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 Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 11:49 am
nvm man im just keep him with out a blood line or clan.
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 12:10 pm
Hibana: Alright, so not bad... an inventive use of the Byakugan, but i would like to see a bit more. do you think you could maybe make note of seeing the Tenketsu, striking at them, or maybe using a heavenly spin or some other Hyuuga technique? You don't have to do it from a Genin standpoint... you could be a higher rank in th RP Sample. I just need to see that you understand what the bloodline is capable of.
Denied...
But I'm confident that you can turn it around easily enough.
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 1:04 pm
Cobra_X Hibana: Alright, so not bad... an inventive use of the Byakugan, but i would like to see a bit more. do you think you could maybe make note of seeing the Tenketsu, striking at them, or maybe using a heavenly spin or some other Hyuuga technique? You don't have to do it from a Genin standpoint... you could be a higher rank in th RP Sample. I just need to see that you understand what the bloodline is capable of.
Denied...
But I'm confident that you can turn it around easily enough.
sure thing
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 1:37 pm
Nerdbot: Alright, well, you showed more. Not sure why you said that your eyes allowed you to make more clones... that doesn't seem to be right, but you showed the enhanced use of Genjutsu which is what i was looking for. Sooo.....
Despite what this picture may seem to represent...
COBRA APPROVES!!!
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 1:52 pm
ok i reedited my applications hows that?
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 8:38 pm
Hibana: Very good, nice edits. Sooo.....
Despite what this picture may seem to represent...
COBRA APPROVES!!!
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 9:24 pm
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 1:07 am
Rpc Name: Orikage Deevo
Village: Mist
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Hyoton Kekkei Genkei
What you know about the clan/bl: Ice Release is created when the user combines wind and water to create ice. Yet most Yurigakure ninja have mastered/learned this bloodline.
Rp Sample: Orikage sighed as his fore-arm bled. He slashed my arm? How? He looked up at the Akatsuki member who's blade dripped with blood. He'll be asking for it..... Orikage slowly raised his hands and panted heavily as he stabilized his chakra, completing hand-signs. "Hyoton!" he shouted as he used wind and water to create ice. "Feel my wrath!" he screamed as he shot ice towards the Akatsuki member. Succeeding in capturing the opponent's foot, Orikage drew out his katana and sliced off the frozen leg. But unexpected, the body poofed as the leg was cut. "A shadow clone?" He said as he felt a stab at his back-side. He turned looking that the Akatsuki had fooled him. "Smart." Orikage said smirking. "But not smart enough." His hand grasped the enemy's as it slowly froze. While his hand was freezing, Orikage slashed his chest open. "There is no way you can survive a hyoton user. Your outmatched!" he spoke silently as he let go of his hand. But unexpected again he cut off his own arm. Orikage looked suprised. How could he?! He looked at the armless member and sighed. "You are weird you know. Or in other words, you are.......interesting!" The enemy still with a blank face created a 2 clones. Orikage sighed and suddenly felt three knives stabbing him. He looked startled and kicked after which all of them poofed. Orikage suddenly looked ontop of a tree and said. "Well you are one tough customer." he pointed his finger as ice once again shot at him, freezing him completly. Orikage fell down. he was exausted. The chakra was all used up. Finally...
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 11:27 am
Rpc Name: Konaga Riko
Village: Iwagakure
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Konaga Clan
What you know about the clan: Having seen Cobra use and talk about his bloodline, I at least have a general idea of the whole concept regarding the bloodline. After further reading, I've can now gladly say I know the basic just of everything so here goes. The Konaga clan is mainly consisted of wonderers and what's unique about this clan is thier seemingly wide and unlimited chakra reserves as well as their ability to augment it to help enhance themselves in terms of speed, power, etc.
Throughout their whole lives, the cells of any Konaga member is flooded with chakra from head to toe making it almost impossible to locate thier chakra points. But what comes with this 'gift' of seemingly endless chakra reserves is the 'curse' of being under constent pain. This pain surges thoughtout the body sometime making a Konaga member feel as if something was lashing out at them from the inside. Because of the instability of this raw chakra, most infants won't even survive a week before getting devoured by thier own bloodline.
Konaga members aren't able to sleep, the closest thing they have to it is mediation with causes them to enter a deep state of meditation while their chakra surges around them like an aura. Also, overuse of the chakra augmenation will cause chakra burns, which blackens the body. Continuous use may cause that certain body part to shut down.
Rp Sample:
Laboured breathing resounded within the small cavern area that a 9 year old Riko had designated as her training area. Lit with only a few torches, Riko stared intensely at the boulder in front of her while attempting to control her uneven breathing. As she stood, Riko shook slightly due to the pain coursing throughout her body but was unwilling to give up until she succeeded in her task to destroy the boulder into many tiny pieces. Closing her eyes, Riko started doing pulse-lip breathing as she cleared her mind, reading herself for her next attempt as smashing a boulder into pieces. "Riko, that's enough. You've been at this for an hour. You're mother and I are getting worried, its time we head back for dinner."
Startled by the sudden voice, Riko's eyes shot open as she turned around to face the imposing figure that was her father. Pressing her back against the boulder, Riko stubbornly shook her head 'no', not wanting to give up when she was so close. Her father relased a tired sigh as he glanced around at the other unsuccessful boulders lying around that were chipped or broken slightly at the side. "Riko, you know it's not good to push yourself too hard. What you're able to accomplish at the moment is really good." Still refusing to go with her father, Riko suddenly felt a strong tug on her arm as her father began pulling her towards the exit. "Stop resisting Riko, I saw you while you were preparing youself to smash that boulder. You where quivering slightly which is a sign that the pain is getting a bit to much for you. Don't risk yourself trying something you could accomplish another day."
