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Dark Lord M

PostPosted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 10:29 am


Why are you all ignoring me? crying

No one's answered my question...
PostPosted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 10:38 am


Dark Lord M
Where do I post my stuff?? crying

Nefas if you need help with villains just ask me. biggrin


You post them here in this thread I think.
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 11:37 am


Yeah, you post it here (sorry, I just saw your question) but no judging until the fourteenth!

Soo...

Who wants to help me send out another guild message?
PostPosted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 1:28 pm


Dark Lord M
Why are you all ignoring me? crying

No one's answered my question...


We don't like you.... nah, was a case of not knowing myself.

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 6:32 am


How are we defining villain in this competition?

Are we going for the classic "evil doer who must be stopped" or just an average human being with a different set of morals from the ones that everyone else lives by?

Bottom line... does a murderer count as a villain?

Edit: Also, does this have to be a completely new piece or can we submit something that we've written recently--as in the last month--and have posted on another site?
PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 11:27 am


IrinChendale
How are we defining villain in this competition?

Are we going for the classic "evil doer who must be stopped" or just an average human being with a different set of morals from the ones that everyone else lives by?

Bottom line... does a murderer count as a villain?

Edit: Also, does this have to be a completely new piece or can we submit something that we've written recently--as in the last month--and have posted on another site?


Whatever could be considered 'villainous', meaning a murderer would count. Yeah, I guess morals define a villain so whatever...

You may enter something you've previously written.

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 5:39 pm


Yay! You see, I wrote this short story and have been trying to get people to read it. So far I've gotten good reviews, but that is coming from family and a close friend. As much as I value their opinions, I can't help but think they are a bit biased. So, on to my entry! (I'm hoping the MC is villainous enough for this!)

Name: Now You Are The Broken One by Irin Chendale
Length: 1378 words
Summary: A woman, having her heart broken by the same man one too many times, decides to take matters into her own hands and deliver her own sort of justice.
Submission:
She stood in the center of the clearing, panting from the near sprint to get there. Turning this way and that, she made sure that there wasn’t a soul near by. Satisfied that she was fully, completely alone aside from the animals in the forest she tilted her head back and let out a blood curdling scream. It didn’t take long for the tears to begin to fall as well.

It happened again. She should have known and prepared herself. She should have avoided it all together, but no. She waltzed right into the situation. Falling to her knees, she wrapped her arms around herself, her sobs coming in fits. It felt like hours before the tears started to run dry and her throat grew sore. Rocking herself back and forth on her heels, she began to formulate a plan.

He brought this upon himself. He took her love and threw it back in her face repeatedly. Did he not know that she would have died for him? Did he not know that she would have given her last breath, had he asked for it? No more though. He had finally broken the last remaining piece of her heart, leaving behind an empty shell of a woman. Retribution would be hers and her demand for payment would be his life.

Slowly straightening herself, she pulled the dagger from its holding place in the pocket of her cargo pants. Sliding the blade from its sheath, she grinned at the comfortable feel of the cool steel in her hand. His day of judgment had come and he had been found sorely lacking.

~*~

She whipped the small vehicle into traffic, her music drowning out any other noise around her. The dream had been so sweet, so tempting. Crimson coating the side of her car and dripping on to the pavement below. A limp body crumpled at an odd angle, half leaning against the car, and half lying on the cement. It was him and he was dead. The joy, the sheer thrill of no longer having to look at those traitorous eyes had been her undoing.

Fitting the car into the stream of traffic, she began to picture the many different locations and methods with which she could kill him. Each one returned back to her favorite of all weapons, her dagger. Guns were messy and loud. Blunt objects required physical strength. Knives and daggers only required a stealthy ability to get close enough to one’s enemy before striking and that was something she was sure she could do.

Her hands gripped the steering wheel tight enough to turn her knuckles white. Anger made her body vibrate and the beat of the music energized her, her mind constantly going back to the crimson puddle in her dream. He had wrecked her for the last time and now she would make sure he could break no one else.

