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 Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 1:53 am
okay, I sorta see what you mean. I often think things through in my mind, but I don't always get it down.
for the quote, I was trying to bring some humour in, since it was right after the 'what's the worst that could happen' bit. *groans* I left that bit out. whoops.
Um, shouldn't the trade have 500g? 200 for level 2 and 300 for level 3?
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 1:58 am
queen_zeppelin69 okay, I sorta see what you mean. I often think things through in my mind, but I don't always get it down. for the quote, I was trying to bring some humour in, since it was right after the 'what's the worst that could happen' bit. *groans* I left that bit out. whoops. Um, shouldn't the trade have 500g? 200 for level 2 and 300 for level 3?
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 2:02 am
PukeFacedFreak queen_zeppelin69 okay, I sorta see what you mean. I often think things through in my mind, but I don't always get it down. for the quote, I was trying to bring some humour in, since it was right after the 'what's the worst that could happen' bit. *groans* I left that bit out. whoops. Um, shouldn't the trade have 500g? 200 for level 2 and 300 for level 3?
lol-I might do level 4 later. My mind is starting to shut down...2am
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 12:22 pm
PukeFacedFreak chuckee PukeFacedFreak chuckee Hit me with a word, your duckiness!!! Mwaha! Done, and can go for another! xd
For the record, I'm going to put all of my submissions in the doc.posts..
With all of the newspaper articles spread out before him, Henri wondered if he was ever going to get away from all the abuse he’d suffered since this steroids story had come out, painting him as the very portrait of a cheater. He didn’t actually use steroids; he was paranoid about what they might do to him. Unfortunately, somebody had made a remark about his stamina, which inspired some “source” to make up a story about it.
He didn’t know who might’ve felt that threatened by him, but it kind of annoyed him. What kind of person would go so far as to defame him anonymously? At least if they’d have shown their face he might be able to deduce why they’d said it, and then he could forgive them. But now, he was banned from competing, until a thorough investigation could be made, and a “verdict” announce. And Henri was worried, because he knew that some of the guys on his team did use steroids, and that he’d probably be assumed guilty by association. And his teammates wouldn’t stand up for him, despite the fact that he’d warned them against it so often. They’d probably think that it was his fault they were discovered.
His employers and coaches would automatically deny all knowledge of any of their athletes having used steroids, and walk away from the whole issue. This irked him even more than being falsely accused. He knew that they had known, and they’d get away without a scratch.
Henri did feel a bit guilty about never outing his employers and teammates. So, maybe, he did sort of deserve this. But he knew that he would never get signed again if he did. Where would that leave him? Probably in the same place that he was now….
- I like how you introduced the problem with the newspapers. I very much like the use of 'portrait.' Very well written and organized.
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Wakki Darkmoon Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 3:11 pm
!st word: inflate
(this is the best i can think of)
"Obama said, 'Inflate the tires completly to save gas.' I did do
that. With the price of gas going up and up everyday, I had
to do something" , he said.
"But then what happened?", a voice asked.
" So I overinflated them, maybe I'd save more money. I also
thought if I fast I'd save even more. "
"And?", the voice asked.
"And the car in front suddenly stopped. I hit the brakes, but
I no traction because I overinflated. I swerved to the right......
and.....and , off the cliff. 500 ft straight down. "
"What was the last thing you said?"
"Obama my a**!"
- Witty and relevant to our current lives! Although the form of your writing is a little harsh on the eyes. The form is a little off, try to keep quotes on the same line. I'm guessing you pasted it from a document.
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 8:30 pm
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Wakki Darkmoon Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 8:38 pm
queen_zeppelin69 lol-I've got a funny story for this one. Also, after each story, including the first one, would you mind telling me what you thought, as well as anything that needs improving? Keeping in mind that they aren't edited and written in a rush, of course. good idea!
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 10:57 pm
PukeFacedFreak Level 4: 'vanish' (+shrink, exacerbate, pineapple)
*sighs* I'm beginning to hate that word...exacerbate
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 3:34 pm
******** I LOSE ALL OF THAT?!
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 3:35 pm
s**t!
