You know that this is not the proper way to get my attention. It is rude, says absolutely nothing and doesn't add to the thread. Your post has been deleted to avoid clutter. In the future if an application appears to be skipped you can PM the reviewer, or if it has clearly been lost in the thread you can repost it.
I apologize for not noticing your edit post, but keep that in mind. Especially since I've been in a mildly sour mood of late.
Username: TvIaMsOqTuHeYz RPC Name: Laxus Makarov Rank: D
Technology Name: 009 Prototype Technology Power Rank: D Description: This is a metal helm, chest piece, gauntlets, and boots. Each piece is mainly red, although decals are in yellow. A skin tight suit is worn beneath this set, and regulates temperature all over the body preventing sweating and degradation of the armor. All portions of the armor provide a 2 rank defense against physical attacks, but only a 1 rank defense against elemental attacks. This reduces most physical attacks to simple bruising, and a few elemental attacks to a lesser amount of pain. **Electrical attacks, while the force of them is negated, the shock delivered is increased by 1 rank, making raiton techniques much more effective against him.
The Helm is largely red with two kunai like projections where the ears are located. Where the rings of the kunai would be, are two grates that cover the ears. On the forehead of the helm is a saw blade, that is sharper than any that one would commonly find. There is also a piece of metal with a respirator that covers Laxus's mouth. This respirator makes Laxus' voice modified to sound much different. It deepens and gives subtle undertones to the input, allowing for a slightly robotic, but largely human voice ( Think of Sonny off of I robot, but more manly. ). Leading from the nape of the neck, where the helm ends, is a yellow rubber hose. It leads to the back of the chest piece. The head piece weighs five pounds.
The chest piece is in three pieces, one for either shoulder, and one for the majority of the torso. This is primarily red as well, except for the underside of the shoulders. The underside of the shoulders appear more as dark blue- black. There is also a piece of under armor underneath the red chest piece, just before it leaves the larger chest. This allows for the simple storage of several units ( Up to 2 units ) of Satetsu without the sand grinding against your chest. On the back of the chest piece, is a small cloth figure. It has five points, two on either side of a larger one that is long enough to drag the floor. The edges of this cloth are made of iron fiber, and as such are capable of being hardened into a blade. This blade is capable of cutting an inch into wood, however contact with anything as hard as bone results in only a small scratch. Chest piece weighs 30 pounds. and the shoulders each weigh 10 pounds totaling up to fifty pounds.
The Gauntlets are more along the lines of arm protectors. They cover the forearm from damage. These are red as well. inside of the arm protectors is an iron fiber sleeve that is drawn up and attaches to the shoulder pieces. While this won't protect against most attacks, it can defend up to a D rank amount of damage from a weapon, or a fire attack. The hands are covered by a similar fabric, although this is much weaker. The base of the gloves are linked directly into the arm protector, making it impossible to remove once it is placed without removing the arm protector. The arm protectors weigh 5 pounds each, totaling 10 pounds.
The Boots are nothing special aside from knee high boots made of metal with a pivot point for the ankle to lean Laxus forward or backward. Unlike the rest of the armor, the boots are Yellow with red trim around the soles, and the ankles. The boots weigh 10 pounds each for a total of 20 pounds. Weakness: **Lightning Rod - The metal that the armor is made of is an excellent conductor, and makes it so that lightning jutsu are drawn to the armor within a foot from Laxus. This makes it decisively harder to dodge any raiton techniques.
Heated Combat - The metal is a largely conductive metal, making it so that prolonged exposure (3 posts around a D rank amount of fire, or being hit with a B rank Katon attack ) Heats the affected piece of armor to scalding proportions. It does however cool down quickly ( 3 posts of being away from the fire. )
Weighty - Without expending 5 points of chakra to gain weightlessness, and then 2 points per post after the initial 2 are used, the armor makes Laxus' effective speed one rank slower in terms of mobility, however countering with upper limbs is unhindered.
