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 Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2018 8:21 pm
Rengato Rah-Do-Sil Infernum Adventicio Fulget: Has a lot of steps, making it seem less like magic and more like an Ability. My suggestion would be to streamline it a little and simply have the skulls surround and then burst without her command. - Fixed Infernum Eruptio: Given the area it can cover, I'd say this is closer to a B.- Fixed Ignis Fornacem Tri-inspiratione: Is definitely more along the lines of conjuration rather than evocation.- Scraped Legenda Est Infernum: The description sounds like this needs to be charged up in some way, so I'd suggest having a number of charge posts. As an S, I'm also running this over with the VC ['cause it's important, so if he mentions anything I missed, I'll let you know].- Fixed Infernum Fluctus: Sounds more like an A.- Fixed Strengths: While she may be good at combat, just keep in mind that the whole point of the Knight/Mage system is that most Knights are better than most magi at physical combat.- Understood Personality/Bio: I'm going to need more information on both Azerec and this cult she's a part of, if that's okay. Either in her personality, her bio, or the Other section.- Explained Alright, I'm going to put this as blunt as possible, as this is my opinion on this:
Your bio is a five sentence way of saying the word "Unknown." Literally, we could replace the entire thing with one word and gleam the same information. You have over two-thousand years to work with. Put down stuff she's done, what's happened in her life, or something that is substantial. She might have things that crop up in our guild story. Whatever's in her bio could help us with future content. Her bio could even be five sentences that explain her life. What you have, however, is five sentences that basically tell us "I'm not telling you anything."
Secondly, I would like to address your S Rank spell. Now, I see this spell as the same level of spell as Zarina's White End. I see it this way because they are both the same rank, apparently have highly destructive capabilities, and have charge times. The difference is that this spell is infinitely faster than Zarina's and is so vague that I can't tell whether your "decimate those that comes in contact with them" is "it does a lot of damage" or "oh snap, she destroyed Planet Vegeta." Please elaborate on whether this instantaneously nukes the world, mountains, people, whatever. Vague-sounding abilities are probably the ones we are most cautious about, especially when you slap an S Rank on it. Additionally, if this is a "one shot to any fighter no matter what" then why is something so powerful the equivalent of a few seconds of casting time, i.e. three posts? Again, we are serious about S rank stuff, we want info and specifics.
Note, we are not saying you can't have things, we just want every detail down to the specifics so nothing crops up that we don't know about.
I fixed the bio, I'll just scrap the spell and keep the four i have whee
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2018 8:47 pm
Username: DragonMistress07
Name: Bella Roseheart
Nickname: Belle, Rose or Honey
Race: Aasimar
Ethnicity: French
Gender: Female
Orientation: Bisexual
Alignment: LG
Affinity: Water
Age: 22
Birthday: October 31st
Height: 5'8"
Weapon: Aquariona
Magic:
First School: Divination
❖ Divine Heal- An ability that can heal any damage done.The larger the wound, the more mana she has to use. Her healing limit maxes out around the use of 10 times. Any more and she has to stop to take a break. 5min.(Rank A)
❖ Holy Seer Sight- An ability that lets Belle see 5 minutes into the future. She uses this to dodge attacks and keep her knight safe (Rank B)
❖ Holy Prayer- An ability that calls on the gods for knowledge in certain areas of healing. (Rank C)
Secondary School: Evocation
❖ Aquarion Scream- Uses her scepter to create a huge whirlpool and fling it at her enemies. Useless.against earth based attacks by extremely effective against fire attacks. (Rank B)
❖ Aquarion Destroyer- Takes droplets of water, forming them into dagger like shards that can pierce through armor and can cause serious damage. The absolute limit she can create is 200. Any more than that drains her. (Rank B)
Relationships:
❖ Entei Roseheart (father- alive)
❖ Alyia Crystalight-Roseheart (mother-alive)
Strengths:
✔ Her kindness (she can make friends with almost any one and children adore her)
✔ Empathic
✔ Determined
Weaknesses:
✘ Easily Distracted
✘ Anything fire-related unless it's cooking-related
✘ Shyness (she's a bit naive)
Likes:
✔ Baking/Cooking
✔ Gardening
✔ Singing
✔ Taking care of her Knight
Dislikes:
✘ Rudeness
✘ Bad Manners
✘ Abuse
✘Those who harm her knight
Personality:
❖ Bella is a kind and caring soul whose ability lies more with healing than magic but when her family or knight is in danger, she takes a 180 turn. But other than that she's fiercely loyal and dedicated to those she loves. She will.also help anyone who needs her help.
