. We all have something we wish to express whether we know it or not. mrgreen Sorry to quote the same thing so many times, but I could never have said it so well. Keep trying- sometimes it takes a while to find the right combination of what you need to say and the right way of saying it, but as long as you keep trying and believe in your message, you will find a voice; be it art, music, poetry, or something totally different, there is a voice for everyone.
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:49 am
The only thing im really good at is reading books . There isn't anything else.
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:50 am
Also- don't trust your opinion of yourself too completely. We're our own worst judges, and we're all bound to see the worst in whatever we do. Show your work to a friend you can trust to be honest and ask them how you can make yourself better- you might already be doing a great job without knowing it!
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:51 am
Do you have any poems posted here? I haven't looked through the whole forum- I just found it last night.
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 11:05 am
Riku calls me star "Listen, real poetry doesn't say anything; it just ticks off the possibilities. Opens all doors. You can walk through any one that suits you." ~Jim Morrison You are one so lonelyyou are one i am one they are another this hall way is full of the unselfish sways of the mysterious way of things to take a form you can not tell can not foretell can not quell i wish not to determine for no nonsense is my flaw i could leave in awe at the birthing of a flower at the birthing of the hour at the time i leave i leave all sense of regret i will walk this way but i speak not to the doors surrounding me each door minding me as i leave my footprints on the concrete my foot prints in the concrete so goes my walk on the way to anywhere the doors the minds of all uncaring to feel lonely in a crowd is no rare thing This is gorgeous!
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 11:10 am
Just read "Simply Said" by Rouje00. It was amazing, and I could really relate to it, on so many levels. If anyone hasn't read it, it's on page two, so go check it out. A-mazing.
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 6:48 pm
Don't know where this came from...Just wrote it tonight. It kinda came out jumbled, so if it sounds that way, that's why.Gazma Don't Forget MeDon't forget me! A whisper A thought A murmur A plight The last words that echoed Through that cold, lonely night Don't forget me! A dream? It's reality A scream It's purgatory The forever turning cog Of this turmoil factory Don't forget me! That was it Her last words Her last sentence Her last thought Before she vanished Don't forget me! This is it This is my mark My existence lonely My heart clouded dark I'll leave you with this My last will and testament Forget not my face Forget not my eyes I've finished my race And I've won my prize
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 9:07 pm
I think this is the best thing I've read of yours so far, Gazma. Honestly, looking back, all of my best pieces, I didn't think when I wrote them. I still don't know where they all came from or what they were written from. I know what they mean and what they feel, and so do the people who read them, and I don't think anything else matters.
Poetry doesn't make sense. It makes feelings. That's what I believe! ^_^
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Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 9:14 pm
Hm...I see your point. Although some of my pieces that actually had some thought put into them turned out better than others that were apparently random. Flood Gates of the Mind for example. I've had some good reviews concerning that poem, but maybe it's because of the imagery more so than what the poem is conveying...I don't know. I guess I'm just relieved at least one person likes my latest spontaneous poem. mrgreen
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