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White Water Lilly Vice Captain
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 Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2011 10:45 pm
Azn Shadow Specz Not to be rude, but I have a style that's been waiting for quite a while now. 10 days now. If that is the case, feel free to kindly send the mods in charge (Deil and Cobra) a friendly reminder in pm. Know that though, kenjutsu/taijutsu styles are much more complex and might need an additional few days to be completely examined. I apologise for the wait and if you were to send them a pm (I would suggest Deil since Cobra's on holiday), I'm sure they will respond to you shortly. Thanks for the reminder and if there are anymore concerns, feel free to post in the comment thread or pm another one of us mods.
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Posted: Sat Aug 06, 2011 8:17 pm
I'll take over on this for now just because, these things need to start getting approved, denied and edited. Deil has and always will have the final say and the ability to veto any call I make. Azn Shadow Specz The virtues of a Bushi are: Rectitude (義, gi) ○ Courage (勇, yuu) ○ Benevolence (仁, jin) ○ Respect (礼, rei) ○ Honesty (誠, makoto) ○ Honor (誉, yo) ○ Loyalty (忠, chuu)
___Notes: • Students of this style are honor bound to follow the tenets of Bushido ( listed above. ) • If a student of this style breaks the tenets of Bushido while actively utilizing this style, their attacks will lack conviction. Okay first of all, those tenets are all well good as ambiguous statements of some abstract concept but what do they ACTUALLY mean in relation to this style? And what do you mean the attacks lose conviction if the tenets (one or many?) is their an actual debuff this applies? Azn Shadow Specz Iaidō Simple :: Rank E With a single unhindered and swift motion, a true samurai can unsheathe his weapon and strike at the exact same time. This can provide an elegant, yet effective way to catch your opponent off guard, or as a means to interrupt handsigns. Note that this ability only shows true effectiveness upon the drawing of a weapon from its sheathe. Losing some of its element of surprise after being used once and then resheathed. ( This attack's rank mimics whatever stage of Tetsu no Ryu you are in. For example, if you are in Stage 5, this technique is considered rank A. ) Does the Stamina cost scale with the attack rank? I'd be reluctant (read: denying any possibility) to let any technique no matter how simple to be A-rank strength for E-rank Stamina. There needs to be a stamina scaling clause in here. Azn Shadow Specz A Decade of Peace
Simple :: Rank E A Decade of Peace is at its core a defensive technique, envisioned in the mind that a true master of the sword need not use his prowess to find peace. This technique allows the user to find, through concentration, the point of their enemy’s own attack, diverting it with a quick stab of their blade below their weapon or limbs, then utilizing the flat of the blade diverts the attack overhead, while their free palm presses against the opponents chest, shoving them away, before sheathing your own blade in the gap provided. This technique can be easily paired with a number of jutsu to escape battle, or as bait to enrage your opponent. So you can parry any Kenjutsu attack, named or unnamed for E-rank Stamina? You'd need to not only raise the rank of this to D at least but also add in the following: Jutsu Cost is D + Stamina Rank of the Technique being deflected (if named), if not named (E Rank) Cannot parry a named Kenjutsu attack 1 rank higher than your current rank Cannot parry an unnamed Kenjutsu attack 2 ranks higher than your current rank Azn Shadow Specz Ryūtsuisen [ Dragon Hammer Strike ]
Simple :: Rank E The "Dragon Hammer" is a sword-drop technique delivered from above, targeting the crown of the head or the shoulder of the adversary. The key to the technique lays in the momentum gained from the user’s jump and the free-fall, which is applied to the sword to multiply the force of the sword-stroke. This is fine. Azn Shadow Specz Ryūtsuisen: Zan [ Dragon Hammer Strike: Tragedy ] Simple :: Rank D A brutal variation of the origin, Zan utilizes a sword impalement or plant, rather than a cross body strike. While this vastly increases the lethality of the move on a general basis it does allow for non-lethal takedowns without using the blunt end of the weapon, as a skilled practitioner can target a specific limb or location to assault. Also fine Azn Shadow Specz Turning Swallow Cut
Complex :: Rank D Utilizing chaka to stimulate the nervous system, this cut is reputedly so quick and precise that it can strike down a bird in mid-flight. It is a downward strike the flicked back up into an upward strike, both strong enough to effortlessly slice through even the hardest wood. and despite its graceful motion, its strength should not be underestimated. Note: The section I've put a line through, suggested alteration afterwards. Azn Shadow Specz Chakra Current
