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 Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2012 3:21 am
Maiden_Arisa Name/ Yukina Uchiha Rank/ Chunin Village/ Leaf Village Bloodline-Clan/ Uchiha A cold wind blew around the now sleeping Leaf Village, and all that could be seen was the small glow of something approaching. The leaf ninja quickly zoomed in on the glow....and what they saw confused them. It was a small girl in her teens, walking with tattered clothes and a small lantern in her hands. She was dressed in black with half a hood pulled over her head. Stop there!" one of the lead ninja yelled at her as they approached her. Now in front of the main gate. "State your name and business here girl." they demanded. "I'm here to find my clan...." she stated to them. The men looked at her with a confused look on her face, and then quickly replied. "Who's you clan?" they asked now approaching the girl with their weapons drawn. Yukari pulled her hood back, and looked at the men, then suddenly out of no where her eyes changed blood red and three tomoes spun into place. "Does that answer your question?" she said with a grin. Nice descriptions/vocabulary and all, but Uchiha is in high demand. So please show how you'll use Sharingan in a fight.
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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2012 3:32 am
00Rebecca_Chambers00 Name: Haruna Uzumaki Rank: Genin (New Member) Clan: Uzumaki (I didn't see the Uzumaki clan up in the clan put I will apply anyways) Haruna was kept in hiding until she was ready to leave the Cloud Village and return to the village her clan once lived in peace with the ninja in the Leaf. As fas as she knows, she is the last member of the Uzumaki Clan. Haruna approached the gates as two ninja blocked her path. "State your business and name?" Haruna carefully removed her hood she wore as her red hair fell to her waist, "Haruna Uzumaki, my business is to return to my home." Um I'm pretty sure you copied Maiden_Arisa. In any matter there isn't an Uzumaki clan in the guild. Maybe post it as a custom?
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Posted: Tue May 01, 2012 7:51 pm
Name/ Ikadaru Senju Rank/ Genien Village/ Hidden leaf Bloodline-Clan/ Senju Rp sample with this Bloodline-Clan/(will be jonin in this role play) Ikadaru had fought this enemy before.He knew most of their moves and knew what he would do next.Ikadaru made the snake hand seal."wood release : forest devastation", he yelled releasing his jutsu. Tree roots came out of the ground.
Both of the ninja now watching the roots sprout.Ikadaru used the snake hand seal again.Now this time the roots grabed his enemy.Ikadaru jumped in the air pushing chakra to his he punched his enemy causing him to fall the the branched.Making Ikadaru victorious.
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Posted: Tue May 01, 2012 7:58 pm
xI OFWGKTA Ix Name/ Ikadaru Senju Rank/ Genien Village/ Hidden leaf Bloodline-Clan/ Senju Rp sample with this Bloodline-Clan/(will be jonin in this role play) Ikadaru had fought this enemy before.He knew most of their moves and knew what he would do next.Ikadaru made the snake hand seal."wood release : forest devastation", he yelled releasing his jutsu. Tree roots came out of the ground.
Both of the ninja now watching the roots sprout.Ikadaru used the snake hand seal again.Now this time the roots grabed his enemy.Ikadaru jumped in the air pushing chakra to his he punched his enemy causing him to fall the the branched.Making Ikadaru victorious. work on your sample. Some of it makes no sense and it is a bit bland.
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Posted: Tue May 01, 2012 8:02 pm
Other than spelling errors it looked good to me.but ill change it in the morning
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Posted: Tue May 01, 2012 8:13 pm
xI OFWGKTA Ix Other than spelling errors it looked good to me.but ill change it in the morning you have some fragments and a run-on that make no sense to me... I can have another mod look at it if you don't like my call.
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Posted: Tue May 01, 2012 8:21 pm
Its fine.ill change it in the morning.
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Posted: Tue May 01, 2012 8:32 pm
xI OFWGKTA Ix Name/ Ikadaru Senju Rank/ Genien Village/ Hidden leaf Bloodline-Clan/ Senju Rp sample with this Bloodline-Clan/(will be jonin in this role play) Ikadaru had fought this enemy before.He knew most of their moves and knew what he would do next.Ikadaru made the snake hand seal."wood release : forest devastation", he yelled releasing his jutsu. Tree roots came out of the ground.
