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Rosepetal - - D R E A M S
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 Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 3:07 pm
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Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 5:44 pm
...Wha? Toshiro? He is approved. mrgreen
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Rosepetal - - D R E A M S
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Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 5:47 pm
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 2:10 pm
Username: Wire_Colossus
Character Name: Zaraki Fong
Race: Shinigami
Age: 21
Birthday (optional): unknown
Height: 7ft 4
Weight (optional): 240 pounds
Eyes: yellow
Hair: dark blue
Unusual Features: He has no right arm, since he was born without it.
Blood Type (optional): unknown
Affiliation: Division
Squad: 11
Rank: lieutenant
Relatives (optional): His Mother: Soi Fong, and his Father: Kenpachi Zaraki
Appearance: Imagine a younger looking Kenpachi Zaraki but without the scar, with hair like that of Soi Fong, and of a very lean build. He has no right arm, since he was born without one.
Personality: Relaxed and gentle, but in battle is a demon that is hard to stop, and even harder to calm down.
History: He is the child of his mother’s shame. His mother once became way too drunk in a bar, and paired up with the captain of squad 11 at the time. Her shame was made all too complete when young Zaraki was born. Has spent his life trying to make his mom happy enough to be nice to him, but, he’s never had success.
Zanpakuto Name: Maruchitasuku ((multitask))
Sealed State: A multi-tool with a 4inch blade
Zanpakuto Spirit: a giant squid
Release: Kettei, Maruchitasuku! ((Decide, Multitask!))
Shikai: He opens the multi-tool and points the blade to his shoulder. Then multi tool transforms while still in his grasp into a mechanical right arm that attaches to his shoulder.
Shikai Abilities: The mechanical arm has hundreds of parts that you don’t see, and as a result the arm seems to only have the function of being an arm, but in reality it has over 20 different functions, many of which are helpful in battle. Among them are grenade launcher, sword, ball and chain, hand, grappling hook, and several others.
Bankai (optional): none
Bankai Abilities: none
Kido: none
Hoho: none
Other Information: in battle he’s hard to deal with, since not many can handle this guy’s Jack of all trades style zanpakuto.
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 4:17 pm
Well I think it's good so far. But what does it mean when it says ((multitask))? sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 4:21 pm
Exactly that. Multitask. as in do multiple tasks at the same time.
The name came first, not the zanpakuto's form or powers. And besides, I really, really didn't want to be doing a lot of copy and pasting just to put the zanpakuto's name into a post.
And the form is actually complete.
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 4:25 pm
Ooooh! In that case, approved! 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 4:40 pm
Yes!!!!
Know what would be fun? Having someone challenge Zaraki to a fight thinking he's an easy opponent because he's only got one arm, and then he uses his shikai and end up scaring the heck out of them. rofl
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 4:44 pm
...That'd be funny between him and Hisana when she first comes to Soul Society. xd
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Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 4:48 pm
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Posted: Tue Dec 14, 2010 5:02 am
Siras Cortage Username: Siras Cortage Character Name: Siras Cortage Race: Shinigami Age: 150 Birthday (optional): Unknown Height: 6’1’’ Weight (optional): 150lbs Eyes: Violet Hair: Black Unusual Features: There is a long thin scar running from under his left ear to the corner of the left side of his mouth from a long past battle, but has no other scars on his body oddly enough. Blood Type (optional): Well, this is unneeded, we are made up of spirit particles… But in life I was A- Affiliation: Division Squad: 3 Rank: Captian Relatives (optional): ((If anyone would like to be my relative, just ask me and I’d be glad to, I just prefer permission.)) Appearance:  Personality: Quick thinking, calculating, sarcastic. History: Although born into a poor rukongai family, Siras had no idea what the destiny would be that came before him. He was born deep in the Rukongai, in one of the most violent areas, nobody would suspect a street child to become a Shinigami, much less a Captian. In violence, he had to learn how to take care of himself. He learned how to move quickly, move acrobatically across buildings to escape as well as how to hold his own in a fight. Soon, everything changed. His family was killed and he swore on blood that he would protect those that couldn't take care of themselves. He was zealous at first, but was taken into the shinigami academy at an early age before anything could change in where he lived. There he mellowed, and his quest changed, now he leads Division 3 with a calm collectedness that none have seen in his age at some time. Zanpakuto Name: Kiyoshi jūjigun Sealed State: (Shown in picture) Zanpakuto Spirit: Release: Smite! Shikai:  Shikai Abilities: 1. Kiyoshi suraisu- The blade’s reatsu and his own combine to circulate around the blade and empower it’s slices to move faster and hit harder, even sharpening the blade far beyond normal. 