GAIA KICKED ME OFF AFTER I WROTE ALL OF THAT AND THAT PISSES ME OFF crying !!!
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 4:02 pm
PFF Words = portrait + steroids + brush
Fouad sat with his girlfriend's head in his lap, using one hand to brush her hair with his fingers, and holding an open book in the other. It was a Friday night, and he'd rather be out at a bar, or picking at his guitar in someone's apartment, or even just driving the desert road. But he'd promised to help Sheri study, and he did love spending time with her. And they didn't have much time...
Sheri was studying herbal healing in the States, and even though she was home for the summer, she had to do a project on herbal steroids to hand in when she got back. Responsible student that she was, she insisted on spending at least two days a week working on it. He didn't really mind that; in fact, it was one of the things he'd always loved about her. Her dedication had always made him respect her. But he hated that her teachers were taking up some of his time with her! After all, they could have given her this assignment in all those months that they'd had her to themselves, when all he'd seen of her in that time was her perpetually smiling face staring blankly up at him from the portrait that her parents had insisted she sit for right before she left.
"Are you okay?" Sheri asked, almost startling him.
Brushing off his sour thoughts, Fouad replied, "Yeah... just having trouble keeping my mind on this. I mean, I really couldn't care less which herbs are good for girls, and which are good for men..."
Sheri rolled halfway to look at him. "You're studying to be a doctor, man! Knowing this stuff couldn't hurt! Besides, if you really didn't want to be here, you should've just said so... I didn't mean to make it seem like you were obligated or anything, you know that!"
"No! I really like spending time with you! I guess that I just feel a bit resentful that your teachers gave you work to do in the time that I was thinking would be for me, ya know. I mean, I know that you like your studies and all, but I want some of your undivided attention, too..."
Fouad raised his head to look into Sheri's eyes, and what he saw there made him so nervous that he stopped brushing her hair.
"We need to talk..." She said, and the lights went out in Fouad's mind.
- Dun dun DUN! Cliff hanger! Awesome.
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 4:03 pm
queen_zeppelin69 PukeFacedFreak Level 4: 'vanish' (+shrink, exacerbate, pineapple)
*sighs* I'm beginning to hate that word...exacerbate Awwz! *huggles*
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Posted: Thu Aug 14, 2008 12:41 am
Level 4: 'vanish' (+shrink, exacerbate, pineapple)
“Mom! Mom! Guess what!” I exclaimed as I plopped myself on a stool by the island in our kitchen. My mother had just come home from grocery shopping, and even as I was reveling one of the most wonderful moments in my pitiful life, all she did was give me a quick glance as she unloaded eggs and milk and pineapple from a large paper bag. That was a bit of a problem in our house. Mom’s tendency to space out exacerbated even my father and baby sister. Anyways, for the first time in what seemed to be months, Mom was sitting patiently, waiting for me to continue.
“Well, after my shower this morning, I looked in the mirror and noticed my roots!” I was beside myself with excitement, yet all Mom did was prompt me with a vague hand signal. “Mom, that hideous dye is starting to vanish!” About three weeks previous, I had tried to dye my fine blonde hair black. Unfortunately, the dye did something weird, so I was stuck with dark purple hair. You’d think, ‘Hey, it’s just hair dye, it’ll come out it a few months’, but no. The school in which I sat through torture every day was extremely strict, and I heard several high-handed remarks because of an accident. My boyfriend broke up with me, saying that he didn’t want to be seen with a ‘punk’. And, to shrink my spirit even further, I was banned from attending the annual journalism convention as a student. Their excuse was that I didn’t give off the image that they wanted portrayed of the school.
But, now, I could finally see the light at the end of the tunnel. My dye was coming out and even Mom was listening to me. Right?
“Mom? Did you even hear what I said?”
“Yes, that’s wonderful dear, it really is. You and Jason are perfect together. I always knew he'd come back to you.” Oh, Lord.
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@chuckee-*huggles back*
- It seems like the words I chose for you are difficult to work into stories so you've done a good job. smile
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Posted: Fri Aug 15, 2008 10:32 pm
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Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2008 3:27 pm
Cool I want to play PFF Hit me with my first word!
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