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 Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 4:56 pm
my work is in that art of dark poetry this is my newest piece. my spelling sucks so plz forgive that and focus on the poem not the spelling EDIT: i edited it. i did a spell check. -jerksofreshhhh. Craving for death subsided
I've had a craving that can get me sent away
held in the place were men with white coats play
giving those pills that fog the reality in your mind to make everything seem "okay" .
I just wanna taste it, don't you see?
slide the smooth greasy metal barrel in my mouth
place a finger on the trigger and close my eyes
knowing the line of my life and my fate is all in that moment
I can change it all in one simple pull
As i contemplate my next move
my eyes are drawn to my lovers name drawn in the middle of my wrist
for you I shall stay and fight
Live all i can take till I fully break and your all out of tape
take the beating of a life time to keep you mine
With those simple thoughts i slid the gun out of my mouth
placed it in its wooden tomb
only to know that we may meet this way again one of my most popular pieces Slipped into suicide
I'v got a gun in my mouth
The angel of death whispering in my ear
To pull the trigger now or forever thine fear
To suffer forever in a world with no peace
and bow down to the creators of my defeat
For the lust of life I no longer desired to obtain
As the bitter lonely had driving me insane
So I Accepted the words the dark angel had bestowed
letting my lifeless body fall into the dead world of unknown
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 6:57 pm
TheLastPhantomhive_Ciel_ The Jawbreaker "What does it mean to be a good man?" - Descartes I like this song, although i think its more of a country song.. i think folk and country are two different things right? If not i apologize for my error ^^' i learn everyday. And this the type of song (mostly elder adults/)people would listen to. Good job, very nice song and even greater message it carries im my opinion. Country has it's roots in folk, and I guess these lyrics would be appropriate in either genre but the guitar that accompanies it is a simple for chorded structure with a 4/4 beat so it really doesn't fit the model of country in terms of that. Not enough variation or really any "riffs." which is a major part of country. But I appreciate it.
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 7:09 pm
i've never writen a poem in my life. free verse means it dosent have to ryme, right? comment, rate, tell me if it qualifies as a poem. we are born knowing only to want and to need to hate and to envey
but kindness is something we must learn.
we must learn how to love how to give
and how to be kind
this developes slow for some and faster for others
some have learned to be kinder than others and some havent learned to be kind at all
not yet at least
all it takes is a little spark of kindness from someone else
to make that mean and cruel person
kinder and kinder until they love everyone they come in contact with
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 7:23 pm
The Jawbreaker TheLastPhantomhive_Ciel_ The Jawbreaker "What does it mean to be a good man?" - Descartes I like this song, although i think its more of a country song.. i think folk and country are two different things right? If not i apologize for my error ^^' i learn everyday. And this the type of song (mostly elder adults/)people would listen to. Good job, very nice song and even greater message it carries im my opinion. Country has it's roots in folk, and I guess these lyrics would be appropriate in either genre but the guitar that accompanies it is a simple for chorded structure with a 4/4 beat so it really doesn't fit the model of country in terms of that. Not enough variation or really any "riffs." which is a major part of country. But I appreciate it. Oh i see~ Then i was right,kinda xD Anyways, your welcome. Keep writting songs, its a great talent =]
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 7:48 pm
blood_lust26 my work is in that art of dark poetry this is my newest piece. my spelling sucks so plz forgive that and focus on the poem not the spelling EDIT: i edited it. i did a spell check. -jerksofreshhhh. Craving for death subsided
I've had a craving that can get me sent away
held in the place were men with white coats play
giving those pills that fog the reality in your mind to make everything seem "okay" .
I just wanna taste it, don't you see?
slide the smooth greasy metal barrel in my mouth
place a finger on the trigger and close my eyes
knowing the line of my life and my fate is all in that moment
I can change it all in one simple pull
As i contemplate my next move
my eyes are drawn to my lovers name drawn in the middle of my wrist
for you I shall stay and fight
Live all i can take till I fully break and your all out of tape
take the beating of a life time to keep you mine
With those simple thoughts i slid the gun out of my mouth
placed it in its wooden tomb
only to know that we may meet this way again one of my most popular pieces Slipped into suicide
I'v got a gun in my mouth
The angel of death whispering in my ear
To pull the trigger now or forever thine fear
To suffer forever in a world with no peace
and bow down to the creators of my defeat
For the lust of life I no longer desired to obtain
As the bitter lonely had driving me insane
So I Accepted the words the dark angel had bestowed
letting my lifeless body fall into the dead world of unknown these are really good. i like the second one the most. it was very dark & deep. AMAZING!
