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.::. The dead never leave... .::.

She was gone a total of like... 6 days with the only notice being in the fight thread and saying that she'd get me a post before the next day or something... no post so I'm just confused?

.::. They just go somewhere else .::.

Insofar as you're concerned, Wilian...

On Spelling and Grammar I gave you a 2.5, the same I gave to Mino. You guys weren't as low as a two, but not high enough for a three, which I put as "decent". You just both need to spend a little bit more time proofreading.

In Conciseness and Writing ability, I gave you both a two. You both had disadvantages and advantages that evened out.

On one hand, you gave a lot of detail, but you lacked clarity and conciseness. You need to seriously break your post up into separate thoughts and paragraphs. It'll make your writing much more clear.

Mino, on the other hand, was very clear and easy to understand, and concise...but that's because he hardly wrote anything at all. ._. I hate grading because of how short a post is, but there is such thing as a lack of detail. More effort is needed.

In Roleplaying I gave you both a three. It was decent and somewhat entertaining, and you guys get a plus for working stuff out amongst yourselves. It made the fight easier to read through.

You both got 2.5 for Creativity and Strategy...for different reasons.

It felt a bit like your use of mana was a bit of an "all-purpose energy" thing to make you just as strong and fast enough to do what you needed to do at a certain time. Even I'm guilty of that at times, but I realize it's not a very creative thing. It also wasn't a good idea to hold onto Mino while he was fire-blasting you in the face, because if I was Mino I would have explained that trying to beast through that atomic blast would only serve to screw up your s**t even more.

Mino, on the other hand, had a lot of other opportunities he could have followed through on that he didn't for the sake of just taking a hit, even when in some cases said hit would make the fight more entertaining or open up for another attack. That being said, taking a hit to give a hit was one creative thing he did, which nets him the same 2.5 score.

What clinched it for you in the end, Wilian, is Control of the Fight. You scored 4 against 2 in your fight with Mino. Mino put up a fight, but the problem was that he took nearly EVERY hit you threw at him. He went with most of everything that you did, so you mostly directed the fight.

I decided you winner by a 2 point lead.

Thanks! That's pretty much what I expected. I'll work on it, but that's something that probably comes with experience.

Anyway, thanks so much. <3

@Shinjiko: If she was gone for a day it wouldn't have cost much at all.

And I think I'll leave that justification up to whoever made that score.

Kay. ^__^

I tied you guys 16.5 - 16.5, Fiend.

Both of you got a 5 - 5 in Grammar and Spelling. I know I hate giving it because it implies perfection, but it was moreso that whatever grammatical inconsistencies you both had, they were too tiny for me to notice off the bat and didn't affect much.

That's why I hate that category. Fights shouldn't be graded on grammar and spelling. If your grammar and spelling is so bad that it affects the clarity of your post, then it's something important to note. In that way, it should really be mixed in with another category. I should also try to remember that clarity and conciseness are not the same thing, but not mutually exclusive. ><

If anything, grammar and spelling should be something you take off for after the total.

In Conciseness/Writing Ability you both got 3. Your writing ability was decent in both accounts. You had a problem with conciseness in explaining your grappling, Fiend, but the clarity of it was fixed up by how you provided pictures. If I were to be more of a stickler I would have shifted it a point or a point and a half in Iopurl's favor, but it wouldn't have made a difference either way. That, and I keep feeling like 4's and 5's are for people who make either an interesting/really interesting writing scheme, a scheme that's fun to read, or just generally well written all around.

In Roleplaying, you both got a 3 for being decent and entertaining. There wasn't a terribly large amount of story and plot development that merits a 5, or something close to that which merits a 4, but you both put in an effort and worked with things, so you both get a 3.

In Creativity/Strategy I gave you both a 3, for different reasons.

You have a great knowledge of grappling, Fiend, but you did make a few mistakes. One of them was going into a fight with an opponent who was not only larger and heavier than you, but was also armed, and instead of using your bracers that I remembered you posting about, you started off with a kick.

That ended up costing you, and you ended up "beasting" through the pain with adrenaline. I was wondering whether or not to take more off of that because that feels like a power not put in your profile, but I do realize humans have adrenaline.

Rather, what kept Iopurl from absolutely ruining you in strategy was him letting you get on top of him. Once your leg got ruined, abusing that weakness to stand up over you should have been very easy for a heavy beast like him to do. By suggesting that your knee would cause you to buckle forward, it set you up to do your grappling.

However, Iopurl gets a 3 for the decent, simple and effective strategy of stabbing the hell out of you. You got the 3 point merit for having effective grappling, and didn't get any further than that because you were grappling the kind of opponent you shouldn't have been grappling in the first place.

If you had used your Kyokushinkai with those bracers, I think you would have ended up with a more effective strategy and less serious wounds. :/

In that aspect, you both ended up with a 2.5 for Control of the Fight because, well...you both got knocked out. Iopurl actually lost his consciousness first, but that wasn't my concern. You both lost consciousness, and even if you hadn't lost consciousness he STILL tore your s**t up with those knives, and you can't deny that. Had Iopurl done some things differently or did something to keep himself from succumbing (which actually could have been a bit more easily argued with him not being human), you probably would have lost.

Weighing the pros and cons together, you guys pretty much tied.

My advice?

You wear those bracers for a reason. >>