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 Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 3:49 pm
Rpc Name: Shinjin Kadan
Village: Suna
Rank: AS
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Metsubou Hiradoma
What you know about the clan/bl: 3 stage bloodline. 1st stage: allows the user to cast any Genjutsu or illusion from any instrument. 2nd stage: user has the ability to form an instrument of their choosing from shadows to use. 3rd stage: gives ability to summon a shadow orchestra to play along with the user, increasing the power of the illusion by tenfold, but draining the user of half their chakra to fuel the orchestra.
Rp Sample:
Shinjin looked at the broken violin in his hands and chuckled lightly. His opponent smirked cockily. "What are you laughing about? I just broke your main weapon, leaving your powerless against me." Shinjin looked back up at him with a triumphant smile.
"You may have broken my violin, but I'm far from powerless," He said as his right arm turned black and he reached into his own shadow. He then pulled back, holding a beautifully crafted, pitch black violin. He held it to his shoulder and began to play while calling out, "Kokuangyo no Jutsu." Suddenly everything went black and the only sounds that could be heard were Shinjin's melodious playing, and the blood-chilling screams of his opponent.
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 6:46 pm
Rpc Name:neko
Village:Village Hidden in the Mist: Kirigakure
Rank:academy student
Bloodline or Clan applied for razz in Point
What you know about the clan/bl:i know that they were feard by many for it's Pinpoint Accuracy bloodline.they are natural.Bloodline users normally wear long sleeves to hide their weapons in.The longer haired users may even hide it in their hair.
Rp Sample: on a very rainy and dark day a kid name neko well learn how to use hes ability from one of hes clan members named jon.the traning takes place at Kiri Lake here he well learn how to control any weapon with their seal on it.
jon spoke to neko about the past for hours.jon said to neko (are are you ready for me to teach u the ways of the Mercenary Clan)necko eyes got big and respond with excitement in hes voice(yes).jon gave him a weapon when neko held the weapon he knew how to use it jon seen how neko was moving around so he made the first move.neko seen jon coming for an attack neko jumped over jon and came down with slash on jons spine.neko eyes opend wide and looked at jon close it was a clone with a paper bomb neko seen it light up so he took hes weapon and cut the end of the paper so it can not burn the rest neko took a deep breath and shouted(are you trying to kill me show your self).jon came from behind him a stabed neko in hes hand before jon could have jumped back neko held hes arm and touched hes weapon as spell started to show on jons weapon jons face had surprising look on it.jon kicked neko back neko fell to the ground and he had a big smile on hes face jon asked (what so funny kid)neko respond (look behind you)ten Shurikens was coming behind jons back jon dodged most of them the last Shuriken had a paper bomb on it it reached by jon face jon touched it and took over the weapon and sent it to neko.neko throw one more Shuriken at the one with the bomb it explode making neko hit a tree and jon jumped back from explosion.jon walked up to neko (you did well for your first test young ninja ill be going i hope i see you soon when you are stronger)as he left neko right on the ground and walked away.
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 8:29 pm
Ok, So i've been patient, and i wouldnt have a problem waiting becuase i understand things take time, but i'm just being skipped over now. There's been like 5 people posting after meh and getting accepted, i fixed what i was told to fix and i would appreciate it if someone would let me know if i am accepted, or what els i need to work on in order to get accepted.
Sorry, not trying to be rude but i didnt see any other way to get your attention. ok and i exagerated, only 3 people got accepted, but 1 got denied wich means they still got looked at, lol.
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 9:20 pm
Gaara_CTru Ok, So i've been patient, and i wouldnt have a problem waiting becuase i understand things take time, but i'm just being skipped over now. There's been like 5 people posting after meh and getting accepted, i fixed what i was told to fix and i would appreciate it if someone would let me know if i am accepted, or what els i need to work on in order to get accepted.Sorry, not trying to be rude but i didnt see any other way to get your attention. ok and i exagerated, only 3 people got accepted, but 1 got denied wich means they still got looked at, lol.
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 9:28 pm
lolcat-sama: Alright, very good edits. Sooo....
Despite what this picture may seem to represent...
COBRA APPROVES!!!
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 9:32 pm
@Cobra: Ok, thank you, and i understand. But im sure you can see my point of view as well no? lol.
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 9:34 pm
GensuiKage Rpc Name: Shinjin Kadan Village: Suna Rank: AS Bloodline or Clan applied for: Metsubou Hiradoma What you know about the clan/bl: 3 stage bloodline. 1st stage: allows the user to cast any Genjutsu or illusion from any instrument. 2nd stage: user has the ability to form an instrument of their choosing from shadows to use. 3rd stage: gives ability to summon a shadow orchestra to play along with the user, increasing the power of the illusion by tenfold, but draining the user of half their chakra to fuel the orchestra. Rp Sample: Shinjin looked at the broken violin in his hands and chuckled lightly. His opponent smirked cockily. "What are you laughing about? I just broke your main weapon, leaving your powerless against me." Shinjin looked back up at him with a triumphant smile. "You may have broken my violin, but I'm far from powerless," He said as his right arm turned black and he reached into his own shadow. He then pulled back, holding a beautifully crafted, pitch black violin. He held it to his shoulder and began to play while calling out, "Kokuangyo no Jutsu." Suddenly everything went black and the only sounds that could be heard were Shinjin's melodious playing, and the blood-chilling screams of his opponent.