Finding his location wasn’t difficult. A few calls were all it took to discover that he was home alone at a friend’s place. She knew the place like the back of her hand. They had shared intimacies there. He had shattered her there with the news of his engagement, then again when he said he was pursuing yet another woman she had made the mistake of allowing him to meet. What a fitting place for him to meet his end, she thought with a chuckle.

Slowing her car down, she began to play through the scene in her mind. It shouldn’t be all that difficult to get close; that b*****d had a one track mind after all.

~*~

Guiding her car into the small drive way, she stared up at the sorry excuse for a home. Paint peeling, old furniture on the porch, and a dog’s leash tied to the stairs, consequently adding to the mounds of canine feces: it was disgusting and the interior not much better. Picking her way carefully to the stairs, she began the ascent; each step made her giddy. It would all be ending tonight. Her pain, her humiliation: it would all be gone in one slice.

Standing at the door, she palmed the dagger in her pocket, feeling comforted by the metal that seemed to have become part of her in the last few days. She had practiced relentlessly in the forest where she had fallen apart, practiced every thrust, slash, and attack she could think of. Of course, she would need only one perfect strike. Taking a deep breath, she knocked on the poor excuse for a door.

He answered. It took her every bit of will power she had not to slice him there and then as he smiled at her. What nerve he had! She smiled back, using her years-long perfected mask of happiness. “Hey,” she said, “may I come in?”

“Yeah, sure.” He nodded, stepping back. Jeans and a t-shirt, did he own anything else? He was taller by a half foot and bulkier too, but she didn’t let that deter her. One track mind, once she had him where she wanted he would be defenseless. “And to what do I owe this honor?” That voice grated on her nerves; of course, it was just what she needed. The mix of friendliness and hidden suggestion meant that he would be willing. Such a fool, she thought.

“I was in the area, thought I’d stop by. Do I need any other reason?” She had moved to the center of the kitchen area, looking over her shoulder at him. He thought she was easy, which wasn’t all that far from the truth.

He grinned, shutting the door and moving to stand behind her, slowly wrapping his arms around her. Those arms were always her undoing, making her feel safe and secure before tearing her apart. “No one’s home. Let’s play.”

Gotcha, she thought, turning in his arms to wrap hers around his neck. “Not here.” She looked off to her right at the bedroom where he seemed to enjoy his life as a male whore and b*****d. “In there.”

Slipping from his arms, but catching a hold of his hand, she led him into the dirty room. Typical male, clutter and dirty clothes every where. She turned, pushing him down on the bed. Climbing on after him, straddling his lap, she framed his face in her hands and pressed her lips to his. A little play before the main course couldn’t hurt anything. It didn’t take him long to start reciprocating, his own hands going to her back and pulling her closer.

She gave his lower lip one final n** before pushing him back on the bed so he was now lying. With both hands pressed to his broad chest she smiled, “Do you trust me?”

“With my life,” was his response. She couldn’t help the grin. Wrong answer, she thought.

“Put your hands underneath you, behind your back.” He did as he was told. For once he was being a good boy. “Now, close your eyes.”

“But, I want to watch,” he pouted.

Shaking her head, she moved her fingers over his eyelids, making him shut his eyes. “If you want to play, you do as I say.” He sighed, but gave in. She kissed his lips, his chin, his neck. Then she lifted his shirt and kissed his chest, flicking a tongue over one n****e then the other. He was biting his lower lip, indicating to her he was fully distracted. Slipping her hand into her pocket, she pulled the dagger out. Sitting up straight, she stared at his vulnerable form for a moment. He shifted his hips upwards, rubbing himself against her for the last time.

With a single swipe of her arm, his eyes flew open and his hands to his neck. She watched as he feebly attempted to staunch the blood flow. She had severed his throat down to the bone; he wouldn’t be living no matter how hard he tried. She remained straddling him despite his attempts at removing her until his last breath shuddered from his lips.

“No more. Now you are the broken one.” She stood, heading into the bathroom and began cleaning her blade of the crimson stain. She paused, staring as his life’s blood flowed down the drain. “No more.”
PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 9:13 pm


sad for obvious reasons, I'm not going to enter.

