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 Posted: Thu May 27, 2010 5:41 pm
Rpc Name:Kai
Village:Konogakure
Rank:Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for:Pin Point
What you know about the clan/bl: Not much. I know that the clan members is scatter everywhere and one of their goal is to look for each other. They usually wear clothing where they can hide weapons or in their long hairs. They control weapon and are natural assassin.
Rp Sample: Kai looked around and checked to see whether anyone else was around. When he was sure that he was the only one, he took out his katana and placed it in front of him. He stared at the katana with great intensity, ignoring everything else. Five seconds later he smiled as the seal appeared on the weapon. He picked it up and smiled even brighter as the katana felt like a part of him.
He stood up and exam the weapon, but felt that something was missing. He then felt for his necklace and wasn't surprise when it wasn't there. He knew right away that his sensei have stolen it when he was forming the seal. He hated how he wasn't able to detect anything when he is forming a seal on a weapon. Letting out tired sigh he decided to look for his sensei later and to test the katana now.
With the seal on the katana Kai is now able to control it freely, and he love it. He look around and found a target practice nearby and decide to test his katana on it. Aiming for the middle of the target he threw his katana and watched as it hit the small red dot 300 feet away. He himself have fairly good aim but with the seal on the katana his aim was above good. He smiled as the thought of him later on being able to form an element seal on his weapon, making it more powerful with the power of the element. "One day Kai, one day." He told himself and ran to get his weapon.
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Posted: Sat May 29, 2010 7:10 pm
Rpc Name:Neko Imuchi
Village:Sunagakure
Rank:Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for:Soma no Ko
What you know about the clan/bl:Soma no Ko is basically the ability that allows the user to unify all or part of someone's body with another body.It also sometimes allows the user to possess another body.They're able to split into two bodies,but one will always be weaker.They are also able to posses other bodies with a jutsu,however,any damage done to the possessed body also damages the user.
Rp Sample:
It was basically just an ordinary morning at the Duel Academy.Neko's teacher called her up because he believed that Neko had some kind of special ability,something different that could benefit the village.He put her up against the best student in the Academy,hoping that,if he could bring Neko to her limits,she would use the ability she was said to have.
The fight had begun,and Neko appeared to be losing.She threw a punch at him,and somehow another arm came out from her side,doubling the damage done to her opponent."What the...what was that?"the other kid asked.Another face emerged form the back of her neck.,freaking out Neko."What the heck?!Oo-o-ok,this is just the stress of this battle,its just gotten to your head.I hope,"Neko tells herself,"Maybe if I just finish this fight,it'll go away."
She kicks at her opponent,and a second leg appears to deal double damage again to her opponent.The second body then unmerged from Neko,then charged at her opponent and merged with him.She got him to remain still as Neko knocked him into the river.The second body quickly unmerged and swam out,and after a couple minutes,Neko went down to the bottom to get her opponent,who was unconcious but alive.
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Posted: Sat May 29, 2010 11:18 pm
Rpc Name: Samedare Mamoru
Village: Sunagakure
Rank: Sannin
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Senju
What you know about the clan/bl: Mokuton, or Wood Element, takes the form of wood attacks and defenses. The usage of this elemental style is a hidden technique unique to Shodai Hokage and others who possess his same exact genes. Mokuton is formed through the simultaneous usage of Water and Earth styles. Due to this, Samedares' roots must have haled from Konohagakure.
Rp Sample: On a summer day, the sun was beaming down on the Konohagakure forest. Trees were still less and the forest critters were as active as ever. Taking his usual tours through villages whether wanted or not, Samedare walks down the dirt path that led to Kusagakure. Holding in his hand, yet, another volume of one of his favorite books, "Icha Icha Baiorensu" he says, "Man, I've been walking for awhile. These legs need some rest." Turning his head side to side, he looks for a place to rest upon and finds a tree that seems to be perfect. The trunk of the tree was curved just perfectly, that you could cradle a baby in it; the branches tendril toward the ground giving all below it shade. "Yes, this is perfect." He walks over to the tree and prompts himself against it, then lays his silver head back against it, "*Phew*, I only need a moment.". Moments later- from his sleep he heard foot steps that drew near with each passing moment. Voices could be heard crying, "This way! His head is our fortune!".
From within his sleep he heard the voices draw near, but pretends to continue sleeping, "This'll be fun". The group of men arrived at Samedares' resting area; by there clothing, they appeared to be bandits with large weapons.
"Yes, this is him." "Why didn't you kill him while he is asleep?" "Are you retarded? This guy is one of the legendary sannin from Suna. I would be dead the moment he awakened!" "Well lets do it now and collect our bounty from those black market guys".