Costly - The cost of the materials to make the suit is 2000 gold. The process to make it requires 2 posts sizing Laxus' body, 5 forming the pieces, 2 priming and painting, and 3 creating the underlying heat distributing suit. Picture:
Please try and fix some of the English marked in blue it's weird.
**You take extra damage from lightning and attract it, I think this is possibly literal overkill. You can make it just one or the other if you like.
Since this edit is minor I believe this custom can be accepted. If you wish to make any changes above those mentioned and basic wording please resubmit.
Posted: Fri Sep 21, 2012 2:16 pm
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I'm sorry, I was out of line, but I've been having my own problems, as I'm now the main force on my Quizbowl team, and for the first time I can clearly see just how much the people below those in power seem to undermine authority. I guess I kind of just projected my own anger onto here as I've been waiting on this, and I've been waiting on a profile in another guild, as well as beginning to work out the kinks in my own guild, because no one seems to want to teach me the ropes of crewing a guild, so I might as well just start my own guild. I again, apologize for my misconduct, it just seemed to me as though you completely skipped over it, since it was posted the same day that you continued your analysis of Hinote's tech.
Username: TvIaMsOqTuHeYz RPC Name: Laxus Makarov Rank: D
Technology Name: 009 Prototype Technology Power Rank: D Description: This is a metal helm, chest piece, gauntlets, and boots. Each piece is mainly red, although decals are in yellow. A skin tight suit is worn beneath this set, and regulates temperature all over the body preventing sweating and degradation of the armor. All portions of the armor provide a 2 rank defense against physical attacks, but only a 1 rank defense against elemental attacks. This reduces most physical attacks to simple bruising, and a few elemental attacks to a lesser amount of pain.
The Helm is largely red with two kunai like projections where the ears are located. Where the rings of the kunai would be, are two grates that cover the ears. On the forehead of the helm is a saw blade, that is sharper than any that one would commonly find. There is also a piece of metal with a respirator that covers Laxus's mouth. This respirator makes Laxus' voice modified to sound different. It deepens and gives subtle undertones to the input, allowing for a slightly robotic, but largely human voice ( Think of Sonny off of I robot, but more manly. ). Leading from the nape of the neck, where the helm ends, is a yellow rubber hose. It leads to the back of the chest piece. The head piece weighs five pounds.
The chest piece is comprised of three pieces, one for either shoulder, and one for the majority of the torso. This is primarily red as well, except for the underside of the shoulders. The underside of the shoulders appear more as dark blue- black. There is also a piece of under armor underneath the red chest piece, just before it leaves the larger chest. This allows for the simple storage of several units ( Up to 2 units ) of Satetsu without the sand grinding against your chest. On the back of the chest piece, is a small cloth figure. It has five points, two on either side of a larger one that is long enough to drag the floor. The edges of this cloth are made of iron fiber, and as such are capable of being hardened into a blade. This blade is capable of cutting an inch into wood, however contact with anything as hard as bone results in only a small scratch. Chest piece weighs 30 pounds. and the shoulders each weigh 10 pounds totaling up to fifty pounds.
The Gauntlets are more along the lines of arm protectors. They cover the forearm from damage. These are red as well. inside of the arm protectors is an iron fiber sleeve that is drawn up and attaches to the shoulder pieces. While this won't protect against most attacks, it can defend up to a D rank amount of damage from a weapon, or a fire attack. The hands are covered by a similar fabric, although this is much weaker. The base of the gloves are linked directly into the arm protector, making it impossible to remove once it is placed without removing the arm protector. The arm protectors weigh 5 pounds each, totaling 10 pounds.
The Boots are nothing special aside from knee high boots made of metal with a pivot point for the ankle to lean Laxus forward or backward. Unlike the rest of the armor, the boots are Yellow with red trim around the soles, and the ankles. The boots weigh 10 pounds each for a total of 20 pounds. Weakness: Lightning Rod - The metal that the armor is made of is an excellent conductor, and makes it so that lightning jutsu are drawn to the armor within a foot from Laxus. This makes it decisively harder to dodge any raiton techniques.
