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 Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 5:40 pm
B.N.A.P.Hime Scathach13 B.N.A.P.Hime Scathach13 B.N.A.P.Hime Oh! I loved it! You're right, it was different than the other parts you wrote, but I loved the witty, sarcastic humor to it. 3nodding I can't wait til you post this! Oh, and I have an idea for Riku. What if you had him trying to find a way to get Sora back into his own time? (I have no idea how, but I'll let you worry about that wink ) Like, you could flash back and forth from Sora and Riku, and carry on their story lines, and then somehow towards the end, have them intertwine together. You know what I'm saying? It's hard to explain...but it's your story, so you do what you want with it. You're doing great so far! heart That's just about it. *nods* You got it. ^^ Still, Sora's... well, what's going on with him, will probably take up at LEAST two thirds of the story. It's kinda funny... I've never written in Riku's POV before, yet a large part of it is written in it... The past one, I mean? So I'm not totally sure if I'm doing it right or not... confused Don't worry so much! I'm sure it'll be great! 3nodding One thing that I'm looking forward too - Riku going and asking Sora!2 for a sparring match, having NO IDEA... just HOW BADLY... he would lose... And then Sora!2 acts all embarrised and says no... And Riku keeps pressuring him... So he tries to go easy on him, but isn't willing to be bad on purpose, and... Riku has a hissy fit when he loses in about under a minute. Said minute contains Sora mostly blocking and doging with an awkward, embarrissed smile on his face. That's gonna be great! I'd love to read that, cuz I just started a new game on expert mode, and you know how you can spare Tidus, Wakka, Selphie and Riku in the beginning? Well, I can beat everyone except for Riku! stressed So, reading that will be sweet revenge. xd My record against Riku by the end of the first day was 0-100, my favor... ^^" (it stopped recording after that...) The next day I raced him 99 times, reciving 99 Pretty Stones and uh... *coughs* ...In any case, just his reaction to Sora beating him so effortlessly... And then the younger Sora beggs him to teach him, and Sora!2's like, "No one taught me... sweatdrop "
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Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 8:11 pm
Scathach13 B.N.A.P.Hime Scathach13 B.N.A.P.Hime Scathach13 B.N.A.P.Hime Oh! I loved it! You're right, it was different than the other parts you wrote, but I loved the witty, sarcastic humor to it. 3nodding I can't wait til you post this! Oh, and I have an idea for Riku. What if you had him trying to find a way to get Sora back into his own time? (I have no idea how, but I'll let you worry about that wink ) Like, you could flash back and forth from Sora and Riku, and carry on their story lines, and then somehow towards the end, have them intertwine together. You know what I'm saying? It's hard to explain...but it's your story, so you do what you want with it. You're doing great so far! heart That's just about it. *nods* You got it. ^^ Still, Sora's... well, what's going on with him, will probably take up at LEAST two thirds of the story. It's kinda funny... I've never written in Riku's POV before, yet a large part of it is written in it... The past one, I mean? So I'm not totally sure if I'm doing it right or not... confused Don't worry so much! I'm sure it'll be great! 3nodding One thing that I'm looking forward too - Riku going and asking Sora!2 for a sparring match, having NO IDEA... just HOW BADLY... he would lose... And then Sora!2 acts all embarrised and says no... And Riku keeps pressuring him... So he tries to go easy on him, but isn't willing to be bad on purpose, and... Riku has a hissy fit when he loses in about under a minute. Said minute contains Sora mostly blocking and doging with an awkward, embarrissed smile on his face. That's gonna be great! I'd love to read that, cuz I just started a new game on expert mode, and you know how you can spare Tidus, Wakka, Selphie and Riku in the beginning? Well, I can beat everyone except for Riku! stressed So, reading that will be sweet revenge. xd My record against Riku by the end of the first day was 0-100, my favor... ^^" (it stopped recording after that...) The next day I raced him 99 times, reciving 99 Pretty Stones and uh... *coughs* ...In any case, just his reaction to Sora beating him so effortlessly... And then the younger Sora beggs him to teach him, and Sora!2's like, "No one taught me... sweatdrop " Oh, I never even thought of that. Little Sora meeting an older version of himself...that'd be so weird. eek I don't know why, but I just didn't think about Little Sora being there the same time as Big Sora. sweatdrop Are you gonna have the parents in there, too?