Nefas Fatum


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 10:00 pm


That's completely understandable, Nefas. We don't expect you to do anything, with what's going on right now. Just know that we'll be here for you, as much as we can.
PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 9:16 am


Name: M-Pire book one, Woes of a Dark Lord/Enter Wong by M
Length: 3030 words
Summary: Enter James Wong and meet the most ruthless and unforgivable character in my writing universe.
Submission:

~*~


Ahmed’s room became very silent. All of the League’s Men and Members became quiet, backed against the walls, and bowed their heads in silent and fearful admiration. It was almost eerie to see men that had bounded in so terribly become so quiet, like kicked puppies.

Misty smoke from the teleporter had filled half the room and added to disturbing silence. A dark figure stepped out from the murk. The figure’s very presence seemed to generate chills down every man’s spine in the room. Ahmed, who was standing the farthest away from the mist whimpered slightly but managed to change it to a cough.

The smoke dissipated to reveal a very tall and thin man who towered over the other men in the room. He wore the dark suit and red ascot tie the League Members wore but the clothes were much neater and more elegant on him. His hair was also neat, dark, and styled in a prominent widow’s peak. Below his round nose was a long Fu-Manchu moustache that hung off his face like snakes with a matching beard hanging from his chin. Both of his eyes had golden irises but his right eye was glossy and the pupil was a black omega instead of a dark circle because it was made of glass.

The man stepped smoothly through the large room and sniffed irritably at the total disarray it was in. His expensive, stable boots crunched against the glass of a smashed hookah as he approached Ahmed. He walked in such a way that said he could explode at any moment in anger.

He was James Wong, President of the League of Uncrowned Kings. This is what he had been waiting to do, coming to Ottoma to catch up with Ahmed. It was the first little thing to do on his list when he had awoken that morning faraway in some unknown country. Now he was here, and he was angry.

Oh, where was it? Where was that little scumbag of a traitor? How dare it betray him, its master! It was under the Binding Contract that kept Ottoma under his control, it was his property, and Wong didn’t like it when he property started planning with the enemy.

‘It’ was a word Wong used often for people. ‘It’ was for everybody against Wong because words like ‘him’ applied that they had working brains and in Wong’s opinion a working brain meant that they were obeying him. The word ‘she’, however, was not in Wong’s vocabulary; women were like exotic birds he had only ever heard about. All the women Wong had met had been old whores that were against him, therefore getting all women the title of ‘it’.

There was a loud crack from the teleporter and the room was filled with more smoke. Another figure came sliding out of the mist but this one was nowhere near as impressive as Wong. It was just Gwhul Aul, Wong’s bodyguard, League Lord of the Middle East, and Prince of the Djinn.
Aul would be tall if he was not hunched over and by his kind’s standards he would have been very handsome with his bloodshot red, totally-not-yellow, eyes. He was covered from head to toe in long pieces of gold fabric, a long green robe, and a heavy looking turban. The only thing that showed that Aul was not a walking carpet sale were his eyes poking out from what could be determined as his head.

Wong curled his lip in disgust. He had not asked Aul to come; he would just get in the way. Aul was always so touchy about when Wong killed somebody. Wong would have thought after all this time and so many bodies Aul would have gotten used to it. Still, the Djinn was useful and his magical skills were unsurpassable; he was a necessity Wong needed to get by.

The crowd of the League’s Men parted as Aul tried to catch up with Wong but he did not stop for his bodyguard, his mind was too clouded by hatred to care.
“James,” Aul whispered in a voice that sounded like hot wind on sandy dunes, “I beg you not to do this.”
Wong ignored Aul and continued to stalk towards Ahmed, who was now on his knees, staring at Wong in absolute, paralyzed fear.

Step.

The War had not gone smoothly for Wong. All that planning and all that money spent had been wasted. Once again Wong’s enemies had outsmarted him at the very last minute. He had been so close this time! Europe had been just an inch from his grasp; he could practically have smelled it! His false dreams of power had been beyond his reach.

Step.

Germany, one of Wong’s most powerful allied countries had been stopped a week ago. The chancellor had not been there at the time of his country’s downfall; instead he was in Africa. Germany’s defeat was the first step to Wong’s defeat.