Both of the ninja now watching the roots sprout.Ikadaru used the snake hand seal again.Now this time the roots grabed his enemy.Ikadaru jumped in the air pushing chakra to his he punched his enemy causing him to fall the the branched.Making Ikadaru victorious. Good Lord. Save Our Souls Problems?: - Grammar - Spelling - Length - Description Come on man take your time and do it right. Give us something to read. Show us that you really know what you're doing. Show us you understand the bloodline. And if all else fails, at least show us some good grammar, spelling and sentence structure emotion_kirakira
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2012 5:05 am
Ikadaru stared at his opponent, intensely.Ikadaru had fought this opponent before in the past,as children.But now Ikadaru is a jonin.He's stronger , faster , and smarter.Ikadaru had also mastered his blood line.His wood release was almost mastered.He had yet to master only one or two jutsus.
"you now" Ikadaru started,"many ninja can tell what the other ninja is saying only by their actions."Ikadaru put his hands together in the snake hand seal."Can you tell what I'm saying"!
"Wood Release Secret Technique: Nativity of a World of Trees"! Suddenly roots came up fro the ground.This jutsu was special,it was made for attack and defense.He would use it to the fullest.Normally when he had practiced this jutsu he just made small roots.but this time he made plump,strong roots.He used his chakra to make on of the strong root grab his enemy by the feet.then using more chakra,he turned one of the roots into a fist and hit his opponent.When his opponent was on the ground Ikadaru turned away.Making the snake hand seal one more time he made three roots cover his enemy,and crush him.
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2012 8:11 pm
xI OFWGKTA Ix Ikadaru stared at his opponent, intensely. Ikadaru had fought this opponent before in the past,as children.But now Ikadaru is a jonin.He's stronger , faster , and smarter.Ikadaru had also mastered his blood line.His wood release was almost mastered.He had yet to master only one or two jutsus.
"you now" Ikadaru started,"many ninja can tell what the other ninja is saying only by their actions."Ikadaru put his hands together in the snake hand seal."Can you tell what I'm saying"!
"Wood Release Secret Technique: Nativity of a World of Trees"! Suddenly roots came up fro the ground.This jutsu was special,it was made for attack and defense.He would use it to the fullest.Normally when he had practiced this jutsu he just made small roots.but this time he made plump,strong roots.He used his chakra to make on of the strong root grab his enemy by the feet.then using more chakra,he turned one of the roots into a fist and hit his opponent.When his opponent was on the ground Ikadaru turned away.Making the snake hand seal one more time he made three roots cover his enemy,and crush him. ok i will break it down to you. - you have a lot of short sentences. EX. - But now Ikadaru is a jo unin. - you have a lot of commas and periods that aren't in the right place, or are just not supposed to be there. EX. - Ikadaru had fought this opponent before in the past,as children.But now Ikadaru is a jonin. (this could be one whole sentence) Ikadaru Had fought this opponent before in the past as a child, but he was now a jo unin. - The post could be longer - You could use more description on your actions. EX. - Suddenly roots came up fro the ground. The ground rumbled, as it cracked to reveal large roots ripping through the earth.- although it isn't necessary, you can try and be creative and switch out common words with others that have the same meaning. - Double check your spelling and try to capitalize the words at the beginning of the sentence. - Make sure you have a space between the period or comma and the next word. - Although some words aren't recognized, gaia does have a spell checking feature. This is used by right clicking a word that has a red squiggly. If you cant figure it out and the spell check can't either, you can check other sources and when you find it out, you can add it to the spell check dictionary using the right click. - also in an example it is fine to auto hit as it is just an example, but when actually posting in the RP don't just say you attacks hit, say that you are attempting to. also try to point out where your attacks are going to land. EX. .then using more chakra,he turned one of the roots into a fist and hit his opponent. Making the snake hand seal one more time he made three roots cover his enemy,and crush him. (try to make your attacks more like the sentences below. Using more chakra, he manipulated the root into a fist, attempting to Strike the opponent in the face. If this was successul, Ikadaru would proceed to try and crush the body with roots That have sprouted around the opponent.- it is good practice to try and give your opponents options at the end of your post so that they will have limited options. although this sounds like ti is helping the opponent, it shows good sportsmanship and how well you handle certain situations. EX. If this was successul, Ikadaru would proceed to try and crush the body with roots That have sprouted around the opponent. If this attack fails however, and the opponentis free of the roots, Ikadaru would be open for a counter attack.although all of this isn't exactly necessary, it something i want you to consider trying to fix before you post again. if you can't do better, i suggest starting with no bloodline, and i will gladly help you by reading over each post and helping you. =)
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2012 8:36 pm
youve got to be kidding.go to hell.
