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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 6:42 am
Aubry walks around in her little town. she enjoys walking. she started to wander off, past the town's boundaries. she saw an angel ask a towns person something, and then he walked off, but she didn't pay any mind to it...
((how is that?)))
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 9:17 am
Iori sat down at the bar.
He looked at the bartender not really wanting to talk to him.
He picked up the glass of water with is left hand not wanting to show his right due to it was still covered in dried blood even though it was no longer dripping off his hand
"Yagami..........."he paused after he stated his last name."Sake........do you have any" he asks the bartender"
Iori told the man that he hadn't eaten or drinkin' anything for a few days as he chugged the water in one shot.
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 9:32 am
Finn thought nothing odd of the left-handed Yagami. He got a sake and handed it to him. "Sorry, I don't have much to eat here, but I might have stuff for sandwiches. Name's Drake." He looked over to the booth where the black-haired man was sitting. "Well, If you'll excuse, I'll make you a sandwich in a second, I've got to get his order first." With that he walked over to the booth. Suddenly there was the distant sounds of sirens. Not too much to worry about in a town like this, but Finn hoped it wasn't Scarlet. "What'll you have Stranger?"
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 9:47 am
Iori slowly drank the sake givin to him and sat quietly.
"You may wanna check up on your friend...... shes in trouble......"
(( gotta go to work see you later))
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 11:48 am
"I don't think so. I doubt anybody realizes how well Scarlet can defend herself. I don't even know how she does it to be honest. Usually when things like that happen, she comes in all cut up. Apparently there's a gang out to get her. I don't know if it's something she did, or if it's just about sex, but people are out to get that girl. Anyways, poor thing must be traumatized. Her men always get the worst of it, but she comes running in here. Sometimes I even have to fight off the guys that follow her in." Finn stopped, he didn't realize how much he had just said. He wasn't too worried though It didn't sound like it was coming from Scarlet's place. Quite the opposite way actually.
"You guys really don't quit do you?" Scarlet said as she ran out of the alley. She kept to the shadows, not wanting to be seen. A bit of blood trickled from her cheek where he had hit her, but she wasn't worried, it'd heal. Her wounds always healed seamlessly. She wanted to get back to Finn's. Maybe he'd play target with her.
((later man, have fun at work))
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 11:56 am
"Hm?" Mark looked over as though just noticing the two. "Oh. My name M- is Mark." He stumbled for a moment over one grammatical error - he had never spoken the language out loud before - but almost before he had made the mistake, he was correcting it. "I'm in trouble. No idea where I am." This was true, although he doubted the entire truth would dawn upon them until he could get talking to them and actually reveal where he'd come from. Then again, they were in the city; nobody could've missed the comet, it hit close enough to the city to be noticed. He presumed local news would already be running stories about it, but he would prefer not to be hunted down just yet. Humans had a nasty way of fearing the unfamiliar...
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 12:01 pm
Ohjiro heard the sound of Sirens and his ears perked up. A Sirens song was one of the greatest things you could here as a Human. Only problem was the song would entrance whoever heard it. He sat there listening to it happily with a blank look on his face. His Human side was being drawn to the sound but his Angel blood was starting to boil. It was like one half was pleased to hear the sound and the other half was upset by the sound of it. It didn't show on his face, his eyes were sort of glassy like someone that was put into a trance.
Ohjiro came to his senses about the time the Bartender walked up to him. He had failed to here anything they had said so he figured he should just order something. Holding up his right hand while looking down at the hand carved wooden table he spoke in a rather lazy way. I'll have a coffee if you have any, no cream or sugar just black. He felt slightly groggy at this point, he didn't realize that anyone else in the bar wasn't completely Human. He didn't really give off any abnormal reactions either. His reaction to the Sirens song was normal and his appearance was rather ordinary.
While waiting for his coffee he spun around in his chair to look at the paintings on the wall. There was this one painting on the wall of an Orange, an old fashioned water jug and a potato with a grassy background. A cloudy sky with a rather blurry Eagle and a some brown paint beneath the grass. This was not only random but poorly made. He thought to himself as he stood there with a rather lazy look on his face. Some artist must have been trying to mix it up or something like that. Amateur!, "he said out loud as he looked at the painting".
Ohjiro turned around in his chair tapping his right hand on the table before sitting there quietly to await his coffee. He was pretty sure that someone was looking at him at this point so he didn't bother looking behind him. Instead he just sat there with a sort of shy half smile on his face.