Step.

And now Ottoma was tumbling down. The countless princes that ran the country were running around in complete circles when they got the news that India, America, and Britain were closing in on them. Their holy warriors wouldn’t be there to save them now; they’d be too busy saving the people of this hellhole of a country. They wouldn’t be there to save the princes from Wong.

Step.

And who was to blame for all this chaos that had been brought down upon the League? Certainly not Wong because Wong didn’t make mistakes but if he did he was quick to peg the blame on somebody else and that somebody else tended to end up dead. Measures would have to be taken to assure the League would survive in one piece. Wong had been in much worst situations than this but they were never pleasant to be in.

Step.

It had been the Bone Man who was responsible for this worldwide League defeat. It was always the Bone Man. Him and his little MI13 and band of freaks always jumped in to save the day for Britain and her allies. Wong had hoped that he would have shown him after he had killed off his enemy’s little teammates in Iran. He hadn’t seen or heard from him sense; perhaps the message had gotten across.

Step.

And then there was this little rat in front of Wong. A traitor, a collaborator with his enemies; a collaborator with the Bone Man. It disgusted Wong beyond anything he could possibly imagine.
He sometimes got creatures like Ahmed. Wong tried so hard for so long to put the ‘Fear of Wong’ into everyone he met. To put fear in a man, in Wong’s opinion, was to have control. It worked, oh how it worked, but some men had stronger wills than others and they ended up working against him. He made sure that he was there to catch them and make an example.

Step.

Wong stood above the bowed Ahmed. Disgusting, did the Ottoman warrior believe that he could get away by a bow? The idea made Wong smirk.
Ahmed raised his head and stared into Wong’s eyes, and squinted when he locked onto Wong’s glass right eye. The omega pupil seemed to burn something into the man’s mind. Despite looking frightened Ahmed did not blink.

“Your Excellency,” he said, bowing his head again.
“Traitor,” Wong whispered coldly.
“How goes Your Excellency’s battle?”
How dare it? Wong thought, how dare it speak to me in such tone! Disrespect, casual!

The League’s Men and Members watched Wong and Ahmed’s stare down. The air around the two men was extremely tense and one could say it was hotter than the rest of the room. Ahmed was still cool but behind his façade was a side of fear. Wong, however, was trembling with anger. His fists were clenched and his brow was furrowed. Three years of anger was about to surface.

“James,” Aul’s voice came from the shadows, “come here.”
Wong turned to Aul in total shock, couldn’t the Djinn see that his master was busy?

Aul was standing by the tapestry against the wall that Abbots had teleported away from, looking disgusted with himself.
“What?” Wong screamed across the room, every syllable drenched in anger. Several of the League’s Members jumped.
“Someone has—teleported in this spot.”
“How do you know?”

“I can smell the magic.”

Wong made long strides across the room, kicking pillows out of his way as he went. When he got next to Aul he could definitely tell something had happened there. Wong had been around magic most of his life and most of the League’s weaponry was magic fused with technology. After awhile you could just begin to tell where magic had been.

“It… wasn’t us who teleported in this spot?” he asked the Djinn.
“The teleporter is over there, James.”

“Then who teleported?” Wong said, staring Aul in those feline like, blood red eyes. Aul had the ultimate poker face but Wong could tell the Djinn didn’t know.

Wong turned around slowly and looked at Ahmed with a face that said, “Got you”. Ahmed obviously knew the game was up. Wong knew what had happened.

In a blink of an eye Wong was back in front of Ahmed, his face the personification of terrifying anger. He picked Ahmed by the scruff of the robe and slammed him against the dusty wall. They were face to face and Ahmed now looked terrified.
“Who was here before me?” Wong screamed in the little man’s face.

Ahmed moaned.
“Tell me!”
Ahmed said nothing.
“It was him, wasn’t it? The Bone Man was here! You met with the Bone Man didn’t you!”
“No,” Ahmed said flatly.
“Who was it?!”

Ahmed spat on Wong’s face. Wong screamed in rage and threw the man across the room in a burst of strength. The little Ottoman warrior rolled into a small pile of pillows.

