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 Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 9:58 am
@Godstone - Good Idea!
@Allwing - ~eats one~ Yum! Thanks!
@FS - As Always thanks and I am glad you enjoyed it!
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Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 2:11 pm
Just something I've noticed about the stories as a bit of advice. *Saying this in the most friendly way possbile* Try not to make yourself a.. super character. I mean, I like how you are in the story, but the story isn't revolving around you, because it isn't revolving around anyone. You're not pushing it too far, but just some advice for the future: Don't get conceited. Not that I think you will. But.. yeah.
My two cents. ^_^;;
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Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 4:36 pm
fish needs to give me his other two cents that I know he has waiting for my story.
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 12:29 pm
@Fish - Thanks for the advice. I will keep it in mind. Have I already or is this just a warning type thing?
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 1:30 pm
Betman fish needs to give me his other two cents that I know he has waiting for my story. I still need to get around to reading it.. >______________________>; Seaphron @Fish - Thanks for the advice. I will keep it in mind. Have I already or is this just a warning type thing? I thought the whole you-leaving-and-coming-back-a-year-later-and-being-all-serious-about-war and the you-being-super-strong-and-awesome was an indication of things to come, but I don't think it's too much yet.
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 3:59 pm
I never got to read the begining! I don't want to start when it is in the middle, so do you have the previous chapters somewhere else?
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 5:53 pm
xd sorry Allwing, but you're goin' DOWN!!!
awesome battle with Echo, BTW. totally suspenseful. *gives big thumbs up*
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 6:02 pm
excellent i think you need new characters though. lol perhaps in the next chapter you could add some wicked 1337 people...
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 6:51 pm
Koosei xd sorry Allwing, but you're goin' DOWN!!! awesome battle with Echo, BTW. totally suspenseful. *gives big thumbs up* Koosei. Honey. I respect you as the leader of the red armies, and a person, don't get me wrong, but there is absolutely no way someone as obviously bad-a** as me is gonna get beaten by a girl with fans. Although there was that one time Vegas...
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 9:10 pm
Allwing Koosei xd sorry Allwing, but you're goin' DOWN!!! awesome battle with Echo, BTW. totally suspenseful. *gives big thumbs up* Koosei. Honey. I respect you as the leader of the red armies, and a person, don't get me wrong, but there is absolutely no way someone as obviously bad-a** as me is gonna get beaten by a girl with fans. Although there was that one time Vegas...pffft! that's what you think. That cocky-ness is gonna be what'll bring you down. it'll seem like you're winning, then you'll get cocky, and then ... BAM!! face down in the ground getting soundly pummeled! mrgreen what was that about a 'one time'?
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 9:17 pm
..I'm waiting for a fight with me in it! =D
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 9:32 pm
Koosei Allwing Koosei xd sorry Allwing, but you're goin' DOWN!!! awesome battle with Echo, BTW. totally suspenseful. *gives big thumbs up* Koosei. Honey. I respect you as the leader of the red armies, and a person, don't get me wrong, but there is absolutely no way someone as obviously bad-a** as me is gonna get beaten by a girl with fans. Although there was that one time Vegas...pffft! that's what you think. That cocky-ness is gonna be what'll bring you down. it'll seem like you're winning, then you'll get cocky, and then ... BAM!! face down in the ground getting soundly pummeled! mrgreen what was that about a 'one time'?Only to find me reversing the pummeling and coming out the victor without ever breaking my moral stance against beating on a woman mrgreen
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 9:47 pm
Allwing Koosei Allwing Koosei xd sorry Allwing, but you're goin' DOWN!!! awesome battle with Echo, BTW. totally suspenseful. *gives big thumbs up* Koosei. Honey. I respect you as the leader of the red armies, and a person, don't get me wrong, but there is absolutely no way someone as obviously bad-a** as me is gonna get beaten by a girl with fans. Although there was that one time Vegas...pffft! that's what you think. That cocky-ness is gonna be what'll bring you down. it'll seem like you're winning, then you'll get cocky, and then ... BAM!! face down in the ground getting soundly pummeled! mrgreen what was that about a 'one time'?Only to find me reversing the pummeling and coming out the victor without ever breaking my moral stance against beating on a woman mrgreen ch! as if that would be possible. I NEVER give up! Not without a sound pwning, and I doubt you'd be able to do that.
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Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 10:08 pm
Koosei Allwing Koosei Allwing Koosei xd sorry Allwing, but you're goin' DOWN!!! awesome battle with Echo, BTW. totally suspenseful. *gives big thumbs up* Koosei. Honey. I respect you as the leader of the red armies, and a person, don't get me wrong, but there is absolutely no way someone as obviously bad-a** as me is gonna get beaten by a girl with fans. Although there was that one time Vegas...pffft! that's what you think. That cocky-ness is gonna be what'll bring you down. it'll seem like you're winning, then you'll get cocky, and then ... BAM!! face down in the ground getting soundly pummeled! mrgreen what was that about a 'one time'?Only to find me reversing the pummeling and coming out the victor without ever breaking my moral stance against beating on a woman mrgreen ch! as if that would be possible. I NEVER give up! Not without a sound pwning, and I doubt you'd be able to do that. You never know, I might just charm you away from the Forsaken one and have you forfeit in my arms. rofl
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Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 4:26 am
@Fish - You are right that is foreshadowing of something, but I am definitly not the strongest one in the upcoming fights. I think you will rather enjoy yours. rofl
@Sherriff - I just send it through PM to those who want to read it. I will send it too you in a bit.
@Koosei - Thank you!
@abgpieceofcheese - Yeah, I do need a new character, but I already know when the come in and that is the chapter after the end of the tournament. Not saying who it is though so all of you keep a look out if you arent already in it.
@Betman - You will have to wait awhile longer it isnt in the next chapter. Sorry!
@Koosei and Alwing - rofl That was great! Just what I needed tofay! (i'm sick) Only good thing about this is that I will be able to work on the story for a good amount of time today!
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