Heated Combat - The metal is a largely conductive metal, making it so that prolonged exposure (3 posts around a D rank amount of fire, or being hit with a B rank Katon attack ) Heats the affected piece of armor to scalding proportions. It does however cool down quickly ( 3 posts of being away from the fire. )
Weighty - Without expending 5 points of chakra to gain weightlessness, and then 2 points per post after the initial 2 are used, the armor makes Laxus' effective speed one rank slower in terms of mobility, however countering with upper limbs is unhindered.
Costly - The cost of the materials to make the suit is 2000 gold. The process to make it requires 2 posts sizing Laxus' body, 5 forming the pieces, 2 priming and painting, and 3 creating the underlying heat distributing suit. Picture:
I actually put the Extra damage in, simply because with how Laxus is going to end up, Raiton under his rank will cause little damage to him otherwise, making so that even in the suit he'd be able to shrug it off, but if it is overkill, I'll only too gladly take it off. ^.^
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Posted: Sat Sep 22, 2012 12:35 pm
Approvamafied unless someone else says otherwise.
Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2012 8:48 pm
Username: White Water Lilly RPC Name: Miyake Shizuna Rank: Jounin Customs: None so far, this'll be my first
Technology Name:Vial Pouch - Picture shows the pouch for 10 bottles but I'm making this equipment to hold 5. Technology Power Rank: E Price: 200 Description: Good for sealers and medical ninjas to use as a carrier for glass vials containing various useful substances - antidotes/ink vials (to be purchased separately)/herbs/etc. This equipment is a rather simple pouch that's plain in design and opens up with two tabs. The pouch itself is made of leather and inside, a leather strap is place across it to hold up to 5 glass vials. The pouch was designed to hang around the shinobi's waist and for that purpose has two belt straps that can be adjusted in length and requires a belt to hoop through them. The dimensions of the pouch are 8.5inch x 1inch x 3.75inch when folded and each glass vial has a .75inch diameter and is 3.25inch in height. **Glass Vials are to be purchased separately
Weakness: [1] One set of straps - The pouch attaches to the shinobi's waist through the two belt straps. If cut, the pouch will have nothing left supporting it to the shinobi's side allowing it to drop to the ground, virtually useless unless the shinobi decides to pick it up and hold it. Which in mid-fight would prove to be a handicap than anything. If dropped from a high enough height, the vials within may crack from the force of impact.
[2] Made of leather - Leather is rather tough but it can only protect against so much force. Should the pouch be on the receiving end of a very strong blunt attack (ex. kick from a taijutsu specialist C-rank +) the force would cause the glass vials within to shatter despite being surrounded by the leather pouch.
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Technology Name:Glass Vials Technology Power Rank: E Price: 5 Description: A simple glass vial that can be used to store various substances - water, herbs, blood, poison, etc. Each glass vial is .75inch in diameter and 3.25inch in height.
Should it be used to contain a liquid substance (water); each vial will be good for one basic technique. For each advancement in technique rank (E to D, D to C, etc.), an additional vial will be needed.
Weakness: [1] Made of Glass - self-explanatory
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Posted: Tue Oct 30, 2012 10:35 am
I do not see why these need to be considered technologies. I would not demand that someone applies for a tent or clothing. The vials themselves would kinda sorta qualify but the pouch could just be treated the same as your backpack.
Pouch- no approval necessary.
Vials- approved, I guess.
Posted: Tue Oct 30, 2012 1:31 pm
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Hey Hikaro,
Thanks for getting back to me so quickly. To be honest, I wasn't really even sure if my requests could be considered technology or not. Wanted to play it safe though and since this is also a place for equipment, I thought why not. I'll add in the pouch as an extension of the backpack section in my profile. Thanks again for all your help.