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 9:33 am
B.N.A.P.Hime Scathach13 B.N.A.P.Hime Scathach13 B.N.A.P.Hime Don't worry so much! I'm sure it'll be great! 3nodding One thing that I'm looking forward too - Riku going and asking Sora!2 for a sparring match, having NO IDEA... just HOW BADLY... he would lose... And then Sora!2 acts all embarrised and says no... And Riku keeps pressuring him... So he tries to go easy on him, but isn't willing to be bad on purpose, and... Riku has a hissy fit when he loses in about under a minute. Said minute contains Sora mostly blocking and doging with an awkward, embarrissed smile on his face. That's gonna be great! I'd love to read that, cuz I just started a new game on expert mode, and you know how you can spare Tidus, Wakka, Selphie and Riku in the beginning? Well, I can beat everyone except for Riku! stressed So, reading that will be sweet revenge. xd My record against Riku by the end of the first day was 0-100, my favor... ^^" (it stopped recording after that...) The next day I raced him 99 times, reciving 99 Pretty Stones and uh... *coughs* ...In any case, just his reaction to Sora beating him so effortlessly... And then the younger Sora beggs him to teach him, and Sora!2's like, "No one taught me... sweatdrop " Oh, I never even thought of that. Little Sora meeting an older version of himself...that'd be so weird. eek I don't know why, but I just didn't think about Little Sora being there the same time as Big Sora. sweatdrop Are you gonna have the parents in there, too? If they are, it'll be extremely minor and names won't be mentioned - I hate making up new(ish) charecters when I don't have to... xp Speaking of which, Sora was about... say, an inch or so taller than Kairi in KH1... less, I think. Then I looked over that scene in Halloween Town where he imagines dancing with her, and compared the heights - and I would say that he's... about the same height as Riku now, maybe a little taller, so that's where I got the 'measurements' for that. sweatdrop Yeah, the interaction between the two Sora's is going to be... interesting. Sooner or later, though, younger Sora's going to start feeling all bitter and inadicuite and in general less-than than his older self... And of course, Sora!2 is not going to have any idea... So it'll be rather angsty on his end; this will have the side-affect of him realising how he feels for Riku, though, now that there's some (very) genuine competition on the scene. Which is good. ...What I'm waiting for is Sora to mess up and go all Anti. twisted: ...And COMPLETELY FREAK RIKU AND SORA OUT... Ah yes - Comedy, Romance, Angst, Drama-- You'll laugh! You'll Cry! You'll Try To Kill Me! Hurray!
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 12:31 pm
I'd draw it but i don't have a scanner emo but i am kinda good on paint here is something i did a lil while back  and this isn't that good but it's kinda cute sweatdrop 
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 12:40 pm
The first one is very cute! But something to keep in mind in this story is that this Sora - the one I generally write - is not very, um... Uke-ish.
...Like me, he looks like an uke, but in his mind...? *coughs* Muhahaha. It gives me a very eeeeeeeevil advantage over my koibito who's the opposite. twisted ...But then she just goes and tickles me and I fall over K.O.d, essentially. sweatdrop
...But I digress. The point is that he's going to be more dominant than Riku in a lot of ways - he's more confident and experienced, in life, fighting, and other matters... But at the same time, this Riku still has that cocky arrogance, so it'll be interesting to see how they interact. In any case, Sora's deffinitly going to be more open about his... interest in Riku, as he already knows how the silver-head feels. ...'Course, Riku doesn't know that at first. xd
By the way, I have another sample from the SoraxRiku scene, if anyone wants it - I'd post it, but I'm pretty damn sure it breaks the pg-13 rule, though... it's still... technically... making out... I mean, they still have pants on, and Sora's fully dressed... ninja
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 3:30 pm
Scathach13 The first one is very cute! But something to keep in mind in this story is that this Sora - the one I generally write - is not very, um... Uke-ish. ...Like me, he looks like an uke, but in his mind...? *coughs* Muhahaha. It gives me a very eeeeeeeevil advantage over my koibito who's the opposite. twisted ...But then she just goes and tickles me and I fall over K.O.d, essentially. sweatdrop ...But I digress. The point is that he's going to be more dominant than Riku in a lot of ways - he's more confident and experienced, in life, fighting, and other matters... But at the same time, this Riku still has that cocky arrogance, so it'll be interesting to see how they interact. In any case, Sora's deffinitly going to be more open about his... interest in Riku, as he already knows how the silver-head feels. ...'Course, Riku doesn't know that at first. xd By the way, I have another sample from the SoraxRiku scene, if anyone wants it - I'd post it, but I'm pretty damn sure it breaks the pg-13 rule, though... it's still... technically... making out... I mean, they still have pants on, and Sora's fully dressed... ninja Ooh, I want it! How do I get it?