Just as there conversation had ended, he awakens with wide eyes and both hands clasped together within the snake seal, "Jubaku no Jutsu!". From the tree he was resting on, beams of wood begin to emerge from the trees' trunk toward the bandits, wrapping around each one, binding them. As the jutsu was executed, the band of men quickly reverted there attention to Samedare, startled by his abrupt awakening and process of technique, and with no time to respond, fell victim to his technique. "Hmm...what should I do with you? I guess I'll turn you in". As one male began cursing and struggling to break free, Samedare aims one hand in his direction. In correspondence, the beam of wood created an extension that smacks the man below his chin, knocking him out cold.
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Posted: Sun May 30, 2010 3:41 am
Hmm...maybe my post could've been a little bit more epic. But other than that, your wrong. Jubaku no Jutsu is Indeed a real jutsu. (As seen in naruto shippuden episode 42 and 43) I already know that Mokutons' weakness is raiton / katon and what not. Honestly, I'm not putting in much effort here. What I Don't get is why everyone keeps telling me that I'm not sannin. (even though I haven't gotten my rpc straightened out yet) I applied awhile back and passed. My submission is on the master list. Why hasn't Jubaku no Jutsu been added to the Wood release list anyway?
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Posted: Sun May 30, 2010 4:27 am
nvm my post it dosnt matter im killing off my rpc anyways now. Good luck with mokuton...
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Posted: Mon May 31, 2010 9:54 am
Rpc Name: Nanashi
Village: Sunagakure
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Smoke shifting
What you know about the clan/bl: I knoe the user of this bloodline can turn thier body to smoke,Create a Smoke Clone.In smoke form they can be blown up by fire,blown away by wind.I also know that they have specile abilities only limited to thier Bloodline.Thier bloodline comes from a vilage that was destroyed and they have been scattered to other vilages.Only one other member of the guild has this bloodline.
Rp Sample:
Smoke began to seep through the air vent and into the small dark room. The smoke seemed to be coming together in the form of a young man. The boy slowly made his way to the small desk on the opposite side of the room. It had a a yellow folder laying on top of a large stack of papers. The boy opened the folder and inside lye blue sheets of paper with designs on them.
They seemed to be some sort of blue prints. The boy removed the sheets of paper from the folder, slipping them into his jacket. He removed a set of papers with the same designs on them just missing some key features. Outside the door the sound of men talking about some sort of experiment began to fill the boy's ears. This began to make the boy nervous. He looked at the air vent and then back to the door. He was at a loss for what to do. The door knob slowly began to turn.
The boy tried to turn into smoke again, however something was off. The boy wasn't able to fully materialize into smoke, seeing as he never completely mastered the art.So he did a set of multiple hand signs. ."Smoke Clone Jutsu." He said under his breath as the men stepped inside the room. They were greeted by several shuriken, before the boy and his clone busted out of the door they ran together for a short time. The two then slip up going in separate directions.
They managed to make their way out of the building with few casualties, yet they were still being chased.He ran behind a small building.He tryed to turn to smoke yet again.This time it was working,but sadly it began to rain."s**t!"He tryed to turn into smoke but his hair,chest and arms were soaking wet,so he was stuck in his regular form.The men that were chasing him saw him hugging the wall and began to chase him yet again."Not this crap again."He began to run again he made several hand signs."Smoke Clone Jutsu."This time he said it aloud and two more clones showed up to the scene going in different directions. The boy made his way to cover, yet unfortunately 2 of his clones were defeated. The boy made his way to the sewage system. There was a man standing there waiting for him. The boy gave him the documents and the man patted him on the head. "Good work Nanashi." He said. Nanashi answered with a smile and they instantly left the scene.
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Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 8:15 am
tinymini7:
Well, it looks to me like you have the general idea of what your bloodline does... however, your RP Sample is a little weak. You basically made reference to the fact that your sensei stole your necklace (which was good, since you showed part of the bloodline's weakness), but then dropped the point, instead to opt for throwing your katana as some random target.
...also, the distance you threw it is insane, 300 ft is 100 yds, which is the length of a football field. I would suggest also showing the elemental weaknesses of your blade as well, which was not demonstrated in your post. Sooo...
Denied. For now. Try to re-write the sample with what I've mentioned above and send me a PM when you do. Thanks!
