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Twila, even though in pain, couldn't help but roll her eyes at Rick. Hadn't he seen what had happened between her & Jake?
"Well, Rick, I'm sorry your numbers are wrong. One person's hurt."
Honestly he was right there! Her blood had made spots on the floor! Her brothers had screamed! So why didn't he realize it?

The defeated Red sat in the offered chair, "So, I get shotgun? Unusual treatment for a prisoner." Red tried to shrug out of habit, but winced when he did. "Remember, don't shrug." He sat down in the offered seat, keeping pressure on his injured shoulder. "If you where wondering, mine was a clear through. Just need to stop the bleeding and I'll be fine. Are you injured Luarn?"


In the room, Rick had to slid out of the grip of worried children. "Looks like we have two injured. Make way all of you." Rick walked through the crowd, ignoring the teacher, as she just fainted. He approached Twila, and knelled next to her, inspecting her injuries. "I'm not a medical doctor, but I don't see anything vital. Skylar, River, please grab a few towels from the closet." It was best to keep the two busy. Too busy to worry. "I'm going to put pressure on your injuries, it might hurt, but I have to stop the bleeding." He took off his white coat, not waiting for the towels, and just ripped the cloth into as long and small of strips as he could. The cloth didn't rip easily, so it took him some work. Then he tied the cloth strips around what wounds he could.
Whispering to Twila, so the twins couldn't here, "Honestly, I don't really know what I am doing, but I'm the best you got here. All I know is I have to stop the bleeding. Just stay calm and breath deeply." With that, he tried to gingerly place a cloth wrapped hand against one of her wounds, pressing on it to try and clot the blood.

Jake grunted darkly, "A shotgun sounds pretty good right about now." Kenny chuckled as he got into the driver seat. The mass of cars pulled away from the school slowly and got on a highway.

"Where to, Ma'am?" Kenny said, since he was the head of the line of vans. Laurn thought for a moment before sighing.

"Go north. Just keep going north until we find a good base." She sighed, leaning back in her seat. "Nothing Serious. I"m barely bleeding." She shrugged it off. "And Jake...what exactly happened?"

Jake growled, "I just lost my temper."

"By how much?" She asked, looking over to him. Kenny coughed slightly.

"By a lot."

"What did you do?" She finally asked, seeing as her simple questions were getting nowhere.

"I killed a few Erasers...some of them vital to some kids." aka parents he thought. "And I went against a morph." He said, crossing his arms.

"Who?"

Jake sighed, annoyed. "Just some girl that was stupid enough to get in my way! I left Chance to the wrath of the school, and Seth as well. And Ragdoll..." Jake mumbled. "Some family I am." He grunted, staring out the window. Kenny sighed, and turned on the radio to a rock station, and suprisingly, American.

"I'm still with you," Twila replied her voice soft, "I just feel a little dizzy." Her eyelids were started to drop but she forced them to stay open.

((Lolz I Won't))
"I know, I know. I'm awake right now & I'll keep it that way," Hopefully.
River & Skylar were sitting there watching, "Why'd you do that?"
Twila sighed, "I just had to. I couldn't take it anymore. But I swear you two, don't be as stupid as I was back there. Never do anything like that."
They quickly nodded without saying a word.

Twila's eyes darted to where the voice had come from, "Chance," she said quietly.
How could I tell her Jake did this to me... It would change things for both of them. He did react like this when I mentioned her so maybe it means he cares deeply about her. Oh god what do I even care anymore!
She whispered, though loud enough that Chance could hear her, "Jake did this... He shot me... Multiple times actually." Twila didn't care about protecting Jake anymore. She wanted to hurt him as much as she could.

Chance stepped back once she heard Twila say his name...
"J-Jake?"
Her eyes were still wide, she showed no emotion looking down at Twila.
"H-He did this...?!"
The voice in her head laughed.
To think that he would actually harm a girl like her!! Im surprised myself actually! and with a GUN imagine that!
Chance started shaking her head,
"N-No...Jake...why would he.."
Chance voice grew much louder and it echoed.
"Why?!?"
Why would Jake shoot her?! And not only once, but many times!! Why?!
She wondered what could she feel at this point. Should she feel sad for Twila and her injuries, ignoring Jake or should she be angry at Jake for doing such a thing. She even wondered if Twila was actually telling the truth!
Chance looked away.
"Medicine? I'm sorry, I don't know a thing..."

Sorry for interrupting everyone else in this thread, but I am hoping to help teach someone what is expected from them in an RP. So bear with me, (that includes you sirkarl2). Oh and I was thinking of scorpion, which is also called scorpio at times by spiderman. It also happens to be a zodiac sign. I was just recommending that you create or find a more unique name then scorpio, this is not required, but does make a character better in a role play.

Forgive my rudeness, but is this supposed to impress me? For starters, I would recommend rereading your posts to check for simple typos and errors. Like you have scorpio possessing something (Scorpio's) but not having him possess anything in the sentence. A minor issue. But the biggest thing is the hows you leave in your posts. What I mean by that is you have him killing an eraser by stabbing him through the heart. How is he doing this? What did he use? I would assume his tail, but I'm not to certain on it. Then he pulls out his gun (if he is able to use his tail or claws or a dagger or anything that can stab a man through the heart, you are likely far to close to use a gun on the rest of the gang behind him. There are exceptions) and shoots six more of them between the eyes. The how is obvious, but the question left here now is; what are THEY doing. Surely they aren't standing around waiting to be shot. You might catch one or two off guard but not six. So do they dodge, run for cover, cower in fear? Lots of details that need to be filled in. Then after that, you have wasted all your ammo in the gun. Do you drop it to the ground and grab your swords (where are they located? on your shoulders or the belt? Or are they even hidden in some trench coat. I wouldn't recommend that, used to often.) or place it back in its holster or pouch? Now that you have your swords out, what do you do? Charge them? Throw them at your now scattered opponents. Do they fire bullets back, or do they approach using claws and daggers/swords? Now about your character. What was he thinking. Was he scared? Was he angry? Was he confused about being jumped by erasers when he thought he was safe? Did he know they where coming? What is his view and feelings on this matter?

This is what people mean by your posts needing more details. You tend to leave more unanswered questions then actual answers. Something that might help when you post, try to make it so someone doesn't have to read your last post (or the last three posts) to understand your most recent post. Its ok if it takes up room and looks like a novel. Another thing that took even me some time to learn when I first started; It tends to sound better when everything is in the past tense, as most people who read the older posts think of it as something from the past, and the newest post is something that has just happened recently (yet again still in the past though).