History:
❖ Bella was born and raised a noblewoman but she never allows that to changer her sweet personality. She was an only child and her parents doted on her, giving her anything that she wanted, which was a lot she did not need as she only needed her mama and papa. When she was 5, she found out that she had magic and it wass water based as it had been discovered when she was playing in the river by the family villa and fell in. She could not swim at the time and her parents panicked. But before they could do anything, her magic activated herself and pushed her up and out of the water and into her mother's arms. So, as soon as she turned 18, she left home to find her knight after finishing her training from her parents.
Outfits:
❖Home Outfit (She cooks and cleans for her knight in this)
❖Battle Outfit
❖Sleepwear (she has more, but these are the top three)
Items:
❖ A solid gold bracelet from her parents
❖ Her scepter (takes the form of a choker when not in use) Choker Form
Other:
❖ The markings on her face light up when she uses magic
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: Real Emotion
❖ Battle Theme:Sirius-CinnamonPunch
❖ Emotional Theme: Right Now I'm Falling In Love With You-Miku-tan
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2018 10:08 pm
Weeamoo Thanks for the submission! My, she is intimidating~ Just a few things I wanna mention:
Infernum Adventicio Fulget: Has a lot of steps, making it seem less like magic and more like an Ability. My suggestion would be to streamline it a little and simply have the skulls surround and then burst without her command.
Infernum Eruptio: Given the area it can cover, I'd say this is closer to a B.
Ignis Fornacem Tri-inspiratione: Is definitely more along the lines of conjuration rather than evocation.
Legenda Est Infernum: The description sounds like this needs to be charged up in some way, so I'd suggest having a number of charge posts. As an S, I'm also running this over with the VC ['cause it's important, so if he mentions anything I missed, I'll let you know].
Infernum Fluctus: Sounds more like an A.
Strengths: While she may be good at combat, just keep in mind that the whole point of the Knight/Mage system is that most Knights are better than most magi at physical combat.
Personality/Bio: I'm going to need more information on both Azerec and this cult she's a part of, if that's okay. Either in her personality, her bio, or the Other section. Thanks for the submission! I think I just wanna mention one thing, and if that doesn't bother you, then it's a non-issue. There's another character named Blake in the guild. While there are plenty of people in the world with the same/similar names, I know it would make some people uncomfortable. That's up to you, though. :3 Accepted. Feel free to begin posting Thanks for the submission! There are just a couple things I want to mention:
Name: There's a character in the guild with a very similar name. While this happens naturally in life ofc, I know it can bother some people. Whether or not that bothers you, well, let me know xD
Tranquility of Shadows: Given the fact that it's kind of a debuff if inhaled, I'd say this is closer to Transmutation as far as the school goes. I would simply suggest adding it to your schools. Given the nature of a lot of her spells, I think this is a good idea.
Eye of Luteus: Feels more like a solid C, maybe even a D.
History/Other: I would suggest that her mother be from Yuki no Okoku, the Asian/Japanese-equivalent of Terra as Japan has only existed to anyone from the "fantasy" world for three months.
Other: STAR SPOILERS! Dx Why you do this?! I changed the name and am ready to post! smile
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2018 10:47 pm
xGREENCATx I changed the name and am ready to post! smile You're good-to-go, then! Feel free to create your thread and begin posting! Don't forget to sign the rules before doing so!
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Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2018 12:43 pm
Weeamoo Thanks for the submission! There are just a couple things I want to mention:
Name: There's a character in the guild with a very similar name. While this happens naturally in life ofc, I know it can bother some people. Whether or not that bothers you, well, let me know xD
Tranquility of Shadows: Given the fact that it's kind of a debuff if inhaled, I'd say this is closer to Transmutation as far as the school goes. I would simply suggest adding it to your schools. Given the nature of a lot of her spells, I think this is a good idea.
Eye of Luteus: Feels more like a solid C, maybe even a D.
History/Other: I would suggest that her mother be from Yuki no Okoku , the Asian/Japanese-equivalent of Terra as Japan has only existed to anyone from the "fantasy" world for three months.
Other: STAR SPOILERS! Dx Why you do this?! -No problem. I want her to keep the nickname Zuzu though since it was a character I made in one of my first guilds.
(The guild is long dead xP).