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Posted: Wed May 09, 2012 12:41 am
Name/ Tamekaze Shigekazu
Rank/ Academy Student
Village/ Konohagakure no Sato
Bloodline-Clan/ Zentengan (全天眼; Literally Meaning "All Heaven Eye" ).
For as long as he could remember, Tamekaze's father - a member of the Head Family Council - provided lengthy stories of those that possessed extraordinary abilities within the Shigekazu Clan. One of the downsides to the story that Tamekaze had yet to fully understand was that it was a Dōjutsu Kekkei Genkai that only manifested in a few members of the Clan, in which there were so few of. None that had the "eyes of the bloodline" were currently in existence, however their feats were incredible; as far as how to bring it out of a dormant state was unclear. Tamekaze held a strong belief, though, that he would be one of the lucky few.
Side Note:
The Zentengan, as it progresses through stages of development, begins to awaken hidden abilities in its wielder, so the powers of the Zentengan can vary between users.
Stages
A potential Zentengan user cannot merely wake the eyes at any moment. The dormant Zentengan shows signs of being able to awaken in a potential user. A possible user's eyes will continuously turn azure blue. As well, the user would also feel sudden bursts of energy at random times. If the potential user then becomes strong enough, the eyes will exit dormancy and activate. Despite possible belief, the eyes don't actually awaken in times of stress or extreme emotion like the Sharingan.
Abilities
The Zentengan has the natural visual capability to capture greater light, resulting in the eye becoming a powerful visual receptor. This gives the eye a greater ability to "discriminate" objects, as in it can distinguish objects from greater distances. As well this also gives the eye the ability to visualize more "frames" per second, thus an enhanced ability to distinguish motion and react to it.
While a human eye can distinguish around 10 million colors, the Zentengan can distinguish more colors along the electromagnetic spectrum, due to its ability to capture far more light. This assists the eye in visualizing objects from far away distances (Distances where normal eyes would be unable to distinguish the object from the horizon), and distinguish movement, making it easier to read the motions of a target and react accordingly. This is not to say the eyes necessarily "predict" the motion of the target, but rather because each frame of motion is being captured with such accuracy, the eyes assist the wielder in reacting to motion in the present.
