Ello! ^_^ I be crit'in~
The personality is pretty cute, she is pretty cute too~ <3
So what are her likes and dislikes?
What does her wand look like? also, you may want to check the Reaper updates
found here.~ Allot of stuff changed around, so she can't cast magic with her hands, she needs a weapon or familiar to channel any FEAR.
and for her natural ability; what would the summoned familiar look like?
her FEAR is interesting, but how would it work in battle? Cause fear is basically a magical move used in battle.~
She has a rather, dark and odd history, if things are so bad, how could she pick her self up and keep moving? Did she go into a new family/adopted? Did she live alone after the incident?
and lastly is the whole killing and clan thing, it doesn't fit in with the setting in my opinion, there aren't clans out to kill each other or clans at all, maybe small family rivals sure but nothing that big. It is a civilized time with cops (called Bogeymen) and rules.
So maybe she was simply orphaned into a place that wasn't total paradise and lots of arguments and emotional abasement, sure doesn't sound great, but it is an okay replacement for clans and revenge.
sweatdrop Hope I didn't sound mean! D= I wasn't aiming for that...
If you could, can you give some crits to my quest
Basil?