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Good point Koosei. Here's a rewritten version, that is a little more acceptable. Opinions anyone?

026: The Falling Earth

“So, that is why I left him,” said Justina quietly. She had just finished telling Bill Flatman about Drakam.

“So, do I remind you of how he used to be?” said Bill, “Is that why you love me?”

“Yes and no,” said Justina, “You remind me of him in ways, both simple men who are genuine and make me laugh, but there is a key difference. You choose to give up wealth, money is not something that binds you.”

“I care not for money,” said Bill, “It brings only bad things to most folk.”

“Do you despise money because of your father?” asked Justina.

“Yes, for the most part. I was born with a mind that thinks too much, and as I sat and mulled things over I became aware that my father was a b*****d. He treats people like scum, and is arrogant in all he does. He is like a worse version of Drakam.”

“So, you went to live on the streets?” said Justina, curiously.

“Yes, I removed the money element from my life, so as to avoid the same fate as my father. After that, all of my so called friends abandoned me, all except for David Forian. My father still accepts me as a son, but only because he hopes to have me return home and end his embarrassment.”

“It must have been hard to let all that money go,” smiled Justina.

“It was worth it,” Bill smiled back.

“Oh!” exclaimed Justina, “We’ve fallen behind the group a little, we should hurry and catch up!”

“Hang on,” said Bill, “What’s this?” He was pointing at a small sculpture of a falling man that was carved into the wall. Reaching out he tapped the figure with his finger.

With a thunderous roar, the roof came tumbling down.

“What happened?!” shouted Fisher, his words drowned out by the sound of falling rock.

Underneath that noisy falling rock, Justina and Bill had become trapped. They lay unconscious for a good few minutes, before waking to find total darkness.

“What happened?” groaned Justina, “Are you alright Bill?”

“I’m here,” said Bill, lighting his lantern, “It appears I triggered a trap.”

“Indeed,” smiled Justina.

“We’ll get out of this alive,” nodded Bill, “You’ll see.”

“I don’t want to die, not now that I found you,” Justina whispered, “It isn’t fair.”

She reached across and kissed him hard on the lips, then plunged into a full deep kiss. “If we are to die, I have one final wish,” Justina whispered, her face red and her eyes heavy, "I want to die kissing the man I love."

"It is the least that I can do," hs said softly, kissing her back.

As they sat there kissing, they failed to realsied that the earth around them was starting to shake. Finally, Bill realised what was happening, and said, "Justina, do you feel that?"

“Yes,” said Justina pulling away, “What is it?”

The earth was shaking more violently now, unknown to the two of them one of the walls of rock was being dug into by the others in an attempt to get them out.

Suddenly Glen burst his way into the rocky tomb, he looked around for a second, then saw that they were ok. Then he noticed that Justina had smeared lipstick on Bills cheek whilst kissing him, "Perhaps you two didn't want rescuing," he whistled.

“Kinky devils!” laughed Silverman, trying to take a peek inside.

“Ah, if only I had been trapped with Ms Carpendale, that could have been me!” sighed Ty Keene heavily.

“They could have died!” said Allriac incredulously.

“I assure you good sir,” said Keene, “That the beautiful act of kissing is not that dangerous as to kill you!”

The whole group felt an inner sense of relief that none of them had died. Gathering up their things, they all agreed to make haste in finding the others, and getting out of this cursed place.

Just pretend you never read the original, what would you think then?

Fair enough. I'll see what everyone else thinks then.

Okay, thanks for your opinion. At any rate, I think I might write the next chapter shortly.

xd sweatdrop honestly, FS, I don't think the original would have breached the PG-13 either.
and I did like the other one over it just because it had more 'sustenance' to it. xp teasing of Allriac and whatnot.

besides, I think to try to censor bits of it would be to cover up your own writing style.

Fair enough mate. I think I should probably just leave the original as it is.

@Seaphron: sorry, I'm updating fast at the moment. And on that note:

Chapter 28 is online!