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Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2012 11:20 am
((O.C.C:i am going to make this character if i get accepted so the bio and all would make since))
Name:Chai Uzumaki
Rank:Genin
Demon:Rokubi The Six Tailed Slug
Village:Hidden Mist
Rp sample: chai was relaxing as he blew a few bubbles from his water pipe to keep hydrated he decided to go for a stroll through the forest as he walks through the forest he smiles seeing the sunshine and blue sky above the lush green tall trees as he smells the scent of fresh air he is approached by a tall man covered in brown clothing with a blade in his hand ''heh you look easy enough i'll beat you down with my bare hands.'' he says in a cocky tone. chai calmly contuines blowing bubbles from his water pipe the man then quikly runs towards chai as he then swings his left fist directly at chai as his hand attaches to chais. chai simple smiles ''what the.'' the man says chai then blows into the water pipe as many bubbles blow out of it as the man finally is able to break away from chai the bubbles explode around the man. he grips his sword as he then looks at chai with a smirk a little injuired from the explosion. ''heh looks like i underestimated you kid.'' he says as he then grips the sword as he charges it upwards towards chai simply blows more bubbles as they surround the mans face as he is about to swing the sword down at chai the bubbles explode creating a red powder as it momentarily blinded the man making him miss his attemped attack the man then glares at him in rage. ''alright kid you're asking for it.'' he says angered he was being beaten so easily he then brings out to explosive bombs from his pocket as he tosses them towards chai as he laughs. ''HA lets see you're little bubbles protect you from that!.'' he says. chai simple stands there relax ''Water Release:Soap Dome.'' he says as a dome of what appears to be a bubble surrounds him as it easily protects him from the multiple blast the man glares at him. chai then sighs. ''i suppose i should end this soon.'' chai says as he then blows what seems to be a type of corrosive gas as the man inhales it as it comes in contact with his skin it begins to burn as he falls down on the ground in pain as he slowly dies from the deadly gas as chai sighs walking off blowing more bubbles. as a another man lands in front of him as he was taller and more muscular as he hand a 2handed sword and various weaponry blades around his waist ''i'll be you're enemy.'' he says gripping the two handed blade chai prepares for the attack knowing he'll half to be more serious now. the man swings from his right side the blade at chai. chai then begins to blow bubbles as they pop the man leaps into the air as chai blew bubbles into the air which began to float upwards towards the mans face as he also attemps to slash them they pop relasing a red powder temporarily blinding him. ''Water Release:Wild Water Wave'' chai says as chai gushes out water out of his mouth like a waterfall towards the man as the man smirks. ''Not Bad.'' he says ''though i have tricks of my own.'' he says the man forms a chidori in his hand using the shape transformation he let off a chidori senbon was they all flew out colliding with the water vaporizingi it. as chai then blows more bubbles though before he is able to explode them the man landing out of the sky with his blade attemps a head first slash into chai due his reduce speed from rokubi he barely misses it as he rolls on the ground taking a minute to get up the man then swings in a z shape form at chai as he manages to slash at chai's chest knocking him off balance falling down as the man leaps upwards attemping another chidori senbon chai begins to focus more putting more thought into this now he closes his eyes knowing he has no option but to ask for rokubis help a 1tailed cloak forms around chai. ''heh that wont help you kid.'' he says as he forms a chidori in attemp to slash through the cloak 5bubbles floated towards the mans face as they exploded letting off a red powder for a little escape time as the mans attemped chidori senbon is scattered into trees or other objects. as he then decides to take chai head on as he attemps to punch chai as he comes in contact with the cloak his fist sticks to chais body giving him a small amount of free damage time as some bubbles a little ways behind the man the man is finally able to pull away falling backwards as the bubbles explode as the man falls he begins to feel a little irratiaion to his skin but shakes it off gripping his sword he lifts it up with both hands as he launches himself into the air forward in a attemp to do a downwards slash as chai is able to barely miss the some bubbles spew out from his pipe as they float towards the mans feet they explode temporarily trapping the mans feet in a type of sticky substance as the man is able to succesfully do another senbon as it is more of them at a faster rate as chai goes into a block postion 1 strikes his arm and another strikes his leg. the man smirks finally being freed from the substance chai then releases his 2tailed cloak adding 1more tail to his cloak the man then forms a chidori in a attemp to finish him off close combat style as he charges towards chai releases several bubbles from his pipe as they float towards the mans direction as he then swings his blade as the bubbles explode around him as his grip on the sword losens as it slides out of his hand he gathers raw strenght to punch at chai only to become stuck again. ''What the hell is this!?!.'' the man says angered his taijustu attacks just bounce off. chai releases more bubbles as they go around the man as some hover above he leaps upwards as he attemps to toss a shiruken at him as the man finds it harder to aim directly at chai as the shiruken lands in a tree. his skin slowly begins to burn from coming in contact from chais tailed beast cloak as he is wore down from the attacks and from the accuracy drop and chakra usage chai smiles as he then blows 10bubbles as they float at a meduim pace towards the man as they explode in hopes off taking him out. with all of the damage and chakra usage the man collaspes dead with his skinned extremtly burned from the tailed beast cloak intereaction. as chai reverts back into his normal stage as he smiles. ''thanks rokubi for helping me out.'' he says with a smile
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2012 6:42 pm
Name/ Yami Enzeru
Rank/ Academy Student for now
Village/ Villiage Hidden in the Sand
Rp sample with this demon/
((Applying for Shukaku))
"What do you mean my mom and dad were sacrificed just to turn me into a weapon!?! They'd never agree to it Lori!!! You're a liar!" Yami Enzeru had just found out from her housekeeper/legal Guardian that her parents had sacrificed their own lives so that the Sand Village could have it's very own Jinjuriki, and ultimate weapon. It had been kept from her from the day she was born, but Lori thought she was old and mature enough to know the truth.
