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 Posted: Wed Aug 09, 2006 4:59 pm
Critique? heart
- OMGSTAFFORSHIRE! whee
- Why would he be made fun of for his hair colour?
- How can he not care and not get stressed out, but be a perfectionist at the same time?
- He doesn't seem like he has maniacal depression. Regular depression, maybe. But not more then the average teen.
- I don't see how he could possibly have autism. Normally such a thing is caught directly after birth and for their entire life they have speech problems, social problems, and interaction problems. While he may have the latter, it doesn't seem nearly as bad to be declared as autism. It also seems like your simply shoving diseases and diagnoses' at him left and right. Doesn't he already sleep walk? And have depression?
- Myotonia Congenita? Just seems like yet another random disease tacked onto him.
- A vial of his own blood? I HIGHLY doubt he would have been allowed to take any with him. It's unsanitary and probably against some law somewhere. o_O;
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Posted: Thu Aug 10, 2006 3:09 am
Kitara Kata Critique? heart - OMGSTAFFORSHIRE! whee - Why would he be made fun of for his hair colour? - How can he not care and not get stressed out, but be a perfectionist at the same time? - He doesn't seem like he has maniacal depression. Regular depression, maybe. But not more then the average teen. - I don't see how he could possibly have autism. Normally such a thing is caught directly after birth and for their entire life they have speech problems, social problems, and interaction problems. While he may have the latter, it doesn't seem nearly as bad to be declared as autism. It also seems like your simply shoving diseases and diagnoses' at him left and right. Doesn't he already sleep walk? And have depression? - Myotonia Congenita? Just seems like yet another random disease tacked onto him. - A vial of his own blood? I HIGHLY doubt he would have been allowed to take any with him. It's unsanitary and probably against some law somewhere. o_O; -*Is guessing you live near there XD* -From my experince at school ginger people always get poked fun of (At least at the schools I when to) -I didn't think the vial of blood thing was that weird ^_^; -All other points taken int oconsideration, some changes may need to be changed after the current Threadaversary. Thanks for beening the first person to actually critique. 3nodding
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Posted: Thu Aug 10, 2006 7:56 am
More art, why? because I have nothing better to do with my time:  Last time i draw Nicholas for a long time, I swear XD
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Posted: Fri Aug 11, 2006 8:14 am
Nikorasu-Kun More art, why? because I have nothing better to do with my time: Last time i draw Nicholas for a long time, I swear XD No keep it up, I want to see 100% him and everythgin inbetween!!
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Posted: Sat Aug 19, 2006 1:10 pm
HereQuickie doodle for ya
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Posted: Sun Aug 20, 2006 3:59 am
Kimari HereQuickie doodle for ya Aww, thats so freaking adorable. 4laugh *Adds it to the Art post on the first page*
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Posted: Sun Aug 20, 2006 5:30 am
Saying "Hi" 'cuse I can XD
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 2:58 am
I love your character idea Nik, he's cute too.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 8:33 am
Psuedo news postI finally got round the changing Nicholas' Nationality, mainly because, there’s already a number of British islanders, making him Gibraltarian like myself makes it easier for me to role-play as him, and it opens up now opportunities to speak Spanish and Spanglish. Rewrote some bits of his personality too, it kinda contradicted itself in parts, and I wanted to make Nicholas a bit more of an a*****e. Also, more doodles: Nicholas when he was 12(ish) sporting that hairstyle that earned him his odd nickname.  A silly doodle of Nicholas at 25%, already displaying his increasingly feline behavior.  And if any Questers are interested, here's a Beach party in the Rp section. Nenia: Cute as in cute-cute or cute as in cute-hawt? xd
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 9:33 am
Here's a couple of things I noticed after a skim of your concept:
- If he was born on Valentine's day, him being conceived during a Valentine's day dinner is impossible unless his mother is an elephant or there is some sort of temporal displacement.
- Mytotonia congenita is an allele-based genetic disorder, with the more common form being on a dominant gene. Realistically, Nicholas should have a family history of it even though it's "rare". There are also given drugs for the disorder in the article you linked to, so putting him on a placebo after a plethora of other experimental drugs is inaccurate.
- Sleepwalking and depression of any kind are used quite a bit, and saying that he might have yet another health problem is just not a good idea.
It seems to me like you only read the first sentences of each of the articles you linked to and decided to stick them on your character to make him more interesting. Wikipedia is fine and good, but you should really do more research than just skimming an online encyclopedia with sometimes questionable referenceability if you really want to make a genetic disorder or whathaveyou a part of your character.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 10:41 am
sweatdrop Stupid mistake on my part on the birthday thing. XD
And the that subject of Mytotonia congenita, I added it to him because I had have in real life, and at no point in my life has anything I've ever been given has ever had any effect on it. It's not really a major problem on my part anyway, just random muscle craps.
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Posted: Sun Aug 27, 2006 2:37 pm
I make you Brick xD.
Well, Some things that I need to say xD
1.- I don't think that is a problem the Valentine Day. Well, In Chile the Valentine day is Another day more. Also, the birth of a baby is an excelent Present for a Mother :3
2.- I see that is a rebelds againts his fathers. (Or at least that I understand)
3.- I don't know how the industries of Making games work, But I thinks that you need a lot of Math's knowledge in this, Also making games is not difficult, anyone can make a RPG using a RPG maker, and there are a lot of Good quality games make by this programs.
4.- Also I think, that is very difficult that a Boy (young in this case) can get a work into "Teleworking" without a Degree, But since he get the info By internet is not rare fall into a Trap...
5.- I like you character. I see a kid who doesn't stop until see his dream true, and don't stop to any obstacule, even if that obstacule is his father, a decided young. But, Make an Enemy with that quantity of money is not a big Idea... xD
6.- Have luck!
7.- I make you Brick!! xD
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Posted: Sun Aug 27, 2006 2:50 pm
whee
I did until just recently change the reason he's on the island, from the teleworking thing.
i know games require a lot of maths to program, but he didn't want to do that, just desgin the characters in the games and all other things inbetween, i really should empathize that though, gotaa reword a few bits.
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Posted: Sun Aug 27, 2006 3:01 pm
Nikorasu-Kun whee I did until just recently change the reason he's on the island, from the teleworking thing. i know games require a lot of maths to program, but he didn't want to do that, just desgin the characters in the games and all other things inbetween, i really should empathize that though, gotaa reword a few bits. Ou... So, He want to life only drawings Character? Well If he can win the necesary money for live... It's Okey xD
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Posted: Wed Aug 30, 2006 4:06 am
Just posting to say I have tweaked bits a pieces of my character, I think I've ironed out the creases. I don't think I'll have to change anything, unless some huge unforeseen problem occurs.
I'm considering changing his name, since his first name is the same as the Doctors, I don't see much of a problem, but the staff may see it differently, might change it to Miles or Elliot.
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