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 Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 3:51 pm
Durrtyboi O.G. Kz Durrtyboi O.G. Kz Durrtyboi, I always thought you were a skilled emcee, when you aren't all trying to use those big words that don't flow. xp yea thats because im tryna change up a lil bit from the norm Whats the point of changing worse? ninja no point i just feel the need to change I gotcha.
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 10:09 pm
O.G. Kz This b***h is an ametuer, He always digs out whack rhymmes, Ima call him a scavenger/ Cause out of all the bars in the world - Durrtyboi bites off the dead ones, I'll (be happy to) teach you how to spit like a real emcee, I flow like 6 sub-machine guns/ ***** was spittin somethin' irrelevant, don't know what it waaaaas, Oh! Probably something along the lines of "No Maaaaaas"/ (Sup Ese) xd ***** your rhymes so shitty, whenever you spit you get cavities, Call me a dentist, I'll give you a good cleanin' gauranteed/ About time you see the light, get a spiritual rebirth, ***** need to take lessons, get his rhymes some lyrical work/ You call yourself a man, but you a b***h, (you some type of) transexual man whore, *That's* Probably da reason you ain't ever ******** a b***h before/ Oh damn, knockout get this ***** some medical attention, If he went to a school for rap, spittn' like that, he'd get eternal detention/ Spittin' all this s**t, you gettin' stopped, Like I was a cop, and you passed a red light when I dropped/ Then maybe go to jail, (The sad part,) he'd try to sell rhymes for money, and he *still* can't make bail/ Okay. So I reworked it a little. The words with the parentheses around them were words I felt could have been omitted for a better flow. *'s indicate words I think should have been there. Overall, it was alright. The bar about him being a transexual man whore was something I would have liked to see ellaborated on, but like the rest of the bars after it, they felt like incomplete thoughts. That's just my take, though. Could have been stronger, could have been weaker. Durrtyboi ok ok he said hes takin his spot back allow me to recapitulate/ after you get beat the second time you aint comin back so you'll be better off if you desintegrate/ watch me as i pentetrate your cerebrum faster than Shaq takin it to the hole/ don't try me cuz i'll have ya eatin from a tube (in you), stuck in the bed watchin your wack home videos/ i'll leave you with more holes than a room full of hos/ get off the bus and walk the line i gets my johnny cash on but call me jim crow/ homie im the truth your skills are just hyperboles/ he went to the clinic and found out this verse had him burnin lookin like an anomaly/ ima make a ghost of this ***** ima have to call the shaman king/ the spiritual forces are tellin me my damage to k.z is critical/ just look at it and notice the *kid's* centerfold/ O.g kz (is layed outt him) and the last b***h to battle me is lookin identical/ kz winnin? ha thats comedical/ cuz unlike his meat this boi is unbeatable/ The closing line was FUNNY AS ********. But again, you suffer from inconsistent flow, somewhere around the Johnny Cash line. But again, you manage to pull off another win. I added some words with the *'s and put some thought in as to where words could have been omitted with the parentheses. The holes + ho's thing was the only line that didn't sit well with me. Maybe it's because they're too obvious for matches. You could have done better with that one. Vote: Durrtyboi
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 12:16 am
Vedic O.G. Kz This b***h is an ametuer, He always digs out whack rhymmes, Ima call him a scavenger/ Cause out of all the bars in the world - Durrtyboi bites off the dead ones, I'll (be happy to) teach you how to spit like a real emcee, I flow like 6 sub-machine guns/ ***** was spittin somethin' irrelevant, don't know what it waaaaas, Oh! Probably something along the lines of "No Maaaaaas"/ (Sup Ese) xd ***** your rhymes so shitty, whenever you spit you get cavities, Call me a dentist, I'll give you a good cleanin' gauranteed/ About time you see the light, get a spiritual rebirth, ***** need to take lessons, get his rhymes some lyrical work/ You call yourself a man, but you a b***h, (you some type of) transexual man whore, *That's* Probably da reason you ain't ever ******** a b***h before/ Oh damn, knockout get this ***** some medical attention, If he went to a school for rap, spittn' like that, he'd get eternal detention/ Spittin' all this s**t, you gettin' stopped, Like I was a cop, and you passed a red light when I dropped/ Then maybe go to jail, (The sad part,) he'd try to sell rhymes