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 Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 8:02 pm
The poetry was good and I absolutely loved the story! I can't wait to read more! biggrin
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 8:05 pm
wow o.0 thats incredible, way better then i could ever do ^_^
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Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 2:21 pm
Thanks but I bet anyone could do better than me. whee
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Posted: Mon Sep 10, 2007 6:44 pm
((bump slash moo. Kidding))
Can I just say that having Writers Block is making me loose brain cells, and its melting the other half of my brain?
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Posted: Wed Sep 12, 2007 7:26 pm
HELP!
i have to do an essay about how a life of a bird would be
PM me if anii one has anii ideas pliis
it's due nexx er
Wednesdaii
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Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2007 7:53 pm
I'm just so bored I could sing!
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 10:43 pm
((I hate writers block... stare scream scream scream scream stare stare sorry about that))
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Posted: Sat Oct 13, 2007 1:14 pm
Your poems are very nice.
I just think if you wanted to make it better, in my opinion, when you repeat yourself too many times, it almost messes up the flow of the poem. So maybe place in two different repeated lines so one doesn't hog up all the space.
<3;
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Posted: Sat Oct 13, 2007 7:28 pm
Thank you for your advice! blaugh
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Posted: Sun Dec 09, 2007 3:03 pm
here's mine (nothing special though)
The Lake That Sings
During the night I walk to the lake
To find a girl with wings.
Her silver hair shines through the night.
She is the lake that sings.
Her voice is calm.
It tinkles like chimes
It flows past you like good times
She is the lake that sings.
She welcomes me
With songs that ring
That break the darkness as she sings.
She is the lake that sings.
During the night I walk to the lake
To find a girl with wings.
Her silver hair shines through the night.
She is the lake that sings.
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Posted: Sun Dec 09, 2007 4:16 pm
one of my favorite lines is this
Legends fade and time turns,
History paints new stories to learn,
but i would change stories to lessons.
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Posted: Sat Dec 22, 2007 4:53 pm
Funny if you think about it it should be both. Lessons from mistakes we have made and stories of the things that have happened.
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Posted: Sun Dec 23, 2007 5:54 pm
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Posted: Thu Jan 31, 2008 5:58 pm
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