"I'm not lying to you Yami. You have Shukaku sleeping inside of you, which is why you've never slept since the day you were born. It's not because of a medical condition. I thought that all those tests done by the Medical Ninja would have convinced you of that. Yami Dear it's not your fault."
"If that's the case then...I murdered my own parents..." She instantly fell to her knees and began to cry like the kid she still was. She wanted to grow up strong for her parents, and just like her parents she had joined the Academy to serve her village as a proud kunoichi. How could she be proud now that she knew she was a monster and a freak of nature?
Then it happened. She had completely snapped and a bit of sand appeared out of her gourd, answering to her sudden rage from the truth. "You could have still lied to me Lori...I stay mostly to myself, afraid to hurt anyone that could become my friend...because I'm a freak!!!" She then felt faint from all of the sudden stress on her brain, and she wound up falling asleep. Lori never had the chance to run, for a single demonic tail formed from the sand and knocked her right through the wall, wrapped itself around her, and killed her on sight. The Shukaku was taking over for the first time since being sealed inside of her. This was why she didn't talk to anyone...she needed no one, and could have no one, but herself. She could only love herself, which is why it's tattooed on her head. Mom...Dad...I'm so sorry....Please forgive me for my sins...
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2012 9:21 pm
Yami Enzeru88 Name/ Yami Enzeru Rank/ Academy Student for now Village/ Villiage Hidden in the Sand Rp sample with this demon/ ((Applying for Shukaku)) "What do you mean my mom and dad were sacrificed just to turn me into a weapon!?! They'd never agree to it Lori!!! You're a liar!" Yami Enzeru had just found out from her housekeeper/legal Guardian that her parents had sacrificed their own lives so that the Sand Village could have it's very own Jinjuriki, and ultimate weapon. It had been kept from her from the day she was born, but Lori thought she was old and mature enough to know the truth. "I'm not lying to you Yami. You have Shukaku sleeping inside of you, which is why you've never slept since the day you were born. It's not because of a medical condition. I thought that all those tests done by the Medical Ninja would have convinced you of that. Yami Dear it's not your fault." "If that's the case then...I murdered my own parents..." She instantly fell to her knees and began to cry like the kid she still was. She wanted to grow up strong for her parents, and just like her parents she had joined the Academy to serve her village as a proud kunoichi. How could she be proud now that she knew she was a monster and a freak of nature? Then it happened. She had completely snapped and a bit of sand appeared out of her gourd, answering to her sudden rage from the truth. "You could have still lied to me Lori...I stay mostly to myself, afraid to hurt anyone that could become my friend...because I'm a freak!!!" She then felt faint from all of the sudden stress on her brain, and she wound up falling asleep. Lori never had the chance to run, for a single demonic tail formed from the sand and knocked her right through the wall, wrapped itself around her, and killed her on sight. The Shukaku was taking over for the first time since being sealed inside of her. This was why she didn't talk to anyone...she needed no one, and could have no one, but herself. She could only love herself, which is why it's tattooed on her head. Mom...Dad...I'm so sorry....Please forgive me for my sins...approved
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