for money, and he *still* can't make bail/ Okay. So I reworked it a little. The words with the parentheses around them were words I felt could have been omitted for a better flow. *'s indicate words I think should have been there. Overall, it was alright. The bar about him being a transexual man whore was something I would have liked to see ellaborated on, but like the rest of the bars after it, they felt like incomplete thoughts. That's just my take, though. Could have been stronger, could have been weaker. Durrtyboi ok ok he said hes takin his spot back allow me to recapitulate/ after you get beat the second time you aint comin back so you'll be better off if you desintegrate/ watch me as i pentetrate your cerebrum faster than Shaq takin it to the hole/ don't try me cuz i'll have ya eatin from a tube (in you), stuck in the bed watchin your wack home videos/ i'll leave you with more holes than a room full of hos/ get off the bus and walk the line i gets my johnny cash on but call me jim crow/ homie im the truth your skills are just hyperboles/ he went to the clinic and found out this verse had him burnin lookin like an anomaly/ ima make a ghost of this ***** ima have to call the shaman king/ the spiritual forces are tellin me my damage to k.z is critical/ just look at it and notice the *kid's* centerfold/ O.g kz (is layed outt him) and the last b***h to battle me is lookin identical/ kz winnin? ha thats comedical/ cuz unlike his meat this boi is unbeatable/ The closing line was FUNNY AS ********. But again, you suffer from inconsistent flow, somewhere around the Johnny Cash line. But again, you manage to pull off another win. I added some words with the *'s and put some thought in as to where words could have been omitted with the parentheses. The holes + ho's thing was the only line that didn't sit well with me. Maybe it's because they're too obvious for matches. You could have done better with that one. Vote: Durrtyboi reason why i said eatin through a TUBE in YOU is because the website YOUTUBE people put there home videos on that website ya feel me but i get ya and that holes+hos line was obvious but it was supposed to be funny
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 12:45 am
Durrtyboi reason why i said eatin through a TUBE in YOU is because the website YOUTUBE people put there home videos on that website ya feel me but i get ya and that holes+hos line was obvious but it was supposed to be funny Oh cool. Something you might wanna do, though, is notate your jokes that people might not get. I know you might be like, '******** them, if they're smart, they'll get it,' but really, it's your responsibility to let us know what you're talking about. Durrtyboi don't try me cuz i'll have ya eatin from a 'tube' in 'you', stuck in the bed watchin your 'wack home videos'/ Something I picked up while battling in chatrooms. When people know what you're talking about, it'll add power to your punches.
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 12:51 am
Vedic Durrtyboi reason why i said eatin through a TUBE in YOU is because the website YOUTUBE people put there home videos on that website ya feel me but i get ya and that holes+hos line was obvious but it was supposed to be funny Oh cool. Something you might wanna do, though, is notate your jokes that people might not get. I know you might be like, '******** them, if they're smart, they'll get it,' but really, it's your responsibility to let us know what you're talking about. Durrtyboi don't try me cuz i'll have ya eatin from a 'tube' in 'you', stuck in the bed watchin your 'wack home videos'/ Something I picked up while battling in chatrooms. When people know what you're talking about, it'll add power to your punches. yea i thought about doing a whole explanation of my verse so everyne'll know what im talkin bout i might just do that anyway
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 1:10 am
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 11:42 am
My vote goes to durrty he killed kz all his metaphors were true and on point, and his punches hit hard as hell. Kz your verse was lacking something that I quite can't put my finger on, but because of that you lost.
VOTE: Durrtyboi
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 11:56 am
Well thats another win under my belt K.O 3-0 Durrty Wins Fatality.
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 1:05 pm
Alright I'm through ******** with you for a while.
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 1:22 pm
O.G. Kz Alright I'm through ******** with you for a while. im superior b***h bow down nah just kiddin but good battle tho
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