It doesn't bother me much, but if you have any name suggestions I'm all ears.
The only one I can think of is Zurie. I'll replace it if it gets too bothersome.
-Transmutation has been added to her schools.
I had no idea double-schooling was possible, so this'll be interesting.
I Changed Eye of Luteus to a C- as well.
-Sorry about the little brain-fart there.
I wasn't quite sure what the equivalent to Japan was in the RP.
It's all fixed now though. whee
- x_x I forgot to put a spoiler warning.
- Anyways, tysm for the advice so far!
If I missed anything, don't be afraid to tell me.
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Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2018 10:04 pm
Hopefully her bio gives a lil more detail about her, though it ruins the whole "enigmatic mage" vibe i was going for. Is there anything else I need to change, i scraped both spells and just keeping the four I have left.
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Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2018 10:24 pm
Username: Blades252
Name: Bastion Lux
Nickname: Ambassador Lux
Race: Human
Ethnicity: Caucasian
Gender: Male
Orientation: Bisexual
Alignment: Lawful Good
Occupation: Ambassador of Carmillion
Age: 23
Birthday: May 14th
Height: 5'9
Relationships:
❖ TBD
❖ Step Mother
❖ Step Father
❖ Step Brother
❖ Step Sister
❖ Step Brother
❖ Step Sister
Strengths:
✔ Very Altruistic
✔ Excellent Speaker
✔ Perceptive
Weaknesses:
✘ Overly trusting (always looks for the good in people)
✘ Physically weak
✘ Can come off as pushy when he becomes passionate about something
Likes:
✔ Meeting new people
✔ Badminton
✔ Fair weather
✔ Sweets
Dislikes:
✘ Blistering heat
✘ Cruelty
✘ Hatred
✘ Uncompromising people
Personality:
❖ Bastion is a rare genuine altruist. He works hard each and every day to improve the lives of the people in any way he possibly can. Bastion has some issues with accepting poor outcomes and even more so when people are hurt in the process. He is very kind hearted and is willing to give the benefit of the doubt to those who do wrongs. That being said however he is no fool and has a good sense when he's being lied too by other people. Bastion is also a bit of a hopeless romantic and loves a good romance novel, however he is embarrassed by this.
History:
❖ Bastion was adopted by a fae family whom had a very close friendship with the Carmillion royal family. He had been left in a gutter to die as an infant and his cries were all but ignored by most, however the family had been passing by when the wife had heard the infants incessant cries and when they didn't stop she went to investigate. From there she took the human baby home with them and raised him as one of their own and the family fell in love with their new member. His older siblings loved playing with him and the Father was just happy to have another son in the household. With him now a part of the family he was given the name Bastion to compliment the family name of Lux and put together his name would mean a "Bastion of Light".
As he grew older Bastion lived up to that name as he stood up to bullies in school in verbal, non physical confrontations. He got beat up a lot during this time but Bastion made a name for himself as a caring pacifist at his school. Eventually once he got older and proved himself to have a silver tongue when it came to negotiating the Lux family brought this to the attention to the Royal family and they decided to put him through a series of tests to see if he really could become an Ambassador for the Carmillion Kingdom. Bastion passed with flying colors and with the trials completed he was now called on whenever delicate treaties and agreements were on the line, accompanying the royals on multiple meetings to act as an advisor at those times.
Outfits:
❖ Mainly what is shown in the picture
Items:
❖ His wallet with identification and money
Other:
❖ Bastion has a low tolerance for spicy food and will cry uncontrolably if he eats any.
❖ Bastion has an even lower alcohol tolerance and a single drink depending on the strength will make him drunk rather quickly. He's an affectionate drunk!