“You b*****d,” Wong murmured as he wiped the glob of spittle of his face and out of his moustache and beard, “I own you! You are mine, you are under Contract!”

Out of his coat Wong pulled out a very old looking piece of parchment. It was the Ottoman Binding Contract, the piece of paper that held Ottoma to Wong’s will. Aul, in the darkness sighed in amazement, his eyes very wide.
“You do not own me!” Ahmed spat out as he got up, looking around the room for his sword, “I am a free man! I am a Muharreb!”

Wong laughed out loud at this comment and Aul put his head into his hands. That was really too funny. Wong laughed in the face of freedom. No one was free once they came under Wong’s control.

The League’s Men pointed their weapons at Ahmed when he had retrieved his sword but Wong waved them down. He liked to play with his food before he ate it. Ahmed wearily got to his feet and took the Muharreb battle stance: Stand and Charge.

Wong just stood there and lifted a very long and thin, delicate eyebrow. Really? Ahmed should know better than this…

The Ottoman warrior began to dash at Wong with great speed, sword thrust into the air. Wong was surprised that Ahmed was not going for his chest but his right hand, Wong’s ring hand. Hm, Ahmed was smarter than he had thought, obviously he had gotten some helpful tips.

Ahmed’s dash towards the League President seemed to take an hour in Wong’s mind but not because he was terrified. His golden eyes flashed and his glass eye rolled around in its socket right as Ahmed sword was about to strike its spot. Now came the amusing part.

Wong stepped out of the way and tripped Ahmed as he passed. The Ottoman warrior dropped his sword and it slid across the floor. Wong gestured for the League’s Men to act and the armored soldiers ran up and held Ahmed down. Wong walked across the room and picked up the sword and turned his eyes to look at Aul, who still had his face in his hands.

Wong could kill Ahmed with a touch— but that didn’t seem appropriate to the man who had betrayed him and tried to kill him. No, Wong had something far more amusing in mind.

“Gwhul,” Wong said while examining the sword in the thin light of the room, “correct me if I am wrong but it is the greatest insult to a Muharreb to be killed by his own blade?”

Aul looked up at his master, his eyes filled with complete surprise. Wong could tell that the Djinn didn’t want to answer but his face told him everything. Oh, this was going to be good.

Ahmed was struggling to break free from the League’s Men’s grip. He was sputtering and swearing in Arabic like a cornered animal and in Wong’s mind that’s what Ahmed was. The League Members were hiding in the darkness, smiles on their faces.

“Bring him to his knees!” Wong giggled in sadistic glee.

Wong strolled over to the Ottoman warrior, grinning ear to ear while twirling the sword like a cane. When he reached Ahmed he got down on one knee and put the blade to the man’s throat.

“Goodbye, traitor,” Wong whispered into Ahmed’s ears and shouted as he swiftly cut the man’s head off. Ahmed’s head rolled across the floor and to Aul’s feet where it laid there, staring up at the Djinn with the glassy eyes of a dead man. Aul shuttered slightly.

“Your Excellency,” one of the League’s Men said, wiping blood of his armor, “what should we do with the body?”

“Leave it,” Wong said, “all of you back to Nigeria, inform Chancellor Adler that I will be… speaking… with him soon. Don’t let him leave the country.”

“Yes, Your Excellency,” the soldiers and men said as they bowed and used the teleporter to disappear. Wong, however stayed, and walked over to a curtained window and flung back the thick piece of cloth blocking the sunshine.

The light blinded Wong for several seconds as he forced himself to look out at the countless buildings that made the Ottoman city. It disgusted him; it was like a labyrinth packed to the breaking point with rats. Rats like Ahmed.

He wondered what it was like for them, the people, in the streets. Did they know who was looking down at them all as they so merrily bought their goods and children played in the streets? Of course they didn’t. Wong was a man of the shadows, which infuriated him. No one knew his name or his face. Would History remember him? Would he be written down in the books as one of the greatest men Destiny had ever produced? He liked to think so but he never had the guts to check.

Then he realized he had lost control. He had let his temper get to him again. The anger had simmered but he had exploded. Why couldn’t he control his emotions? He was stronger than that! He could control himself if he wanted to! He was not a child, he was a grown man—men could control their emotions.