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Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 8:31 am
seargent cry:
If this was a test of your grammar and spelling, you would have gotten a C. However, as it's only a test of your bloodline knowledge and the ability to use it, I shall ignore that. You have a general idea of your bloodline, but you didn't mention your bloodline's weakness to water anywhere. The RP sample started out pretty good, but there were a few things I noticed:
1. You didn't make any hand seals, or make reference to doing so when you used the Smoke Clone Jutsu.
2. You didn't show any of your bloodline's weaknesses, or how they might have affected you. Sooo...
Denied. For now. Try to make the edits and rewrite the sample with what I've mentioned above and send me a PM when you do. Thanks!
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Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 8:47 am
Lolcat-sama:
Well, in reading the info you put under 'what you know' it SOUNDS like you understand the bloodline, but the RP Sample didn't really show that you did. The whole concept of the bloodline is that you have another person merged inside of your body with you, and that that person can have their arms and legs come out of you in order to increase their abilities.
...also, the Controlling/Possessing another person's body comes into play I believe when you MERGE with them through one of your bodies. Therefore, possessing someone to jump into the river, would CLEARLY look VERY strange, and then, you'd run the risk of drowning yourself at the same time, unless you merged out of them in the middle of the river.
Denied. For now. You need to redo your RP Sample and mention some of the things I made note of above. Try to be more precise in your descriptions and make sure you understand the bloodline a bit more. (I suggest re-watching those episodes involving Sadon and Ukon from the Anime.) Once the RP Sample is redone, send me a PM when you do. Thanks!
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Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 9:00 am
gaara997 Hmm...maybe my post could've been a little bit more epic. But other than that, your wrong. Jubaku no Jutsu is Indeed a real jutsu. (As seen in naruto shippuden episode 42 and 43) I already know that Mokutons' weakness is raiton / katon and what not. Honestly, I'm not putting in much effort here. What I Don't get is why everyone keeps telling me that I'm not sannin. (even though I haven't gotten my rpc straightened out yet) I applied awhile back and passed. My submission is on the master list. Why hasn't Jubaku no Jutsu been added to the Wood release list anyway?
Though I do not doubt your ability to use more of the Mokuton techniques, I would still have liked to see more then one technique used by your character in the RP Sample.
...this may all be moot however, as your character has been crossed off the Master List, and now shows Cody Uchiha as the Sand Sannin. You might want to get a hold of Gregar and clear this up with him as to your character's status/rank and then forward the appropriate PM to me so I can know as well.
After all of that (and hopefully a bit more use of the bloodline in your Sample)... I can re-evaluate the submission.
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Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 10:14 am
gaara997 Hmm...maybe my post could've been a little bit more epic. But other than that, your wrong. Jubaku no Jutsu is Indeed a real jutsu. (As seen in naruto shippuden episode 42 and 43) I already know that Mokutons' weakness is raiton / katon and what not. Honestly, I'm not putting in much effort here. What I Don't get is why everyone keeps telling me that I'm not sannin. (even though I haven't gotten my rpc straightened out yet) I applied awhile back and passed. My submission is on the master list. Why hasn't Jubaku no Jutsu been added to the Wood release list anyway?
Alright, well you are confirmed to be the Sand Sannin, so you're good on that account. However, in terms of accepting you to the bloodline, I would like to see a bit more effort from you in terms of showing that you know how to use the bloodline (in that it should show you using more then one technique.)
...You may also want to show your clan's weaknesses within the same post as well, just to be complete about everything.
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Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 11:28 am
sergeant cry: Alright, very good edits. Sooo....
Despite what this picture may seem to represent...
COBRA APPROVES!!!
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Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 7:58 pm
Rpc Name: Hayate Nadare (Creating)
Village: Iwagakure
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Oragami No Dara
What you know about the clan/bl: The users of this kekkei genkei fuse both Doton and Suiton to create a technique involving paper, they can turn themselves into paper as well as create clones, weaponry, and many other things from paper.
Rp Sample: Hayate was cornered, the Genin from this strange over village outnumbered him, and outranked him, but he knew he would need to defend Iwagakure or die trying, and therefore did not back down from this challenge. Hayate realized he had no weaponry on him at the moment and wasted no time, pulling a sheet of paper from a pouch at his side that was seemingly full of sheets he quickly folded the paper into a perfect kunai, and once finished it had the strength of one as well "Kimitate" once he spoke the kunai's properties became the same as that of an actual kunai besides the paper appearance. Hayate watched as the Genin leaped forward on the attack, seven total, Hayate kept the kunai close as a supplementary defensive precaution, and quickly formulated his second offensive, crumpling three sheets of paper her quickly produced from his pouch he created three origami butterflies and threw them forward "Chou Tokkoutai" the butterflies gracefully took flight towards three of the Genin, and within moments switched from graceful to deadly, taking the shape of shuriken and flying at the chests of the three Genin's it had caught them off guard and all three were taken down in an instant. Hayate created another origami butterfly and had it fly forward to the nearest of the remaining four Genin, he believed he knew the secret of this trick and was ready to dodge a kunai, but he soon realized it would not change, it only came closer until he could almost touch it, the Hayate spoke "Chou Tokkoutai" the butterfly exploded with the force of a paper bomb, sending the Genin backward and counting him out as well. To finish the remaining three Genin, Hayate grabbed the pouch of folding paper and threw the entire pouch forward, all the folding paper flying through the air he quickly created a somewhat large fox-like beast of origami, sending it forward, near the three Genin, one of the three leaped in to attack it and the others followed, but before they were able to get close enough to land a blow Hayate spoke "Art of the Cutting Blast" the fox exploded with force, sending paper senbon from inside of it at the remainin Genin, all being impaled without fail, they hit the ground writhing in pain, Hayate's job was finished.