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 1:30 pm
"Coffee it is. Strange, normally people are drunk before I need to pull out the coffee." Finn walked back to the bar to prepare the hot drink. As Finn heard Mark chattering away, he poured him a cup too. "You're in a bar, I'm surprised you didn't say 'my name mark' and then belch. Don't worry too much about where you are. You're safe." He looked up as Scarlet burst through the door. "Scarlet, are you okay? Did they go after you again? One of Finn's hands went to his pocket while the other calmly continued to serve drinks.
Scarlet listened to the sirens, not knowing what to think. Had they already heard what had happened? Not a matter, They didn't follow her here, she was safe again at Finn's. "One of them grabbed Roderick. I don't think he made it. That wonderful man told me to run and save myself, so I did. Oh Drake, it was terrible."
((Nice enthusiasm, and as always Nice description man. But um... Police sirens. This kind -> wahmbulance <- Okay, I've got to go to work now. See you guys later!))
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 2:58 pm
((I'm waiting for Pen to post.))
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 3:20 pm
((In response to hippi.))
Kin contemplated for a moment about the winged man's question, racking his head for any familiarity of the name 'Ryn', but inevitably couldn't find a trace of it, "Er... I don't seem to know him. Who is he?" He asked with sheer curiosity, ne eye wider than the other as he focused it on the being.
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 4:07 pm
Sakeri's eyes widened in shock. His words struck her. Something wasn't right.
"Brutality, Angel?" she inquired her words cold to an icy whisper. Then suddenly, it seemed as though her attitude changed, and she popped up next to Kin, knocking playfully on his head. "Come one, Kin! Don't be blind," she chirped. "What purifier would call our acts brutal? No, one wolf says to the other, 'My... You were pretty brutal to your moose there, Buddy.' If anything..." she paused, licking her chops. "He's a moose himself."
But, instead of attacking, she popped right off Kin and headed toward the mine, the disturbance, from earlier, had completely flown her mind. She skipped down the path, Amati trotting patiently behind her.
"Why didn't you kill him, Sake?" he questioned in a low voice. Sakeri whistled for a bit, skipping down the road before coming to a halt. The wind whistling through the trees, scattering the fallen leaves. She stood there for a moment, unmoving... before she answered.
"I was only playing, you know... That angel really was a wolf, and wolves only kill if they want something out of it," she replied quietly. "There's nothing I want from him, Amati." The air around her shifted once more, and she spun around with a large smile adorning her face.
"Kin!" she cried, happily. "It's time to serve an order."
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 4:51 pm
[[It's fine. Just don't forget to post.]]
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 5:06 pm
((Awws. I was hoping to form a bad guy/purifier team that would have an adventure of their own, and meet with the good guys/deffenders and humans and commence in war. That wuld be cool.))
"Huh?" Kin looked up ahead of him and found Sakeri all the way deep into the mines, and scurried his way to his companions, "Hey, wait up!" He laughed out as he ran after them.
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 5:19 pm
[[Well, the time will come when we team up. More likely when we can draw all the purifiers to a single area. GAH! I'm trying soooo hard to make a profile. You know, I reasearched my name!!! So, I'm basically Defender Lime Tree Criminal. Sweet!]]
Sakeri had walked a ways and the path had changed over a course of time. Trees began to thicken around them with every yard they advanced into the thicket.
Soon the mine had risen over the horizen and she frowned at the the site. All it consisted of was a bunch of machinery with dirty men crawling in and out of the opening in the mountain, toting metal carts with piles and piles of dirt. Agitated, she examined the scene.
"I can't kick through metal," she mumbled, rather upset that the place looked so sturdy. Then her eyes spotted a series of boxes labeled "Danger TNT." An excited grin popped up, and she made a dash toward the stash, checking quickly if there was anyone guarding it.
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 5:43 pm
Kin scratched the back of his head as he watched Sakeri get worked up on such small things, well, according to his perception. He yawn loudly, a habit of his to show that something or someone was unimportant, and leisurely made his walk towards the large metallic structure blocking the way. Some men saw Sakeri dig into the TNT and approached her, some pulling out their guns at the nearby wolf, but he could much care less. Placing his palm on the structure, there was a sudden explosion, a mess of screams, some screeching and yanking before the entirety of the place exploded, large pieces of material launching in all directions. A shield immediately covered the three purifiers, while the rest... let's just say they disappeared, save the excruciating detail of torn "stuff".
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