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Panda Got No Game

PostPosted: Tue Jan 10, 2006 4:43 pm


ok, it's not really a FANTASTIC or OUTSTANDING poem but I just made it up now.....and......and I'm really happy!! gonk biggrin

happy, happy people
people all around!!
come see them prance, dance and jiggle
all around the town!!

smiles are contagious
so show your pearly whites!!
feel the sun onto your skin
and see the seagulls take flight!!

now I know what your thinking
this poem is too happy!!
well just read the poem...
and partay with CAPPY!!


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PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 4:40 am


Night Rain55

[Translation]
Give me your hand,
we will be together while smiling,
until tomorrow,
follow my steps slowly,

I will repeat this song,
that will never be erased from my memory,
and I will repeat this song,
tomorrow, whom will never leave my memory,


Cheap and crappy poem, I know. But it wasn't supposed to be a great piece of literature anyway. It's a poem for little children, right right right right? =D If there's anybody else who also speaks French, please point out my mistakes in the poem, that'd be appreciated. ^^ [Cause I suck at French gonk ]

I love the translation, it's sweet. Unfortunately I can't help you with the French, as I only excel at English and Mandarin.

sileeka_h


sileeka_h

PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 4:43 am


-=Cha^0^s_G3ar=-
It's pretty long so I'll just show a few stanzas. Please excuse some of the language. heh

A Face In The Crowd...

A face in the crowd with my hands side to side
I stay hidden from view, like a sly private eye.
Only focused on you, but behind I reside...
to admire... as you recieve, what I, cannot provide.

A face in the crowd, Im a gaze...cross the stage.
Im not in the movie... Im the credits that fade.
Not the ocean, a wave, not the master, a slave
Im not a big burst of sunshine, Im only a ray
not a month or a ******** only a day
Not the gift.
Im the box.
You can throw me away.

A face in the crowd, though you dont notice me
you dwell on my mind soon as I go to sleep
Look at YOU , so discrete...... look at ME , ob~so~lete
a wash up, a has been, nothing more..
so to speak.


It's wonderful! I love your use of similies and metaphors. Would you post the rest? I'm sure I'm not the only one interested in reading it.
PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 4:59 am


LiL_KrNPrINcE
if ur an neon genesis evangalion fan u may think i deprived this from the show's intro song but i did not copy the words only certain phrases sound like the ones in the song its called copyright fools lol

Woot, I love that song, and I love your poems too. If you can produce poems like those easily then that doesn't mean they suck, it means you have a gift for writing poetry. wink
I admit sometimes I pick out a phrase or a song title and base an entire poem on that one phrase/title/word, or form my own interpretation of the actual music of the song.
In some cases I listen to a song in a foreign language and then write my own 'translation' of the song as a poem, ie what I think the song is about judging by the music and the voice.

eg. Pine Tree sung by Kang Ta. (My favourite Korean artist. heart )


sileeka_h
Pine Tree

Under the pine tree
Where a couple used to sit,
Now sits two people.

She sits with her back to the trunk,
Not realising that on the other side
Sits another person.

He sits with his back to the trunk too,
Knowing she's there,
But not knowing what to do

She lays with her head on the roots.
He wants to reach out to touch her hand,
But he might scare her.

He peeks around the trunk.
All he has to do is let her see him
And everything would be alright.

Why did he run away?
She asks herself questions
That she doesn't know the answer to.

Suddenly she starts up.
He whips back to his place
And once again everything is still.

She's frustrated and needs time to think;
She needs the peace the pine tree offers
To sort out the thoughts swimming in her head.

Pine needles make marks into his palm
But he doesn't mind;
Each moment he's near her is another to treasure.

This was where they sat
And thought of each other,
Barely a metre separating them.

And when they both left
They got up and left not a trace -
Not a hair, not a mark.

Each went their separate ways;
She never knowing he had been there,
He never knowing she still cared.


Quote:
Translation of Pine Tree, sung by Kang Ta.

I couldn't tell you after all, even at the last moment I turned around.
I know I can't go back. But it's not an easy thing to do, erasing you.
Everything is still left so clearly that it hurts. If only you can come back.
If it's okay for me to wait.
Then I won't go too far from your side, so I can come back anytime.
Even though the only thing in this empty room now is a picture of you smiling.
Something that makes my heart unbearable is the thought of you crying somewhere else just like me. I look so foolish, but I love you.
If only you can come back. If it's okay for me to wait.
Then I won't go too far from your side so I can come back anytime.
If you are having hard time too, if you are crying like a fool for leaving me,
then will you please come to me now?
Though I don't have much, I will protect you forever.
I love you. Now even the promise of your return is gone. oh~
With a single memory you left, I will live my life without a greed.
I am okay. Only for a while I live in this world, I am letting you go.
A short parting too. I love you. If only you can come back.


Incidentally, I wrote this poem about two years before I read the translation. xD

sileeka_h


sileeka_h

PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 5:00 am


Sildrag
well i'm only good at depressing poems...sorry

That's okay, I love depressing poems.