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Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2011 2:48 pm
iamthegucci blood_lust26 my work is in that art of dark poetry this is my newest piece. my spelling sucks so plz forgive that and focus on the poem not the spelling EDIT: i edited it. i did a spell check. -jerksofreshhhh. Craving for death subsided
I've had a craving that can get me sent away
held in the place were men with white coats play
giving those pills that fog the reality in your mind to make everything seem "okay" .
I just wanna taste it, don't you see?
slide the smooth greasy metal barrel in my mouth
place a finger on the trigger and close my eyes
knowing the line of my life and my fate is all in that moment
I can change it all in one simple pull
As i contemplate my next move
my eyes are drawn to my lovers name drawn in the middle of my wrist
for you I shall stay and fight
Live all i can take till I fully break and your all out of tape
take the beating of a life time to keep you mine
With those simple thoughts i slid the gun out of my mouth
placed it in its wooden tomb
only to know that we may meet this way again one of my most popular pieces Slipped into suicide
I'v got a gun in my mouth
The angel of death whispering in my ear
To pull the trigger now or forever thine fear
To suffer forever in a world with no peace
and bow down to the creators of my defeat
For the lust of life I no longer desired to obtain
As the bitter lonely had driving me insane
So I Accepted the words the dark angel had bestowed
letting my lifeless body fall into the dead world of unknown these are really good. i like the second one the most. it was very dark & deep. AMAZING! aww thank u sooo much that truely means alot to me
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Posted: Thu Mar 03, 2011 2:15 pm
Hears some (i guess you could call it) Poetry from deep inside my dark lil soul lol here we go: :-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:Living Hell Redemption:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:-:
Why do you hurt me?
Abusing me seems right?
You think all of the tears I shed were FOR you?
I shed my tears BECAUSE of you!
The screams and yells of all the pain and agony you put me through.
Cuts, bruises, fractures, concussions; all the things you did to me.
You yell at me, calling me names but all I could do was scream as you abused and raped me over and over.
I used to love you, but then you turned.
You went from loving and caring to hateful and abusive.
Kissing was gentle and love filled.
Now you kiss with force and pain as my lips split open and BLOOD flows out.
You ravage my mouth with your putrid tongue as you cut my pale skin with your hideous nails.
I scream with my hoarse voice for you to stop but you just won't!
'Help! Please someone help me! Help me escape this LIVING HELL!' I scream in my mind.
Why can't this all just end?
Don't you hear my screams?
Do you even care?
Do you know my pain?
My eternal suffering?
Why can't you just see what you're doing to me?
Pain.
Blood.
Gasping for air.
Loneliness.
Endless darkness fills my vision as I finally let the life slip from my beaten body.
Why do you hurt me so?
I cant bare to see your face.
Im moving on to a more better place.
I hope....
I dream...
I imagine...
I anticipate...
...I can leave this hellish place.
...that I can be happy again.
...my life was perfect and that I was able to find someone who truly loves me.
...the day you go to HELL!
My soul drifts on forever in the empty dark of loneliness.
I hope you rot in hell you sick, malicious monster!
You made my life a LIVING HELL!
Then, a light.
An angel bursts throught the door.
He responded to my screams of pure agony.
I hold onto my soul for just a little longer.
The pain still evident in my heart and body.
This angel...
He helps me.
He calls the police.
He beats you down.
He comes to me.
He helps me.
He Helps Me.
HE HELPS ME!
IM SAVED!
IM FREE!
I CAN LEAVE!
My Gurdian Angel has come to help me.
I am now no longer in a hell.
I have been set free of my pain and suffering.
I'm...
...Happy!
...Joyful!
...Ecstatic!
...Loved!
My life is no longer tragic.
I have been set free by My Guardian Angel!
Life will be eternally peaceful.
My soul drifts on.
Im smiling.
Im crying tears of joy.
Im hugging him.
I kiss him with love.
