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 Posted: Tue Mar 29, 2005 4:58 pm
Rednal *Hugs Shouri in a friendly way* whee I'll take that 'meow' as a good sign.
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Posted: Tue Mar 29, 2005 5:01 pm
biggrin *Is cheered up* Yay!! *Bounces around*
Mouse: Squeek!!
*Pauses* Uh-oh...
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Posted: Wed Mar 30, 2005 12:48 pm
Rednal biggrin *Is cheered up* Yay!! *Bounces around* Mouse: Squeek!! *Pauses* Uh-oh...
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Posted: Thu Mar 31, 2005 4:05 pm
Mouse: Squeek squeek!
*Looks down and sees a moue standing right in front of him*
sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Mar 31, 2005 6:10 pm
I read your first page....not enough attention span to read other pages in this thread but I would love to see your final productwhen it's perfected to your liking....and I like the idea of adding more catgirls but leave your human characters and add more humans along with it....read the manga NAGIMI(it's made by Ken Akamatsu)(he's the guy who made Love Hina what it is)....us this and I"m sure you will be able to think of some wonderful plots and better detail of what's going on in the story...but don't get me wrong you did a great job you just need to not be so descriptive of every item or place but more descriptive of how that place feels, what mood it gives off, WHAT TIME OF DAY IT IS...I get easily lost in your transitions between scenes, but keep up your character development it's fine the way it is ^_^
all and all it feels like a great story that I would take the time to read whenever I got the chance 3nodding
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Posted: Fri Apr 01, 2005 1:54 pm
Rednal Mouse: Squeek squeek! *Looks down and sees a moue standing right in front of him* sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Apr 01, 2005 2:20 pm
The duck flies high, yet the pie flies higher...
-This has been a random moment with yours truly..obey teh pie...
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Posted: Fri Apr 01, 2005 5:28 pm
SexyNinja I read your first page....not enough attention span to read other pages in this thread but I would love to see your final productwhen it's perfected to your liking....and I like the idea of adding more catgirls but leave your human characters and add more humans along with it....read the manga NAGIMI(it's made by Ken Akamatsu)(he's the guy who made Love Hina what it is)....us this and I"m sure you will be able to think of some wonderful plots and better detail of what's going on in the story...but don't get me wrong you did a great job you just need to not be so descriptive of every item or place but more descriptive of how that place feels, what mood it gives off, WHAT TIME OF DAY IT IS...I get easily lost in your transitions between scenes, but keep up your character development it's fine the way it is ^_^ all and all it feels like a great story that I would take the time to read whenever I got the chance 3nodding It's Negima!, actually... sweatdrop Yes, I've read3 Volumes. *Is an Eva-chan fanboy* This is just my style of writing for this particular story. I help out on others, and even write more of my own. See the Second Post for links. xd xd xd
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Posted: Fri Apr 01, 2005 6:03 pm
*plays with the mouse before throwing it at Rednal-kun.*
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 2:38 pm
*Catches the mouse* >.< Hmm... What should I do with this? twisted
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 2:40 pm
Wow... I haven't read any of this since your 4th chapter....
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 2:42 pm
Rednal *Catches the mouse* >.< Hmm... What should I do with this? twisted
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 2:42 pm
Yeah, but then you threw it. blaugh
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 2:45 pm
Rednal Yeah, but then you threw it. blaugh
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 2:48 pm
Lady Shouri Rednal Yeah, but then you threw it. blaugh *Glomps her* Do you want me to make you a sandwich or not?
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