Actually, they're all I'm good at too. sweatdrop
PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 5:06 am


Forever_Love333
Ummmm... By William Shakespeare
From you have I been absent in the spring,
When proud-pied April, dressed in all his trim,
Hath put a spirit of youth in everything,
That heavy Saturn laughed and leaped with him,
Yet nor the lays of birds, nor the sweet smell
Of different flowers in odor and in hue,
Could make me any summer's story tell,
Or from their proud lap pluck them where they grew.
Nor did I wonder at the lily's white,
Nor praise the deep vermilion in the rose;
They were but sweet, but figures of delight,
Drawn after you, you pattern of all those.
Yet seemed it winter still, and, you away,
As with your shadow I with these did play

Woot, I love William Shakespeare! xD I have a large collection of his works, but it's taking me quite some time to get through it all. sweatdrop He wrote awesome sonnets. My favourite from the ones I've read so far is this one:
William Shakespeare
Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
Thou art more lovely and more temperate:
Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May,
And summer's lease hath all too short a date:
Sometime too hot the eye of heaven shines,
And often is his gold complexion dimm'd;
And every fair from fair sometime declines,
By chance, or nature's changing course, untrimm'd;
But thy eternal summer shall not fade,
Nor lose possession of that fair thou owest;
Nor shall Death brag thou wander'st in his shade,
When in eternal lines to time thou growest;
So long as men can breath, or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this gives life to thee

Okay, maybe it's a little cliche that I like it... But I do anyway!

sileeka_h


sileeka_h

PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 5:14 am


pinay sakura
ok, it's not really a FANTASTIC or OUTSTANDING poem but I just made it up now.....and......and I'm really happy!! gonk biggrin

happy, happy people
people all around!!
come see them prance, dance and jiggle
all around the town!!

smiles are contagious
so show your pearly whites!!
feel the sun onto your skin
and see the seagulls take flight!!

now I know what your thinking
this poem is too happy!!
well just read the poem...
and partay with CAPPY!!


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Woot, I love your poem! It brightened my day after coming home all tired from work.
The picture caught my eye first, then I went and read the poem. I burst out laughing on the last line.
Soo... thank you! I hope you don't mind if I print out your poem and stick it on my mirror. It's a lovely poem to read in the morning and pep myself for another hot, stressful day at work.
PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 9:16 am


sileeka_h
pinay sakura
ok, it's not really a FANTASTIC or OUTSTANDING poem but I just made it up now.....and......and I'm really happy!! gonk biggrin

happy, happy people
people all around!!
come see them prance, dance and jiggle
all around the town!!

smiles are contagious
so show your pearly whites!!
feel the sun onto your skin
and see the seagulls take flight!!

now I know what your thinking
this poem is too happy!!
well just read the poem...
and partay with CAPPY!!


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xp

Woot, I love your poem! It brightened my day after coming home all tired from work.
The picture caught my eye first, then I went and read the poem. I burst out laughing on the last line.
Soo... thank you! I hope you don't mind if I print out your poem and stick it on my mirror. It's a lovely poem to read in the morning and pep myself for another hot, stressful day at work.


I don't mind ^o^...and you're welcome ^-^

Panda Got No Game


Sildrag

PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 2:05 pm


lil azn angel 12
Sildrag
There was a song from long ago,
that my mother used to sing for me.
it gave me peace, love, and hope
-of the good person i could be......
I can remember her voice like yesterday,
her voice as smooth as the sea.
When she left, she took my love away-
and never returned it back to me.
I've long forgot how the song went.
I've long forgot what love is like.
I only remember that my heart was rent-
as if I've been stabbed by a pike.
I'm no longer the loving child I was before,
I'm seldom happy anymore.

I never laugh,
i never cry,
I never smile,
I never sigh.
I never show my true emotions,
-I keep it all inside.
My mind's in a constant motion,
-my thoughts, a swirling tide.

It's during these times that I will hear-
Hear a song I used to know.
A song sang to take away fear,
-a song sang from long ago.
that was awesome.ur'e great!

thanx.....I'm glad u liked it biggrin
PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 2:17 pm


By request of sileeka_h, I will post the rest! biggrin

A Face In The Crowd...(Continued)

A face in the crowd, you cant see me... I blend.
Im nothing to you, why even pretend?
Not even a friend, till you need me again.
To hang on to your coattail... till your grieving descends.

A face in the crowd, Imma smile thats no diffrent.
Though for you, Id travel, many miles in an instant
Im aware that your gifted, I point it out, and instist it.
but to you I assume, Imma nother statistic.

A face in the crowd, there is nothing distinctive.
Im not the main pattern, Im merely a sequence...
unseen since , Im seamless, Not the ear, but the secret.
that gets passed along cause one wants to keep it.