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 9:39 pm
Gaara: I'm guessing that the only reason you didn't demonstrate a technique like the Heavenly Spin, or 128 palms is becasue you wrote the RP Sample from an Academy standpoint. Personally, I like to see the RPs written from a Chuunin/Jounin level, but in this case, I'm confident you understand what's going on. So.....
Despite what this picture may seem to represent...
COBRA APPROVES!!!
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 9:43 pm
Cobra_X Gaara: I'm guessing that the only reason you didn't demonstrate a technique like the Heavenly Spin, or 128 palms is becasue you wrote the RP Sample from an Academy standpoint. Personally, I like to see the RPs written from a Chuunin/Jounin level, but in this case, I'm confident you understand what's going on. So.....
Despite what this picture may seem to represent...
COBRA APPROVES!!!
Saweeeett!!! Thank you. And yeah, i wasnt going to write an AS using 128 palms, lol, a weeeee bit to advanced for an AS, lol, but thank you very much.
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 12:10 am
Rpc Name: Aihi Hyuuga
Village:Konohagakure
Rank:Academy Student.
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Hyuuga Branch house./Byakugan
What you know about the clan/bl: The Family is divided into the Main and Branch houses. Weakspot is the first Thoracic Vertebrae. directly behind the area where the neck meets the shoulders. Byakugan is used for scouting and recon missions, great against enemies who like to hide in smoke clouds, underground or water. This isnt really a weakness but more of a set back; the Byakugan cannot see things that are the same temperature as its surroundings. The Byakugan can see on a molecular level.
The Rp will be against a Nara-Clan member
Rp Sample: Aihi struggles within the Shadow bind as her hands near her weapon pouch on her waist. She then Activates her byakugan searching for the weakpoint in the canopy to which her plan can be executed. She scans the treetops left to right while wriggling around a bit. It seems as if she's just struggling to the member of the nara-clan but, Aihi reaches two kunai with exploding tags and around the same time spots the weakness she was looking for in the structure of the forest. "Alright here goes nothing she though to herself" She ignited the seal on the kunai in her right hand and dropped it. Upon reaction of seeing the exploding tag the nara-clan member released the shadow bind and shielded himself for the upcoming explosion.
"Gotcha!" Aishi said under her breath, as she threw the kunai in her left hand towards the canopy while the enemy shielded himself. She then stood there as the nara member realized the kunai in the dirt was a dud he reapplied his shadow bind. Aihi now smirked as the nara member had no clue of what was about to happen. "Why are you laughing? You seem to think the roles are switched." the enemy said confidently. "Oh but they are!"
Aihi looked up as the piece of paper burned out on the kunai then exploded blowing an opening in the thick and dense canopy causing the nara member to shield himself from the destruction. Aihi took this time to create a shadow clone and hide int he safety of some dense foliage a short distance away. and watched him intently with her Byakugan. The Light pierced through the treetops cutting through the shadow bind freeing Aihi.
"I cant remember what rule # it is of a shinobi and at this point i dont care but always know your surroundings." Aihi said with a smirk. She knew nara clan members were highly intelligent so she had to put him in his place and swiftly before he somehow manages to maneuver her into a more shadowed area. she got ready to take a step be couldnt move..
"wha- whats goin on i cant move." The Nara clan member laughed i guess you should've payed more attention and you'd know what rule # it was. he said as he jumped down from the tree closing the distance making his jutsu more effective in grasping around her legs and the shadows stretched up her body squeezing her neck.
He had ran a shadow along the fallen debris from the canopy. He kneeled down and pressed the jutsu more as breathing was more difficult for Aihi. The clan member laughed as the life was squeezed from her body and she dangled there motionless. He then he released the jutsu and stood up as her body hit the ground with a poof. When did she have time to...
his eyes widened when she first blinded him she cloned herself and had the clone take her place. "Looks like you underestimated me." she said as a shuriken flew at him from the position he once had in the treetop. he ducked as it whizzed by him hitting a near by tree and exploding.
"Almost got you but this time i wont miss." she said reaching into her pouch she grabbed a pepper bomb threw it as she would a shuriken [with similar body motion] the nara clan member retaliated with his own shuriken as it cut the pepper bomb in half spreading the pepper all about getting into his eyes. he covered them rubbing frantically. Aihi knew now was her chance as she leapt from the tree she made about 3 hand-seals Kage bushin no jutsu!