Wong lifted his right hand to the light and examined the rings on his finger. On his ring finger was a handsome, gold signet ring and on his index was a glistening silver dragon twisting itself into a Celtic knot. The light caught them perfectly; those were the objects of authority and power. Perfect in every way, godlike, everything Wong wanted to be.

Aul crept out of the shadows and stood next to Wong. He too stared down at the streets of Ottoma but Wong could tell that the Djinn was feeling other emotions besides disgust. This is what separated Wong from Aul; Aul was flimsy and too caring while Wong simply didn’t care. The idea of love, care, and respect had no place in Wong’s mind. Wong had decided long ago that it was much better to be feared than respected because in his mind when men respected you they could stand against you but with fear you turned them to cowards and they wouldn’t have the guts to fight you.

“What are you going to do now, James?” Aul asked, “Have you lost hope with the War?”

“The War is lost, Gwhul,” Wong said, picking Ahmed’s head up by the turban and throwing it to Aul, “but I will make sure I reap some sort of reward out of my defeat. There will be things that must be done that assure the League’s survival, of course.”

“Of course,” Aul said in disgust, holding the head, “what would you like me to do with the head?”

“Bring it to the princes of this hellhole, tell them it is a gift from me. Tell them they need to work harder.”

“But why, James, why?” Aul moaned, “You lifted Germany’s Contract, why not release Ottoma?”

“Because unlike Germany, Ottoma has only failed me once, Gwhul, and I find it to be a much more useful country than those drunk bastards that run Germany. Your country’s stupidity can be aimed.”

“It is not MY country, James.”

“Yes,” Wong said, stepping on the teleporter, “but you watch over this disgusting piece of sand like it’s your own. Set this mud house ablaze before you leave.”

With a hiss and a zap James Wong had left Ottoma.

Aul stared at the teleporter for several minutes, his eyes reflecting his mind. He wanted to run, run far away. He did not want to return to his master but he had to; he was under Contract.

The Djinn walked over to Ahmed’s beheaded body and placed the warrior’s sword into his dead hands. Aul said a quick prayer and took the head, like Wong had told him to, and stepped onto the teleporter but before he went he focused his energy into his hands and a large ball of smokeless flame appeared in his hands. He through it onto the pillows and the flame began to consume the room.

Hiss.
Zap.
Gwhul Aul had left Ottoma.

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PostPosted: Sat Jul 05, 2008 11:08 am


I will try out the next contest and I'm really busy and haven't got the spare time to do it at the moment.

I wish everyone the best of luck and these entries are looking great guys!!
PostPosted: Sun Jul 06, 2008 12:54 am


Surprise! A conversation with M sparked the concept, so I had to write it and decided it fit the prompt. Oh, and trigger warning for use of the word 'rapist'. There isn't any rape, but I used the word, so I just wanted to make a note of that up here in case someone's not OK with that.

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Name: Never Turn a Blind Eye by Min
Length: 1030 words
Summary: A ruthless blind vigilante is tired of being set back by his compulsive liar of a henchman.
Submission:

When society was rotting from the inside, perhaps it was better not to see.

The world of black surrounding Heinrich Artyom was certainly more beautiful than what he would have seen had he been able to see at all. The mayor and police called him a terrorist, but he was in fact taking the law into his own hands in murdering criminals—or, as he was now forced to do, make his henchmen kill criminals for him.

The one that sounded to Heinrich like he was kneeling across from him, presumably with servant Therese Lamarliere’s dagger at his throat, was whimpering, pleading for his life. Heinrich only cackled cruelly.

“Have you any idea how much the world will not be missing after your death?” he drawled, walking forward. His footsteps reverberated on the concrete floor and off of the aluminum sheet walls of the derelict warehouse.

“Please don’t kill me…” The rest of the man’s words were lost in a stream of tears. It was hardly profound, but it was all that a man in his position could muster. Heinrich was disgusted: someone who had been suspect in a series of rapes, begging on hands and knees to be spared? If he’d been able to commit such atrocities without thinking of the inevitable judgment he would face, society was being done a favor with his culling, as he was not only too immoral, but too stupid, to be of any contribution to his fellow man.