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 3:55 pm
B.N.A.P.Hime Scathach13 The first one is very cute! But something to keep in mind in this story is that this Sora - the one I generally write - is not very, um... Uke-ish. ...Like me, he looks like an uke, but in his mind...? *coughs* Muhahaha. It gives me a very eeeeeeeevil advantage over my koibito who's the opposite. twisted ...But then she just goes and tickles me and I fall over K.O.d, essentially. sweatdrop ...But I digress. The point is that he's going to be more dominant than Riku in a lot of ways - he's more confident and experienced, in life, fighting, and other matters... But at the same time, this Riku still has that cocky arrogance, so it'll be interesting to see how they interact. In any case, Sora's deffinitly going to be more open about his... interest in Riku, as he already knows how the silver-head feels. ...'Course, Riku doesn't know that at first. xd By the way, I have another sample from the SoraxRiku scene, if anyone wants it - I'd post it, but I'm pretty damn sure it breaks the pg-13 rule, though... it's still... technically... making out... I mean, they still have pants on, and Sora's fully dressed... ninja Ooh, I want it! How do I get it? I'll PM it to you! ...Actually, I'll just send you the whole scene that I've written so far, so you don't have to go back.
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 4:38 pm
Scathach13 B.N.A.P.Hime Scathach13 The first one is very cute! But something to keep in mind in this story is that this Sora - the one I generally write - is not very, um... Uke-ish. ...Like me, he looks like an uke, but in his mind...? *coughs* Muhahaha. It gives me a very eeeeeeeevil advantage over my koibito who's the opposite. twisted ...But then she just goes and tickles me and I fall over K.O.d, essentially. sweatdrop ...But I digress. The point is that he's going to be more dominant than Riku in a lot of ways - he's more confident and experienced, in life, fighting, and other matters... But at the same time, this Riku still has that cocky arrogance, so it'll be interesting to see how they interact. In any case, Sora's deffinitly going to be more open about his... interest in Riku, as he already knows how the silver-head feels. ...'Course, Riku doesn't know that at first. xd By the way, I have another sample from the SoraxRiku scene, if anyone wants it - I'd post it, but I'm pretty damn sure it breaks the pg-13 rule, though... it's still... technically... making out... I mean, they still have pants on, and Sora's fully dressed... ninja Ooh, I want it! How do I get it? I'll PM it to you! ...Actually, I'll just send you the whole scene that I've written so far, so you don't have to go back. OMG, awesome!! Thanks!! blaugh
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 4:47 pm
o__o
Bow keeps checking in for more samples.
;O
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 6:29 pm
I must say I worship your talent as a writer please when you are done post the whole thing! <3
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 6:59 pm
wow that’s good o_o…are you going to post the entire story here or host it somewhere else?
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Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 7:50 pm
Thanks guys - and I'd host it here, but... honestly, it would break the TOS. The ratings too high. I mean, sure - there's large parts where it would be fine, but the other scene's kind of... shoot the rating through the roof. *rubs back of head and laughs a little embarriesd*
Rights, so - anyone who wants samples, let me know and I'll pm it to you. I just... like showing off scenes before I publish them as fanfiction, to make sure they're liked. And when I say pm you samples, I mean the... the one's that can't be posted here. So yeah...
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Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 4:27 pm
So when you do post it, is it gonna be in FF.net? Oh, and to anyone wanting more samples, I recommend the PMed ones. wink
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Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 5:04 pm
B.N.A.P.Hime So when you do post it, is it gonna be in FF.net? Oh, and to anyone wanting more samples, I recommend the PMed ones. wink My FF.net account is Imay - but don't get your hopes up. I only have one story up there right now, and it starts off rather rough because I didn't know what I was doing back then. Essentially... the whole thing is Zidane - horror, angst, pain, blood, all that good stuff. Wanted to try my hand at an extended one of those... Meh. Anyways, the problem is I made this charecter Alex, for the story, and I have to keep fighting ever yaoi-impulse not to pair them... ><" ...I mean, I still have perverted jokes and hugging and stuff... *coughs* It's just sort of... vaugely suggested... Kinda like in the final fantasy games... *laughs*
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Posted: Wed Oct 04, 2006 4:50 pm
Hey, haven't talked to you in a while. How's the story comin' along? Oh and thanks for all the PMs, I love them. wink
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