A clone appeared beside her ready to work so she swung in mid-air and launched it towards the nara member. Landing in front of him the clone open palmed him in the chin lifting him off the ground somewhat followed up with a launcher kick from the ground sending him into the air. Aihi was falling towards him ready to strike. "Hakkesho Kaiten!!"
she said as she began to spin swiftly emitting chakra from her pores it forming a great spinning barrier. The nara clan member was hit by the kaiten directly as he then plummeted to the ground landing on his back in pain.
H-how did get behind me? "I saw your tenketsu well up with chakra when i blinded you, but I had cloned myself before the flash finished and hid watching your actions. I guess you forgot i can see chakra and the chakra coil system. but i saw it squirming its way underneath the fallen debris. better luck next time. she said walking away"
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 9:08 am
Quote: Nerdbot: Unfortunately, for the moment, I'm going to have to Deny you. worry not however, I'm sure you can do better. The sample itself was fine, very nice in fact, however, there is so much more to this bloodline then simply being able to see through mist. Try to incorporate the genjutsu, or the red chakra particle jutsu, or even the sensing of life force. Aspects like those are what truly make the bloodline unique among the other Doujutsu. So For now... OK, that makes sense. I'll try it again. Rpc Name: Sarukin Genkaku Village biggrin ont have one yet.... Sand or Rock Rank:Academy Student, I guess Bloodline or Clan applied for:Ranmaru Kekkei Genkai What you know about the clan/bl:-Similar to Sharingan and Byakugan -Heightens Genjutsu -Can locate others by sensing chakra -Can see someone's life force -Not as much distance as Byakugan -Similar to the sharingan, the eyes can predict movements, but does not affect the speed of your body to counter them Rp Sample: Sarukin jumped to the right, barely managing to dodge the kunai thrown at him. He landed on his feet, reaching in his pouch for a kunai of his own. But before he could manage to grab hold of one, a barrage of shuriken headed his way. This isn't good. Not good at all. Sarukin ducked, most of the shuriken flying over his head. However, two managed to strike his shoulder, sending a pain running through his left arm. Laughter filled the forest, seemingly coming from all sides. "Did you honestly think you could defeat me? Everyone was right. You are a stupid monkey!" Sarukin was breathing fast, regretting his decision to start a fight with a chuunin. He was exhausted, and had two shuriken lodged in his left shoulder. On top of all that, he didn't know the location of his opponent. He closed his eyes, focusing on his chakra intently. There was only one way he could win. After a few silent moments of concentration, Sarukin opened his eyes again. They were illuminating a faint red glow. His "special eyes", as his grandfather liked to call them, could save him from this jerk, giving him a chance to win. He scanned the area, looking for his opponent. After a few careful moments, he saw the faint outline of a middle aged man wandering about the forest. There he is. Sarukin grinned, knowing exactly how he would finish this match. He began to run, pulling out a kunai and an explosion tag. After a few seconds, the explosion tag was on the kunai, making a perfect bomb. Sarukin threw the kunai, careful of his aim. Although he missed by a few feet, the explosion stunned the chuunin. Sarukin took this opportunity to perform a jutsu. "Bunshin No Jutsu!" He only meant to summon three clones, but amazingly, seven appeared, not breaking stride in their run. Its these special eyes. They helped me. Sarukin couldn't help but smile. Its over for him.The chuunin looked at Sarukin and his eyes grew wide, shocked at what he was seeing. One of the clones charged for an attack, aiming for a "kick" to the chest. When the chuunin decided to counter attack, he was devastated to see it was only an illusion. He was left open by the counter attack, and Sarukin was only a few feet from him. He punched him in the nose, putting as much force in the punch as he could muster up. The chuunin fell on the floor, temporarily stunned by the attack. Sarukin knew that the chuunin was down. He knew that this battle was over. He knew that the chuunin wouldn't make fun of him ever again. But Sarukin wasn't satisfied, for he insulted his grandfather. He took a look at the chuunin, almost feeling pity for the man. "Magen: Narakumi No Jutsu!". The man's eyes grew wide, fear and torment present in them. In the forest, the screams of the man could be heard, Sarukin's "special eyes" enhancing the Vision of Hell technique. Sarukin felt little remorse as he turned to go home, those demonic eyes still activated and still illuminating that faint, red glow.....
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 9:39 am
ok man can u look at mine dude
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 10:22 am
Cobra_X lolcat-sama: Alright, very good edits. Sooo....
Despite what this picture may seem to represent...
COBRA APPROVES!!!
Thanks.I'll add this to my RPC profile.Sorry it took so long to get it right. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 11:45 am
iiLov3_Kendra ok man can u look at mine dude
Your RP post is so hard to follow and it doesn't really show me that you understand how your bloodline works.
First off, you can't just control all those shuriken without having placed seals on them previously, and the fact that he says he's going to teach you the clan jutsu... then immediately engages you in combat, without teaching you anything makes no sense.
You should frame your RP in the scene of a training grounds, when you'd be able to have your teacher show you the technique, and then you follow it, showing that you understand how everything works.
You didn't really show the concept of pin Point Accuracy, or forming the seal, or other such things. These need to be included in your sample. Also, please, TRY to have proper Capitalization and spacing after periods.
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