A face in the crowd, sometymes it is hurtful
to not be the sitcom, and just a commercial...
to never be personal, only an associate
looking for more, but NOTHINGS the most ya get
not the brightest or faintest , amidst all the nameless.
and being the same is, making my intentions turn heinous

A face in the cowd, only average to them...
you're unique and amazing, you are magnificent
you're a magic event, you're like abracadabra
Im a face in the crowd wishing that I could have ya
Thats mad at the mass of... people who're gawking
and wanting the thing, I'm aparently wanting.
To stand out of this damn crowd, with hopes to take view
be your back bone and structure, your custom made muse,
thats enough to hate you, for not seeing my efforts
not paying attenton, not seeing IM BETTER!!
NOT distinguishing me, from the fakes and imposters
Giving them all of YOU, is what makes me a monster

A face in the crowd, so you throw me aside
unaware of the beast I have growing inside
who's distroying my mind
who keeps showing me signs.
And telling me "give up", your not going to be mine

A face in the crowd, who unknowingly trys
the one wit the gun and the GLOWING GREEN EYES

A face in the crowd.
as you bow when you're leaving...
I'll place one shot
to my crop..
Wow.
NOW you can see me?

-=Cha^0^s_G3ar=-


sileeka_h

PostPosted: Wed Jan 11, 2006 9:15 pm


Wow, my hunch was right! It's magnificent!

I really liked the way you built the tension in the poem, and the way you ended the poem.
PostPosted: Thu Jan 12, 2006 4:19 pm


-=Cha^0^s_G3ar=-
By request of sileeka_h, I will post the rest! biggrin

A Face In The Crowd...(Continued)

A face in the crowd, you cant see me... I blend.
Im nothing to you, why even pretend?
Not even a friend, till you need me again.
To hang on to your coattail... till your grieving descends.

A face in the crowd, Imma smile thats no diffrent.
Though for you, Id travel, many miles in an instant
Im aware that your gifted, I point it out, and instist it.
but to you I assume, Imma nother statistic.

A face in the crowd, there is nothing distinctive.
Im not the main pattern, Im merely a sequence...
unseen since , Im seamless, Not the ear, but the secret.
that gets passed along cause one wants to keep it.

A face in the crowd, sometymes it is hurtful
to not be the sitcom, and just a commercial...
to never be personal, only an associate
looking for more, but NOTHINGS the most ya get
not the brightest or faintest , amidst all the nameless.
and being the same is, making my intentions turn heinous

A face in the cowd, only average to them...
you're unique and amazing, you are magnificent
you're a magic event, you're like abracadabra
Im a face in the crowd wishing that I could have ya
Thats mad at the mass of... people who're gawking
and wanting the thing, I'm aparently wanting.
To stand out of this damn crowd, with hopes to take view
be your back bone and structure, your custom made muse,
thats enough to hate you, for not seeing my efforts
not paying attenton, not seeing IM BETTER!!
NOT distinguishing me, from the fakes and imposters
Giving them all of YOU, is what makes me a monster

A face in the crowd, so you throw me aside
unaware of the beast I have growing inside
who's distroying my mind
who keeps showing me signs.
And telling me "give up", your not going to be mine

A face in the crowd, who unknowingly trys
the one wit the gun and the GLOWING GREEN EYES

A face in the crowd.
as you bow when you're leaving...
I'll place one shot
to my crop..
Wow.
NOW you can see me?

yea man, that's poem was tyte. ninja *steals it and hides it under his shirt*(I'm rich!I'm rich!) cool

Sildrag


sileeka_h

PostPosted: Sun Jan 15, 2006 11:10 pm


Just Friends

I pretend not to realise how I really feel.
Until now, unable to say it, I've just been hiding it.
How hard this is for me to admit!
When I met you, bit by bit my heart was charmed.

What can I do about these feelings?
I don't want to scare you.
Just being looked at by those eyes -
It's like I'm in paradise with you.

Why am I so uneasy?
Maybe I'm thinking too much.
We'll always be together.
Whenever I turn around, you are always there.

Even if I fall in love with someone else
I won't forget you.
There is no need for pity.
Look, a smile really suits you.
PostPosted: Sun Jan 15, 2006 11:19 pm


Sildrag
There was a song from long ago,
that my mother used to sing for me.
it gave me peace, love, and hope
-of the good person i could be......
I can remember her voice like yesterday,
her voice as smooth as the sea.
When she left, she took my love away-
and never returned it back to me.
I've long forgot how the song went.
I've long forgot what love is like.
I only remember that my heart was rent-
as if I've been stabbed by a pike.
I'm no longer the loving child I was before,
I'm seldom happy anymore.

I never laugh,
i never cry,
I never smile,
I never sigh.
I never show my true emotions,
-I keep it all inside.
My mind's in a constant motion,
-my thoughts, a swirling tide.

It's during these times that I will hear-
Hear a song I used to know.
A song sang to take away fear,
-a song sang from long ago.

thats an awsome poem

drunken ninja45


DreamWalker0

PostPosted: Mon Jan 16, 2006 6:08 am


I miss poetry.. I wrote about 5 poems last year.. But now i cant find it!! .... sweatdrop confused

"I stand infront of a great mountain
Where at its front gushes down
A never endling flow of silk
That comes right out of the clouds"

Nice?? did it when i was infront of a waterfall.. forgot the name of the falls..
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