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: Main
❖ Battle Theme: Battle
❖ Emotional Theme: Sad
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2018 1:24 pm
Username: Killer-wolf-kun
Name: Leonardo Tethis
Nickname: Leo, The Glimmering Dark Angel
Race: Fallen Aasamir
Ethnicity: Celtic
Gender: Male
Orientation: Heterosexual
Alignment: LN
Affinity: Earth
Age: 21
Birthday: 4/23
Height: 5'10
Weapon: Two Broken Long Swords
Mage: N/a
Natural Abilities: [Name and Rank]
❖ Glimmer of an Angel: Using his Celestial background he is able too summon forth the clad of armor from his people, creating a great boost in his abilities and giving him a blade able to withstand his power [B Rank]
❖Clad of the Dark Knight: By giving in to the darkness in his blood, his armor is imbued with a more powerful darkness, allowing him to increase his power by multiple times as well as his speed and defense, at the cost of his Sanity and stamina for the duration, making his movements and actions more feral and destroying his sense of humanity and comradery [A Rank]
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Magus Abilities: (Name and Rank)
❖ [abilities the Knight gains through the addition of mana]
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Unison Abilities: (Include Description and Rank)
❖ [abilities the Knight gains through the addition of mana that act as a representation of their bond]
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Relationships:
❖ [Who your RPC is related to]
Strengths:
✔ A Well Trained Warrior
✔ Enhanced Physical Strength and Speed
✔ Potential Celestial Power
Weaknesses:
✘ Using the full extent of his energy cracks his sanity
✘ Stamina issues while transformed
✘ Has bursts of pain after using his full power, feeling the taint in his celestial blood
Likes:
✔ Tea
✔ Dancing and Festive music
✔ Duels and Training
✔ Being in the Sky
Dislikes:
✘ Being underground and in tight spaces
✘ Politics to a degree
✘ True Evil and Demonic blood
✘ Stale Breads
Personality:
❖ The knight holds many things dear, such as the people close to him, the pride he has for the craft he uses, the blade he wields in combat, the pride he has as he fights, though in his demeanor he doesn't show it. The usually calm and laid back warrior. He has a knack for smuggling snacks around with him and being quick witted to his peers and higher ups on occasions. His ability to battle is not only revered on the field, but requested off it, as he usually keeps his blade on hand, prepared for anything. Outside of that, he enjoys the public as he is seen playing tag, hide and seek, and volunteering so he is able to socialize with people of all ages and have a renown for his friendly and joking nature.
History:
❖ From a not so humble birth, he was the son of a Florist and Wayward man. Most of the people in his home village would have taken this as a bad omen, or a dirty family, but for the young man and his mother, life was nothing short of delightful. He was a Shop's hand, granted a bit absent minded, but a well known help throughout his home. In his time off, he'd watch the local men train to become great knights for the leaders of their countries, He pitied them abit, though he also slightly envied them. His hands were usually caught mimicking them, thinking of the freedom and glory knights could have, but also the reputation and anguish that they took on from the common folk. Though as he grew into his 12th year, his mother spoke to him, telling him to chase after the knight's desire, he may not be the greatest, but he may change the way that they are seen. Leo's mouth could only let out a laugh to his mother. On that day, making a vow, that he'd become strong enough to make the difference, and from then on out, he trained along side the other knights, trying to better himself at every form of combat he could, though the monotony of their regiment and style bored him within a few months of it, his training wasn't as effective as he'd hoped, and each weapon he used seemed too different from the last to see how the knights could master them all. Though soon enough, through the slightly grueling training regiment, he found the power in ranks. It was a system of get to the top and lead through the back. It didn't seem so bad within, but on the outside, it would be frowned upon. The fact that the public rarely saw the greater Generals saddened the young man, making him want to grow up stronger than the men and women who used the title and fame for their own selfless gain, only to lose it to another who did the same thing, and thus it was the rise.
The Glimmering knight was his name within ranks and Powerful/unpredictable warrior he was. One of the only people within that didn't study the art of magic religiously to get stronger. He merely used the Longswords that was given to recruits, slaying opponents, winning duels, and impressing citizens. The young man was much spoken of, as one of the region's top prospects, and a hero from his home town to the capitol. Though, there was something different in store for him, after his great 17 years of service, he was summoned. Summoned to his lord and lady. The summon was something he never expected, a small touch from the man in his kingdom known to all as the Celestial Emperor, and he was flourished with an array of great power. It seemed his power wasn't just from his training, but as well,from the father he had no seeming connection to having Celestial blood within him. The young man was overjoyed with this discovery. Though as ritual of his Celestial blood increased in progress, a turn came and hurt his spirits. The Lord of the land would allow the lady of the land to draw his blood. With a bewitched dagger, cursed by a demon. This one cut tainted his spirit and his celestial body shifting his power around and creating a sort of monster from a once righteous and holy warrior. The young man's life delve into iniquity and his power felt as if it were a curse more so than a blessing. This created a rift in what he tried to do and forced the young man to seep away from the place he called home and find a way to exact the vengence he prayed for from the people who create a monster that he believes he is. Through this, a vagabond of a dangerous variety was born. The Dark Angel in Gilded Armor.