2. Tenshi no hane- His spiritual energy manifests into a surplus of spirit energy which allows him to call on this energy for healing of himself as well as others. 3. Jujigun- When the blade cuts through the air, an insane release of spirit energy charges forward at the target. 4. Hogo- The release of spirit energy creates a barrier between the attack and its target, protecting them from the harm of the ability. Bankai (optional): Mugen no shinsei jūjigun Appearance: The Blade takes on a brilliant radiance, changing entirely into something that is completely blurred out by the white spirit energy surrounding it. The energy will twist and morph into the new blade, his hand encased in the energy. Bankai Abilities: 2. Buki no henkō- The Bankai has the unique property to change into whatever weapon he needs, changing in size and type. 3. Sourushiā- When the weapon lands a hit, it not only damages you, but also makes a slice at your soul, causing an intense searing feeling. Kido: His Shikai ability can indeed heal, but cannot preform healing kido, but has done powerfully well in bakudo as well as hado, only the most powerful needing an incantation. Hoho: He has learned shunpo to the extent required by captians, but he has no need to. Other Information: In his blades zanpakuto state he weilds it backwards to make the power harder for him to weild but harder to predict in action. This is from Siras Cortage. Judge away! mrgreen
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Posted: Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:45 am
Far too powerful. some of those abilities wouldn't be fair even in the bleach universe. slicing into someones soul? tha basically an autohit and auto kill, because if you damage the soul, you've permanently damaged the being that soul belongs to, and in doing so you could cause them to slowly, or rapidly die. Even in a roleplay universe and even for a bankai, that particular power is godmodding as it gives an unfair advantage against any and all opponents no matter how strong they are.
Also, the ability to turn into any weapon needed, for any and all scenarios, that is also godmodding, because that power could allow him to transform his zanpakuto into a copy of someone elses with it's powers and basically cheat.
you must also look at the shikai abilities. The guy who created this character is acting like the character is stronger than Ichigo and Kenpachi combined. The abilities listed are not really acceptable, since the amount of spirit energy required to do these attacks repeatedly would be absolutely insane, far beyond that of either Kenpachi Zaraki or Ichigo Kurosaki.
Face it, the guy who created this character was going for an all out battle never gonna lose type character who can defeat anyone and everyone. He has no weaknesses of any kind listed what so ever, no physical deformities, no draw backs to any of the powers of his shikai or bankai.
Take all of this into account and the character is completely unacceptable.
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Posted: Tue Dec 14, 2010 3:46 pm
Agreed. I like the appearance of the character and the back story, but the powers are overloaded. sad He could frickin' wipe out all of Soul Society in less than a day!!!
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Posted: Tue Dec 14, 2010 3:53 pm
Er... what they said. -points up- XD
Now let's see if this guy can't give us more of an easy-going profile. sweatdrop
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TwiDawnLight Vice Captain
High-functioning Bibliophile
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Posted: Tue Dec 14, 2010 5:18 pm
Hmmm... yeah... thats a little.... much XD, I mean I like the shape-shifting part of the sword, your background story was good, contained detail, You developed a solid personality for the character, however the swords abilities are waaayyyy tooo far in range. If it remained in something like shape-shifting, I think that would be better, or some other aspect.
Otherwise, don't get me wrong, I like the character. biggrin ! surprised
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