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Name of Substance: Hinder Required Posts: 3 Posts to make Effects: The victim will begin to feel too slow for their own good, over a course of 6 posts. Each area that is slowed is done so by half a rank. 1st Post: The victim will feel their legs reacting slower, which may cause them to trip up, and move slower. 2nd Post: The victim's torso is slow at reacting, making maneuvering hard. 3rd Post: The victim's arm begin to slacken, once more making maneuvers hard. 4th Post: The victim's body is slower than it should be, making reactions to things slower. Their brain is unaffected by this. 5th Post: The victim's arms return to their normal speed 6th Post: The victim's torso and legs have returned to their normal speed, and the poison has been purged.
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Name: Adrenaline Shot Required Posts: 5 Posts to make Effects: This makes the victims mind perceive everything at such a high rate, it seems as if everything is moving in slow motion. Their body will not be affected by this, it is simply their mind. For example, when after the victim is poisoned with the adrenaline, and if they are about to receive a cut, they will feel everything as if it were in slow motion. They would feel the blade entering their skin, cutting through the tissue, muscle, etc. Adrenaline doesn't actually give them a physical boost of any kind, but makes the mind perceive it as if they were moving at amazing speeds. It essentially is used for torture, so the target would have to suffer every moment as it happened, slowly. This lasts for 5 posts
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Name: Blind Required Posts: 4 Effects: The victim, after being poisoned, shall suffer blindness for a few posts. 1st Post: Partial blindness in left eye 2nd Post: Partial blindness in right eye 3rd Post: Both eyes fail 4th Post: Vision is returned
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Name: Numb Required Posts: 15 Effects: The victim will loose their sense of feeling, even pain they may suffer. This could make the victim quite reckless, as they may believe they have turned invincible. They will tend to not shy away from a blade, nor notice if a kunai is protruding from their back. Of course, injuries will still tax them, such as they cannot run on a broken leg. This poison lasts for 10 posts. Afterword, all the pain will rush back, and consume them if they are not already dead.
These were approved twice already, but since its been awhile I thought it appropriate to set them here before I started using them.
Posted: Fri Nov 02, 2012 10:16 am
Well I gotta be mean and do what I do, nitpick. So here goes!
all "injections"- How are you injecting someone with just a bottle? I think the images are misleading here since if you were just using bottles you would need quite a bit of setup time to prepate an injection.
Hinder- please note how big a difference it actually makes in ann areas (ex. makes them .5 or half ranks slower)
Adrenaline- Does it directly improve anything? reaction speed? strength? Speed? It would be better if it stated so. you used the wrong their.
Blind- I think having it jump from one eye and then only affect the other and then both is weird. perhaps you could throw partial blindness in there as a better mid-way step?
Numb- looks okay except noted injection bit.
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Posted: Fri Nov 02, 2012 10:31 am
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To explain the injections, these poisons were all meant to be used with a blade that acted as a syringe. I'm changing it so that they are going to be coated onto weapons or dropped into food or something like that.
-I edited hinder to add in the level of ranks dropped. -Adrenaline doesn't actually give them a physical boost of any kind, but makes the mind perceive it as if they were moving at amazing speeds. It essentially is used for torture, so the target would have to suffer every moment as it happened, slowly.
-Changed the description on blind.
Posted: Fri Nov 02, 2012 10:40 am
Looks good approved.
You might want to make that just a little clearer in the description for adrenaline, but I leave that up to you. (you dont need to get a reapproval unless you actually change something)
Username: iAkura-kun RPC Name: Seytan Rex Rank: Genin Customs 0 [ two if these are approved ]
Technology Name: Chakra Amplifier v. 1 Technology Power Rank: E-S Price: I really have no idea. Description: The Chakra Amplifier v. 1 is a piece of equipment that is worn that allows the user to compress his chakra and turn it into raw power and as the name suggests, amplify the user's physical power by the amount of chakra that is payed to make it work.In essence what it does is that it powers up the user by the amount of chakra payed [ which cannot exceed their current level ] stacking their physical power by the amount payed. Weakness: Upon paying anything more than a C rank amount of chakra, the user must allow the tech to cool down one post per rank. C rank would be a single post of cooldown, B rank two, A rank three and S rank 4.