Riko stopped struggling for a moment knowing that what her father said was true but being the stubborn girl she is, Riko refused to leave it at that. Breaking free from her father, Riko dashed back to the boulder and hid behind it. "One more time! I promise that if I don't succeed this time, I'll go home with you oto-san." Peaking around the boulder, she saw her father relase another tired sigh before nodding his head in consent. Smiling, Riko got ready to add chakra to the limbs in her right arm.
Feeling a surge of energy and pain surrounding her right arm, Riko fought to hold in the pain as she focused on controlling the charkra surging somewhat uncontrollably around her arm. Not knowing how much longer she could take the pain, Riko aimed her punch towards the center of the boulder. Upon contact, the power of the chakra caused bits and pieces of the boulder to fly out in all different directions as a dust cloud enveloped Riko and the boulder.
Before the dust could even clear allowing her to see her results, Riko was suddenly hit by pain. Letting out an angonizing scream, Riko cluctched her right arm close to her body as she felt a scorching pain emitting from her right arm. Never having experiencing this sort pain, Riko fell to the floor trying to hold back in her tears. It wasn't only her arm that was in pain, it was her whole body though her right arm was in the most pain at them moment. 'So this is what happens when I push pass my limits...' Chancing a glance at her arm, Riko gasp is surprise as she watched as a chakra burn began to cover her arm in large dark burn marks. Never having seen such a large burn mark in her life made Riko's fear of her bloodline intensify as she finally cried out for help. Her father was there beside her in a heartbeat and instead of critizing her, talked her through the healing procedure. After serval minutes of meditation, Riko finally calm down and the pain numbed slightly. Able to move again without dropping down in pain, Riko slowly began to make back home with her father's assistance.
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 1:28 pm
Lilly: Do were the previous failed attempts on the Boulders failed Augmentation attempts, or simply weak/uncontrolled augmentations?
...I always imagined that Konaga training was especially difficult, because you had, at most like 8 attempts to test power augmentations (2 for each limb) and that even that would be excruciatingly painful, despite the fact that you had not lost control of a limb yet. I only ask, becasue I was wondering if that arm should be limp at your side or not, but if the previous attempts were failed augmentations and the last strike was a completed one, then yeah it would all make sense.
I would also note that assuming your father was Konaga (if he was in fact the Konaga, if both your parents weren't)... you would be comforted in his presence. I have yet to note this in the bloodline, but Konaga of higher rank then you tend to "dwarf" you in a sense, relieving some of your pain based on the number of ranks they are above you.
Also, healing from burns takes a full 8 hour meditation cycle. I don't think that you said you had healed your arm, but you said he "talked you through the healing process"... and I wasn't really sure what that meant.
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 1:35 pm
Cobra_X Lilly: Do were the previous failed attempts on the Boulders failed Augmentation attempts, or simply weak/uncontrolled augmentations?
...I always imagined that Konaga training was especially difficult, because you had, at most like 8 attempts to test power augmentations (2 for each limb) and that even that would be excruciatingly painful, despite the fact that you had not lost control of a limb yet. I only ask, becasue I was wondering if that arm should be limp at your side or not, but if the previous attempts were failed augmentations and the last strike was a completed one, then yeah it would all make sense.
I would also note that assuming your father was Konaga (if he was in fact the Konaga, if both your parents weren't)... you would be comforted in his presence. I have yet to note this in the bloodline, but Konaga of higher rank then you tend to "dwarf" you in a sense, relieving some of your pain based on the number of ranks they are above you.
Also, healing from burns takes a full 8 hour meditation cycle. I don't think that you said you had healed your arm, but you said he "talked you through the healing process"... and I wasn't really sure what that meant.
As to the last part, I know that healing it all would require a long period of time, as such I mentioned that 'once she was okay to walk with assistance' (best to rest at home afterall). And with her being in so much pain, listening to someone talk to her would be helpful so what I meant by that was that he instructed her into meditating and such since she was too busy brooding over her current pain issue.
Yeah, sorry about this, seems most of the problems lie in the wording. I'll be more careful from now on in terms of that.
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 1:42 pm
Lilly: Alrighty, well I'm sure you get it. You've seen me use Sai a lot, and the sample shows you understand the basics. Personally, I sometimes have to forcefully remind myself to incorporate a Konaga's pain into most posts (not all, but a lot), so just a warning to that too. Otherwise however, I think you'll do great! Sooo....
Despite what this picture may seem to represent...
COBRA APPROVES!!!
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 2:13 pm
Solitude: As awesome as it would be for Hyouton to work this way, it simply doesn't. first off, Hyouton is a Kekkai Genkai that is NOT normally mastered even by Yukigakure ninja. Actually, in fact, Yukigakure ninja have to use preexisting ice to perform their jutsu, whereas the Hyouton bloodline allows you to create it from thin air.
Secondly, your not using the 'jutsu' right. Now the first technique you sued to pin the opponent's leg wasn't so bad, despite not having a name... but you can't simply point your finger at someone and shoot ice at / freeze them without some kind of hand seal or jutsu effect.
MAYBE, if you reached level 2, something like that might be possible, but I would be wary of doing anything like that in combat without some backing as to how. (Haku was shown to do something LIKE this at points, but most of his stuff was shown as jutsu... at least in the things he did purposely.)
Denied...
But I'm confident that you can turn it around easily enough. Just try to incorporate the concepts I laid out here in your RP sample.
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 2:59 pm
Im just wondering but... has anyone actually sent in the 1k gold in for their bloodline/clan?
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 3:07 pm
I'll admit, I have not yet. Who do I send it to in the first place, or is that person's name on the first post?
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