Complex :: Rank D After mastering two techniques, Iaido and any one other, a student is capable of awakening the true signature of the Tetsu no Ryu. A Samurai's blade becomes rife with pure chakra that crackles and dances around the blade. A blade properly focused is quite capable of cutting through even the thickest steel. • Active until battle ends or turned off. • Increases to Rank C after learning [ Form Manipulation. ] • Increases to Rank B after learning [ Two As One. ] • Chakra cost DOES increase as rank increases. We've been against lightsaber like techniques from the day the guild was born, this is a flat out denial of the admission of such a technique. Not only that, but it has no maintenance cost for the battle, nor does the chakra have any potential detrimental effect on the weapon. The rank for such an ability is also absurd, especially given the suggested cutting power. Azn Shadow Specz Twin Dragon Strike
Simple :: Rank DUtilizing Iaido, the student of Tetsu no Ryu then follows up with a strike from his chakra current, utilizing the whole of his weapon, instead of just a single piece. This technique is generally utilized to catch an opponent unaware if they dodge the first stroke of the bladed weapon. I am unsure what you're actually suggesting with this technique, the premise isn't clear at all except that it relies on the chakra current which is in a state of denied for now. Azn Shadow Specz Twin Dragon Strike: Lightning
Simple :: Rank DThis technique does not rely on the utilization of Iaido, as it first strikes with the chakra current of the weapon, using the shock effect of being attacked with an improvised weapon, or the opening that follows an opponent’s dodge to follow the initial strike up with the actual bladed weapon. Read Twin Dragon Strike. Same critique. Azn Shadow Specz Form Manipulation
Complex :: Rank C Truly skilled practitioners learn to shape the chakra around their weapon into different shapes. From a lance to a broadsword, anything is possible. However, while anything may be possible some forms will of course be difficult to maintain, requiring extra chakra expenditure. For every dimensional five feet after the first, the jutsu will require an extra three [3] chakra. • Lasts [10] posts No, for the reason expressed in Chakra Current, also no due to the need to constantly quantify size for the sake of figuring out chakra cost, and for the simple reason of forming a chakra battle axe around a katana. What this pure chakra is supposed to do is unclear too. Azn Shadow Specz Pressure Wave
Complex :: Rank CWhen swinging your weapon, you can create a crescent shaped chakra wave, five feet wide by one foot long, that can travel up to about 100ft before dissipating. A hit from it can be as strong or possibly even stronger than a normal blow. Unfortunately- it leaves your katana without a chakra current and you must activate it again. • Max distance: 100ft. • Cannot be reused for a minimum of five [5] posts until Stage Three is mastered. • Can be reused in three [3] posts at Stage Four. • Can be reused in two [2] posts at Stage Five+. No, because it relies on the Chakra Current, because you're essentially firing a Getsuga Tensho which is ridiculous ESPECIALLY at this rank. The cooldown lowering should not even be a part of it. Perhaps if instead of a wave of chakra that can be stronger, a wave of pure kinetic motion achieved channeling the body's chakra and stamina energies into a massive swing that release a shockwave of force that is -1 rank weaker than your current but without a increasing Chakra and Stamina Cost based on rank. If it were this shockwave I'd suggest a cooldown of 5 or 3 posts or a debuff of a single rank in either Strength or Speed for 2 posts after use with no cooldown with debuffs stacking. Azn Shadow Specz Drying Pole
Complex :: Rank C The user extends the tip of their blade with chakra as they thrust. Like a beam of energy, the strike can stretch several extra feet. • Max distance: 8ft. No, for reasons previously discussed, unless you mean it actually extends the blade of metal itself at which point also no, unless you wanted to include a 6d die roll which included a decent possibility of the blade shattering from stress after the technique. Azn Shadow Specz Elemental Chakra Current Complex :: Rank B In place of your chakra scabbard you are able to substitute pure chakra for whatever element you have an affinity for. • Same notes as [ Chakra Current. ] • Primary element does +1 damage above the rank of the user • Secondary Element does the same damage as the users rank • Tertiary Element does -1 rank of damage of the users rank. • Changing chakra elements counts as renewing the jutsu and thus cost chakra No Azn Shadow Specz Two As One
