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 Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:10 pm
((Sage, the car was destroyed to the point it wasn't driveable, thats why me, izzy and ryn flew away. If you want to meet up with us thats fine, just don't make it over the top lol.))
I post a lot because Im not in school anymore, and I was taking a break from working.
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:11 pm
[[I post because school hasn't let in, but it will on Monday!]]
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:13 pm
[[I start college on the 27th]]
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:19 pm
((I'm IN school. Not at the moment, I just got out, but I've been posting throughout the day during school. Man, I love being homeschooled. lol ))
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:19 pm
Onamisaki [[I post because school hasn't let in, but it will on Monday!]] [[I start school on 5 of september.]]
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:33 pm
(((ok... can you explain what has happened so far?... redface rolleyes )))
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:36 pm
((Theres an update a couple pages back, posted by the historian Penguin. Find it, read it, and then read the couple pages after it.
Try to get on more so you arent so left behind :/ ))
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:36 pm
[[Most of it's on page 26, written by our Historian Penguin Song. After that it's mostly OOC and Ryn, Nendir, and Izzy leave for Canada. There are two players in Chicago. Three in the mining town. And, Booksage in the countryside.]]
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 4:54 pm
Finally an the Angel has made it into town but suddenly spots a character of his intrests, hes asks a neer by town folk who the person is and he says thats Aubry Rosewater a Defender of earth. suddenly the Shote freezes and remebers that Aubry Rosewater was one of the names carved into the tree. so he turns and runs up to here and asks: are you Aubry Rosewater?
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 5:04 pm
The blood splattering on the ground gave slight ecstasy for Kin and he wanted more. As the men came to ask, he merely replied in a gentle tone, "We're purifiers. We suck the lives out of you leaches of this world." With that, he opened his eyes and stared them, immediately impaling and paralyzing their bodies. "Hmm... I want to try something new today..." he giggled to himself and began forcing the two men to pick up their weapons, one with a shot gun and the other with a knife. They were 5 feet apart, and the on with the knife began dashing towards the other, going to strike, while the other pulled the trigger towards the manipulated human before him. Kin let them control their own mouths as they shrieked in pain, fear and desperation, music to his ears. There was a loud gunshot, then another. The one with the knife stood bleeding in front of the one with the shot gun, who was all pale and breathing hard, tears flowing from his eyes, "Jake, no!" But as it appeared, Jake was dead. A malignant smirk played upon Kin's face, as the dead Jake bled as he stood, and all of the sudden struck the remaining man upon the chest, then driving the blade upwards, through the throat and into the head. The remaining man cried out, "No! No!" but ended up in a shriek and awkward silence. The two men fell dead, and Kin went and crouched up close to enjoy watching them, the shot gun facing Jake and the knife dug in the other man's forhead. Kin then stood straight and looked back to Saki and her wolf 'pet', "Shall we go on?"
((Meh... horror.))
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 5:04 pm
[[Check spelling, use quotation marks, and speak in past tense, Hippi.
It seemed like ages, but the angel had finally found himself in the small town. His eyes searched the terrain only to land on an interesting young girl.
"Hey," he said in a low voice, nudging as nearby villager. "Who's that girl?" The man, clearly terrified, shrrnk away from him, mumbling the name, "Aubry Rosewater," before taking off.
See? It sounds better when you use them altogether. biggrin ]]
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 5:09 pm
Onamisaki [[Check spelling, use quotation marks, and speak in past tense, Hippi. It seemed like ages, but the angel had finally found himself in the small town. His eyes searched the terrain only to land on an interesting young girl.
"Hey," he said in a low voice, nudging as nearby villager. "Who's that girl?" The man, clearly terrified, shrrnk away from him, mumbling the name, "Aubry Rosewater," before taking off.See? It sounds better when you use them altogether. biggrin ]] [[Wow that is really good that sounds alot better, ok ill try harder I promise]]
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 5:11 pm
[[ euchi left what should i do?]]
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 5:21 pm
Sakeri let out a sigh of relief, while Amati threw the body to one side.
"You alright," he mumbled, looking away in shame as the blood dribbled from his jaws. She gave a meek nod and embraced him, running her smalls hands through his fur.
"Yes," she whispered, softly. "I'm fine." The sounds of agony echoed behind them, and Sakeri turned to see that Kin had disposed of the remain two.
"Shall we go on?" he asked curiously. Sakeri could not help but smile as a light laugh erupted from her throat. In moments, she popped up onto her feet, eyes glinting with joy.
"But, of course," she giggled, folding her arms behind her head. She spun in the direction the other had gone and started her comical march toward the "disturbance." Amati shook the blood of in disgust and padded solemnly after her.
My first human kill, he thought to himself. I never thought it would come to this...
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