Heinrich’s inner rant was interrupted by Therese clearing he throat. “M-master,” she said, “You’re walking the wrong way.” Heinrich jumped and righted himself so that he was now, hopefully, facing his captive. Obviously, it wasn’t all sunshine and daisies being blind.

“As I was saying,” he began, but the laughter of the sobbing, dying rapist cut him off. “You were just begging for your life!” he snapped. If he could see his reflection in the dull metal of the walls, he would know how red in the face he was. “What could possibly be so funny!” Out of his element and caught off guard by the sudden lack of fear and intimidation, it took a while for him to figure out what had caused the victim’s outburst:

That little liar, I’m facing the wrong way now.

It was doing little good to dawdle. Any enjoyment he could have reaped from lecturing to the man Therese held at the throat was gone now, replaced by embarrassment, even if the terrorist leader wouldn’t show it. With a sigh, he muttered, “Just kill him, Therese.”

“Yes sir,” Therese responded in a compliant fashion, and there was the sound of a point driven into flesh, and rather messily at that. Squelch. Then came the screaming: a broken, nerve-wracking cry of agony. Heinrich could only imagine the sort of pain the man was in.

It was well-deserved.

It was a payment for his sins.

However, this did not mean that it could not bring pleasure to its inflictor. Heinrich let a laugh escape his lips. Society would not thank him, but it would never understand the importance of what he was doing—or, for that matter, the euphoria of it all. And the man screamed on…

“Well?” Heinrich asked Therese, “Have you killed him or what?”

“Of course, sir.”

“Aaah! Merciful Lord…aah…”

“Then why does he still scream?” he asked. He could hear the wince in Therese’s voice in her response.

“Oh, those are screams of death, believe me.”

The victim screamed on. Heinrich sneered. “Oh, dear Therese…why is it that you can’t just tell the truth? You’re only hurting yourself, and the people around you, by letting these criminals off easy.”

He couldn’t see her face, but she sounded deadpan. What he wouldn’t give to see her face again, to see its expression at that very moment. He had no way of knowing what she looked like, and it had been so long since he’d set functional eyes on her…perhaps she’d let herself go, neglected taking care of her appearance, with no fear of being seen by her master. What a shame that would be: he remembered her as such a pretty girl. Such an honest one, too.

“Therese, just because I’m blind, doesn’t mean that I’m turning a moral blind-eye to your latest betrayal. Now, if you won’t—” the man screamed some more “—kill him, hand me the dagger.”

“Fine,” Therese breathed, and slid the dagger across the floor to the other side of the warehouse, where Heinrich spent several moments groping about for it, despite the clang it made against the wall.

Therese screamed as Heinrich slashed the dagger through the air. She never thought he would punish her for her own sins—and she had been thinking wrong. She used to be such a loyal henchman, but she’d let her nasty habit get the better of her. Of course, Heinrich would kill the rapist, but first he had to get rid of this little liability.

“I’m a little to the left,” Therese said, her voice aquiver. Heinrich smiled and drove the dagger leftward, and was lucky enough to plant it between the woman’s eyes on the first shot, not even allowing her time to scream. He twisted the knife and pulled it out, ready for his next kill already: just like old times.

She may have been a compulsive liar, but she wasn’t dumb. She knew that he knew that she would be lying, so if she told him to aim to the left, he would aim to the right and miss, giving her time to escape. But of course, by this time, Heinrich new her well enough to anticipate such a move and predict that she really would be standing to his left. He couldn’t imagine what it was about serving justice that failed to amuse her as it once had, but if it was an escape she wanted, then an escape she would get.

But alas, that was immaterial now, as Therese Lamarliere’s pretty little brains, which Heinrich Artyom, unfortunately, could not see, were now a pulp, and he had another piece of scum to track down and rid the world of.

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PostPosted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 8:01 pm


Well... I have bad news... due to recent turns of life, I don't have the time to put in an entry or judge the contest... Sorry guys.
PostPosted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 12:22 am


That's fine; I just wrote mine, so I just procrastinated all two weeks.