Outfits:
❖He's usually within his casual attire (As seen in the picture)
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Items:
❖ Broken Longswords from his training days
❖ A small bag of berries
Other:
❖ [any other information not covered by the stuff above]
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: Song Name
❖ Battle Theme: Song Name
❖ Emotional Theme: Song Name
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2018 4:10 pm
✦Username: Rush And Crush
✦Name:Shasdran
✦Nickname:The Disgraced
✦Race:Dragonkin
✦Ethnicity: Mediterranean
✦Gender: Male
✦Orientation: Straight
✦Alignment: Appears to be Chaotic Good but is actually Neutral evil
✦Affinity: Fire
✦Age:102
✦Birthday: Sept/10
✦Height: 6ft2
✦Weapon: None
✦Magic:
✪Evocation
►Fire Stream◄┃ Rank=C
Discription:- Thanks to his affinity Shasdran can easily manipulate his mana and turn it into fire, which he then shoots in a line from his fingertips and palm
✔Stream Measurements.
→One Finger 10ft long 0.4″ wide
→Two Fingers 15ft long 0.8" wide
→Three Fingers 20ft long 1.2" wide
→Four Fingers 30ft long 1.6" wide
→Palm 40ft long 3" wide
►Pyro Lance◄
Description:- Shasdran uses his mana to channel a spear made of pure fire and hurls it at his target and imploding as soon as it makes contact.
✔Lance Power
→Channeling for one post→minor burns and 5ft knockback Rank=C
→Channeling for two posts→moderate burns, damage, and 10ft knockback Rank=B
→Channeling for three posts→Major burns, damage and 20ft knockback Rank=B+
✖Draw Back
→While Channeling Shasdran is almost defenseless.
►Fire Bomb◄
Description:- Shasdran Channels incredible amounts of mana into his palms before slamming them together causing an explosion based on the amount of mana channeled.
✔Bomb Power
→One post channels 30% Mana. Destroys everything within 15ft radius Burns everything within 30ft┃Rank=B
→Two posts channel 50% Mana. Destroys everything within 30ft radius Burns everything within 45ft radius ┃Rank=A
→Three posts channel 70% Mana. Destroys everything within 45ft radius Burns everything within 60ft radius ┃Rank=A-
→Four posts channel 90% Mana. Destroys everything within 60ft radius Burns everything within 75ft radius ┃Rank=B-
✖Draw Back
→At 70% Shasdran will be fatigued and most likely not be able to continue fighting. His body will be aching and every time he moves it'll cause damage.
→At 90% Shasdran will pass out and will require immediate medical attention, the remaining 10% cannot maintain his damaged body.
✪Conjuration(Mastered)
►Fire Armor◄┃Rank=B
Description:- Shasdran summons an armor of flame that surrounds his body protecting him from physical contact and causing his physical attacks to burn the target. Lasts for 6 posts
►Summoning:Havoc◄┃Rank=A
Description: Shasdran Summons a 7ft2 shell of the Primal elemental Havoc, that requires a host to be active. Thanks to Havoc's size and body he's physical strength and durability is increased by a large amount. (Lasts 6 posts)
✖Draw Back
→After 6 Posts Shasdran will pass out and require immediate magical medical attention or he'll lose his magic and maybe even die.
►Primordial Fire Manipulation◄┃Rank=A
-Description: When Shasdran Fuses with Havoc his Fire turns into Primordial Fire
►Blast Shots◄┃Rank=B
-Description: When Shasdran is fused with Havoc his Flame Lance turns into Blast Shots. Channeling his mana to his limbs causes cracks to appear on Shasdran's limbs which makes his basic attacks release small concentrated explosions that push back and damage his target. (Lasts 3 posts)
►Pillars of Flame◄┃Rank=A
-Description: When Shasdran is fused with Havoc his Fire stream turns into Pillars of Flame. Shasdran Slams both arms into the ground, sending his mana into the ground and creating a crater that will immediately create multiple pillars of fire erupting from the cracks on the ground.
►Fire Breath◄┃Rank=A
-Description: Shasdran shoots a beam of intense flames from his mouth that involves anyone in front of him Causing incredible damage.
