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 Posted: Thu Jan 20, 2005 2:29 pm
What?! I'm telling the truth he wanted replies and I gave them to him. Even if I don't like the certin type of poem.
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Posted: Mon Jan 24, 2005 1:19 pm
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Posted: Tue Feb 08, 2005 3:20 pm
Your poems are really awesome! ^.^.....I would ask to post one in but....mine are kinda depressing and morbid so.....nevermind... sweatdrop But, I think yours are good
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Posted: Tue Feb 08, 2005 3:59 pm
Your poems are very nice, I hope that you post up more in the future.
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 8:33 pm
ok well hers a few poems i made when i was half asleep, just so you people can read them and give your comments..... if anyone ever goes in here.....
Is there anyone out there
Who can see through my act?
Is there anyone who''ll care
For a girl whose lies are packed?
Is there anyone nearby
Who''ll hold me without regret?
Is there anyone to cry
With me, sunrise to sunset?
There is, I found him today,
I can only hope that he''ll stay...
My hands are shaking,
These hands that want to hold you.
My eyes are waking,
These eyes that want to see you.
My tears are quaking,
These tears that want to be with you.
My voice is faking,
This voice that wants to say ''I love you.''
My body is breaking,
This body that wants to lean on you.
Truth is falling faster,
Lies to create illusions rise,
What have we become?
Up and down are neither yet,
Right and left confused now.
Fly up faster, broken wings,
Save our damned lives,
We need you, Truth,
We need your freedom.
When tomorrow finally comes, the world will slow to a stop,
When today is yesterday, everything will be backwards,
When yesterday has yet to come, night will swallow day.
yes theyre very weird and kinda stupid but i though since theres a poetry thread i might as well post in it, no one else is...
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 8:50 pm
Wow They're awesome Winter... and ask me sometime, we still have to Rp you me and Alexi...
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:00 pm
I should share my Cookie poem
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:03 pm
I love poetry O.O * reads whole thread * these are amazing
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:16 pm
YESYES!! THE COOKIE POEM!!!
include my comment too, im too tierd to retype it... I think all the world should know of my evil plan!!!
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:20 pm
The Cookie
The cookie was great
The cookie was sweet
Too bad it was me who took it to eat
The cookie was yummy
When i took it, it was funny
Now its in my tummy
The cookie was good
The cookie was fine
Edit:
Celestail Lullaby said in my journal: awww your a really good poet!! but im afraid I'll have to pump your stomach for the cokkie, you see it was my cookie and I disguised it as such so the police wouldn't find my bomb with which I will destroy the world and your stomach acid might set it off before I can escape in my doughnut shaped rocket ship. ^.^
I originally wrote this poem one day when i was spacing out. I think it was math class, i'm not sure but my mind was on cookies because my mom promised me she would make me some over the weekend. ((This poem was written in Elementry school))
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:25 pm
at the end when you say
the cookie was good
the cookie was fine
you should change it to
the cookie was good
the cookie was great
it has more of a ring to it.
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:29 pm
Well, there was another line after "The cookie was fine" but it was a little wierd
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:35 pm
what? the cookie was divine?? Tell me!
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:36 pm
Okay, don't laugh and remember i wrote this when i was in third grade
The ending~
The Cookie was good
The cookie was fine
Too bad it came out of my behind
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:42 pm
OoO thats hiLARious!!! I absolutly LOVE that.. haha, I remember third grade, back when I was in shape, popular and had all my lovely guy friends... and then I switched schools and screwed myself over, so now my big bro who is like totally buff and tall is trying to get short chubby me into shape...*sigh* I buried myself when I discovered the internet and that it had more than just barbie and hotwheels websites..(the only two dad and mom let me on)
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