...I Die...*The beginning was an exert from my Fanfiction story "Living Hell Redemption...i turned this poem into a fanfic story lol* **Link to my story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6612905/1/Living_Hell_Redemption***Link to Other story I wrote: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6539958/1/Shattering_HeartsSorry to put so much up...just wanted to show some people my "Dark" works...lol
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Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 10:59 am
O.K here I go,
I lie here only thinking of you
It hurts to think that it was easy for you to let me go
But I still think of you in the hardest times to pull through
And I know you moved on, but I want you to know
That I still love you inside I never let you go
So when you listen to this you know who you are, going around breaking innocent hearts
I see your face and here I go, I think I'm ready to let you go
So Goodbye this is it, now I'm on my own
I hope you know that I know
Who you really are
heart heart
You would have to here it with music( Yeah it's a little bit of a song)
What do you think?
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 3:06 pm
Hey ya'll. I'm entering this in my school's poetry contest. BE HARSH.
Beaten, But Not Broken, Trust
I thought I knew you
But I didn’t know the truth
I can’t believe it
I just can’t admit it
How could you do this?
What signs did I miss?
You scared her,
Surprised her
She could’ve put up her hands and fought
But it was you so she forgot
You grabbed, then slammed.
With your usually caring hands
You still haven’t told me.
Are you afraid of what you’ll see?
Are you afraid I’ll walk away?
Are you afraid of what I’ll say?
She still doesn’t blame you.
Because to her you’re see-through
You keep it all inside
So I didn’t realize
That it was eating, tearing,
But you still act un-caring
You still don’t know
That I know.
She planted a seed of fear
But I will always be here
I wish you’d trust me
Enough to tell me
Because I trust you enough to know
That you will never lay a single blow
On me.
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Posted: Sun Mar 13, 2011 7:09 pm
jerksofreshhhh Hey, My Poets & Songwriters! We'd love to read some of your work. You can place some of your short exerts or some freestyle rhymes if u like.
We'll rate em & comment on them. smile
An original haiku by me:
Hi fellow Gaians,
I've had a great weekend,
now how about yours?
I love utilizing poems in such a way to communicate with others in a new and creative way. If you answer this or not, just thank you for reading. Oh, by the way, It's Sunday now! D:
~Anthony
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Posted: Mon Mar 14, 2011 8:06 am
ACMaestro42 jerksofreshhhh Hey, My Poets & Songwriters! We'd love to read some of your work. You can place some of your short exerts or some freestyle rhymes if u like.
We'll rate em & comment on them. smile An original haiku by me: Hi fellow Gaians,
I've had a great weekend,
now how about yours?I love utilizing poems in such a way to communicate with others in a new and creative way. If you answer this or not, just thank you for reading. Oh, by the way, It's Sunday now! D: ~Anthony
That's cool. Here's mine:
It's nice to meet you.
I hope you've enjoyed my guild.
Cause I've enjoyed you.
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Posted: Mon Mar 14, 2011 4:11 pm
jerksofreshhhh ACMaestro42 jerksofreshhhh Hey, My Poets & Songwriters! We'd love to read some of your work. You can place some of your short exerts or some freestyle rhymes if u like.
We'll rate em & comment on them. smile An original haiku by me: Hi fellow Gaians,
I've had a great weekend,
now how about yours?I love utilizing poems in such a way to communicate with others in a new and creative way. If you answer this or not, just thank you for reading. Oh, by the way, It's Sunday now! D: ~Anthony That's cool. Here's mine: It's nice to meet you. I hope you've enjoyed my guild. Cause I've enjoyed you.
Nice. I like this whole "open mic" idea. It makes me feel welcome. By any chance, is this your first guild? Because it definitely doesn't seem like it. smile
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Posted: Mon Mar 14, 2011 4:37 pm
ACMaestro42 jerksofreshhhh ACMaestro42 jerksofreshhhh Hey, My Poets & Songwriters! We'd love to read some of your work. You can place some of your short exerts or some freestyle rhymes if u like.
We'll rate em & comment on them. smile An original haiku by me: Hi fellow Gaians,
I've had a great weekend,
now how about yours?I love utilizing poems in such a way to communicate with others in a new and creative way. If you answer this or not, just thank you for reading. Oh, by the way, It's Sunday now! D: ~Anthony That's cool. Here's mine: It's nice to meet you. I hope you've enjoyed my guild. Cause I've enjoyed you. no, it's more like my 3rd. smile
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Posted: Mon Jul 18, 2011 10:35 pm
This is just a bit from a song that I wrote.. It's called Shadow:
You are the shadow
That surrounds me
In an unsafe darkness
You make my path dark,
And hard to travel on.
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 7:34 pm
This is awesome. I really like them.
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