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Posted: Wed Jun 02, 2010 3:29 pm
Rpc Name: Hyuuga, Yasukazu, Rai Village: Sand Rank: AS Bloodline or Clan applied for: Hyuuga (Byakugan stage 1) What you know about the clan/bl: That it has the ability to see 360 degree's around the character except for at the 3rd vertebra at the users neck. The Byakugan has the ability to be used like x-ray and a telescope. Can see the chakra network. Rp Sample: i..i have to use it!! "BYAKUGAN!" Rai unleashes his Byakugan seeing all around him....... Now things were going to get started.. _________________Before that..__________________ Rai had been out on a stroll in the city. It had been a nice day, mostly sunny, small clouds out blocking the sun here and there. Rai decided to go to the training yard and..well, train up a little bit. A mission was up for him in a little and he wanted to test his abilities. As Rai reached the training ground he sat in the middle of the yard meditating as a small rock hit him upside the head with a "thud" "Ouch! What the?" Rai looked around as 4 boys started surrounding him. "Hey there White Eyes. What you doin over here eh? WE'RE training here!" "Yeah, WE'RE Training here!! What give you the right to be around us White Eyes? Heh?!!" The boys said as they all rushed in at Rai. Rai quickly rolled back doing a handspring to avoid them, but was caught by a fifth boy right behind him with a kick to his back. Rai fell forward ducking under one of the boys punches kicking him in the ribs pushing him away. But just as he did so he turned around just to feel a solid fist smack him dab in the chin fending him to his knees. __________________Now_________________ i..i have to use it!! "BYAKUGAN!" Rai unleashes his Byakugan seeing all around him. He jumped up whipping the blood from his mouth. 3 of the 5 boys through kunai at Rai, 1 from the front and 2 from the behind. Feeling the kunai approach him Rai ducked forward, down avoiding all three Kunai just as a 4th boy ran to kick Rai in the face, Rai Barely leaned back in time to avoid the kick. Sensing the 5th boy going for a grapple Rai turned around fast throwing an Elbow to the boys face. Just then 2 Kunai were thrown at him and 2 boys came at him. One aiming high for a punch and the other kicking at Rai's ribs. Rai could sense all of this with his Byakugan, but sensing it wasn’t enough, he couldn’t move fast enough in time to dodge it all. Rai Ducked avoiding the Kunai and the fist as all 3 flew over his head, but in doing so the kick from the other boy Smacked right into Rai's head sending him face first into the dirt. Damnit!! Cant.. Got to get up... "Ok boys, lets end this." Crap..crap...i have to get up, it wont end like this! Rai's knees were weak as he tried standing up. "Hey!! You boys knock it off!!!" Just as Rai thought it was all over a nearby Jounin had heard the ruckus and came over just in time to stop the fighting. Rai stop using his Byakugan even though he had plenty of chakra for it, he actually was quite blest in that area. After sending the 5 boys home, but not without a note to there parents and holding them back another year before being able to apply at the Genin Tournament, he helps Rai get stable. "You alright son?" “Yeah.. I’m ok.. I coulda taken them." If I would just practice my Byakugan more.. "Haha, I don’t know.. Looked a little uneven there, even for a Jounin, 5 - 1 isn’t exactly easy.. You gana be ok?"“Yeah.. I’m just going to head home. Its just a few bumps and bruises... Thank you though." The Jounin nodded his head and Rai went off still a little light headed from getting it smacked around so much. Once he got home he cleaned up and looked himself in the mirror with those words running through his head. "If I would just practice my Byakugan more.." That’s it.. I WILL practice my Byakugan more. No more hiding it. I will be the ultimate Byakugan User and everyone will know it! "Yeah!! I'll make sure everyone knows!! I’m Rai Yasukazu HYUUGA!! Know it!!!")
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