I'm not good at giving crit but here goes:
First of all, I like her <3
she seems really sweet

A few things:
Hobbies:
Baking Pastries: How often does she bake? Does she share any of her baking with her family?
Baking Group: What time do they meet? get rid of the ",well," How often are the bake offs held? does she win
often?
Collecting glass figurines: does she have a specific store she goes to? Does she go there often?
Piano Playing: Why do her parents want her to play piano? what time does she attend class?
Virtues:
Polite: How polite is she in certain situations? example? Does she have a limit to how polite she can be?
Modest: Elaborate? It doesn't seem like there's enough detail here..... >.<;
Helpful: It's tasks, not task. its and her strongest area of helping is with baking related issues. xD Sorry...I'm kind of a spelling Nazi >.< Sorry if that sounded a bit harsh...I didn't intend for it to :<
FlawsInsecure/Self-conscious: I don't see nothing wrong here <3 But you might want to ask other people <3
Disorganized: Elaborate? Maybe go into a bit more detail?
Often distracted: Nothing wrong here <3
Sorry if it's a little short. This is the first crit that I've ever done >.<