Complex :: Rank BYou are actually able to make two blows at once. A normal sword blow and a chakra saber blow. This second blow is almost impossible to see coming, but can be blocked by a chakra force of the same rank as it disrupts the chakra current’s free movement. • Does not stack with Combo or Speed boost benefits No, maybe if you just made it so the technique was two sword swings at B-Rank for the cost of one Kenjutsu technique and that it could be performed twice per post via Speed or Combo but not Thrice via speed and combo and made it a simple not complex it might be acceptable. Azn Shadow Specz Many as One Complex :: Rank A A complex pattern of blows converge on the target. You may make three [3] blows with the chakra sabers and one with your real sword. All the attacks are real, and they can all pierce your opponent's sword if they are foolish enough to normally block you! • Does not stack with Combo or Speed boost benefits This one would definitely not work with Speed and Combo, once per post no matter how many jutsu uses available. All attacks would have to be normal sword swings with normal swords, and the cutting through other swords takes us into lightersaber territory again and would have to be removed. Azn Shadow Specz Hachiware [ Helmet Breaker ]
Complex :: Rank A This overhead blow is designed to go THROUGH a person, horse, and armor, all in one blow, by utilizing one’s chakra to actively sharpen the blade of your weapon. However, this fine point chakra manipulation creates crevices in the blade of your weapon, effectively making it useless after the fact, as any parrying blow would cause the rigid workings of the blade to crack entirely. • This technique breaks most normal weapons. • This technique can be blocked by an equal level Kenjutsu. • This technique can only ‘kill’ if the opponent is willing, otherwise it merely wounds/incapacitates if not blocked. Remove that this technique will break the users weapon clause, make it that a Kenjutsu of B-rank or higher can block this, the kill/incapacitate clause I fine, of course it works on the assumption the technique hits. Make it a jumping overhead attack. Azn Shadow Specz Kamikaze [ Divine Wind ] Complex :: Rank S By utilizing an [Elemental Chakra Current] as a base, the user prepares (2 posts) additional elemental chakra before performing a powerful stab. This combination of chakra and motion forces a powerful "beam" to be released from the sword. The immediate release of the beam causes a good amount of recoil to the user, often forcing them to a knee. The beam itself has impressive distance, often dispersed only out of sight, or when contact is made with an incredible chakra based defense. The impact of the beam is so devastating that it is often referred to simply as an "undeniable death sentence." Additionally, because the beam is formed of such specific combinations of chakra, it can easily pierce most anything, and prevents the usage of "escape" techniques (substitution and body flicker.) • Does not receive learning reductions. • Can only be used once per battle. • Requires two [2] posts of preparation. ( Can move, but cannot be interrupted. ) • User receives crippling recoil without additional training. • User is left with one [1] Chakra and [1] Stamina Point We do not have lightsabers and we do not have Gundam beam cannons, the premise of the attack is ridiculous just as are the penalties you have tried to use to balance it out. 1 chakra and stamina left? This is flat-out denied. Azn Shadow Specz Serene Absorption
Complex :: Rank S
[Attribute]After mastering and being victim to one's own Kamikaze recoil, the practitioner will begin to develop a method to prevent such return damage. Manipulating their stance and force impact, the user attempts to divert such force by pressing and moving chakra into the ground. This is a rather difficult task to accomplish as it is not simply the act of moving chakra from one part of the body to another, but completely pressing it out of the body without having destructive results. Because of this odd requirement, it is recommended that multiple sessions be completed before one is considered having "mastered" this method. Meditation is one of the main training method used by practitioners. • Does not receive learning reductions. • Must use Kamikaze at least three [3] times before beginning this training. • One session requires two separate sessions of ten [10] posts to learn. ( At least a one day breaks between sessions. ) • Almost completely reduces recoil of [ Kamikaze. ] •After: 1st Recoil Training Session – [5] Chakra, [5] Stamina, 2nd Recoil Training Session – [10] Chakra, [10] Stamina, 3rd Recoil Training Session – [20] Chakra, [20] Stamina (Only three sessions are available) •User is left exhausted after each session [1] Stamina, [1] Chakra] This ties into Gundam beam and removes some of the debuffs which weren't going to make it passible anyway so denied. This kenjutsu requires MASSIVE reworking to be viable. Deil feel free to go against this completely and whack me over the head for being so impetuous if you see fit.
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Posted: Sat Aug 06, 2011 8:19 pm
If you want a custom style checked/approved/denied, please reply to this thread saying with a link to the post of the custom style. If you do not reply with this information you hold responsibility for your style not being reviewed. DO NOT REPOST THE ACTUAL STYLE.