Technology Name: Chakra Amplifier v. 2 Technology Power Rank: E-B Price: I really have no idea. Description: The second version of the chakra amplifier is a puppet user exclusive. Unlike the first amplifier, this one is a small device, smaller than 4 inches, that goes generally inside of puppets or other such items to which chakra strings are connected. What this does is that it creates an extra set of chakra strings depending on the amount of chakra that is put into it. The strings created by the Amplifier can then do one of two jobs:
1) Be used to apply themselves on to new puppets. 2) Apply themselves to an already existing puppet.
When the strings attach themselves to a new puppet what it does is that it allows the user to use the new puppet as well as the ones he already has to control. The draw back to this is that the user must re-pay the cost of the chakra string jutsu per every extra puppet and pay an upkeep of 1 CP per post the extra puppet is available. This can only be done with puppets from rank E through rank B. Added to this the user can only have a total of extra puppets equal to his rank per Amplifier. Only two amplifiers can be active at any given time.
The other one works to better the control on the puppets he already has outs and enables him to use puppets of a higher rank than his own. + 1 Rank to his ability to control Puppets all the way to B rank. The draw back is that only a single puppet can be used this way since it would take all of the user's concentration to control a puppet that is higher than his rank.
Weakness: Well its a very small device so if the puppet is destroyed odds are it would be destroyed as well.
EDIT: added the poisons
Poison Name: Kin [ Venom 001 ] Poison Duration: 2 posts [ the posts the target breathes it in and the one following it ] Can multiple doses of this poison stack? If so, explain in the effect: Creation Time: One post of putting it all together; 30 minutes IRL Activation Conditions (if any): - Method of Affliction and area range effect, if it's an airborne toxin : Inhalation; the toxin only expands in a three foot radius around where its released. Poison Effect : Upon being breathed in the target feels his body shutting down, his/her extremities would being to numb down and weigh the target down and make them fall to the ground, paralyzing them for no more than a minute. [ one post ]
Poison Name: Yotta [ Venom 002 ] Poison Duration: 4 posts Can multiple doses of this poison stack? If so, explain in the effect: Yes it does stack; for every entry wound the poison goes in its another dose stacked on to the target. Creation Time : 3 posts to make; 3 hours IRL Activation Conditions (if any): - Method of Affliction and area range effect, if it's an airborne toxin : Direct entry on to the target. Poison Effect : The poison in of itself takes two posts to actually kick in and affect the target. On the second post [ the one after being hit by the poison ] the target starts feeling woozy and disorientated. After that point the target starts seeing doubles of everything around them; the caster, his allies, the surrounding, everything, making the person lose the sense of direction and making the battle that much harder for him. For every dose applied on the target its an extra set of false views the target will see. The effects of this poison lasts for two posts for every dose applied to the target.
Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 3:30 pm
Username: Black Knight Captian RPC Name: Dmitri Kori Rank: Genin Customs Weapons- 1 under construction Tech- 0
Technology Name: Voin shlem Technology Power Rank: D Price: Description: Voin shlem, warrior's helmet, a hard cased helmet, providing protection of the cranium against attacks. Causes physical attacks to due one rank less damage, while lightning release has a plus one rank if attacking the head. When activated, the eyes glow orange, giving the wearer thermal vision. Though, easily blinded by fire techniques, thermal vision can be very helpful when tracking enemies. Giving the wearer a greater ability to hear any noises with high definition sensors. The mask, giving a air filter, filtrates the air of any harmful gaseous particles. Giving the wearer immunity to any gas based poisons that attack through the mouth or nasal cavity.
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 6:49 pm
Akura:
I'll ask for a second crew opinion on this one, as I might be too lenient/strict.