Relationships:
❖ Turvid The Champion Of Dragons┃Father┃Alive
❖ Shinnae The Magnificent┃Mother┃Deceased
❖ Iddriass The Chosen┃Younger Half-Brother┃Alive
❖ Frithioss The Fierce┃Younger Half-Sister┃Alive
❖ Naimryt The Brave┃Younger Half-Brother┃Alive
Strengths:
✔Observant
✔Tactical
✔Extremely Selfish
✔Manipulative
✔Very Convincing
✔His flame is unmatched
✔Strong and Tough for a mage
✔Always one step ahead.
✔Always looking after himself and how he can further his power.
Weaknesses:
✘Greedy
✘Grudgeholder
✘Water Based abilities.
✘Prideful
✘Extremely Selfish
✘Enemies left, right, and center.
✘Because of his confidence he could overlook a thing or two, it's rare but it does happen
Likes:✔ Fighting
✔ Power
✔ Savory Food
✔ Blood
✔ Arson
✔ Near Death Experiences
Dislikes:
✘ Peace
✘ Children
✘ Sweets
✘ Laziness
Personality:Shasdran is entirely self-serving, self-absorbed, and selfish; he does whatever he likes as long as it pleases him in some way. He will take whatever he wants and will kill anyone who stands in his way without even giving it a second thought. Shasdran is a murderous sociopath who will do whatever it takes to achieve his goals. Even though Shasdran's nature seems to be malevolent, he isn't an indiscriminate killer. He has no problems killing anyone regardless of age or sex; however, he only kills people who are in his way. Shasdran is simply Amoral.
History:
❖ The Heir is born
There once was warrior tribe from Alsaam that roamed the land looking for the next challenge, the next opportunity for glory, a tribe led by The Champion Of Dragons Turvid and his wife Shinnae The Magnificent. The wondering tribe was never given anything they took what they wanted preferably with a struggle, and they rarely set up camp, fearing they might miss the next great battle. On one of those rare days, Shinnae's water broke and Shasdran was born. "I'm sorry Turvid...Shinnae died giving birth to your son. Her last words were 'Shasdran The Chosen' "
❖ Disappointment
"Doubt is for the weak! Fight your fears! This is but a test of our strength. We will show Alsaam our might! There are strong warriors behind those mountains and they will take our wives and children as slaves! Will you let them?!" Roars from the crowd echoed throughout the land, while weapons slam against their shields in unison. Sounds that would instill horror in any creatures heart, the sound of brave warriors at your doorstep. "Their heads will roll!".
A fourteen-year-old Shasdran stood among the crowd looking at his father in admiration, standing right next to him was his younger brother screaming with the crowd and banging his axe against his shield, before following the tribe into battle.
During the battle Shasdran who was avoiding the actual battle noticed a small girl crying over her mother's corpse with a tribesman preparing to strike her down. "No! I saw her first!" Were the only words that left his mouth, which prompted the man to turn before flashing a sick smile at Shasdran and leaving the girl to leader's son. Shasdran then approached the girl before dropping his weapons on the ground, grabbing the girl and running off into the woods. "Your mother is dead, run! and when you get tired, keep running!"
After the battle, all the warriors gathered around boasting about their kill count and how easy the battle was. "Shasdran,Iddriass how many did you slay?" "4" "....3" "Don't lie boy!" A strong authoritative voice could be heard from behind Shasdran, he knew who it belonged to that's why he didn't dare turn around and see his disappointed father's face. " Your Sword was clean, Your mother died so you could be a warrior. you disrespect her memory. "
❖The Disgraced
"He hasn't spoken to me in years despite everything that happened I still miss hearing the sound of their voice...Why do I refuse to kill?" Shasdran, now eighteen years old and unwelcome in his father's tent. Living in complete solitude, no one talks to him or even acknowledge his existence..."I have to sound the horn."
A loud horn reverberated throughout the forest, the sound synonyms with death. It's source? Shasdran, The Disgraced, son of Turvid Champion Of Dragons. ["I challenge my father Turvid..." The forest was filled with deafening silence before every man woman and child left their tent to see who's the idiot issuing the challenge.
After a short one-sided battle, the tribe began packing their belongings leaving the beaten son of their leader in the dirt within an inch of his life, barely breathing. Shasdran could hear their comments, and how pathetic he was, and how Turvid should've killed him. Shasdran couldn't take it anymore, he finally lost it. Shasdran started laughing with what little energy he had left, and it caught the attention of the tribe especially his father who was close by. "I know why I was born...I was born to end you. To end your pathetic tribe...You think you have won?! I will never die! NOT UNTIL I DESTROY EVERYTHING YOU LOVE! You wanted a warrior?! You'll get one...I WILL MAKE ALL OF BEG FOR A SWIFT DEATH! Your damn family will be sold as slaves! and if they escape they will be tortured!" Having heard enough of his now disowned son Turvid delivered the final blow and knocked Shasdran unconscious. "Lets see how you do that from the lands bellow...Throw him off the edge!"