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 6:55 am
Well I don't see the problem with chakra sabers. I mean, that's one of the big things about the wind chakra nature that is completely taken out here. So I'm not gonna even try, you basically just slaughtered down the style to nothing and left it to nothing. So really no point in me trying to edit it another hour or so when I already had to do that for my guild.
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 7:02 am
If a MOD has declined/told you to edit a large number of parts from your style, then that means that it's either overpowered or against some rule of the guild. Remember, it's always your responsibility if you don't want to edit.
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 9:24 am
Azn Shadow Specz Well I don't see the problem with chakra sabers. I mean, that's one of the big things about the wind chakra nature that is completely taken out here. So I'm not gonna even try, you basically just slaughtered down the style to nothing and left it to nothing. So really no point in me trying to edit it another hour or so when I already had to do that for my guild. Hey WHAT THE ******** DO YOU THINK YOUR DOING WITH MY STYLE EH. To all mods this style was made by ME for a guild called Shinobi Nations. He has copied and pasted it PERFECTLY and I refuse to allow him to do so without even asking permission to do so. @Anz If you EVER try to use this style again I will report it to the mods of gaia and you WILL be banned for copyright infringement
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 9:42 am
You don't have the right to talk in that manner to ANYONE in this guild, solve situations calmly and never flame.
Azn, is it true that you copied the style directly?
Azeiel, could you post up a link where you submitted the style?
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 10:12 am
The Criticizer You don't have the right to talk in that manner to ANYONE in this guild, solve situations calmly and never flame.
Azn, is it true that you copied the style directly?
Azeiel, could you post up a link where you submitted the style? Gladly ^.^ The only changes he made were to modify some of the systems to fit this guild all of the descriptions are still the same. Here is the link
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 5:14 pm
Azeiel The Fallen The Criticizer You don't have the right to talk in that manner to ANYONE in this guild, solve situations calmly and never flame.
Azn, is it true that you copied the style directly?
Azeiel, could you post up a link where you submitted the style? Gladly ^.^ The only changes he made were to modify some of the systems to fit this guild all of the descriptions are still the same. Here is the link Duly noted, but I'd be careful, anyone's rights in terms of copyright infringement of intellectual property online especially when constructed around a pre-existing commercial concept or world are murky at best. Obviously my ruling still stands that such a style is not acceptable in its current state and please refer to my quotation of the style above if you'd like at some point to reconstruct the style from the fragments I've left intact.
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Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2011 1:04 pm
Okay, first off EVERY technique will have to be learned through the appropriate amount of posting for that rank. Now, what you can do is add up the training posts for each technique, and say train each stage in ways that will learn you the moves. But you will have to have the same amount of posts.
I am still going over all the style, I do have a question though, do you mind if I edit the formatting a bit? It is kinda sore on the eyes.
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Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2011 1:13 pm
Alright, so let me start off by saying I'm sorry for the long wait guys, but I kinda overbooked myself on TUP jobs and my job hunt IRL, but I'm ready to catch up. Expect at least one reply for every style and style application from me by late Thursday night.
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Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2011 1:28 pm
-o-Havik-o- Okay, first off EVERY technique will have to be learned through the appropriate amount of posting for that rank. Now, what you can do is add up the training posts for each technique, and say train each stage in ways that will learn you the moves. But you will have to have the same amount of posts.
I am still going over all the style, I do have a question though, do you mind if I edit the formatting a bit? It is kinda sore on the eyes.
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Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2011 4:02 pm
TrafalgarHyozo -o-Havik-o- Okay, first off EVERY technique will have to be learned through the appropriate amount of posting for that rank. Now, what you can do is add up the training posts for each technique, and say train each stage in ways that will learn you the moves. But you will have to have the same amount of posts.
I am still going over all the style, I do have a question though, do you mind if I edit the formatting a bit? It is kinda sore on the eyes.
They all seem far, and able to be ranked, but the last stage might require the fire element.
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Posted: Wed Aug 10, 2011 8:51 am
Nothing seems over powered in you style, and seems like with the appropriate cost every thing will be accepted. so you still need to add ranks to everything.
I was also wondering why only two students? The way it was in Ronni Kenshin was there was a master, and a student. There were only two because every time the student became the master, the master died from the student mastering the last technique.(Not due to hate or anything like that, it is just how it happens, of course Kenshins reverse blade ended up just hurting his teacher, but that not the point mrgreen )That obviously isn't the case here since you wanted a Npc to teach two
Genin who can't hope to mastery the style for some time.
If you are not going to use the style the way it was meant to be used in the show (In terms of people able to use the style.) Then why put a number on it at all?
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