Everything: Technology don't get rank ranges please give them static ranks. -What does it take to destroy/damage in regards to taijutsu, ninjutsu, or elemental damage? Does anything happen when it is destroyed? -Are they guildwide/personal or village only techs?
Chakra Amplifier v 1: You can give yourself an undetermined boost by using and undetermined amount of chakra. There are no limitations as to how big a boost you can get. This is a problem. As a rule, anything more than one rank boost would require a heavy weakness. A proper chakra cost would be equal to a same rank jutsu. This would fit better as a jutsu anyways. What does it look like/where is it "worn"? Is it some sort of back pack? exoskeleton? shirt? glove?
V2: This sounds like you are trying to use more puppets than you would normally be allowed, or of higher rank than would normally be allowed. Which won't fly here. If you want to try and give your character exceptions to rules visit the custom talents thread. The weakness is worthless. "odds are it would be destroyed" is code for it would only be destroyed if it doesn't inconvenience you. Having it be destroyable wouldn't be a sufficient weakness anyways, since anything can be destroyed. I don't think this one can be made to work.
Poisons: I don't have a really good idea what is acceptable as a poison, and neither does anyone in the crew really since noone is willing to work with them. So just know any approvals for poisons might be later denied by another crew member. Just a warning.
001: Sorry, but airborn poisons won't be very strong, since it is way too easy to "hit" a target. Paralysis by poison gas will not pass. Instant full body paralysis is also not going to be approved by me, although I can see strike area paralysis through a cut as very useful. It also would be able to last longer. (cut someone's arm and they can't move that arm for 4 posts).
002: so just double vision basically? this actually seems pretty tame, just more detail on the injection method. Do you just need to get it in the bloodstream? would drinking/eating it work? and finally how many uses do you get out of it?
Knight:
Denied. This mask is doing too many things at once to be considered without any real weakness, it would be at least C rank as is and pretty expensive.
Let's look at the parts first.
A gas mask, alone, would be perfectly passable without weakness.
infrared goggles (thermal vision) alone would be acceptable as a D rank tech, possibly with just the weakness of heat blinding.
helmet protecting against enemy attacks, D rank, probably some small weakness.
Super hearing: D rank with weakness.
You can't just put all this together though, and expect it to stay at D rank. So, it would have to be bumped up to C rank with mandatory weaknesses. Thermal blinding, possibly sensitivity to loud noises and something else. What would it take to break it? How would it handle ninjutsu? Is it weak to any elements? Is this meant to be a personal technology, guildwide or village specific?
Side note: Welcome. Note that technology rank mostly translates to it's cost more than who can use it. Also please proofread. "Due" doesn't make sense in the second sentence, it should be do.
Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2012 9:10 am
Hikaro_rin
Sorry for the long time to reply.
001: Airborne poisons should technically be the most effective since they are the ones that are easier to use but at the same time shouldn't be too strong because of how easy it is to we get the hit. Numbing in the body which would be like -1 rank in speed, and immobility for a single post isn't all that much, but if you have some suggestions as to how fix it it would be very appreciated.
002: Yeah it works by entering it into the bloodstream, but any other way to get it into the target's body works as well; what really needs to be done is to get it into the system, regardless of the way but its usually via injury.
001: Airborne poisons should technically be the most effective since they are the ones that are easier to use but at the same time shouldn't be too strong because of how easy it is to we get the hit. Numbing in the body which would be like -1 rank in speed, and immobility for a single post isn't all that much, but if you have some suggestions as to how fix it it would be very appreciated.
002: Yeah it works by entering it into the bloodstream, but any other way to get it into the target's body works as well; what really needs to be done is to get it into the system, regardless of the way but its usually via injury.
ehh, your not the one who needs to apologize for long replies. Im very sorry i forgot about your post here,
001: Precisely. As it is almost guaranteed to hit, it cant be very strong. just reducing speed rank would be fine. but actual paralysis=no go.
Name of Substance: Hinder
Name: Adrenaline Shot
Name: Blind
Name: Numb