And actually, you can judge stilll, as we can't judge our own.
Mine'll be up in just a second.

Lt Oblivious


Lt Oblivious

PostPosted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 12:24 am


Name: Lt. Oblivous
Length: 667 Words, Page and a Half
Summary: Two cats have a bad day.
Submission:
“Oh, Sphiiiinx!” Snickerdoodles meowed, poking his head around the fence. “Sphinx? You around here somewhere?” The cat looked up at the fence, measuring the distance. He wiggled his hindquarters and leapt, landing lightly on his paws on the corner post. “Where could she be?” he mumbled to himself, looking around the yard. Sphinx wasn’t in it, nor was she in the tree hanging above Snickerdoodle’s head. He sighed and jumped down, his paws taking him across the street to the hangout.

He padded inside, finally spotting his white friend. “Sphinx, I’ve been looking all over for you!”

“And you didn’t think to check here?” She daintily licked a paw, pulling it over her ear.

Snickerdoodles thrashed his tail, embarrassed. “I thought you’d be in your yard, cause of the rain and all.”

She snorted, standing. “A little mud isn’t gonna stop me, Snickers, and don’t you forget that! Now come on, I found a bit of catnip earlier.”

“Catnip?” Snickerdoodles asked, interested. “Where? I thought it was all gone.”

“Come on and I’ll show you!” The little white cat brushed past him and he turned, following her tail out of the small entrance. She led the way through the many white fences, around puddles, and over an inattentive dog, finally stopping in an out-of-the-way garden Snickerdoodles hadn’t known was there.

“See? Catnip!” Sphinx declared, rubbing her face against the dewey leaves. Snickerdoodles followed suit, then took a small bite of it, laughing slightly as it began to take effect.

Sphinx nibbled on it, then suddenly started chomping down, dropping the dainty demeanor.

Within minutes, the small plants were chewed down to the ground, and both cats were acting very silly.

“I love capnit,” Snickerdoodles slurred, standing. He wobbled through the fence, slipping in the mud. He sat, blinking owlishly. Sphinx nudged him with her head, and jumped ahead, splashing into all the puddles she could find. “Hey, slow down!” Snickerdoodles yelled, chasing after his friend. She bounced ahead of him, slightly more tolerant of the substance. “Shpinx!”

The little not-so-white cat raced through the yard with the dog, passing him and jumping the fence before he could react. Snickerdoodles followed suit, using the dog’s head as a bounce board.

Ahead of his, Sphinx was stopped by the side of the road, watching the cars whiz by. “Hey, Snickers, wanna play a game?”

“Sure!” Snickerdoodles said, wobbling to lean on Sphinx. “What’s it?”

“Gotta run past a car!” Sphinx said, a daring glint in her eyes.

“Are you sure?” Snickerdoodles asked, dubious. Sphinx rolled her eyes, and stepped to the side, letting Snickerdoodles fall.

“Yes, I’m sure.” She stretched, and waited for a car to come up the road. “Think I can make it?”

“I hope you can,” Snickerdoodles said, “because I don’t think your human’ll be pleased if you get squished.”

“I won’t get squished!” She yowled, and took off before Snickerdoodles could retort.

Time seemed to slow down for the orange cat, as the little red car charged up the road. Across the street, he could see Sphinx’s owner stepping out onto the porch- he could hear her yowl of terror, then pain as she was bounced off the bumper. He could see the human racing down the steps, the car pulling to the side of the road, but he couldn’t move- he was stuck.

Time was nonexistent in those few seconds afterwards, where Snickerdoodles just watched. Just watched his best friend scooped up into the man’s arms. Just watched the car driver say something to the man; the man followed him to his car and it sped off.

“…Sphinx…?” Snickerdoodles asked, eyes watering as it sunk in. His friend- one of his closest friends, his younger sister by one litter- was gone, and she might not be coming back. “SPHINX!” He yowled, cries dissolving into pained howls.

From then on out, cars were not friends. Catnip was not his friend. And by Sphinx, he would do his best to keep the evil from happening again.
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