Outfits:
❖[Work Attire]
❖[Usual Attire]
Items:
❖ Nothing
Other:
None
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: Get jinxed
❖ Battle Theme: In Your belief
❖ Emotional Theme: Hurt by Johnny Cash
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2018 9:00 pm
So, I was going through profiles and I noticed something about your own profile that didn't match up to everyone else's. Every single one of your "spells" are labeled as skill and seem to be treated as such. Given how strict we've been with members so far in how they refer to and treat things, I think it's only fair we ask you to resubmit your abilities with proper wording as spells.
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2018 9:06 pm
Rengato So, I was going through profiles and I noticed something about your own profile that didn't match up to everyone else's. Every single one of your "spells" are labeled as skill and seem to be treated as such. Given how strict we've been with members so far in how they refer to and treat things, I think it's only fair we ask you to resubmit your abilities with proper wording as spells. i understand where your getting at. (but the charecter is from before the reboot. and weamoo said i didn't need to do anything) but if you telling me to change just the naming then ok.
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2018 9:45 pm
DaMetaEX Rengato So, I was going through profiles and I noticed something about your own profile that didn't match up to everyone else's. Every single one of your "spells" are labeled as skill and seem to be treated as such. Given how strict we've been with members so far in how they refer to and treat things, I think it's only fair we ask you to resubmit your abilities with proper wording as spells. i understand where your getting at. (but the charecter is from before the reboot. and weamoo said i didn't need to do anything) but if you telling me to change just the naming then ok.
I'mma tell you right now Meta, that's a dangerous game you're playing right there. I don't care for your sass. I'll just have you remember that I'm the Vice Captain, and I came up with 80% of this guild, its lore, and my personal opinion of your character is that it completely goes against every single idea of what a Mage is supposed to be. But please, keep sassing me so I have a reason to ask Weeamoo to reread over your character and consider whether or not they are a Mage. I will tolerate you posting one-liners in a literate guild all day long as long as I don't have to deal with it, but I'm not tolerating you thinking you are above the person that made the entirety of this guild's story, most of its locations, and most importantly has been rather complacent with allowing you to do mostly whatever you want. You were lucky we even considered giving you a railgun in a fantasy setting. You're lucky we're we've put up with you only having negative things to say whenever we make an announcement and thereby making other guild members feel negative about the guild. Finally, you're lucky I'm willing to let you reword your profile instead of telling you to completely resubmit it as a proper Magus profile.
The reason Weeamoo only does profiles now, and I am not allowed, is because of how blunt and, quite honestly, brutal I am in reviewing them. All of you did not want me to be in charge of looking over your profiles because it was like sticking your hand in a tank full of piranhas, and I did not like making guild members feel that way about me or this guild in general. Thus, Weeamoo took over. But this, this type of response from people like you makes me wish I never committed to that self-imposed rule. And it makes me reconsider my standing in general.
By the way, as of this response, it looks like I am Captain of this guild. Now repost your profile for approval. The whole thing. Unless, of course, you would like to apologize for basically telling me "you cannot make me do anything since the Captain said it was alright."
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2018 10:02 pm
Rah-Do-Sil Hopefully her bio gives a lil more detail about her, though it ruins the whole "enigmatic mage" vibe i was going for. Is there anything else I need to change, i scraped both spells and just keeping the four I have left. Don't worry, I'm not going power-mad and going to ruin your day. As a bit of advice though, for your approval process, we don't mind your character being mysterious and her being roleplayed that way. Our main gripe with things like this is that, at the drop of the hat, someone could go "My character is a world class figure skater! She's lived 2000 years and is full of mystery! No one really knew this though since everyone burned records of her and erased her! She also knows how to use a tank for this same reason." Then it can develop into more and more ridiculous claims from there. You can see how this would be a problem normally, right? I'm not saying you would do any of these things... but we don't know how you roleplay exactly and what to expect from letting you have that much leeway. If we were very familiar with the way you roleplay, we may consider being lenient... but this is a sort of risk that could end badly for us and maybe other roleplayers. You see what I'm getting at?
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